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I sat. He glared at me. “You can give it to me or I can take it, your choice. What will it be ” I pulled the package of hair ribbons out of the pocket of my jeans, handed it to him and begged, “You’re not going to call my dad, are you ”
“I’m calling the police. They will call your father.”
My head dropped onto my hands and I sobbed, “No, please! Can’t you just let me go I can pay you. I have money in my pocket. I’m only fourteen years old. Please, I won’t ever shoplift again!”
“Save your tears. They won’t work on me. I’m sick of you bad kids stealing, just for the thrill of it.”
I sat there, trembling uncontrollably. The previous excitement brought by stealing lipstick, teen magazine and all that stuff... now gave way to immense fear and shame.
The police arrived, and the policemen walked me to their black-and-white car and opened the backdoor. I got in, and they drove me through the middle of our small town. I slouched down into the seat so no one could see me as I looked out the window at the evening sky. Then I saw the steeple (尖塔) of my family’s church, and the guilt pierced me like a dagger. “How could I have been so stupid I’ve broken my father’s heart... and God’s,” thought I.
We arrived at the station, and a round woman with a square face asked me questions until I ran out of answers. She pointed to the door of a large open cell and said, “Sit. Wait.” I walked in, and my footsteps made an echo that bounced off the bars. The tears started again as I sat down on a hard bench and heard her dial the telephone and say, “I have your daughter in a cell at the police station. No, she’s not hurt. She was caught shoplifting. Can you come and get her Okay. You’re welcome, good-bye.” She yelled, “Hey kid, your father’s on his way.”
第一段：Paragraph1: About one hundred years later, I heard his voice say my name.
第二段：Paragraph2: After we arrived home, Dad finally asked me, “Why ”
文章大意：文章讲述了一个 14 岁女孩因在商店行窃被抓的经历。她偷了发带、口红、青少年杂志等物品，被店员发现后，店员表示要报警。警察将她带到警局，在警局里她满心恐惧与羞愧，一位女警询问她后通知了她的父亲。
伏笔及续写回应：
伏笔：“I pulled the package of hair ribbons out of the pocket of my jeans”，续写中可呼应被偷物品的处理情况以及女孩对这些物品的后续态度。
伏笔：“The previous excitement brought by stealing lipstick, teen magazine and all that stuff... now gave way to immense fear and shame”，续写中可进一步描述女孩如何面对这种恐惧和羞耻感以及如何克服。
伏笔：“I slouched down into the seat so no one could see me as I looked out the window at the evening sky. Then I saw the steeple (尖塔) of my family’s church, and the guilt pierced me like a dagger”，续写中可提及教堂或宗教信仰对女孩反思和改过自新的影响。
伏笔：“a round woman with a square face asked me questions until I ran out of answers”，续写中可在女孩与父亲交流或自我反思时提及在警局被询问的经历所带来的触动。
伏笔：“She yelled, ‘Hey kid, your father’s on his way.’”，续写重点围绕父亲到来后的情节展开，如父亲的反应、与女孩的交流互动等。
续写要点：
第一段：续写父亲到警局接女孩时的场景，包括他的神态、动作、言语等细节描写，以及女孩的内心感受和反应，如她如何面对父亲的失望与愤怒，两人之间的沉默或简短交流。
第二段：续写回家后父亲与女孩的深入对话，女孩解释行窃原因，父亲表达对她行为的看法和期望，以及女孩对自己错误的深刻认识和决心改正的态度，同时可提及家庭环境或价值观对女孩后续行为的影响。
情感线：女孩最初行窃时的兴奋，被抓后的恐惧与羞耻，在警局等待父亲时的极度愧疚与不安，见到父亲时的不敢直视与内心的煎熬，回家后面对父亲质问的懊悔与决心改过自新。
故事线：女孩在商店行窃被抓，被带到警局，父亲接到通知后赶来接她，回家途中两人沉默，到家后父亲询问原因，女孩坦白并表示后悔，父亲对她进行教育并给予惩罚，女孩接受并立志改正错误。
主旨升华句：
“Stealing is not a path to excitement but a doorway to regret and self-destruction.”
“True repentance is the first step towards rebuilding trust and mending a broken soul.”
“In the face of mistakes, the courage to admit and the determination to change are the keys to redemption.”
“The consequences of our actions teach us lessons that shape our character and define our future.”
“Family's love and guidance can be the light that leads us out of the darkness of our wrongdoings.”
写作示范一：
Paragraph 1: About one hundred years later, I heard his voice say my name.
My father's voice was like a thunderclap in the silent cell. He stood there, his figure seemingly taller and more imposing than ever. His eyes were filled with a complex mix of emotions, mostly disappointment. Without a word, he motioned for me to follow him. I shuffled behind him, my heart pounding in my chest. As we walked through the corridor of the police station, I could feel the weight of his unspoken words. He opened the car door for me, and I slid into the passenger seat, still avoiding his gaze. The drive home was filled with an unbearable silence, broken only by the sound of the engine.
Paragraph 2: After we arrived home, Dad finally asked me, “Why ”
I took a deep breath and began to pour out my heart. I told him about the group of friends I had been with, how they had made it seem like a harmless prank. Dad listened intently, his face growing sterner with each word. When I finished, he sighed heavily. "You should have known better. Your actions have consequences, not just for you but for our whole family." I nodded, tears streaming down my face. "I know, Dad. I'll do whatever it takes to make it right." Dad looked at me and said, "You'll have to earn back our trust. You'll start by doing community service and reflecting on your actions every day." I accepted his punishment, knowing that it was a chance for me to redeem myself.
写作示范二：
Paragraph 1: About one hundred years later, I heard his voice say my name.
The moment I heard him, my body tensed up. Dad walked towards me with a slow and heavy step. His face was pale, and his lips were pressed tightly together. He stopped in front of me and stared into my eyes for what felt like an eternity. Then, he gently took my arm and led me out of the cell. We walked past the police officers, and I could feel their eyes on me. Dad's grip on my arm was firm but not painful, as if he was trying to hold on to me and keep me from slipping further away. In the car, he finally broke the silence. "I'm disappointed, but we'll get through this."
Paragraph 2: After we arrived home, Dad finally asked me, “Why ”
I was hesitant at first, but then I told him the truth. I explained how I had been influenced by my friends and the momentary thrill of doing something forbidden. Dad sat down and rubbed his forehead. "You have to understand that our actions are a reflection of our values. What you did was wrong, and it goes against everything we've taught you." I felt a deep sense of shame. "I'm sorry, Dad. I want to change." Dad nodded. "You will have to face the consequences. You'll be helping out at the local charity for the next few weeks, and we'll have regular talks about your behavior. This is a chance for you to learn and grow." I knew that this was a new beginning, a chance to make amends and become a better person.
参考答案
I gave him the gift card and asked him to enjoy a cup of coffee there by himself. He looked at me in disbelief for a moment and then a glimmer of gratitude appeared in his eyes. As he made his way upstairs, I quickly gathered some age-appropriate books: storybooks full of adventure and magic for his nieces, a colorful picture book about animals for his nephew. I also selected a classic novel for his brother-in-law and a collection of beautiful poetry for his parents. With the selected books in my hands, I noticed that he walked downstairs.
When he saw those books, he was moved to tears. “You have no idea how much this means to me, ” feeling those books lightly, he murmured, his voice trembling. I smiled, hoping that these books would bring him some comfort and joy during this difficult time. He waved goodbye to me and then left the store with a relaxed mind and a heart full of warmth. All of a sudden, I felt my tiredness lifted off my heart completely this Christmas time.

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