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读后续写：人与自我——独臂男孩找到榜样，重塑信心Two one-handed boys bonded
读后续写题目
Jayce Crowder began noticing when he was in kindergarten that he looked different from his classmates. They had two hands. He had one. “It started when one boy teased him.” says his mother, Cortney Lewis.Jayce’s bubbly enthusiasm soured to sullenness(活泼的热情变成了闷闷不乐). He’d return to their Des Moines, Iowa home with questions: Why am I different Why me Why “He actually told us he was mad at God for making him that way,” his mother says. “That was a huge dagger to the heart.”(像一把匕首刺痛我的心）Lewis admits she didn’t know what to do at that point. How could she provide answers to her son’s questions when she had never found those answers herself A few weeks later, Lewis came home from her job as an orthodontic assistant and turned on the TV to a news story about a six-foot-three eighth grader from Washington, Iowa. Trashaun Willis, then 14, had become an Internet sensation after posting videos of his slam dunks, and, like Jayce, he was missing most of his left arm. Lewis called Jayce in. He was riveted（被吸引）, watching dunk after monstrous dunk.（他全神贯注地看着一个又一个可怕的扣篮。）At the time, it seemed that watching Trashaun would simply be an inspiring moment for Jayce—he’d see a thriving role model with a seemingly similar similar defect. And had it stayed just that, Lewis would have been happy. But little did she know that a family friend had already reached out to the Des Moines Register, asking the newspaper to help set up a meeting with Trashaun to build Jayce’s confidence.
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The boys met at Washington Middle School on a Saturday afternoon a couple of months later.
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Since that meeting, Lewis has seen a pronounced/noticeable difference in her son.
语篇分析
故事梗概
这篇文章讲述了Jayce，一个因天生缺失左臂而感到自卑的男孩，在遇到同样身有残疾但充满自信的篮球少年Trashaun后，受其鼓励和指导，不仅学会了接纳自己，还逐渐找回了自信。这是一则关于自我接纳、努力和榜样力量的成长故事。
人物分析
Jayce Crowder
主人公，一个因天生缺失左臂而感到困惑和低落的男孩。经历了从自我怀疑到被鼓励和找到榜样的转变。
Cortney Lewis
Jayce的母亲，深切关心儿子的情感与成长，但面对儿子的问题感到无助，后来通过行动帮助儿子找到解决方法。
Trashaun Willis
Jayce的榜样，一个因天生残疾仍能取得卓越成就的篮球少年，激励了Jayce接受自己并重拾自信。
情节分析
Jayce在幼儿园意识到自己和他人的不同，并因此感到沮丧与愤怒。
母亲无意中看到关于Trashaun的新闻，并让Jayce看了相关视频，点燃了Jayce的兴趣和希望。
一位家庭朋友促成了Jayce与Trashaun的会面，帮助Jayce建立了自信。
情绪发展
前期：Jayce感到失落、愤怒、不安，母亲同样感到无助。
中期：母亲试图为Jayce找到一个榜样，情绪逐渐转为希望。
后期：Jayce通过榜样的激励变得积极乐观，情绪达到了愉悦与满足的高潮。
主题分析
接受自我：通过榜样的影响，学会欣赏和接受自己的独特之处。
鼓励与支持：他人的关爱和榜样的力量可以帮助我们战胜内心的挣扎。
克服自卑：无论先天条件如何，每个人都可以通过努力超越自我。
续写方向
1.第一段描写meeting的情节
描述在此次会面的情景，包括人物的情绪动作表情等，其次是Trashaun如何帮助Jayce找到why am I different的答案，也正好呼应前文母亲的疑问HOW could she provide answers to her son's questions when she had never found those answers herself; 以及Tashaun如何鼓励Jayce直面残疾，克服自卑，收获自信。
2.详细描述这次meeting带来的影响
Jayce产生了什么样的变化，可以是情绪上的，与妈妈相处上的，对自己先天缺陷认知上的，受到Trashaun影响收获的兴趣爱好，面对同学的嘲笑等等。最后可以回扣文章的主题Trashaun helped him see that their shared difference is no handicap to succcess. He’s not alone, and he has someone to look up to who’s just like him.
参考范文
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原版范文
The boys met at Washington Middle School on a Saturday afternoon a couple of months later. The day was not spent wallowing in self-pity-it was dedicated to fun. The two boys were instantly bonded. They rode bikes around the school's hallways, took photos, played hide-and-seek, and shot baskets. Trashaun taught Jayce to finish with a high release and put some backspin on the ball. At one point, Trashaun did get serious with Jayce. He talked about their Jeft arms-or lack thereof. He told Jayce he was perfect the way God made him. He said not to let anyone drag him down and that words don't need to shake his confidence.
Since that meeting, Lewis has seen a noticeable difference in her son. Jayee has become more confident, outgoing, and determined than ever before. He is no longer ashamed of his differences and instead embraces them, using them as a source of strength and inspiration. He recently even has started wrestling and loves it. Lewis watches with pride and amazement as her son continues to grow and thrive. She knows that the chance encounter with Trashaun has changed his life forever, and is grateful for the kindness of the family friend who has made it all possible.
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The boys met at Washington Middle School on a Saturday afternoon a couple of months later. At the sight of Trashaun—tall, confident, and smiling—Jayce hesitated, unsure of what to say. Sensing his unease,Trashaun greeted him with a warm smile and a fist bump, putting him at ease.The two were instantly bonded,embracing their shared difference, or rather uniqueness. Trashaun shared his journey of overcoming challenges similar to those Jayce was experiencing. “ I know how it feels to wonder, ‘Why am I different ’ But let me tell you it’s not about what we don’t have but how we use what we’ve got.”These words resonated deeply with Jayce.For hours, they talked, laughed, and played basketball together. By the end of the afternoon, Jayce was laughing and smiling, his confidence already beginning to bloom.（115words）
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Since that meeting, Lewis has seen a pronounced difference in her son. Jayce has regained his bubbly enthusiasm. No longer does he return home sullen, but speaks of his dreams with newfound enthusiasm and confidence.Nor does he shy away when asked about his arm; instead, he talks about his friend Trashaun and the amazing things he can do. He’s taken up basketball with renewed passion, practicing every day and showing off his improving skills with pride. “If Trashaun can do it, so can I,” he often says, his face glowing/radiating with determination. For Lewis, the change is nothing short of miraculous. That meeting changed everything—nger questions why he is different—instead, he embraces it, knowing that his uniqueness makes him capable of extraordinary things.(115words）
一些找回自信的语料积累
Once a timid individual who avoided eye contact and mumbled uncertainly, Sarah transformed after regaining her confidence. Now, her voice is steady and resonant, her words brimming with assurance. She stands tall, her back straight and her shoulders relaxed, as if she carries the world with ease. Her bright smile and sparkling eyes exude warmth, drawing people toward her. Each step she takes is purposeful, and her gestures are open, radiating trust and optimism. 萨拉曾经是一个胆小的人，避免目光接触，含糊不清，在恢复信心后，她改变了。现在，她的声音稳定而洪亮，她的话语充满了自信。她站得高高的，背挺直，肩膀放松，好像轻松地扛起了整个世界。她灿烂的笑容和闪闪发光的眼睛散发着温暖，吸引着人们。她迈出的每一步都是有目的的，她的姿态是开放的，散发着信任和乐观。
Jayce’s transformation was evident in every aspect of his demeanor. His posture, once slouched and hesitant, became upright and assured. He walked through the school hallways with a bounce in his step, his head held high, and a smile that seemed to radiate warmth and positivity. His eyes, which had once darted around nervously to avoid making contact, now sparkled with determination and enthusiasm.
In conversations, Jayce’s tone was lively and upbeat. He began to crack jokes with his classmates, often making light of his own challenges.His voice carried an air of self-assurance, making it clear that he was no longer defined by self-doubt.
Perhaps most striking was the way he started to engage with others. Jayce would greet everyone he met with an open, genuine smile, his energy drawing people toward him.
He no longer viewed himself through the lens of his limitations. Instead, he celebrated his progress and embraced his uniqueness, inspiring everyone around him to see the beauty in their own differences.
杰斯的转变在他举止的各个方面都很明显。他的姿势，曾经的懒散和犹豫，变得笔直和自信。他迈着轻快的步伐走过学校的走廊，高昂着头，脸上的微笑似乎散发着温暖和积极的光芒。他的眼睛曾经紧张地四处张望，避免与人接触，现在却闪烁着决心和热情。
在谈话中，杰斯的语气活泼而乐观。他开始和同学开玩笑，常常把自己面临的挑战当儿戏。他的声音带着一种自信的神情，表明他不再被自我怀疑所束缚。
也许最引人注目的是他开始与他人交往的方式。杰斯会用开放、真诚的微笑迎接他遇到的每一个人，他的活力吸引着人们向他靠近。
他不再以自己的局限来看待自己。相反，他庆祝自己的进步，拥抱自己的独特性，激励身边的每个人在自己的差异中看到美丽。

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