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读后续写练习写作训练：个人成长类之即将退休教师音乐会对教学和学生的新认知 自我疗愈（含解析）
读后续写（温州市2025届高三第一次适应性考试）
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The stage lights in the music hall darkened, as the next school’s concert band settled onstage. The First Chair, a young violinist, called upon each section to play, tuning them with precision and grace. The moment the musical director appeared, a wave of applause filled the air.
The annual High School Music Festival was the highlight of my year. As a music teacher, I never missed a session, always amazed by the extraordinary talents the musical directors inspired in their students. But this year might be my last visit. With age catching up, my desire for retirement was growing stronger.
Honestly, there was always a touch of dissatisfaction and envy in my heart as I watched these school bands, because I had never been able to develop a band to this level. I taught in a small primary school. My students played beginner music, and they were happy when we managed to play from the start all the way to the end of a piece, with all the instruments finishing together. The complexities of full tone, dynamic control, and balance were beyond their abilities.
As the band opened with their first piece, the striking sound of violins, accompanied by the lively notes of pianos, set my heart pounding. Wouldn’t it be great to be the musical director for one of these massive high school bands I thought as the music transported me. When the last notes rang out, there was a brief silence before thunderous applause erupted. My aging eyes scanned (察看) the stage, seeking familiar faces among the performers. But my vision was no longer sharp enough to recognize anyone.
During the tea break, I headed toward the entrance hall. “Miss Jones!” a young man’s voice cut through the crowd. I recognized the concert uniform he was wearing. It was the very violinist I had been admiring. Puzzled,I searched his face for familiar features. It turned out to be Bradley, a former student of mine who was difficult to forget. Schoolwork had been hard for him, and he had struggled through all his subjects. It was a pleasant surprise to meet him here. We sat down and had a chat.
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I remembered the day when he asked to join the school band.
I was still smiling as I made my way back to the music hall.
积累原文素材，认真审读原文
原文分析：the highlight of （积累）
The stage lights in the music hall darkened, as the next school’s concert band settled onstage（状从）. The First Chair, a young violinist, called upon each section to play, tuning them with precision and grace（非谓语动词做伴随动作）. The moment the musical director appeared（状从复合连词）, a wave of applause filled the air（积累）.
The annual High School Music Festival was the highlight of my year. As a music teacher, I never missed a session, always amazed by the extraordinary talents（非谓语动词做主语的补语）the musical directors inspired in their students（定从）. But this year might be my last visit. With age catching up（非谓语动词做后置定语）, my desire for retirement was growing stronger.
Honestly, there was always a touch of dissatisfaction and envy in my heart as I watched these school bands（状从）, because I had never been able to develop a band to this level. I taught in a small primary school. My students played beginner music, and they were happy when we managed to play from the start all the way to the end of a piece, with all the instruments finishing together（非谓语动词做后置定语）. The complexities of full tone, dynamic control, and balance were beyond their abilities.
As the band opened with their first piece, the striking sound of violins, accompanied by the lively notes of pianos（非谓语动词做后置定语）, set my heart pounding. Wouldn’t it be great to be the musical director for one of these massive high school bands I thought as the music transported me（状从）. When the last notes rang out, there was a brief silence before thunderous applause erupted. My aging eyes scanned (察看) the stage, seeking familiar faces among the performers（非谓语动词做伴随动作）. But my vision was no longer sharp enough to recognize anyone.
During the tea break, I headed toward the entrance hall. “Miss Jones!” a young man’s voice cut through the crowd. I recognized the concert uniform he was wearing（定从）. It was the very violinist I had been admiring（定从）. Puzzled（非谓语动词做adj主语补语）,I searched his face for familiar features. It turned out to be Bradley, a former student of mine who was difficult to forget（定从）. Schoolwork had been hard for him, and he had struggled through all his subjects. It was a pleasant surprise to meet him here. We sat down and had a chat.
原文语法、重点词汇短语和续写思路
重点词汇短语
语法现象分析
1. 并列句与复合句
- 例如：“The stage lights in the music hall darkened, as the next school’s concert band settled onstage.”
- 分析：此句是并列复合句，由并列连词“as”连接两个分句。前者陈述舞台灯光暗下来，后者描述乐队上场，两者表明时间上的相继关系。
2. 定语从句
- 例如：“I recognized the concert uniform he was wearing.”
- 分析：这里“he was wearing”是定语从句，修饰“concert uniform”，解释了“uniform”的细节信息。此结构增强了句子的描述性。
3. 分词结构
- 例如：“Puzzled, I searched his face for familiar features.”
- 分析：句中“Puzzled”为分词做状语，表明说话人“疑惑”的状态，使句子更加简洁、流畅，表现人物情感。
4. 省略现象
- 例如：“Wouldn’t it be great to be the musical director for one of these massive high school bands ”
- 分析：该句省略了部分主句结构，但完整意思为“Wouldn’t it be great if I could be the musical director...”，这种结构在英语口语及书面表达中常用。
常见搭配与语料积累
1. Settle onstage - 登台
- 定义：登上舞台，为演出准备就绪。
- 近义词：take the stage, get onstage
- 例句：The dancers settled onstage as the audience quieted down.
2. Wave of applause - 一阵掌声
- 定义：观众给予的热烈掌声。
- 近义词：round of applause
- 例句：A wave of applause broke out as the lead singer took a bow.
3. Catch up with - 追赶上；（在此处）指“年老体衰”
- 定义：用于形容岁月的积累或某种状态的显现。
- 近义词：get old, age
- 例句：The years finally caught up with him, making him consider retirement.
4. Dynamic control - 动态控制
- 定义：在音乐中掌控音量的变化。
- 例句：The orchestra’s dynamic control was impressive, shifting smoothly between soft and loud.
5. Cut through the crowd - 穿过人群
- 定义：从拥挤的人群中穿过或喊出。
- 近义词：make one’s way through
- 例句：The security guards cut through the crowd to reach the front of the stage.
生词短语及解析
1. Precision (n.) - 精确
- 词性：名词
- 近义词：accuracy
- 反义词：inaccuracy
- 例句：The experiment requires high precision to get accurate results.
2. Highlight (n.) - 最精彩部分
- 词性：名词
- 近义词：main event
- 反义词：low point
- 例句：The highlight of the evening was the grand fireworks display.
3. Envy (n.) - 嫉妒
- 词性：名词
- 近义词：jealousy
- 反义词：admiration
- 例句：She looked at her friend’s success with envy.
4. Thunderous (adj.) - 雷鸣般的
- 词性：形容词
- 近义词：deafening, roaring
- 反义词：quiet, silent
- 例句：The thunderous applause lasted several minutes after the performance.
5. Striking (adj.) - 引人注目的
- 词性：形容词
- 近义词：noticeable, remarkable
- 反义词：unremarkable
- 例句：Her striking appearance made her stand out in the crowd.
续写思路与框架
1. 提取情节：本段故事的情节围绕一位年迈的音乐教师与曾经的学生重逢的情感。关键情节包括回忆学生加入乐队的情景及对学生成长的欣慰。
2. 确定情感基调：续写要维持温馨、感动的情感基调，表达老师对学生成长的欣慰与对自己音乐教育事业的反思。
3. 框架构思：
- 第一段：回忆 Bradley 加入乐队的情景，可以写老师对他初次加入时的鼓励，或教学中的点滴回忆。使用细节增强情感，例如学生的努力、老师的指导。
- 第二段：老师从回忆中回到现实，带着微笑回到音乐厅，可能对自己曾付出的努力感到欣慰，也带着继续支持学生们的决心。
4. 实施策略：
- 情感对比：在回忆和现实中体现出教师从略带遗憾到满足的心理变化。
- 使用细节：通过对学生表现、乐曲演奏的细致描写丰富故事。
- 合理衔接：续写应与原文情节无缝衔接，尤其注意人物情感的延续性。
注意事项
- 人物一致性：确保人物的行为、语言与之前的描述一致。
- 情节自然流畅：避免情节跳跃和生硬的情感转变。
- 语言风格：保持原文的书面表达风格，适当使用复杂句型和生动的词汇，使得续写更加真实生动。
重点单词分析
范文中的重点词汇
重点生词短语和常见搭配
1. Clutch - 紧握
- 词性：动词
- 近义词：grip, hold tightly
- 反义词：release, let go
- 例句：The child clutched his mother’s hand, refusing to let go. / She clutched her bag tightly as she walked through the crowded street.
2. Legacy - 遗产，成就
- 词性：名词
- 近义词：heritage, inheritance
- 反义词：none（遗产无反义词）
- 例句：She left behind a legacy of kindness and generosity. / His teachings became a legacy for future generations.
3. Encourage - 鼓励
- 词性：动词
- 近义词：inspire, motivate
- 反义词：discourage
- 例句：My teacher encouraged me to pursue my dreams. / The warm applause encouraged the performer to continue.
4. Dedication - 奉献
- 词性：名词
- 近义词：commitment, devotion
- 反义词：apathy, indifference
- 例句：His dedication to his work was admired by all. / The volunteers’ dedication made the event a great success.
5. Perseverance - 坚持不懈
- 词性：名词
- 近义词：persistence, determination
- 反义词：giving up, surrender
- 例句：Her perseverance in the face of challenges was inspiring. / Perseverance often leads to success.
以下是根据欧路词典整理的词汇表，包括词性、词义、近义词、联想词和例句：
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1. darken
- 词性：动词
- 词义：变暗，使变黑
- 近义词：dim, obscure
- 联想词：lighten, brighten
- 例句：As the clouds gathered, the sky began to darken. / The stage lights darkened, creating a dramatic effect.
2. settle
- 词性：动词
- 词义：安顿，解决，定居
- 近义词：resolve, establish
- 联想词：relax, inhabit
- 例句：They decided to settle in the small town. / The concert band settled onstage, ready to perform.
3. pound
- 词性：动词
- 词义：重击，心脏跳动
- 近义词：beat, hammer
- 联想词：strike, thump
- 例句：Her heart began to pound with excitement. / He pounded on the door, demanding to be let in.
4. note
- 词性：名词/动词
- 词义：音符，注意到
- 近义词：observe, remark
- 联想词：tone, record
- 例句：She took note of the key points during the lecture. / The first note of the song was perfectly on pitch.
5. prestigious
- 词性：形容词
- 词义：有声望的，著名的
- 近义词：famous, reputable
- 联想词：renowned, distinguished
- 例句：He graduated from a prestigious university. / The award is given by a prestigious organization.
6. rhythm
- 词性：名词
- 词义：节奏，韵律
- 近义词：beat, cadence
- 联想词：tempo, flow
- 例句：The rhythm of the music made everyone want to dance. / She has a great sense of rhythm when playing the drums.
7. clutch
- 词性：动词
- 词义：紧握，抓住
- 近义词：grip, hold tightly
- 联想词：grasp, seize
- 例句：She clutched her bag tightly as she walked through the crowded street. / The child clutched his mother’s hand, refusing to let go.
8. audible
- 词性：形容词
- 词义：听得见的
- 近义词：perceptible, clear
- 联想词：distinct, loud
- 例句：Her voice was barely audible over the noise. / The distant thunder was just audible.
9. unwavering
- 词性：形容词
- 词义：坚定不移的，不动摇的
- 近义词：steady, resolute
- 联想词：firm, determined
- 例句：He has an unwavering commitment to his goals. / Her faith in him was unwavering.
10. nurture
- 词性：动词
- 词义：培养，滋养
- 近义词：foster, cultivate
- 联想词：support, encourage
- 例句：Parents need to nurture their children’s talents. / She nurtured her dream of becoming a writer.
11. skeptical
- 词性：形容词
- 词义：怀疑的
- 近义词：doubtful, suspicious
- 联想词：cynical, questioning
- 例句：She was skeptical about the plan’s success. / Many people are skeptical of new technology.
12. obstacle
- 词性：名词
- 词义：障碍，阻碍
- 近义词：barrier, hurdle
- 联想词：difficulty, hindrance
- 例句：The biggest obstacle to success is often fear of failure. / They faced many obstacles during their journey.
13. diligently
- 词性：副词
- 词义：勤勉地，用心地
- 近义词：carefully, conscientiously
- 联想词：earnestly, persistently
- 例句：She worked diligently on her project. / He studied diligently for his exams.
14. persistence
- 词性：名词
- 词义：坚持不懈
- 近义词：perseverance, tenacity
- 联想词：determination, resolve
- 例句：Her persistence helped her overcome the obstacles. / Persistence is the key to achieving one’s goals.
15. timid
- 词性：形容词
- 词义：胆怯的，害羞的
- 近义词：shy, fearful
- 联想词：nervous, apprehensive
- 例句：He was too timid to speak up in class. / The little girl gave a timid smile.
16. be destined to
- 词性：词组
- 词义：注定要
- 近义词：be meant to, be fated to
- 联想词：inevitably, surely
- 例句：She was destined to become a great musician. / They seemed destined to meet.
17. dim
- 词性：形容词/动词
- 词义：昏暗的，使变暗
- 近义词：dark, faint
- 联想词：dull, obscure
- 例句：The light in the room was very dim. / His vision dimmed as he grew older.
Possible Version 1
I remembered the day when he asked to join the school band. Back then, if I hadn't seen the spark in his eyes(条件状从), I might have turned him down(虚拟语气). He had barely shown any interest in his studies, and his grades were far from impressive. Yet, there was something about the way he looked at the instruments(定从) that made me say(定从), “Alright, Bradley. Let’s give it a try.” If I hadn't believed in him(条件状从), he probably would never have discovered his musical talent(虚拟语气). Over time, he practiced hard, and I watched him struggle but persistently push forward, his determination shining through(独立主格). Little did I know(倒装句) that this young boy would one day grace such a grand stage with his talent(宾从).
I was still smiling as I made my way back to the music hall. Bradley’s success had given me a renewed sense of pride and fulfillment(积累). If my role as a music teacher had contributed to his journey(条件状从), maybe that was worth more than leading a prestigious band. Sitting in the audience(非谓语动词做伴随动作), I listened to the rest of the concert with a heart full of peace. Perhaps retirement didn’t have to mean leaving music behind, but simply shifting to a quieter rhythm(非谓语动词做伴随动作), knowing I had played a small role in the melody of many young lives(非谓语动词做伴随动作).
Possible Version 2
I remembered the day when he asked to join the school band. Bradley, who had always struggled academically(定从), looked at me with a determination that I had rarely seen in him before(定从). “I know I’m not good at this,” he had admitted, “but I want to try.(蓝色为admit的宾从)” He had been the last person I would have expected to take interest in music(定从), yet something in his voice convinced me. We started with basic scales, which, for Bradley, were as challenging as climbing a mountain(定从). But he was never one to give up. He has grown so much since those days, I thought, watching him play with ease and confidence on stage(非谓语动词做伴随动作).
I was still smiling as I made my way back to the music hall. It was hard to believe that the young man onstage was the same shy boy(宾从) I once knew(定从). Bradley, whose growth I had witnessed firsthand, was now part of something beautiful and inspiring. My role as a teacher has always been challenging, but moments like these make it all worth it. While I still have dreams(状从) I haven’t fulfilled(定从), I realized that helping others achieve their dreams might be just as valuable(宾从). The applause rang in my ears as I took my seat(状从) , feeling a quiet satisfaction(非谓语动词做伴随动作) I hadn’t known before(定从).
Possible Version 3
I remembered the day when he asked to join the school band. Bradley, a boy with a learning disability and constant struggles, stood in front of me with a shy smile. I was skeptical, unsure if he would keep up with even the basics(条件状从). However, he was determined and enthusiastic, qualities that were rare among my students(定从). He started coming to every practice, trying to follow along even(非谓语动词做伴随动作) when he was struggling(状从). With every lesson, he worked a little harder, and I saw him transform before my eyes. Music, something that had once seemed impossible for him(定从), became his escape, his strength, and his joy.
I was still smiling as I made my way back to the music hall. That day, I realized that my work had meant something after all(宾从). Although I had always wanted to conduct a large band(状从), the memory of helping Bradley, a student with so many obstacles, felt more fulfilling. As I took my seat and waited for the next piece(状从), I noticed the joy that filled the hall(定从). Each young musician, just like Bradley, was finding their way through music. Retirement could wait, I thought, feeling grateful to be part of this extraordinary world, one note at a time.
Possible Version 4
I remembered the day when he asked to join the school band. At that time, I had believed he was going to quit after a few weeks(宾从). Yet, week after week, he showed up, practicing diligently(非谓语动词做伴随动作) even when the notes seemed too hard to play(状从). Slowly but surely, his efforts began to pay off. I was moved by his persistence, which eventually led him to join the high school orchestra(定从). The Bradley I saw onstage today (定从)was far from the timid boy I once knew(定从). He was destined to grow into a talented musician, even if I hadn’t realized it back then(状从).
I was still smiling as I made my way back to the music hall. It struck me that each student I taught(定从) had been touched by my efforts in ways I hadn’t anticipated(定从). If Bradley could turn his struggles into success(状从), maybe there were countless others I had inspired without even knowing it(定从). Sitting down(非谓语动词做伴随动作) as the lights dimmed(状从), I felt a surge of pride, knowing that even though my own career may be ending soon(that+宾从，内部even though 状从), my students’ journeys in music would carry on.

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