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读后续写 ：个人成长类之父亲不离不弃和身残志坚的孩子勇闯铁人三项
读后续写（湖北省武汉市2023-2024学年高三二月调研考试试卷）
From the day Johnny was born, Jeff refused to let his son's disabilities hold him back. Johnny has cerebral palsy(脑瘫), making it difficult for him to walk. Determined to show Johnny that he could pursue his dream of being an athlete, when he was 15 years old, Jeff signed him up with Team Triumph, an organization that helps kids with disabilities engage in endurance sports.
" It gave me a new perspective on life," Johnny said. He even dreamed of walking marathon one day. From then on, Johnny became addicted to racing, and Jeff also wanted to be a part of it. Though Jeff had been a minor league baseball player, endurance(耐力) sports were new to him. He made up his mind to achieve Johnny's dream and started doing things he never dreamed about. He began waking up at 4 a.m. So he could run in the silent street while pushing Johnny in a special wheelchair called a racing chair. Every morning, he drove himself to run increasingly longer distances. Soon, he and Johnny were entering 5K races, then on to Iron-man triathlons.
Finishing the Iron-man competition in under 16 hours would be another dream for Jeff and Johnny. The big day came. The race began with a 2.4-mile swim in the river. Jeff helped Johnny into a kayak(皮艇). With one end of a rope tied to a belt around his back and the other end to the kayak, Jeff eased himself into the water. Swimming while dragging another person is quite tough. The pair completed the swim in 90 minutes, and then it was on to the next leg: a 112-mile bicycle ride.
按下文给出的衔接句进行续写：
P1 Their specially-made bike has an additional back seat facing backward for Johnny.
P2 Then they sat their sights on the final leg of the race with Johnny sitting in the racing.
对提示句P1,P2做逐词逐句的解读，理解其背后深意；
回溯原文，找到对应的文本，确定基本元素，时间，地点，人物，所涉及的物品，细节等信息；
试图对时间线，地点线结合P1,P2的提示句，看是否有所变化，以确定是否需要展开；
构思情节
读懂最后2段尤其是最后1段的信息，合理结合生活实际，构思文章，并完成
成长前的困扰
情境描写+消极情绪的累积→高潮
成长中的蜕变
成长的动机+过程中变化的心情
成长后的升华
成长后的收获+积极情绪(喜悦、满足和骄傲等)
积累原文素材，认真审读原文原文赏析
Find your enthusiasm
From the day Johnny was born, Jeff refused to let his son's disabilities hold him back. Johnny has cerebral palsy(脑瘫), making it difficult for him to walk(非谓语动词做伴随动作，或补语). Determined to show Johnny that he could pursue his dream of being an athlete(非谓语动词做伴随动作，或主语John补语), when he was 15 years old(状从), Jeff signed him up with Team Triumph, an organization that helps kids with disabilities engage in endurance sports(定从).
" It gave me a new perspective on life," Johnny said. He even dreamed of walking marathon one day. From then on, Johnny became addicted to racing, and Jeff also wanted to be a part of it. Though Jeff had been a minor league baseball player(状从), endurance(耐力) sports were new to him. He made up his mind to achieve Johnny's dream and started doing things he never dreamed about(定从). He began waking up at 4 a.m. So he could run in the silent street while pushing Johnny in a special wheelchair(状从，省略形式) called a racing chair(非谓语动词做后置定语). Every morning, he drove himself to run increasingly longer distances. Soon, he and Johnny were entering 5K races, then on to Iron-man triathlons.
Finishing the Iron-man competition in under 16 hours would be another dream for Jeff and Johnny. The big day came. The race began with a 2.4-mile swim in the river. Jeff helped Johnny into a kayak(皮艇). With one end of a rope tied to a belt around his back and the other end to the kayak(with引导的状语), Jeff eased himself into the water. Swimming while dragging another person(动名词短语做主语) is quite tough. The pair completed the swim in 90 minutes, and then it was on to the next leg: a 112-mile bicycle ride.
1.续写原文分析：
这段文本讲述了父亲杰夫（Jeff）和他的儿子约翰尼（Johnny）的感人故事。约翰尼出生时就患有脑瘫，这使得他走路非常困难。尽管如此，杰夫坚决不让儿子的残疾阻碍他的梦想，决心让约翰尼追求成为运动员的梦想。杰夫为约翰尼报名参加了一个专门帮助残疾儿童参与耐力运动的组织。随着时间的推移，约翰尼爱上了赛车，而杰夫也开始投入其中，甚至为了陪伴约翰尼而进行高强度的训练。
故事中提到，他们一起参加了许多比赛，包括铁人三项（Ironman），并且他们在比赛中的努力与成就展现了父子间深厚的情感和不屈不挠的精神。
2.续写思路
在续写时，可以围绕以下几个方面展开：
1. 细节描述: 继续描述比赛的细节，包括骑自行车的经历，遇到的挑战以及父子间的互动。可以描绘他们的感受、周围的环境、其他参赛者的表现等。
2. 情感升华: 强调杰夫和约翰尼在比赛过程中的情感变化，比如面对困难时的坚持和相互支持。可以加入一些对话或内心独白，展现他们的心理状态。
3. 结束语: 最后可以通过他们完成比赛后的感受来总结这一段旅程。例如，约翰尼如何感受到成功的喜悦，杰夫对儿子的骄傲，或者他们对未来的憧憬。通过这种续写方式，可以充分展现杰夫与约翰尼之间深厚的父子情，以及他们在追求梦想过程中所经历的艰辛与快乐。结合细腻的情感描写与生动的场景描绘，续写将使整个故事更加感人和完整。
3.续写的节奏把控:
点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。
由于首段提示句P1 Their specially-made bike has an additional back seat facing backward for Johnny. 提到了他们自制的自行车去参加铁人三项中的112mile的部分，一定会遇到困难，第一段重点写Tony 和 Jonny互相鼓励，突破自我的比赛过程；
第二段P2 Then they sat their sights on the final leg of the race with Johnny sitting in the racing.给出的提示信息是他们坐在自己的车上，到达了比赛的最后一程，并且有Johnny的陪伴，仍在处于比赛的过程中，故而，应该把重点的信息依然放在写比赛的最后一程方面。
重点词汇和短语日积月累才是捷径
重点词汇短语
1. 句子结构
现象: 复合句
- 解析: 原文使用了许多复合句，通过连词连接主句和从句，增加句子的复杂性和信息量。
- 例子: “From the day Johnny was born, Jeff refused to let his son's disabilities hold him back.”
2. 非谓语动词
现象: 动名词和分词
- 解析: 使用动名词和分词形式来表示伴随或原因关系。
- 例子: “Determined to show Johnny that he could pursue his dream of being an athlete, Jeff signed him up…”
3. 现在分词短语
现象: 现在分词作状语
- 解析: 现在分词用来描述时间、原因或条件。
- 例子: “...making it difficult for him to walk.” 这里“making”表示因果关系。
4. 直接引语
现象: 引号内的直接引语
- 解析: 直接引语用于表达角色的原话，增加生动性和真实性。
- 例子: “It gave me a new perspective on life,” Johnny said.
5. 从属连词
现象: 使用从属连词引导的时间从句
- 解析: 从属连词“when”用于引导时间从句，表达事件的时间关系。
- 例子: “when he was 15 years old, Jeff signed him up…”
6. 被动语态
现象: 被动语态的使用
- 解析: 被动语态用于强调动作的承受者或结果。
- 例子: “...an organization that helps kids with disabilities engage in endurance sports.” (helps是主动形式，但整个短语强调了组织的功能)
7. 定语从句
现象: 定语从句
- 解析: 定语从句用于对名词进行修饰，提供更多细节信息。
- 例子: “...an organization that helps kids with disabilities engage in endurance sports.”
8. 并列句
现象: 并列句
- 解析: 通过并列连词连接两个独立主句。
- 例子: “He began waking up at 4 a.m. So he could run in the silent street while pushing Johnny…”
扩展例子
1. 使用复合句:
- Original: “Though it was raining, they decided to go for a run.”
- 扩展: “Although the weather was bad, they continued their training regimen.”
2. 使用现在分词短语:
- Original: “Walking quickly, she made it to the bus stop just in time.”
- 扩展: “Running late, he hurried to catch the train.”
汉译英练习题
1. 汉语: 尽管天气恶劣，他们还是决定进行训练。
- 答案: Although the weather was bad, they decided to continue their training.
2. 汉语: 他一直梦想着参加马拉松比赛。
- 答案: He has always dreamed of participating in a marathon.
重点单词分析
单词的替换现象是写作的加分点
1. Soak in
释义: 吸收，沉浸于
近义词: Absorb, take in
同义词: Immerse, indulge
对应词组: Soak in the atmosphere, soak in the experience
例句:
1. After the long hike, I took a moment to soak in the breathtaking views of the mountains.
2. She closed her eyes to soak in the music, letting the melodies wash over her.
3. During the quiet evening, he sat by the fire to soak in the warmth and comfort.
4. As the sun set, they paused to soak in the beauty of the vibrant colors in the sky.
使用方式: 在续写中，可以描述角色如何沉浸在比赛的氛围中，感受周围的情感。例如，Johnny在比赛中体验欢呼声和观众的支持，表明他对这次经历的感受。可以扩展为“soak in the cheers of the crowd”或“soak in the joy of victory”。
2. Exhilarate
释义: 使兴奋，使振奋
近义词: Energize, invigorate
同义词: Excite, elate
对应词组: Exhilarate the crowd, exhilarate the atmosphere
例句:
1. The thrilling performance exhilarated the audience, leaving them breathless.
2. A sudden burst of laughter can exhilarate even the dullest of moments.
3. The fresh mountain air exhilarated him, making him feel alive.
4. The news of their victory exhilarated the entire team.
使用方式: 可以用来描述比赛中观众或运动员的情绪。例如，可以写成“the exhilarating atmosphere of the race”或“the exhilarated faces of the spectators”。
3. Speed
释义: 加速，快速移动
近义词: Rush, hurry
同义词: Accelerate, zip
对应词组: Speed up, speed along
例句:
1. They had to speed through the project to meet the deadline.
2. The car began to speed down the highway as the driver pressed the gas pedal.
3. He decided to speed up his training regimen in preparation for the race.
4. The train will speed along the tracks, reaching its destination in no time.
使用方式: 在续写中，可以用“speed”来形容运动员的节奏。例如，“speed toward the finish line”或“the team sped through the course”。
4. Pedal
释义: 踏，踩（踏板）
近义词: Push, crank
同义词: Cycle, treadle
对应词组: Pedal faster, pedal away
例句:
1. She learned to pedal a bike before she could even walk.
2. The athlete began to pedal harder as he approached the finish line.
3. He had to pedal uphill, feeling the strain in his legs.
4. They took turns pedaling the tandem bike through the park.
使用方式: 可以用来描述运动员在比赛中的动作，例如“pedal with determination”或“pedal as fast as they could”。
5. Whip
释义: 鞭打，快速移动
近义词: Lash, flick
同义词: Beat, stir
对应词组: Whip up, whip through
例句:
1. The wind began to whip around them as the storm approached.
2. She used a whisk to whip the cream into soft peaks.
3. The coach would whip the team into shape for the upcoming match.
4. He decided to whip up a quick dinner before his guests arrived.
使用方式: 可以用来形容风或速度，例如“the wind whipped around them”或“they whipped through the course”。
6. Ring out
释义: 响起，回响
近义词: Echo, resound
同义词: Sound, reverberate
对应词组: Ring out loud, ring out clear
例句:
1. The bell began to ring out, signaling the start of the ceremony.
2. Laughter would ring out from the room, filling it with joy.
3. Her voice rang out clearly, capturing everyone's attention.
4. The music rang out across the park, inviting everyone to dance.
使用方式: 在续写中，可以用来描绘环境的声音，例如“the cheers rang out as they crossed the finish line”。
7. Palpable
释义: 明显的，可感知的
近义词: Tangible, noticeable
同义词: Perceptible, evident
对应词组: Palpable tension, palpable excitement
例句:
1. The tension in the room was palpable as they awaited the announcement.
2. Her excitement was palpable when she received the good news.
3. There was a palpable sense of relief when the storm passed.
4. The connection between them was palpable, evident in their every glance.
使用方式: 可以用来描述气氛或情感，例如“the palpable excitement in the air”或“the palpable tension before the race”。
8. Glanced at
释义: 瞥一眼，快速看
近义词: Looked at, peeked at
同义词: Cast a glance, took a look
对应词组: Glanced at the clock, glanced at her phone
例句:
1. He glanced at his watch, realizing he was late for the meeting.
2. She glanced at the beautiful painting hanging on the wall.
3. They exchanged glances, silently communicating their thoughts.
4. He quickly glanced at the book, hoping to catch a glimpse of the ending.
使用方式: 在续写中，可以用来描述人物之间的互动，例如“he glanced at Johnny with encouragement”。
9. Leaned forward
释义: 向前倾身
近义词: Inclined forward, bent forward
同义词: Propelled, advanced
对应词组: Leaned forward in excitement, leaned forward to listen
例句:
1. She leaned forward to hear better as the speaker began to talk.
2. He leaned forward in his chair, eager to see the results.
3. The child leaned forward, trying to catch a glimpse of the parade.
4. They leaned forward in anticipation as the fireworks lit up the sky.
使用方式: 描述人物的期待感，例如“they leaned forward in their seats as the race began”。
10. Conquer the challenge
释义: 克服挑战，征服困难
近义词: Overcome the challenge, face the challenge
同义词: Master the challenge, tackle the challenge
对应词组: Conquer the mountain, conquer the fear
例句:
1. With determination, she was ready to conquer the challenge ahead.
2. He faced every obstacle with the mindset to conquer the challenge.
3. The team worked together to conquer the challenge of the project.
4. It was time to conquer the challenge that had long intimidated him.
使用方式: 用于描述角色克服困难的决心，例如“they were determined to conquer the challenge of the race”。
11. Surge
释义: 涌现，急剧上升
近义词: Rush, swell
同义词: Rise, burst
对应词组: Surge of energy, surge forward
例句:
1. A surge of excitement filled the crowd as the concert began.
2. He felt a surge of adrenaline as he crossed the finish line.
3. The river surged after the heavy rain, overflowing its banks.
4. She experienced a surge of confidence before her presentation.
使用方式: 描述情感或能量的涌现，例如“a surge of adrenaline”或“surged forward as the race started”。
12. Adrenaline
- 释义: 肾上腺素
- 近义词: Excitement hormone, epinephrine
- 同义词: Rush, thrill
- 对应词组: Adrenaline rush, surge of adrenaline
- 例句:
1. The adrenaline coursed through his veins as he prepared for the race.
2. She loved the adrenaline of extreme sports and sought new challenges.
3. An adrenaline rush can help you perform better in high-pressure situations.
4. The fear of failing triggered an adrenaline response that pushed him to succeed.
- 使用方式: 可以用来描写激烈时刻的感受，例如“the adrenaline pumping as they reached the finish line”。
13. Infectious enthusiasm
- 释义: 具有感染力的热情
- 近义词: Contagious excitement, spirited energy
- 同义词: Inspiring passion, exuberant zeal
- 对应词组: Infectious enthusiasm for learning, infectious enthusiasm in the team
- 例句:
1. Her infectious enthusiasm motivated everyone in the group.
2. The coach’s infectious enthusiasm inspired the team to train harder.
3. His infectious enthusiasm for the project made it a success.
4. Children’s infectious enthusiasm can light up any classroom.
- 使用方式: 描述团队或观众的情绪，例如“the infectious enthusiasm spread among the racers”。
14. Unwavering
- 释义: 坚定不移的
- 近义词: Steadfast, unflinching
- 同义词: Resolute, determined
- 对应词组: Unwavering support, unwavering belief
- 例句:
1. Her unwavering commitment to her goals kept her moving forward.
2. They faced adversity with an unwavering spirit.
3. His unwavering focus on the task helped him achieve success.
4. The team's unwavering dedication was evident in their performance.
- 使用方式: 可以描述角色的决心，例如“with unwavering determination, they approached the finish line”。
15. Segment
- 释义: 部分，片段
- 近义词: Section, part
- 同义词: Portion, division
- 对应词组: Segment of the market, segment of the race
- 例句:
1. They divided the project into manageable segments for better organization.
2. The race consisted of several segments, each with its own challenges.
3. In marketing, it's important to identify your target customer segment.
4. She focused on one segment of the problem at a time to find a solution.
- 使用方式: 描述比赛的不同阶段，例如“each segment of the race brought new challenges”。
16. Radiate
- 释义: 辐射，散发
- 近义词: Emit, spread
- 同义词: Exude, project
- 对应词组: Radiate warmth, radiate positivity
- 例句:
1. The sun began to radiate its warmth as it rose in the sky.
2. Her smile seemed to radiate happiness, lifting everyone’s spirits.
3. The team’s energy radiated throughout the venue, creating a lively atmosphere.
4. He could feel the love radiate from his family during the reunion.
- 使用方式: 可以用来描述气氛，例如“radiate confidence”或“radiate joy during the race”。
17. Accelerate
- 释义: 加速
- 近义词: Speed up, hasten
- 同义词: Quickening, expedite
- 对应词组: Accelerate growth, accelerate progress
- 例句:
1. The driver had to accelerate quickly to avoid the oncoming traffic.
2. We need to accelerate our efforts if we want to meet the deadline.
3. The company plans to accelerate its expansion into new markets.
4. She took a deep breath and began to accelerate her pace during the run.
- 使用方式: 用来描绘运动的加速，例如“accelerate toward the finish line”。
18. Narrow
- 释义: 变窄，收缩
- 近义词: Slim, tighten
- 同义词: Constrict, reduce
- 对应词组: Narrow down, narrow focus
- 例句:
1. He needed to narrow down his options before making a decision.
2. The path began to narrow as they ventured deeper into the forest.
3. She had to narrow her focus to complete the task on time.
4. The debate helped narrow the issues that needed to be addressed.
- 使用方式: 可以描述路途或目标的集中，例如“the path narrowed as they approached the finish line”。
Possible Version 1
Their specially-made bike has an additional back seat facing backward for Johnny, allowing him to soak in the exhilarating sights as they sped along(状从). Jeff felt a surge of pride as he pedaled hard(状从), the wind whipping through his hair and the sun shining brightly above them(可积累语料，独立主格). Johnny's laughter rang out, mixing with the sounds of the cheering crowd that lined the route(非谓语动词做伴随动作+定从). With each turn(伴随状语), Jeff could see the determination in Johnny’s eyes(可积累语料，非谓语动词做伴随动作), reflecting their shared dream(非谓语动词做伴随动作). As they approached the last stretch(状从), Jeff’s muscles burned(可积累语料), but the thought of crossing the finish line together pushed him forward. They were a team, and nothing could hold them back now.
Then they set their sights on the final leg of the race with Johnny sitting in the racing chair. The excitement was palpable, and Jeff could feel his heart racing in sync with the rhythm of the bike(可积累语料). The cheers from the spectators grew louder(可积累语料), urging them on(非谓语动词做伴随) as they navigated the twists and turns of the course. Johnny leaned forward, his face beaming with joy(独立主格), ready to conquer this final challenge(形容词短语做补语). Jeff glanced at the finish line ahead, its vibrant colors beckoning them closer(独立主格). With one last burst of energy(伴随状语), they surged forward, embodying the spirit of resilience and triumph(非谓语动词做伴随动作).
Possible Version 2
Their specially-made bike has an additional back seat facing backward for Johnny, allowing him to enjoy the view of the cheering crowd behind them. As they pedaled(状从), Jeff felt a wave of adrenaline rush through him(可积累语料), driving him to push harder(非谓语动词做伴随). Johnny’s infectious enthusiasm filled the air(可积累语料); every shout of encouragement from the onlookers fueled their determination(可积累语料). Jeff could see the finish line approaching, a bright banner fluttering in the distance(独立主格). It was a symbol of their journey, a culmination of countless hours of training and unwavering support.
Then they set their sights on the final leg of the race with Johnny sitting in the racing chair. Jeff’s heart swelled with pride(可积累语料) as they approached the last segment(状从), the cheers of the crowd ringing in their ears(独立主格). He could feel Johnny's excitement radiating off him, a reminder of why they were here(宾从). With a final push(伴随状语), they accelerated, the bike gliding smoothly over the pavement(独立主格). Jeff’s focus narrowed to the path ahead, the world around them fading away(独立主格) as they raced toward their shared dream(状从). They were not just finishing a race; they were rewriting their story of perseverance and love(可积累语料).
Possible Version 3
Their specially-made bike has an additional back seat facing backward for Johnny, a design that allowed him to feel the wind rush past his face(定从) as they rode(状从). Jeff smiled, knowing that every mile they traveled together(定从) was a step toward(宾从) making Johnny's dreams come true(非谓语动词短语做后置定语). The rhythmic sound of the wheels turning matched the beating of his heart, a steady reminder of their progress(补语). Each cheer from the crowd was a testament to their hard work and resilience, pushing them closer to the finish line(非谓语动词做后置定语).
Then they set their sights on the final leg of the race with Johnny sitting in the racing chair. The excitement in the air was electric, and Jeff felt a surge of determination(可积累语料). He could see the finish line ahead, and with it, the promise of victory(介词短语做同位语). As they rounded the final corner, Johnny’s voice broke through,(状从) “Let’s do this, Dad!” Jeff nodded, his resolve unwavering(独立主格). With one last effort, they propelled (可积累动词)themselves forward, crossing the finish line together(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). In that moment, they were champions, bound by their journey and the love(非谓语动词短语做定语) that had brought them this far(定从).

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