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My brother Jack was so smart that he earned a full scholarship to Harvard. I often wished he wasn't so perfect because it made me feel like I had to work twice as hard just to prove myself to others. On one hand, his success was a challenge that I enjoyed, but on the other hand, it was an immense pressure that I struggled to cope with.
To balance his record in high school, I felt like I was constantly running on a treadmill (跑步机) , dedicating every moment to a non-stop race. There was no room for relaxation as I pursued that perfect record. My life seemed to be compressed into a series of endless tasks and deadlines.
“I needed an A,” I repeated to myself before the biology test, so that I would maintain my perfect record and secure a place on the honor roll. I studied till the last minute of lunch and rushed to class. I felt a sense of confidence as I glanced over the first page of the test, quickly filling in the answers with a smile. However, as I turned to the last page, my mind went blank. Time ticked by, and soon, the classroom began to empty as students finished their tests and left, except me. “Lara, class ended. I need you to hand in your test,” Mrs. Phloem said, stretching out her hand. Reluctantly, I handed her the test paper.
The next day, I received my test back. I stared dumbfounded at the red mark: 76. Not even a B minus, my mind screamed. Just average. It ' s over. No perfect record. I felt an unprecedented(前所未有的) sense of frustration and disappointment. After school, I dragged my heavy feet back home. When I pushed open the door, Jack was sitting on the couch, reading. Seeing his leisurely state, I cried, hard to contain the jealousy and sadness in my heart. Jack immediately noticed the depression on my face. He asked with concern, “What's wrong, Lara ” Blinded by frustration mixed with a touch of jealousy, I shouted at him “How I wish you were not so perfect!”
注意:1. 续写词数应为 150个左右;2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 Paragraph 1: With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me.
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Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset.
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文章大意：“我” 的哥哥杰克非常优秀，获得了哈佛的全额奖学金，这让 “我” 感到巨大压力，为了能和他一样出色，“我” 拼命学习，力求在各方面都保持完美记录。在一次生物考试前，“我” 一心想要取得 A 以维持荣誉榜的位置，但考试时最后一页却大脑空白，最终只得了 76 分，“我” 极度沮丧和失望，回家后看到哥哥悠闲的样子，忍不住冲他大喊希望他不要那么完美，内心充满嫉妒和悲伤。
5 处伏笔及续写中的回应
伏笔：哥哥杰克很聪明且获得哈佛全额奖学金，给 “我” 造成巨大压力。
回应：在续写中哥哥通过分享自己的经历和内心想法，让 “我” 明白每个人都有自己的挑战和压力，成功不是表面看起来那么轻松，缓解了 “我” 对他的嫉妒和因对比产生的压力。
伏笔：“我” 为了平衡成绩拼命学习，没有放松时间，视完美记录为目标。
回应：哥哥的话使 “我” 意识到追求完美并非生活的唯一意义，开始思考自身真正的价值和生活的多样性，不再仅仅局限于成绩上的竞争。
伏笔：生物考试前 “我” 对成绩的极度渴望和考试时的失利。
回应：哥哥以自己曾经的失败经历为例，让 “我” 懂得失败是成长的一部分，不应因一次考试失败就完全否定自己，帮助 “我” 从沮丧中走出来，重新审视学习和生活的态度。
伏笔：“我” 看到哥哥在家悠闲读书的状态心生嫉妒。
回应：哥哥向 “我” 展示他在背后付出的努力，让 “我” 明白不能只看表面现象，改变了对哥哥的片面看法，也消除了嫉妒心理。
伏笔：“我” 因考试成绩不理想而产生的前所未有的沮丧和失望。
回应：通过与哥哥的交流，“我” 的情绪逐渐从消极转向积极，重新找回自信和对生活的热情，实现了情绪和心态的转变。
续写要点
情感线：
第一段：哥哥最初因 “我” 的话受伤和惊讶，而后转为关心，“我” 则在哥哥的引导下，从愤怒、嫉妒逐渐变得冷静，开始倾听哥哥的话，情绪有所缓和。
第二段：随着哥哥深入的讲述，“我” 内心受到触动，沮丧和嫉妒逐渐消散，被理解、温暖和振奋所取代，最终实现了情感上的升华，对哥哥和生活有了新的认知和积极的态度。
故事线：
第一段：哥哥靠近 “我”，没有生气，而是耐心询问 “我” 原因，然后拉着 “我” 坐下，开始讲述自己在哈佛的压力和曾经的失败经历，告诉 “我” 成功背后都有不为人知的艰辛。
第二段：哥哥继续说他看到 “我” 只看到他表面的优秀，却忽略了他的付出，鼓励 “我” 要做自己，不要被完美束缚，“我” 听后深受启发，感谢哥哥，两人关系更加亲密，“我” 也重新审视自己的生活方向。
主旨升华句
True success is not about being flawless, but about rising after every fall and finding our own unique path.（真正的成功不是完美无缺，而是在每次跌倒后重新站起，找到属于自己的独特道路。）
We often envy the achievements of others, unaware of the battles they fight behind the scenes. Let's cherish our own journey and strive for progress, not perfection.（我们常常羡慕他人的成就，却不知他们在背后所经历的挣扎。让我们珍惜自己的旅程，追求进步，而非完美。）
Perfection is an illusion; it's the cracks that let the light of growth and self-discovery shine through. Embrace your imperfections, for they are the stepping stones to a more meaningful life.（完美是一种幻想；正是裂缝让成长和自我发现的光芒透进来。拥抱你的不完美，因为它们是通往更有意义生活的垫脚石。）
The pursuit of perfection can blind us to the beauty of our own imperfect but real lives. Let go of the impossible standards and embrace the authenticity of our journey.（对完美的追求可能会让我们忽视自己不完美但真实生活的美好。放下不可能的标准，拥抱我们旅程的真实性。）
Instead of comparing our lives to the highlight reels of others, we should focus on writing our own stories, filled with growth, learning, and the courage to be imperfect.（与其将自己的生活与他人的精彩片段相比较，我们不如专注于书写自己的故事，充满成长、学习和不完美的勇气。）
写作示范
第一篇
Paragraph 1: With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. Instead of getting angry, he softly asked, “Can you tell me what happened, Lara ” I hesitated for a moment, then poured out my frustrations about the test and how his achievements had been weighing on me. Jack listened patiently and then led me to the couch. He sat down beside me and said, “You know, Lara, being at Harvard is not as easy as it seems. I have my own set of challenges and failures too. There was a time when I got a lower grade than I expected in a very important course, and I felt just like you do now.”
Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset. “I realized then that one grade doesn't define me, and the same goes for you. You are so focused on being perfect that you forget to enjoy the process of learning. I may seem perfect from the outside, but you don't see the hours of hard work and the times I doubted myself.” His eyes met mine sincerely. “You have your own strengths and talents, Lara. Don't let the pursuit of perfection overshadow who you really are. Be proud of your efforts, not just the results.” I felt a weight lift off my shoulders. I looked at Jack with newfound understanding and gratitude. “Thank you, Jack. I'm sorry for what I said.” From that day on, I learned to embrace my imperfections and focus on my personal growth, rather than comparing myself to others.
第二篇
Paragraph 1: With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. He placed a hand on my shoulder and said, “Lara, I had no idea you were feeling this way. I thought you were always so strong and determined.” I shrugged his hand off, still fuming with anger and jealousy. But Jack didn't give up. He pulled me down to sit beside him and began to share his own story. “When I first got to Harvard, I was overwhelmed. The competition was fierce, and there were times when I felt like I didn't belong. I studied day and night, just like you, but still faced setbacks.”
Paragraph 2: His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset. “I understand your pain, Lara, but you have to understand that everyone has their own journey. You are so much more than just your grades. You have a kind heart and a unique perspective that no one else has.” Jack's words sank in. I realized how foolish I had been to envy him without knowing the whole story. “I should have been more supportive of you, instead of being jealous,” I said, my voice filled with remorse. Jack smiled and hugged me. “We're in this together, Lara. Let's support each other and focus on our own paths. Remember, it's not about being perfect; it's about being true to ourselves.” From that moment on, I decided to let go of the burden of perfection and cherish my own experiences and growth, knowing that my worth was not determined by a single test score or comparison to others.
One possible version:
With a hint of hurt and surprise in his eyes, Jack gently approached me. He placed a hand on my shoulder, asked me again what had happened. I took out my test paper and told him that I would never match up to him in a choked voice. Jack's smile grew warmer, and he gave my shoulder a reassuring squeeze. “You don't have to measure up to anyone and your worth isn't defined by grades0Iachievements. You're more than just a number on a test. Remember that be yourself; everyone else is already taken.”
His words were like a warm breeze, blowing my depression away and changing my mindset, was still engaged in endless tasks and deadlines, but I no longer felt constrained by my brother's shadow. Realizing that comparison is the thief of joy, I strove for excellence instead of perfection, which is often unattainable and can lead to burnout. I felt a weight lifted off my shoulders as I realized that my value wasn't tied to a single test score. felt more confident and less overwhelmed as I know that believing in doing my best will always be the ultimate best score.

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