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读后续写之师生情：师生互赠礼物促情谊
一、读后续写题目
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was Christmas 1961. I was teaching in a small town where my twenty-seven third graders eagerly expected the great day of gift-giving.
Each day the children made some new wonders-strings of popcorn, hand-made decorations, and German bells made from wallpaper samples, which we hung from the ceiling. Through it all she stayed indifferent, watching from a distance, seemingly miles away. I wondered what would happen to this quiet child, once so happy, now so suddenly unsociable. I hoped the celebrations would light her up. But nothing did. We made cards and gifts for mothers and dads, for sisters and brothers, for grandparents, and for each other. At home the students made the fried marbles（油炸玻璃弹子） and competed with one another to bring in the prettiest ones. As my gift to them, I made each of my students a little bag for carrying their fried marbles. And I knew they had each made something special for me.
The day of gift giving finally came. We oohed and aahed over our handwork as the presents were exchanged. But she sat quietly watching. I had made a special bag for her, red and green with white lace, hoping very much to see her smile. She opened it so slowly and carefully. I waited but she turned away. I had not passed through the wall of isolation she had built around herself.
After school the children left in little groups, but she hesitated, watching them go out of the door. I sat down in a child-sized chair to catch my breath, hardly knowing what was happening when she came to me reaching out her hands, holding a small white box unwrapped and slightly soiled, as though it had been held many times by unwashed, childish hands. She said nothing.
注意:1. 续写词数应为150左右。
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“For me ” I asked with a weak smile.
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I carefully held out the chain.
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二、文本分析
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了1961年的圣诞节，作者在一个小镇上教三年级。班上27个学生都在热切地准备着这个互赠礼物的好日子。其中一个女孩在整个过程中，都无动于衷，只是远远地看着。我想知道这个安静的孩子发生了什么事，我为她做了一个特别的包，希望能看到她的笑容，但是却没有什么用。在赠送礼物的日子，她向我走来，手里拿着一个白色的盒子，什么也没说。
四、思续写情节
衔接1：根据句1“For me ” I asked with a weak smile. 可知，接下来可描述她的反应：是依旧沉默不语还是轻声回应？在她做出回应后，接下来我会做什么？→打开礼物盒→看到了什么？有何反应？
衔接2：根据句2“I carefully held out the chain. ”可知，段一应提到打开盒子，看到一条chain。
衔接3：开头衔接句2的“我小心翼翼地拿出项链”：这是一条什么样的“项链”？我对此作何反应，说了什么？→小女孩听了什么感受？我会不会戴上它？她看后又是什么反应？笑容重现？
衔接4：尾句：①衔接原文I wondered what would happen to this quiet child, once so happy, now so suddenly unsociable.，在我的关心关怀下，那个曾经快乐的小孩回来了，我们彼此的关系更近一步。②衔接原文 I had not passed through the wall of isolation she had built around herself. ，在我的欣赏和鼓励之下，那堵隔着她和大家的“墙”被拆除了。③借物抒情：利用chain升华主题，回扣原文a special bag：这是一条特殊的项链，连接我们彼此，把我们紧紧联系在一起，见证了我们师生情的升温。
五、思伏笔巧协同
原文伏笔 情节协同
Para.4 She said nothing. 第一段：在我询问之后，可协同写她还是沉默不语(said nothing)，只是点头。
Para.2 She opened it so slowly and carefully. 第一段：可协同写我打开礼物盒时的动作：慢慢地又小心翼翼地。
Para.3 she sat quietly watching. 第一段：可协同写我在打开礼物盒时，她静静地站着观看。
Para.3 I had made a special bag for her, red and green with white lace 第二段：可协同写这条项链也是很特殊的，用各种彩色marbles串联起来
Para.2 I hoped the celebrations would light her up. 第二段：可协同写我对项链表示喜欢、欣赏，让她面露喜色。
Para.3 I had not passed through the wall of isolation she had built around herself. 第二段：可协同写赞赏之后，她打开心扉，我也终于通过了她心里的那堵“墙”。
主题的协同：这不仅是一条特殊的项链(chain)，更是我们师生情的纽带。
六、协同原语言风格
分词作状语：原文使用了许多分词作状语的句子，如Through it all she stayed indifferent, watching from a distance, seemingly miles away. 以及but she hesitated, watching them go out of the door.等，在续写两段也可以描述作者打开礼物、对礼物的欣赏等等亦可以使用分词作状语。
副词凸显人物情绪：原文用如slowly,carefully,quietly等突出人物情绪。
七、原文佳句积累
1.I wondered what would happen to this quiet child, once so happy, now so suddenly unsociable.
2. I had made a special bag for her, red and green with white lace, hoping very much to see her smile.
3.I sat down in a child-sized chair to catch my breath, hardly knowing what was happening when she came to me reaching out her hands, holding a small white box unwrapped and slightly soiled, as though it had been held many times by unwashed, childish hands.
八、范文欣赏
Possible version1:
“For me ” I asked with a weak smile. She said nothing, nodding her head. I took the box and carefully opened it. There inside, lay a special chain,with colorful marbles attached to it. An idea suddenly occurred to me—she had made it for her mother, who would never again hold her or brush her hair or share a funny story.We couldn’t see any smile on her face after her mother passed away three weeks before. I stood there, not knowing how to comfort her well.
I carefully held out the chain. She took it, putting it on at the back of my neck. She stepped back as if to see whether all was well. I looked down at the golden chain, then back at her, “It is so beautiful. She would have loved it.” Neither of us could stop the tears. She threw herself into my arms, her eyes filled with tears. At that moment she looked at me as though I had become her mother, for she had given me the greatest gift of all: herself.
Possible version2:
"For me " I asked with a weak smile. I was at a loss, not knowing what to do. At the thought of the small white box, I asked "Could you open this box for me " But she seemed unwilling to open it, holding it slightly. It occurred to me that I was supposed to take it easy, so l asked with a big smile, "You must have a gift for me, don't you " So shy was she that her face burnt. I opened it, only to find it was a chain. She quietly standing beside, expecting my reaction.
I carefully held out the chain.With a bright smile on my face, I exclaimed,
"It is the bestgift I have ever received." And it was at that moment that she lit up and the once happy girl came back with a radiant smile .Accordingly, she helped me wear the chain carefully. Shy and timid, she whispered, "Thank you, teacher! You've made a huge difference to my life. With tears sparkling in my eyes, we embraced tightly. From that moment, I knew that I had passed through the wall of isolation that she had built around herself.
九、主题升华积累
1.Mrs. Caruso's legacy continues to shine brightly, illuminating the path for me to make a positive difference in the lives of others, just as she did in mine. Our bond has become a lifelong connection of respect, guidance, and gratitude.
2.Without Mr Buttler’s encouragement and generous support, Emily White, the once self-doubting girl, would not have gained such a precious chance to shine brightly on the stage.
3.Thanks to my teacher’s unconditional trust, I knew that no challenge would be too daunting if I put my mind to it.
4.It was under his inspiration that he made up his mind to study hard and become a respected and caring teacher like Mark.
5.The encounter with Mark was like an everlasting flower, blossoming in the river of my memory and reminding me of the value of being honest.
6.The letter has not only served as a constant reminder of our past, but also has fostered a special bond between us.

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