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读后续写练习写作指导与范文：吉他比赛
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Once upon a time,there lived a young boy named Ethan in a small village.With a passion for music,Ethan was enthusiastic about playing the guitar.Every day after school, he would rush home,grab his guitar,and lose himself in the melodies(乐曲)he created.
One summer,the village was hosting a talent show,and Ethan decided to participate. However,doubts started to flood into his mind.He began comparing himself to other talented musicians and questioning his abilities.The fear of failure began to consume him.
But Ethan's grandfather,who had always been his biggest supporter,noticed his grandson's inner struggle.He sat down with Ethan and shared a story from his own youth.
“When I was your age,I had a dream of becoming a painter.But I was filled with self-doubt. just like you are now.I decided to seek guidance from a wise old artist in a nearby town.
The old artist listened to my worries and offered me a challenge.He asked me to paint a picture on a large canvas in front of a crowd. Overwhelmed by the challenge, I hesitated.
The wise artist smiled and told me not to focus on what others might think.He asked me to paint from my heart and pour my soul into every stroke.The beauty lies not in perfection,but in the authenticity(真实性)of one's creation.
Encouraged by these words,I accepted the challenge.I painted with passion, letting my emotions guide my brush.Finally,a beautiful masterpiece appeared on the canvas."
Finishing the story,Ethan's grandfather said,“That day,I realized that success is not defined by how perfect we are or how we compare to others.It's about embracing our unique talents,taking risks,and expressing ourselves with passion and authenticity."
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Inspired by his grandfather's story,Ethan decided to give the talent show his all.
Ethan didn't pay much attention to the surroundings until he heard the applause at the end of his performance.
写作指导
文本分析
这篇文本是一个励志故事，讲述了一个名叫Ethan的年轻男孩和他的祖父的故事。Ethan是一个对音乐充满热情的男孩，他喜欢弹吉他并且每天都会创作旋律。当村里举办才艺表演时，他决定参加，但开始怀疑自己的能力，害怕失败。Ethan的祖父注意到了他的挣扎，于是分享了自己年轻时的故事并鼓励他。受到这些话的鼓舞，Ethan决定参赛。自那天后，他意识到成功不是由我们有多完美或者我们如何与他人比较来定义的，而是关于拥抱我们独特的才能，敢于冒险，并以激情和真实表达自己。
读原文 理解基本要素和2情线
Characters:Ethan, Ethan's grandfather
When: One summer，during the talent show
Where: on the stage
What: Enthan decided to attend the talent show and showed his talent.
2情线
情节线：想参加吉他比赛→自我怀疑→祖父分享故事鼓励参赛 →深受鼓励，Ethan决定训练 →(续写段1)深受祖父故事的鼓励，Ethan决定全身心投入比赛。→(续写段2)直到听到掌声，Ethan才注意到周边情况。
情感线：Ethan：interested/enthuastic→doubtful→encouraged/inspired...
思续写情节
衔接1：根据句1 Inspired by his grandfather's story,Ethan decided to give the talent show his all. 可知，第一段接下来可描述Ethan如何投入到为比赛的准备当中，并参加比赛，在比赛中表现地很出色。
衔接2：根据句2 Ethan didn't pay much attention to the surroundings until he heard the applause at the end of his performance. 可知，段一应提到Ethan参加比赛，并且表现很好，他的吉他技巧令大家着迷。
衔接3：根据句2的Ethan didn't pay much attention to the surroundings until he heard the applause at the end of his performance. 可知，第二段接下来描述出现完成比赛后画面及感受：Ethan有何反应？Ethan收获了什么？信心？对祖父的话有了很好的理解？明白了真正的成功是表达自我？
衔接4：尾句：衔接原文“That day,I realized that success is not defined by how perfect we are or how we compare to others.It's about embracing our unique talents,taking risks,and expressing ourselves with passion and authenticity."通过这次比赛，Ethan明白成功的定义不是与他人作比较，而是真实地去表达自己。
思伏笔巧协同
原文伏笔
情节协同
Para.1 Ethan was enthusiastic about playing the guitar.Every day after school, he would rush home,grab his guitar,and lose himself in the melodies(乐曲)he created.
第一段：可协同写：像往常一样，充满热情(full of passion)，他沉浸（bathed himself in)在练习吉他当中。
Para.6 He asked me to paint from my heart and pour my soul into every stroke.
第一段：可协同写：在练习过程中，他全身心投入到每个音符(note)
Para.3 He began comparing himself to other talented musicians and questioning his abilities.
第一段：可协同写：随着技巧的熟悉，他不在与他人作比较，也更加相信自己的能力
Para.6 told me not to focus on what others might think.
第一段：可协同写:表演时，只专注于他的演奏
Para.7 I painted with passion, letting my emotions guide my brush.
第一段：可协同写：他充满热情地弹奏，让情绪指引着每次拨弦(string)
Para.7 Finally,a beautiful masterpiece appeared on the canvas."
第一段：可协同写：最终，一首动听的乐曲(soundful melody)呈现(presented to)给观众，触动大家(strike a chord with sb.)
Para.2.However,doubts started to flood into his mind. The fear of failure began to consume him.
第二段：可协同写：情绪转变：疑虑和害怕消失(die away)，取而代之(replaced by)的是开心与自豪
Para.4 But I was filled with self-doubt.
第二段：可协同写：在那一刻，那个曾经自我怀疑少年找到新的(a renewed sense of)信心
Para.8 Ethan's grandfather said,“That day, I realized that success is not defined by...
第二段：可协同写：祖父的话萦绕耳边(ring in his ears)使他意识到成功的真谛
主旨：敢于接受挑战、真诚表达自我等
协同原文语言风格
1.多动作衔接：Every day after school, he would rush home, grab his guitar,and lose himself in the melodies(乐曲)he created.
2. 情绪名词作主语：However, doubts started to flood into his mind.
3.分词作状语：Overwhelmed by the challenge, I hesitated.
Encouraged by these words,I accepted the challenge.
I painted with passion, letting my emotions guide my brush.
范文赏析
Inspired by his grandfather’s story, Ethan decided to give the talent show his all. He practiced every day, often for hours, until his fingers were raw and his back ached.He practiced tirelessly and poured his heart into every note. When the day of the talent show arrived, Ethan took a deep breath, stepped on stage, and played his guitar like never before.The audience was captivated by his performance. Ethan's fingers danced on the strings， creating melodies that touched their hearts. At that moment, he realized that his self-doubts had held him back, but now he was free.
Ethan didn’t pay much attention to the surroundings until he heard the applause at the end of his performance. He looked up and saw his grandfather smiling proudly at him from the audience. Ethan felt a surge of happiness and pride. His hard work and dedication had paid off, and he had finally overcome his self-doubts. He smiled, knowing that this was just the beginning of his musical journey. Ethan never forgot the lesson he learned from his grandfather’s story: With hard work and dedication, one can achieve his dreams. Beauty lies not in perfection, but in the authenticity of your creation. He regarded this lesson as a constant reminder to never give up on his passions and dreams.

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