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读后续写之亲情类：圣诞节男子与多年未见的祖母重逢 讲义
读后续写
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The heavy snow continued outside. It was the week before Christmas. The evening receptionist who was scheduled to relieve me had phoned to say she had been unable to get her car started. Why was I the unlucky one stuck behind a receptionist’s desk
Suddenly, my thought was interrupted by the ringing of the telephone. Answering a little unhappily, I heard a man’s voice. “Is this Avis Car Rental ”
“No, I’m afraid our phone number here at the assisted living facility is one digit different than Avis. Let me give you that number so you don’t have to look it up again,” I finished giving the gentleman the number, wishing him a Merry Christmas. Just as I was about to hang up, I heard his voice in midair.
“Wait a minute, please! Do you believe in miracles ”
I sat straighter in my chair, surprised at such a question from a total stranger.
“Definitely. Why do you ask ”
“I’ll try to make a long story short. My parents recently passed away in a car accident. I have no one left in the world but a grandmother somewhere in Virginia who I haven’t seen since I was little. My uncle placed my grandmother in an assisted living facility when he grew too ill to care for her any longer. Unfortunately, he’s gone to heaven as well. Do you happen to have Grace Sheperd at your facility ”
My heart beat faster as I recognized the familiar name.
“Are you still there ” he asked finally.
“Yes. I’m afraid there’s a privacy policy that prohibits me from answering.”
“I understand,” the young man sounded so sad. “Thank you for your time, and Merry Christmas!”
“Wait! Virginia is a beautiful state to visit at Christmas time! Let me give you our address in case you happen to be traveling through our area any time soon...” I added.
“Thank you!” the young man said before he hung up.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
The next day when I was passing Grace Shepard’s room, I suddenly froze in place.
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The young man slowly rose to his feet and walked to me.
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以下是对这篇文章从几个方面进行的分析：
一、主旨大意
文章讲述了在圣诞节前一周的一个雪天，身为接待员的“我”在值班时接到一位陌生男子的电话，他误将养老机构电话当作租车公司电话拨打过来。男子倾诉了自己的身世，亲人相继离世，只剩未曾谋面已久的在弗吉尼亚某养老机构的祖母。“我”虽因隐私政策无法告知他其祖母是否在此，但巧妙地给了他养老机构地址。最终男子得以和祖母团聚，体现了在特殊的节日氛围下，人与人之间的善意相助促成了温暖的家庭重逢的故事。
二、伏笔
1 陌生男子询问“我”是否相信奇迹，为后文他真的找到祖母并实现团聚这一如同奇迹般的情节埋下伏笔，引发读者对后续发展的好奇。
2 “我”在电话中违反常规地给了男子养老机构的地址，看似不经意的举动，实则为后文男子能够前来与祖母相聚埋下伏笔，暗示了故事可能会朝着温暖团聚的方向发展。
三、续写要点
第一段续写要点：要描述“我”看到男子和祖母相聚的场景，展现出祖母的喜悦以及男子的温情，突出重逢这一刻的温馨氛围，比如通过对人物的动作、神态描写来体现。
第二段续写要点：需刻画男子对“我”表达感激之情的具体表现，如言语、神态等，同时要从“我”的角度表达出内心的温暖感受，以及这件事在这个特殊的圣诞时节所带来的特别意义，进一步升华故事的情感。
四、主题升华句
1. On this cold and snowy day, an accidental phone call, with a little kindness passed along, led to a heartwarming family reunion, filling the approaching Christmas with deep affection.
在这个寒冷的雪天，一次偶然的电话连线，却因着那一点点善意的传递，成就了一份温暖至极的家庭重逢，让这个即将到来的圣诞节充满了浓浓的温情。
2. Sometimes, a small act, like giving an address, might bridge the gap of time and space, reunite separated relatives, and show how brilliantly the kindness of human nature shines.
有时候，一个小小的举动，如给出一个地址，或许就能跨越时空的隔阂，让失散的亲人再度相聚，让我们看到人性的善良是如此熠熠生辉。
3. Despite the restrictions of the privacy policy, that bit of care that broke the norm, like the warm sun in winter, not only illuminated the man's way of finding his relatives but also filled the nursing home with the air of love on this Christmas Eve.
尽管有隐私政策的限制，但那一丝突破常规的关怀，如同冬日里的暖阳，不仅照亮了男子寻亲的路，更让这个圣诞前夕的养老机构洋溢着爱的气息。
4. The inquiry about miracles on the other end of the phone and the kind response on this end jointly wove a warm picture, proving that even in the face of the hardships of life, the warm help among people can always create wonderful miracles.
电话那端的询问奇迹，电话这端的善意回应，共同编织出了一幅温暖的画面，证明了即使在生活的苦难面前，人与人之间的温情相助总能创造出美好的奇迹。
5. The story that happened on this snowy day tells us that every inadvertent act of kindness can become a beam of light in someone else's life. On a special occasion like Christmas, it kindles the long-lost family affection and makes love bloom again.
这个雪天发生的故事告诉我们，每一个不经意的善举都可能成为他人生命中的一束光，在圣诞节这样的特殊时刻，点亮那份失落已久的亲情，让爱重新绽放。
五、故事线
开端：圣诞节前一周的雪天，值班接待员因同事车故障而坚守岗位，接到陌生男子误拨的电话。
发展：男子倾诉身世，询问祖母下落，“我”因隐私政策无法告知但给了地址。
高潮：第二天“我”路过祖母房间看到男子和祖母相聚的场景。
结局：男子向“我”表达感激，“我”内心温暖，感受到这份重逢在圣诞时节的特殊意义。
六、情感线
“我”的情感：开始接到电话时有些不耐烦，听到男子身世后转为同情，给出地址时怀着希望能帮到他的心情，看到男子和祖母相聚时内心充满喜悦和温暖，最后因男子的感激而深感这份善举的意义重大。
男子的情感：打电话时的迷茫、无助与悲伤，得到地址后的期待，见到祖母时的激动、喜悦与温情，向“我”表达感激时的诚挚。
Possible Version:
The First Version:
The next day when I was passing Grace Sheperd’s room, I suddenly froze in place. Through the half-open door, I saw a young man sitting beside an old lady, their hands clasped tightly. Grace Sheperd was beaming with a happiness I had seldom seen. The young man was speaking softly, his face filled with affection and a tinge of sadness. It was clear that he was the grandson who had called last night. I couldn't help but smile, realizing that a miracle was indeed happening right before my eyes.
The young man slowly rose to his feet and walked to me. His eyes were moist with tears of joy and gratitude. “Thank you,” he said, his voice choked with emotion. “You gave me the chance to reunite with my grandmother. This is the best Christmas gift I could ever receive.” I told him it was fate that brought them together. As I walked away, I felt a warm glow in my heart, knowing that I had played a small part in this heartwarming family reunion during the Christmas season.
The Second Version:
The next day when I was passing Grace Sheperd’s room, I suddenly froze in place. Inside the room, the young man was leaning over Grace, his eyes filled with a mixture of tenderness and disbelief. Grace was patting his hand gently, her wrinkled face lit up with an ecstatic smile that made her look years younger. The room seemed to be filled with intangible warmth, as if the long-lost bond between them had instantly rekindled. The young man was showing Grace some old family photos from his wallet, and they were both laughing and crying at the same time, lost in the precious memories of the past that had been dormant for so long.
The young man slowly rose to his feet and walked to me. His steps were a bit unsteady, as if he was still in a daze from the overwhelming emotion. Tears glistened in his eyes as he said, “You have no idea what this means to me. I thought I was all alone in the world, but now...” He paused, unable to continue for a moment. “This is truly a Christmas miracle, and you are the angel who made it possible.” I felt a lump in my throat and replied, “It was fate that brought you two together. This season is all about love and reunion, and I'm just glad to have witnessed such a beautiful moment.” As he thanked me again and again, I realized that this small act of mine had not only reunited a family but also filled my heart with an indescribable sense of joy and fulfillment that would stay with me long after this Christmas had passed.

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