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2024学年第一学期浙江省精诚联盟适应性联考
第二节(满分 25 分)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In a small town in Iowa, sixteen-year-old Emma Thompson was an ambitious student with dreams of becoming a scientist. Every year, the local high school held a science fair, and Emma had always placed high but never won first place. This year, she was determined to change that.
Emma spent months working on her project, a study on renewable energy using algae(藻类). She recorded data, ran experiments, and even stayed up late into the night perfecting her presentation. Her parents often found her working at her laptop, surrounded by books and lab equipment.
One evening, a week before the science fair, Emma was working on her project when her laptop screen suddenly went black. Panicked, she tried to restart it, but it was no use. All her data, notes, and the presentation were on that laptop, and she hadn't backed up her files.
Desperate, Emma took the laptop to the local repair shop. The technician told her it would take at least a week to recover the data if it was even possible. Emma left the shop, feeling a sense of despair. How could she possibly recreate everything in just a few days
Returning home, she sat on her bed.fighting back tears. Her mind flashed back to a conversation she had had with her science teacher, Mr. Reynolds, earlier in the year. He told her the true test of a scientist was not in how they handled success, but in how they overcame failure and that innovation often came from the ability to adapt and persevere.
Emma let Mr.Reynolds’ words sink in. She realized that this was her chance to prove herself - as a true scientist. Determined to make the best of her situation, she began to gather all the resources she still had. She found her handwritten notes, some scattered (散乱的) papers, and relied on her memory to recall key points of her research.
Paragraph l: Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over.
Paragraph 2: After the fair, the winners were to be announced.
第二节(满分 25 分)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In a small town in Iowa, sixteen-year-old Emma Thompson was an ambitious student with dreams of becoming a scientist(with复合结构). Every year, the local high school held a science fair, and Emma had always placed high but never won first place. This year, she was determined to change that.
Emma spent months working on her project, a study on renewable energy(介词短语做study的后置定语) using algae(非谓语动词做后置定语)(藻类). She recorded data, ran experiments, and even stayed up late into the night perfecting her presentation(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Her parents often found her working at her laptop, surrounded by(非谓语动词做伴随动作) books and lab equipment.
One evening, a week before the science fair, Emma was working on her project when her laptop screen suddenly went black(状从). Panicked(非谓语动词做状语), she tried to restart it, but it was no use. All her data, notes, and the presentation were on that laptop, and she hadn't backed up her files.
Desperate(形容词做状语), Emma took the laptop to the local repair shop. The technician told her it would take at least a week to recover the data(宾从) if it was even possible(状从). Emma left the shop, feeling a sense of despair(非谓语动词做伴随动作). How could she possibly recreate everything in just a few days
Returning home(非谓语动词做伴随动作), she sat on her bed, fighting back tears(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Her mind flashed back to a conversation she had had with her science teacher(定从), Mr. Reynolds, earlier in the year. He told her the true test of a scientist was not in(宾从) how they handled success(宾从), but in how they overcame failure(宾从) and that innovation often came from the ability to adapt and persevere(宾从).
Emma let Mr.Reynolds’ words sink in. She realized that this was her chance to prove herself - as a true scientist(宾从). Determined to make the best of her situation(非谓语动词短语做状语), she began to gather all the resources she still had(宾从). She found her handwritten notes, some scattered (散乱的) papers, and relied on her memory to recall key points of her research.
Paragraph l: Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over.
Paragraph 2: After the fair, the winners were to be announced.
1. 读后续写分类与构思分析
类型分析：
该文章属于情感转折型（也可称为逆境中的成长类型）读后续写。文章描述了Emma面临电脑故障、项目数据丢失的困境，她从初始的绝望中找到力量，最终决定不放弃并重新开始。续写的任务是呈现她如何克服困难，展现成长与坚持。
构思思路：
1. 情感递进：
- 从绝望到希望：文章中的Emma在电脑崩溃后的绝望情绪成为情感的起点，续写要自然承接这种情感转变，通过Emma的行动与心理转折，展现她从失败中汲取力量，最终展现出她坚韧不拔的决心。
2. 行动与决心：
- 如何应对困境：续写要描绘Emma在知晓数据丢失后的种种应对措施，如回忆实验过程、手工记录数据、重新整理资料等具体行动。
- 最终克服困难：最终的结果可以是她完成了项目，并且在科学展中取得了好成绩，或许虽然没有获奖，但她收获了自信和对科学的更深理解。
3. 人物性格与成长：
- Emma的坚韧：她的成长与坚韧是故事的核心，续写应强调她如何在压力下保持冷静，重新开始，不断前进。
布局与提炼框架：
- 第一段：
- 情感转折：Emma的绝望转变为决心，决定从头开始。
- 行动：收集手写笔记，依赖记忆重建实验数据。
- 第二段：
- 情感高潮：Emma完成项目，准备在科学展上展示，充满信心。
- 结果揭示：展示她在科学展中的表现，可以是获奖，也可以是收获了其他形式的认可。
实施：
- 承接原文：
- 续写要注意情感上的承接，从“Emma感到绝望”自然过渡到她的决心与行动。
- 细节的具体呈现：比如Emma如何利用零散的手写资料重新构建数据，如何整理思路并进行项目展示。
续写承接原文的注意事项：
1. 情感转折：情感的转变要自然流畅，避免生硬的转变，展示Emma的心理变化。
2. 人物行为：继承人物的坚韧与决心，确保行为符合她的性格。
3. 情感连接：从绝望到重新振作的过渡要清晰，并展示她的成长。
4. 细节描写：注重环境细节，如她在夜晚整理数据、翻阅笔记的场景，以增强人物与环境的连接。
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故事山元素 内容
起点 Emma的电脑崩溃，数据丢失，情感低谷。
攀升 Emma回忆老师的话，决定从头开始，收集手写笔记，尝试重新做实验。
转折点 她决定从困境中找到新的方法，用有限的资源重做项目。
高潮 Emma完成了项目，并成功参加科学展。
结局 获得某种形式的认可或反响，尽管未必获得第一名，但她展示了自己的坚韧与创新。
2. 故事山模式分析
续写衔接点：
- 原文情感衔接：原文中Emma从绝望转为希望的心理变化，续写应体现这种内心转变。
- 动词与心理：在续写中要展示Emma的努力与重拾信心的具体动作，例如“她开始翻阅手写笔记”、“她恢复了数据并开始重新做实验”。
关键句子与短语：
- 心情反映：
- “She felt a sense of despair.” → 续写可以反映她如何从这种绝望中走出来，找到新的动力。
- “This was her chance to prove herself” → 显示Emma如何从内心恢复信心并采取实际行动。
- 动作描写：
- “She began to gather all the resources she still had.” → 续写时应通过具体的行动展现她如何挽回项目，利用有限资源。
- 关键转折点：
- “Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over.” → 这是故事的关键转折，标志着Emma决定不放弃并采取积极行动。
3. 续写动作、心理、环境描写推荐例句
动作描写：
1. Emma immediately opened her handwritten notes, flipping through pages to recall crucial data and experiments.
2. With her hands trembling, Emma started organizing the scattered papers, hoping to piece together the fragments of her research.
3. She took a deep breath, opened her laptop again, and began typing furiously, determined to finish her project on time.
心理描写：
1. Emma’s heart raced with anxiety, but she knew she couldn’t give up now. She had to finish what she started.
2. As she sat down at her desk, the weight of her failure seemed unbearable, but her teacher’s words echoed in her mind, reminding her that true scientists were defined by their ability to persevere.
3. She felt a flicker of hope ignite within her as she realized that, though the task ahead was daunting, she had the strength to face it.
环境描写：
1. The room was quiet except for the sound of Emma’s pen scratching across the paper, her only companion in the late hours of the night.
2. Emma’s small bedroom was filled with crumpled papers and open textbooks, evidence of her relentless determination to finish her project.
3. The soft glow of the desk lamp illuminated Emma’s tired face as she worked tirelessly, surrounded by the chaos of her work.
高级词汇替换：
1. Determined → Resolute, Tenacious, Unyielding
2. Frustrated → Exasperated, Disheartened, Defeated
3. Desperate → Despondent, Hopeless, Struggling
4. 语法分析
语法现象：
- 过去完成时：表示某一过去动作发生在另一个过去动作之前。例如，“She had always placed high but never won first place.”
- 近义词：had completed, had achieved
- 例句：
1. Emma had been working for months before the fair.
2. She had never seen her project fail until that day.
- 情态动词：如“could”与“would”，用于表达能力和未来假设。例如，“How could she possibly recreate everything in just a few days ”
- 近义词：might, should
- 例句：
1. She might not be able to finish in time.
2. He would have helped if he had known.
- 定语从句：如“a study on renewable energy using algae,” 其中使用了“using algae”来修饰“study”。
- 近义词：which used algae
- 例句：
1. The experiment, which tested renewable energy sources, was a success.
2. The papers that were scattered across the table contained important information.
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5. 范文分析与加分点
语法加分点：
1. 被动语态：“The data was recovered by the technician.”
2. 情态动词：“She might have been able to save the project if she had backed up her files.”
3. 过去完成时：“Emma had already gathered her notes before the technician arrived.”
语法加分点：
1. 虚拟语气：“If she had known about the problem earlier, she would have backed up the data.”
2. 非限定性定语从句：“The project, which was her passion, had to be restarted from scratch.”
语法加分点：
1. 现在完成时：“She has been working on her project for months.”
2. 动名词：“Collecting data and writing reports took most of her time.”
Possible Answer 1：
Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over. The night seemed endless, but she refused to let the failure consume her. She opened her handwritten notes(与原文衔接) and, with a steady hand, began organizing the scattered papers(与原文衔接). Her mind raced, recalling the key experiments(非谓语动词做伴随动作) she had conducted(定从), the data she had gathered(定从), and the conclusions she had drawn(定从). She had always dreamed of becoming a scientist, and this was the moment she would prove her resilience(定从). The hours flew by as she poured over her notes(状从), determined to recreate the project(非谓语动词短语做补语) she had worked on for months(定从).
After the fair, the winners were to be announced. Although she didn’t win first place(状从), Emma felt a sense of accomplishment that no ribbon could define(定从). Her teacher, Mr. Reynolds, smiled at her from the back of the room, and Emma knew in that moment that she had passed the true test of a scientist(宾从): perseverance in the face of failure.
Possible Answer 2:无框架续写
Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over.She tried her best to calm down, her hands still trembling(独立主格) as she opened her notes again(状从). The project had seemed impossible to complete, but she refused to give up. As she sifted through her handwritten notes(状从), she recalled the hours spent experimenting with algae for renewable energy(非谓语动词做后置定语). Each detail, each result came back to her, and she began to rebuild her presentation. Though the task ahead seemed daunting(状从), Emma’s resolve strengthened. She was no longer overwhelmed by the setback; instead, she was determined to prove that a true scientist never quits, no matter the circumstances.
When the science fair began, Emma was filled with a sense of quiet pride. She had done her best and shown what she was capable of(宾从). The judges walked by, inspecting the projects(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作), and when the winners were announced(状从), Emma didn’t win first place, but it didn’t matter. As she packed up her materials(状从), she felt a new sense of confidence. Her perseverance had paid off. Mr. Reynolds gave her an encouraging look, and Emma knew she had earned something far more valuable than a prize (宾从)— the belief in herself and the knowledge that she could overcome any obstacle(定从).
Possible Answer 3 无框架:
Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over. She opened her notes and scattered papers across the desk, hoping to reconstruct her project(非谓语动词做伴随动作). It wasn’t easy, and she felt the weight of failure pressing down on her shoulders(非谓语动词短语做后置定语). But her teacher’s words echoed in her mind: "A true scientist isn’t defined by their successes, but by how they rise after failure(宾从)." With renewed determination, she worked tirelessly, using every resource at her disposal. The hours passed, but Emma didn’t give up. She had lost time, but she hadn’t lost hope. And that made all the difference.
The day of the science fair arrived, and Emma stood before her project, her heart pounding with excitement(独立主格). As she presented her findings(状从), she spoke with newfound confidence, her passion for science evident in every word(独立主格). When the judges announced the winners(状从), Emma didn’t take home first place, but she felt a deep sense of satisfaction. She had proved to herself that she could overcome adversity(宾从), and that was a victory in itself(宾从). Mr. Reynolds gave her a proud nod, and Emma knew that this was only the beginning of her journey as a scientist(宾从).
语法加分点分析：
1. 过去完成时：用于描述在过去某一时刻之前已经完成的动作。例如：“Emma had always dreamed of becoming a scientist.”
2. 情态动词：表达可能性、能力、必要性等情感。例如：“She might have been able to save the project if she had backed up her files.”
3. 非限定性定语从句：补充说明名词，增加句子的细节。例如：“The project, which was her passion, had to be restarted from scratch.”
4. 动名词：表达动作或活动作为名词使用。例如：“Collecting data and writing reports took most of her time.”
5. 虚拟语气：用于表示与现实相反的情况，增强假设与愿望的表达。例如：“If she had known about the problem earlier, she would have backed up the data.”
情绪描写与动作描写亮点词汇：
- 情绪描写：“Emma felt a sense of despair” → 替换词：exhausted, disheartened, defeated
- 动作描写：“Emma immediately opened her handwritten notes” → 替换词：flipped through, sifted through, reviewed
替换词与高级表达：
- Determined → Resolute, Tenacious, Unyielding
- Frustrated → Exasperated, Disheartened, Defeated
- Desperate → Despondent, Hopeless, Struggling
第四部分 写作(共两节，满分40分)
第一节(满分15分)
假定你是李华，为迎接即将来访的新西兰姐妹学校的师生代表，学校将举办“戏剧工坊”(drama workshop)活动。现向全校学生征集活动的建议，请你给负责活动的老师写一封邮件。内容包括:1.写信目的;2.你的建议及具体安排。
注意:1.写作词数应为80左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope this letter finds you well.
Best regards, Li Hua
参考范文：123
Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to share some suggestions for the upcoming drama workshop to welcome the students and teachers from our sister school in New Zealand.
To begin with, we could initiate the workshop with interactive ice-breaker activities, allowing students to familiarize themselves with one another(非谓语动词做伴随动作). Following this, a session dedicated to basic acting techniques(非谓语动词做后置定语), such as voice projection, body language, and improvisation, would be highly beneficial. Moreover, organizing students into small groups to prepare and perform short skits(非谓语动词短语做主语) could foster teamwork and creativity. To conclude, a feedback session where students can share their thoughts and learning outcomes would be valuable.(定从)
I am confident that these activities will create an engaging and educational environment for all participants(宾从).
Best regards, Li Hua
参考范文：
Taking a deep breath, Emma decided to start over. She had her handwritten notes, some papers, and her memory. She could do this. The following week, Emma spent every waking hour reconstructing her project. The kitchen turned into a makeshift lab, notes scattered across the table(独立主格). Her parents made sure she had snacks to keep her energy up(宾从). The night before the science fair, Emma finally finished her presentation. She knew it wasn't as polished as her original(宾从), but she had done her best(宾从). At the science fair, Emma stood by her project, feeling a mix of nervousness and hope(非谓语动词短语做伴随动作). As the judges made their rounds(状从), she presented her findings with passion.
After the fair, the winners were to be announced. Emma held her breath as they called out the names. When the first-place winner was called, it wasn't her name. Disappointed but still proud of her efforts(adj做状语或主语补语), Emma listened intently as they announced the second and third-place winners(状从). To her surprise and joy, Emma was awarded third place. Her heart swelled with pride as she accepted her prize, knowing(非谓语动词做伴随动作) that despite the setbacks, she had proven her resilience and determination(宾从). This experience fueled Emma's passion for science even more, inspiring her to continue pursuing her dreams with even greater determination and perseverance(非谓语动词做后置定语).

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