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读后续写：人与自我——Soaring Beyond Limits 50岁挑战空中吊环
一、续写原题
A few days before my fiftieth birthday, Iexperienced a bad brain runner, and sports had always injury. At the time, I was a long-distance helped me deal with my life-long depression But depression after a brain injury became severer, and I needed something new in my life.
So at the age of fifty, depressed and brain-njured, I did what many women would do: learning the circus（马戏表演）. I was athletic as an adult but not as a kid, and I had never taken dance lessons or gymnastics. I was strong, but neither very flexible nor graceful in the least.
Since the beginning of my severer depression, I had kept to myself. I took time away from work, my social circle became much smaller, and I felt very alone.I was often afraid to leave the house.Even booking my first circus class was a leap in the dark（冒险之举） for me.
When I walked into my first circus class, I wasn't surprised to find I was the oldest student; in fact, even my teachers were young enough to be my daughters! But I was determined to stretch beyond my comfort zone, and the "kids” welcomed me. One of my classmates said to me, “Wow, my mom would never do this!”
After a group stretch and warm-up, my coach Katelyn told us that weeks after finishing the course, there would be a student performance. All students would be invited to give a performance, showing what they had learned in class. And all the performers' family members and friends would be invited to watch. I felt worried.
After talking about that performance, the coach asked which equipment I'd like to learn. There were silks, trapezes and the aerialhoop（空中吊环）.I eyed the aerial hoop. Oh, how I wanted to sit up in the hoop and learn to fly like a bird! But I didn't have the arm strength to lift myself up onto the hoop. I was discouraged. My excitement was replaced with self-doubt and disappointment.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1: When I expressed my upset to my coach, she smiled and said, “Just keep trying!”
Paragraph 2: When my name was called, I stood up, confidently walking to the stage.
二、文本分析
人物分析
主人公是一名年近五十的女性，经历过严重的脑损伤。她此前是一名长跑运动员，运动帮助她缓解长期的抑郁。然而，脑损伤后，她的抑郁症状加重了。为了应对这次新的危机，她决定挑战自己，学习马戏表演。
教练Katelyn和其他马戏课的同学：他们大多比主人公年轻，表现出友善和支持，尤其在主人公觉得困难时给予鼓励。
情节线
开端：主人公在50岁时因脑损伤和加剧的抑郁症深感孤独和焦虑。她决定冒险学习马戏表演，以寻找新的人生动力。
发展：她初次参加马戏课，感到和其他年轻学员格格不入，特别是在发现自己缺乏力量和灵活性时感到自我怀疑。当教练提到最后的表演时，她因害怕自己无法做到而更加担心和失望。她最初想要尝试空中吊环，但因为臂力不足而感到沮丧。
情感线
初始情绪：主人公感到抑郁、孤独和焦虑，甚至害怕走出家门。
中期情绪：在报名参加马戏课并看到其他年轻学员时，她感到紧张、不安和自我怀疑。尝试空中吊环失败后，情绪转为失望和沮丧。
转折点：当她向教练表达沮丧时，教练的鼓励使她有了坚持下去的动力。
期待的情绪：通过不断的努力和克服困难，主人公最终获得自信和满足，超越自己的心理和身体障碍。
主题
勇敢面对挑战，克服自我怀疑，实现个人成长与自我超越。通过主人公挑战空中吊环的经历，文章展现了人们在面对身体和心理的双重困难时，通过努力和坚持，最终战胜内心的恐惧与障碍，并重新找回自信与生活热情的历程。主题还强调了支持与鼓励的重要性，以及突破舒适区所带来的深刻改变。
可续写的方向
方向一：突出主人公的努力过程，描述她如何一步一步克服身体上的困难，逐渐增强力量，重建自信。在练习过程中，可以描写同学们如何鼓励她，以及她如何逐渐融入这个年轻的团体，感受到集体的温暖和支持。
方向二：表现她在最终表演当天的紧张情绪，并通过回忆和教练的鼓励克服内心的恐惧。可以写她成功完成表演时的兴奋与解脱，以及观众的掌声对她心理上的重大影响。
方向三：通过表演后对她的心理变化进行升华。她意识到这不仅仅是一场表演，而是她重生的象征。可以描写她重新找回对生活的热情，甚至展望她未来的计划，比如继续挑战新的事物或者帮助其他有类似经历的人。
三、“八股文”续写模式
Paragraph 1
情绪(我有了动力和决心)：Her words ignited/kindled my determination. Greatly motivated, I was determined to push forward.
回应首句(继续努力增加臂力) ：With a renewed sense of purpose, I repeated the arm-strengthening exercises over and over.
情节+反应(辛苦训练不放弃)：My hands blistered, my arms aching, yet, I gritted my teeth., determined to conquer it.
出现转机(成功将自己举起在空中盘旋)：One day, gripping the hoop tightly and summoning all my strength, I lifted myself into the air. My body hovered above the ground, and I felt as if a bird flying freely. A rush of indescribable exhilaration surged through me. Gradually, my movements became less clumsy but more steady, each small victory spurring me forward.
与后文衔接(学生表演的日子到了)：Soon came the big day. Nerves crept up on me, but I reminded myself of how far I had come.
Paragraph 2
情绪+回应前文(现场环境+紧张又自信开始表演)：The lights were blinding, and the room buzzed with excitement. Beaming a confident smile, I gripped the hoop tightly and lifted myself up.
解决问题(成功表演+喜悦的心情)： Twirling and soaring through the air, I felt powerful and free, as if all the fear and doubt I had carried for so long finally melted away. Applause erupted and family members cheered as I finished.
收尾(我突破了自己的limits)：A smile spread across my face, a smile not just of triumph but of deep, profound joy. Tears of pure accomplishment welling up, I knew not just had I overcome my physical obstacles but also the darkness of depression. At age fifty, I learned to fly.
四、参考范文
When I expressed my upset to my coach, she smiled and said, “Just keep trying!” Her warm smile and genuine belief in me ignited my determination to push forward. With a renewed sense of purpose, I repeated the arm-strengthening exercises over and over. My hands blistered(起水泡), my arms aching, yet, I gritted my teeth(咬紧牙关). One day, gripping the hoop tightly and summoning all my strength, I lifted myself into the air. My body hovered above the ground, and I felt as if a bird flying freely. A rush of indescribable exhilaration surged through me. Gradually, my movements became less clumsy but more steady, each small victory spurring me forward(激励我前进). Soon came the big day. Nerves crept up on me(紧张), but I reminded myself of how far I had come.(114 words)
When my name was called, I stood up, confidently walking to the stage. The lights were blinding(灯光炫目), and the room buzzed with excitement(嗡嗡作响). My heart thumping wildly, yet taking a deep breath, I grabbed the aerial hoop and pulled myself up with strength and grace. Twirling and soaring through the air(在空中盘旋飞翔), I felt powerful and free, as if all the fear and doubt I had carried for so long finally melted away. Applause erupted and family members cheered as I finished. A smile spread across my face, a smile not just of triumph(成功) but of deep, profound joy. Tears of pure accomplishment welling up, I knew not just had I overcome my physical obstacles but also the darkness of depression. At age fifty, I learned to fly.(114 words)
Chatgpt 范文
When I expressed my upset to my coach, she smiled and said, “Just keep trying!” Her words were simple yet full of encouragement. Katelyn patiently showed me how to strengthen my arms and practice techniques to get onto the aerial hoop. “It’s not about perfection,” she added. “It’s about progress and having fun.” With her support and my classmates’ cheers, I threw myself into training. Each class brought new challenges, but slowly, my arm strength increased. There were days I wanted to give up, but I remembered how far I had come. The once unreachable hoop became a symbol of my determination. One day, after weeks of hard work, I pulled myself up into the hoop, feeling a rush of pride and joy. My classmates erupted into applause, and I felt something I hadn’t experienced in a long time: belonging and achievement. Then came the day of student performance.
When my name was called, I stood up, confidently walking to the stage. The room was full of family members, friends, and my supportive classmates. My heart pounded, but I took a deep breath, remembering Katelyn’s advice: “Enjoy every moment.” As I grasped the aerial hoop and lifted myself gracefully, a sense of freedom washed over me. I spun, stretched, and flew like a bird, feeling a pure joy I thought I had lost. The crowd’s cheers were overwhelming, but what mattered most was that I had overcome my self-doubt. Stepping off the stage, I was met with smiles and congratulations. I realized that taking this leap into the circus had not only helped me regain strength but also brought me back to life, filled with hope and connection.
语料积累（尝试吊环前的紧张—艰难的训练—最后的成功）
·She stood before the aerial hoop, her palms sweaty and her heart pounding like a drum. Staring at the hoop suspended high in the air, anxiety and fear gripped her, making the challenge seem impossibly daunting.
·She gripped the sides of the hoop tightly, summoning all her strength to lift herself. Her arms trembled, her muscles burning like fire, and she could barely maintain her hold, sweat trickling down her forehead as a heavy wave of disappointment washed over her.
·Her palms became blistered, and the soreness in her muscles kept her awake at night. Yet she gritted her teeth, whispering to herself, “This pain is worth it.” Whenever exhaustion threatened to overwhelm her, she thought of the days when she could barely step out of her house. Those dark memories spurred her onward.
· Then, one day, she gripped the hoop and, with every ounce of strength in her body, managed to pull herself up steadily. Her feet left the ground, and she hung in the air, an indescribable thrill surging through her. Sitting on the hoop, she spread her arms wide, feeling the gentle breeze brush against her face. It felt as if the whole world was cheering for her triumph.
· Tears welled up in her eyes—tears of joy and accomplishment. She could hardly believe she had finally done it. The feeling of regaining control over her body and her life flooded her with a sense of long-lost confidence and strength.

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