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高考英语一轮复习写作专项：应用文练习写作--人与自我之做人与做事
写作任务
假设你是李华，下周你将作为交换生到伦敦学习，请你给曾经的外籍教师——来自伦敦的Mr. Smith写一封信，要点包括：
1. 告知Mr. Smith你即将到伦敦学习；
2. 感谢Mr. Smith的教诲；将去看望Mr. Smith；自己的学习打算等；
3. 表达祝愿。
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
思路
该题的语篇类型是应用文，主题语境为人与自我之做人与做事。在跨文化交流的同时，该写作体现出一种尊师的优秀品质。另外，海外学习也是积极人生态度的体现。此题属于半开放提纲类作文，要求考生根据提示合理添加细节。
此写作要点归纳和拓展如下：
(1) 问候对方，并告知对方自己下周将作为交换生到伦敦学习；
(2) 感谢对方的教诲；
(3)自己将去看望对方；
(4)自己在伦敦的学习打算；
(5)希望早日见到对方并表达祝愿。
行文时注意思路要清晰，可以适当添加细节，但要注意词数要求；语气要恰当，表达要准确，句式要多样。
此写作正文可分为三段。
第一段：告知对方自己即将去伦敦学习；
第二段：描述三个要点，即：表达感谢、要去看望对方、自己的学习打算；
第三段：希望早日见到对方，并表达祝愿。
范文
Version 1
Dear Mr. Smith,
How are you doing Two years ago, you returned to London; I have been missing you. I’m writing to tell you that I will go to London to study as an exchange student.
When you taught me English, you gave me a lot of help. Thanks to your help, I improved my English greatly. I have been thankful to you. As soon as I arrive in London next week, I will go to see you. What’s more, as an exchange student, I will study hard to improve my English, learn more about British culture and history and make more friends.
I’m looking forward to seeing you soon. I hope you’ll continue to enjoy good health.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
Version 2
Dear Mr. Smith,
How are you doing I’m delighted to tell you that I’ll go to your city to study as an exchange student next week and see you soon.
It’s two years since you returned to London. To begin with, I’d like to convey my sincere gratitude to you for your help with my English. But for your help, I wouldn’t have made rapid progress. Secondly, arriving in London, I’ll visit you with a nice tea set and some tea, which may appeal to you. Furthermore, I’ll study in London for a year, during which I’ll make the best of this opportunity to work hard at English and broaden my horizons.
I can’t wait to see you. May joy and health always be with you.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
亮点
1. 两封书信正文结构安排恰当，要点表达齐全；语言表达上Version 1用词平淡，给人一种平铺直叙的感觉，而Version 2用词更加准确，句式更加多样，语气更加正式；另外，在细节方面，Version 2添加中国的茶文化，体现文化交流和文化自信的意义，更上档次。
2. Version 2句式多样：(1)第二段第一句使用句型It is/has been…since…；(2)第二段第三句使用虚拟语气(But for your help, I wouldn’t have made rapid progress)；(3)第二段第四句使用V-ing结构作状语及which引导的非限制性定语从句(arriving in London…which may appeal to you)；(4)第二段最后一句使用“介词+which”引导的非限制性定语从句(during which I’ll make the best of this opportunity…)。
3. 在词汇运用方面，Version 2用词更丰富、更贴切、更高级。例如：convey,gratitude, but for, appeal to, make the best of, can’t wait及may等。
其他可用表达
1. It is two years ago that you returned to London.
2. If it hadn’t been for your help/If you hadn’t offered help to me, I wouldn’t have made rapid progress.
3. Secondly, the moment I arrive in London, I’ll visit you with a nice tea set and some tea, which may appeal to you.
4. Furthermore, during my stay in London, I’ll make the best of this opportunity to work hard at English and broaden my horizons.
5. I miss you so much that I’m eager to see you again.

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