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读后续写：Race at River’s Edge
读后续写（嘉兴市2024年9月高三测试续写）
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Race at River’s Edge
Like me, my cousin Gabriel is into riding bikes. He’s 16 and I’m allowed to join him on longer rides because we’ re training for a charity cycling event.
One day, after checking our tires (轮胎), we set out for Tournus. Upon arrival, Gabriel and I parked our bikes near the river and walked to the town square. We’d just ridden 33 kilometers, and we were starving. We planned to get lunch and then ride to M con, a small city in France on the Sa ne River.
It was market day. Locals were busy filling their baskets with groceries. Tourists hunted for gifts. Gabriel and I bought a long, thin loaf of bread and some Brie, a soft cheese which tasted awesome.
As we ate, I noticed a girl wearing a USA Basketball T- shirt. She smiled at us.
Basketball is big in France too. You can even watch NBA games on TV. The girl stopped to buy some bread with her mum.
I saw them again by the river. They sat on a bench enjoying their food in front of a long, narrow riverboat named Voyageur. Then they boarded the boat. It was preparing to leave. Suddenly, I spotted a colorful shopping bag on the bench. The girl had left it! I looked up. Some passengers were gathering on the upper deck (甲板) of the riverboat, including the girl and her mum. I held up the bag and waved it to get their attention while Gabriel called to them.
When the girl noticed the bag, she opened her mouth in surprise. But her face fell as the boat started to pull away from the dock (码头). She didn’t think she’d get the stuff back.
Running alongside the boat Gabriel learned from a sailor that the boat’s next stop was M con—— our destination as well. It would take the boat just under two hours at a speed of 22 kilometers per hour.“ What can we do then ” he said.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
P1：“We have to find a way to return it” I replied.
P2：Then it happened: pffft! Flat tire!
故事简介
我和表哥Gabriel都喜欢骑自行车，他们正在为慈善骑行活动做准备。在一次骑行中，他们抵达了法国的Tournus小镇，并计划吃完午饭后骑到附近的M con。吃饭时，一个穿着美国篮球队T恤的女孩引起了他的注意。后来我骑行到河边看时到了她上了一艘"Voyageur"的船。我发现她在河边的长椅上遗落了一个购物袋，但船已开始离开码头。Gabriel得知船的下一站正是他们的目的地M con，并且他们有机会把购物袋还给女孩，于是他们决定跟随船只骑行到M con。
情节设计：
P1： "We have to find a way to return it,”I replied.
P2: Then it happened: pffft! Flat tire!
1. 根据conflict-solution原则，从最后情节反向思考：
没有能归还购物袋 --- 归还购物袋
如何归还？--- 骑自行车
自行车胎破了 --- ？
选择A: 跑步 B：打车 C: 搭顺风车 D: 骑自行车带我 E：修好自行车前行 F: 一人骑自行车前往
读后续写的情节设计根本原则在于合理简洁。在考场上要么东拉西扯要么胡编乱造，在于没有经过逻辑思维的训练。上述五个选择中是F项最符合常理。考试中有学生还设计了终于骑到M con, 但是没有发现船，正当他失望的时候，船来了，原来船在途中出故障耽搁了。这种情节有可能，但是合理性上不够，而且增加了写作难度。如无必要，不必为制造冲突而强行编造分支情节。
选择F选项后还需要进一步思考：是Gabriel骑车前往还是我前往。从上下文呼应角度考虑应该是我前面更为合理。
所以情节设计如下：决定骑车去归还 --- 努力骑行 --- 突然爆胎 --- 决定一人骑行前往 --- 终于归还
2. 情节设计中的细节呼应
无必要无细节。这是小说创作中的基本原则。续写中要注意要运用细节来进行前后串联，保证文章的逻辑协同。
3. 常识合理性
游轮每小时22公里，对于自行车专业骑行来说一般可以轻松超过。但是对于青少年来说，特别是已经骑行了33公里后，后续的骑行是比较艰难的。同时要考虑到，骑行的路线可能不是直线，路线可能崎岖不平（所以即使出来时检查了车胎，后面还出现爆胎。）等因素。
情节扩写
对于考生来说，最怕的就是情节简单，感觉没什么好写, 只能东拉西扯硬凑字数。如何扩展情节需要扎实耐心的训练，如何写好扩展的情节需要过硬的知识储备。
1. 情节的扩展 --- FACTs
2. 写好情节 --- 常规句型+精准词汇
此篇续写难度在于自行车骑行有关的一些表达。考生要借此收集一些有用的表达，平时也要接触、掌握多方面的生活相关词汇，特别是动词和名词。
had a head start
take a shorter route
hopped onto our bikes
powered through each pedal stroke
twisted and turned
pushed ourselves to ride faster
my bike wobbled.
skidded to a halt
flat tire
my back wheel wobbled
sped off down the road
pushed my bike off to the side
范文
P1: "We have to find a way to return it," I replied. Gabriel and I quickly realized that we still had a chance to beat the boat to M con if we rode fast enough. While the riverboat followed the winding waterway, we could take a shorter, more direct route along the riverbank. Without a second thought, we hopped onto our bikes and started pedaling furiously. The road twisted and turned through fields and villages, but we pushed harder with each turn. The girl’s look of disappointment spurred us on, motivating us to ride even harder. Every pedal stroke felt urgent as we flew past the scenic countryside, hearts racing, our only goal to reach the dock before the boat.
P2: Then it happened: pffft! Flat tire! My back wheel wobbled wildly, and I nearly lost control. I had to pull over. Gabriel screeched to a stop beside me, eyes wide with worry. “Take my bike!” he urged. Determination kicking in, I jumped onto his bike, leaving him to deal with the flat tire. I took off again, my legs screaming in protest, but I wouldn’t slow down. I had to make it. As I sped around the final bend, the riverboat loomed into view, just beginning to dock. On the upper deck the familiar USA Basketball T-shirt in view, I raced ahead, holding up the shopping bag. Her eyes lit up in surprise, and a broad smile spread across her face with hands waving excitedly.
参考范文
“We have to find a way to return it,” I replied. Without hesitation, we grabbed our bikes and quickly calculated the time it would take to beat the boat to M con. It would be close, but if we rode fast enough, we just might make it. Gabriel and I jumped on our bikes and started pedaling as hard as we could. The wind blew against our faces as we raced along the river’s edge, the boat visible in the distance. The road was narrow and uneven at times, but we pushed forward, determined to return the girl’s bag. With each passing minute, my legs burned, but I couldn’t give up. The smile on the girl’s face kept flashing through my mind, urging me to ride faster.
Then it happened: pffft! Flat tire! I looked down in horror as my back wheel wobbled dangerously. “No! Not now!” I groaned. Gabriel stopped and looked at me with a worried expression. We had no time to fix it. “You go on without me!” I urged him. “I’ll catch up somehow.” Without arguing, Gabriel nodded, took the bag from me, and sped off down the road. I watched him disappear into the distance, feeling a mix of frustration and hope. I quickly pushed my bike off to the side and started running. Despite the setback, I wasn’t giving up. As I neared M con, I saw Gabriel waiting by the dock, a triumphant grin on his face. The boat had just arrived, and the girl was joyfully holding her shopping bag, waving to us in gratitude.

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