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2025届高三统测三读后续写
2024.11.11
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文章大意：三位女生Maya、Sarah和Mary首次相遇并决定共同分享一间公寓，开启大学生活。Maya因思念家人而感到孤独，但在新朋友的陪伴下渐渐找到慰藉。她们一起度过了在Pizza Hut的晚餐，展示出了各自的情感和品格。回到公寓后，Sarah提议为Maya做点什么，希望让她开心。
主题：属于“人与社会”主题语境下的人际交往子主题
细读首句，构思框架
Para. 1 Sarah’s suggestion was met with enthusiasm from Mary.
衔接句 How did Mary react to the suggestion
过渡句 What did Sarah and Mary do next
衔接句 How did they feel at last
Para. 2 As Maya woke up, the pancakes were ready on the table.
衔接句 How did Maya feel
Theme: How will their relationship become
情节构建---情节发展方向
Para.1 Sarah’s suggestion was met with enthusiasm from Mary.
Sarah 和 Mary 要商量具体如何让 Maya 开心，可能会围绕 Maya 提到的妈妈的煎饼展开行动，比如决定尝试做煎饼给 Maya 吃，她们可能会去寻找食材，准备工具，过程中可能会遇到一些小困难，但她们会一起克服。
语言表达要点：可以使用描述她们商量时的对话，如 “Let's make pancakes for Maya. She misses them so much.” 等，以及描述她们准备过程中的动作和心理活动，如 “Searching through the kitchen cabinets, they finally found the flour and eggs. They were a bit nervous but determined to give it a try.”
Para.2 As Maya woke up, the pancakes were ready on the table.
Maya 醒来看到煎饼会非常感动，她的情绪会因此得到改善，三人之间的关系也会更加亲密。她们可能会一起分享煎饼，聊天，回忆家庭温暖的时刻，进一步增进彼此的了解和友谊。
语言表达要点：描写 Maya 醒来看到煎饼时的惊喜和感动，如 “Maya's eyes widened in surprise and her heart was filled with warmth when she saw the pancakes.”，以及她们分享煎饼时温馨的氛围和对话，如 “Sitting around the table, they enjoyed the pancakes and talked about their families. Maya said with a smile, 'You two are like my family here now.'”
二、增加细节，开始写作
在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所做、所思、所说、所想等给每段增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为叫“58细节添加法”。
Para.1相关句子:
情景一:描写Sarah and Mary沟通对话的场景（两个达成一致意见）
① Knowing that Maya was struggling with homesickness, they wanted to make her feel more at home. “Let’s surprise Maya with the best pancakes ever!” Mary said, her enthusiasm contagious.
知道玛雅一直在想家，她们想让她感觉如在家一般。“让我们用史上最好吃的煎饼给玛雅一个惊喜！”玛丽说，她的热情很有感染力。
② They came to a settlement that they decided to make homemade pancakes for Maya, something that would remind her of home-cooked meals. “Absolutely! Let’s make Maya’s day.” Mary replied, her eyes twinkling with excitement.
他们达成了一个协议，他们决定为玛雅自制煎饼，一些能让她想起家常饭菜的东西。“包的!让我们让玛雅开心吧。”玛丽回答，眼睛里闪烁着兴奋的光芒。
情景二:描写Sarah and Mary具体行动（准备过程）
① With the intention of giving a surprise to Maya, Sarah and Mary woke up early the next morning,and started cooking.They rummaged through the kitchen drawers, their hands moving swiftly in search of the necessary utensils. After gathering the flour, eggs, and milk, they faced the challenge of the recipe. Sarah, with her phone in hand, scrolled through countless cooking websites until she found what seemed like the perfect one.
为了给玛雅一个惊喜，莎拉和玛丽第二天一大早就起床了，开始做饭。他们在厨房的抽屉里翻找着，双手迅速地移动，寻找必要的用具。在收集了面粉、鸡蛋和牛奶之后，他们面临着制作食谱的挑战。莎拉手里拿着手机，浏览了无数个烹饪网站，直到找到了一个看起来完美的。
情景二:描写Sarah and Mary具体行动（准备过程）
①It's 5:00 in the morning when the alarm rang in their ears. Without a moment’s hesitation, they scurried into the kitchen. Searching through the cabinets like two eager detectives, they managed to find some flour, eggs, and milk. However, the recipe was a bit of a mystery. Sarah whipped out her phone and quickly googled it.
凌晨5点,闹钟在她们耳边响起。她们毫不犹豫地跑进了厨房。她们像两个急切的侦探一样在橱柜里搜寻，终于找到了面粉、鸡蛋和牛奶。然而，它的配方有点神秘。莎拉拿出手机，迅速用谷歌搜索了一下。
情景三:描写Sarah and Mary具体行动（制作过程）
①Mixing the ingredients with care, Mary’s brow furrowed in concentration as she whisked the batter, determined to get it just right. Despite a few minor setbacks, like the batter being a bit too thick at first, they adjusted and persevered.With several attempts, they made it at last and delicious pancakes were put on the table.
小心地混合着原料，玛丽一边搅拌面糊，一边全神贯注地皱着眉头，决心把它搅拌得恰到好处。尽管遇到了一些小挫折，比如一开始面糊有点太厚，但他们还是坚持了下来。经过几次尝试，他们终于做出来了，美味的煎饼摆上了桌子。
情景三:描写Sarah and Mary具体行动（制作过程）
①Following the instructions as closely as possible, they began to mix the batter. Mary carefully poured the batter onto the hot pan, her hand steady despite her excitement. As the pancakes cooked, their faces lit up with anticipation.
他们尽可能严格地按照说明，开始搅拌面糊。玛丽小心翼翼地把面糊倒在热锅上，尽管她很兴奋，但她的手还是很稳。当煎饼烤熟时，他们的脸上充满了期待。
Para.2相关句子:
情景四: Maya看到煎饼的情感描写
1.Maya’s eyes widened in amazement and her heart swelled with affection. “You did this for me ” she asked, her voice filled with disbelief. With tears of joy streaming down her face, she hugged Sarah and Mary tightly.
玛雅惊讶地睁大了眼睛，心中充满了爱意。“你这么做是为了我？”她问，声音里充满了怀疑。她高兴得热泪盈眶，紧紧地拥抱着萨拉和玛丽。
② Maya blinked in surprise and then her face broke into a huge smile. Touched beyond words, she felt a lump in her throat. “This is so wonderful,” she whispered.
玛雅惊讶地眨了眨眼，然后脸上绽出灿烂的笑容。她感动得说不出话来，感到喉咙哽咽。“这太棒了，”她低声说。
③ Maya’s eyes fluttered open, and in an instant, her gaze was drawn to the table. Her heart skipped a beat as she beheld the stack of pancakes. Overwhelmed with emotion, her eyes were filled with tears of gratitude. “You two are amazing! ” she exclaimed, her voice choked with happiness.
玛雅的眼睛抖动着睁开，瞬间，她的目光被吸引到了桌子上。当她看到那堆煎饼时，她的心猛地跳了一下。她激动万分，眼里充满了感激的泪水。“你们俩太棒了！”她叫道，她的声音因幸福而哽咽。
情景五：共同品尝煎饼以及畅谈--
① Sitting down, Maya took a bite, and as the familiar taste spread across her tongue, a sense of warmth and belonging washed over her. The three girls sat around the table, sharing stories of their childhoods and the love they had for their families.
玛雅坐下来，咬了一口，熟悉的味道传遍了她的舌头，一种温暖和归属感席卷了她。三个女孩围坐在桌子旁，分享她们童年的故事，以及她们对家人的爱。
②As they all sat down to enjoy the pancakes, Maya opened up about her family and became more talkative. All of them shared stories about their families, their dreams, and their fears., enjoying the happy and harmonious moment. 当他们都坐下来享用煎饼时，玛雅开始谈论她的家庭，变得更健谈了。所有的分享他们的家庭、梦想和恐惧的故事。，享受快乐和谐的时刻。
情景六：结局（theme)
①In that small apartment, on that ordinary morning, a deep and lasting friendship was forged, filling their hearts with a warmth that would carry them through the challenges of university life and beyond.
在那个平凡的早晨，在那间小公寓里，他们结下了深厚而持久的友谊，这让他们的心中充满了温暖，这种温暖将带着他们度过大学生活的挑战，甚至超越大学生活。
②The laughter and the warmth of the moment began to ease Maya’s homesickness.With each word, their bond grew stronger, and in that moment, they knew they had found not just roommates, but true friends.笑声和那一刻的温暖开始缓解玛雅的思乡之情。每说一个字，他们的关系就更紧密了，在那一刻，他们知道他们找到的不仅仅是室友，而是真正的朋友。
③The simple act of making and sharing pancakes had not only cheered Maya up but had also cemented their friendship. In that small apartment, a new chapter of their lives filled with friendship and support had begun.
制作和分享煎饼这个简单的行为不仅让玛雅高兴起来，也巩固了他们的友谊。在那间小公寓里，他们的生活开始了一个充满友谊和支持的新篇章。
④ In that moment, they knew that they would be there for each other through the ups and downs of college life, united by the simple act of kindness and the power of friendship.在那一刻，他们知道他们会在大学生活的起起落落中相互支持，通过简单的善意行为和友谊的力量团结在一起。
下水作文
Sarah’s suggestion was met with enthusiasm from Mary.They came to a settlement that they decided to make homemade pancakes for Maya, something that would remind her of home-cooked meals. “Absolutely! Let’s make Maya’s day.” Mary replied, her eyes twinkling with excitement. With the intention of giving a surprise to Maya, Sarah and Mary woke up early the next morning,and started cooking.They rummaged through the kitchen drawers, their hands moving swiftly in search of the necessary utensils. After gathering the flour, eggs, and milk, they faced the challenge of the recipe. Sarah, with her phone in hand, scrolled through countless cooking websites until she found what seemed like the perfect one. Following the instructions as closely as possible, they began to mix the batter. Mary carefully poured the batter onto the hot pan, her hand steady despite her excitement. As the pancakes cooked, their faces lit up with anticipation.
As Maya woke up, the pancakes were ready on the table.Maya’s eyes widened in amazement and her heart swelled with affection. “You did this for me ” she asked, her voice filled with disbelief. With tears of joy streaming down her face, she hugged Sarah and Mary tightly. Sitting down, Maya took a bite, and as the familiar taste spread across her tongue, a sense of warmth and belonging washed over her. The three girls sat around the table, sharing stories of their childhoods and the love they had for their families.The laughter and the warmth of the moment began to ease Maya’s homesickness.With each word, their bond grew stronger, and in that moment, they knew they had found not just roommates, but true friends.
参考范文
Sarah’s suggestion was met with enthusiasm from Mary. They both knew that Maya was struggling with homesickness, and they wanted to make her feel more at home. “Let’s plan a surprise for her tomorrow,” Mary whispered, her eyes sparkling with excitement. They decided to make homemade pancakes for Maya, something that would remind her of home-cooked meals. They wanted to make it clear that they were all in this together and that Maya was not alone. The next morning, Sarah and Mary woke up early and started cooking.
As Maya woke up, the pancakes were ready on the table. Maya walked out, rubbing her eyes, and was greeted by the sight of her new roommates setting the table. “Good morning, Maya!” they cheerfully greeted. Maya’s eyes widened with surprise and gratitude. She couldn’t believe they had gone through all this trouble just for her. As they sat down to eat, the girls chatted more openly than the night before. They shared stories about their families, their dreams, and their fears. The laughter and the warmth of the moment began to ease Maya’s homesickness.

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