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"I feel hopeless about my school life! I'm not a popular student in our class. I can't play basketball as well as other boys. And I failed Math exam again yesterday, which made me...", Tom, a 16-year-old boy of Mt. Brown's class, lowered his head, sobbing(啜泣）uncontrollably in the Teacher's Office.
"I'm sorry to hear that, Mr. Brown patted Tom's shoulder gently and asked the young boy to sit down in front of the desk so that they could sit opposite each other. This was the first time that Tom had turned to Mr. Brown for help because he was so shy and quiet in school. But Mr. Brown had noticed him many times in school's volunteer work. Looking at the sad young boy, Mr. Brown was silent for a moment. Then, he took a piece of paper and a pen out of his drawer.
"I'd like to invite you to take a surprise test, my boy", said Mr. Brown, passing the pen to Tom. "A new Math exam ", Tom raised his eyes which were still filled with tears, got the pen and
- replied in confusion, worrying about the coming challenge. "Just take it easy because it's not about numbers or formulas(方程)”, Mr. Brown comforted him with a big smile. Not knowing what would come in the exam paper, Tom nodded his head and wiped his tears with his sleeves.
Mr. Brown handed Tom the question paper and encouraged him softly, "Now, you can begin and please finish the test within ten minutes." To Tom's surprise, there were no questions in the paper, but just a black dot in the center of the page. Mr. Brown thoroughly read through Tom's puzzled expressions and said, "I want you to write what you see there." Confused as he was, Tom began to do what he had been asked to do. Meanwhile, Mr. Brown picked up a novel and started reading it, waiting patiently.
Paragraph one:
Tom scratched(挠)his head anxiously, having no idea what to write.
Paragraph two:
"What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper," said Mr. Brown.
一、文章大意
16 岁的 Tom 因在班级不受欢迎、篮球打得不好、数学考试再次失利，在老师办公室向 Mr. Brown 哭诉，感觉对校园生活绝望。这是内向害羞的 Tom 首次求助，Mr. Brown 注意过他做志愿工作，此刻拿出纸笔让 Tom 做个惊喜测试，试卷中心只有一个黑点，要求他在十分钟内写下所见，Tom 虽困惑但照做，Mr. Brown 则耐心等待。
二、故事山分析
开篇：呈现 Tom 的困境，他在老师办公室崩溃哭诉，引发读者对他处境的同情，为故事奠定压抑基调，引出后续情节。
起因：Tom 的无助促使他向老师敞开心扉，这一求助行为成为故事发展的导火索，推动 Mr. Brown 介入帮忙。
发展：Mr. Brown 别出心裁地拿出特殊试卷，以新奇方式引导 Tom，打破常规师生交流模式，增添故事悬念。
高潮：试卷的独特要求 —— 描述黑点，将故事紧张感提升，Tom 的反应与思考过程成为关注焦点。
后续：依据给定开头续写，将围绕 Tom 的书写内容及 Mr. Brown 的点评展开，走向故事结局，揭晓寓意。
三、伏笔及续写中的回应
伏笔：Tom 平时害羞安静，与这次崩溃形成反差。
回应：续写中可展现他内心其实渴望改变、渴望被关注，借这次测试突破自我。
伏笔：Mr. Brown 多次在志愿工作中注意到 Tom。
回应：后续提及老师借此了解到 Tom 的闪光点，引导他认识自身价值，助力成长。
伏笔：试卷只有一个黑点。
回应：续写围绕 Tom 对黑点不同视角描述，反映心态，老师借黑点寓意开导他。
伏笔：要求十分钟内完成。
回应：体现时间紧迫感，促使 Tom 快速思考，后续可写限时让他思维突破，找到方向。
伏笔：Mr. Brown 耐心等待。
回应：续写展示老师等待时胸有成竹，后续讲解引导时循循善诱，展现教育智慧。
四、续写要点
第一段：
详细描述 Tom 抓耳挠腮、苦思冥想的神态动作，如咬笔头、皱眉头。
写他内心纠结，不知从黑点本身写起，还是联系周围空白，最终落笔写下简单描述，体现迷茫探索。
第二段：
阐述 Mr. Brown 接过纸后，针对 Tom 描述深入剖析，若只关注黑点如遇困难只看挫折，忽视白纸代表的诸多可能。
描绘 Tom 听完后如醍醐灌顶，眼神从迷茫到明亮，领悟老师用心，重拾信心，展现成长转折。
五、情感线
起初，Tom 满心绝望、自卑，觉得自己一无是处，在老师面前泣不成声；面对神秘试卷，焦虑困惑；书写时，内心挣扎迷茫。Mr. Brown 始终温和、耐心，以智慧引导。经老师开导，Tom 从懵懂到顿悟，重拾希望，认识到自身问题视角局限，决心改变，师生间信任升温，情感完成由抑到扬的转变。
六、故事线
Tom 因校园挫折在老师办公室哭诉。
Mr. Brown 决定以特殊测试帮助，拿出黑点试卷。
Tom 面对试卷，困惑开篇，限时思考。
按要求书写，内心挣扎。
Mr. Brown 点评书写，借黑点寓意启发。
Tom 领悟成长，故事收尾。
七、主旨升华句（英文）
In the canvas of life, we often focus on the tiny dots of setbacks, forgetting the vast expanse of possibilities around us.（在人生画布上，我们常聚焦挫折的小黑点，遗忘周围广阔的可能性。）
Difficulties are but black dots; it's our perspective that can turn the surrounding blankness into a world of opportunities.（困难不过是黑点，是我们的视角能将周围空白化为机遇世界。）
When we shift our gaze from the single black dot of failure to the whole white paper of potential, we unlock the door to self-growth.（当我们将目光从失败的单个黑点移向充满潜力的整张白纸，就开启了自我成长之门。）
Our lives are filled with ‘black dots’; it's the wisdom to see beyond them that shapes our journey.（我们生活中充满 “黑点”，是看透它们的智慧塑造了我们的旅程。）
The black dot of despair can be transformed into a star of hope, if only we change our way of looking at it.（绝望的黑点若我们改变看待方式，就能变成希望之星。）
八、写作示范
第一篇
续写第一段：Tom scratched (挠) his head anxiously, having no idea what to write. He bit his pen, his brows furrowed deeply. Glancing at the clock ticking away the minutes, his heart raced. Should he just describe the dot's shape and color Or was there more to it After what felt like an eternity, he hesitantly jotted down a few words about the small, black dot in the center of the page, feeling utterly unsure if that was what Mr. Brown expected.
续写第二段：“What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper,” said Mr. Brown. Tom looked up, his eyes filled with confusion. Mr. Brown continued gently, “Just like in life, when you face problems, you tend to zero in on the difficulties, like this dot. But look around it, there's so much more. You have friends you haven't discovered, talents you haven't tapped into. This one failure in math doesn't define you.” Tom's eyes widened as the realization dawned. The heaviness in his heart lifted, and he nodded, a newfound determination gleaming in his eyes.
第二篇
续写第一段：Tom scratched (挠) his head anxiously, having no idea what to write. He drummed his fingers on the desk, his eyes darting between the dot and the clock. His mind was a jumble of thoughts. Was it a test of his creativity Or his attention to detail In a panic, he finally scribbled something about the dot's position and how it stood out against the white. But he knew it was a feeble attempt.
续写第二段：“What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper,” said Mr. Brown. Tom stared at his teacher, waiting for an explanation. Mr. Brown leaned forward, his voice soft yet firm. “Tom, in life, we often magnify our problems, just as you did with this dot. But if you step back, you'll see the big picture. You might not be good at basketball, but you're excellent at volunteering. You failed math this time, but you have countless chances to improve. Don't let the ‘black dots’ overshadow the ‘white paper’ of your potential.” Tom's face lit up as understanding flooded in. He felt a surge of confidence, ready to face life's challenges anew.
参考答案
Tom scratched his head anxiously, having no idea what to write. He took a deep breath, looking around the office to search for some inspiration. But it didn't work! All he could think of was just the black dot in the paper. He cast a quick look at Mr. Brown who was totally absorbed in his book. Time going so fast, there were only thirty seconds left! Tom had no choice but to write a very short sentence on the paper in a hurry-_What I can see is just a black dot in the center of the paper! Then, he handed it to Mr. Brown perplexedly.
"What your writing focused on was just the black dot, but you have a whole white paper," said Mr. Brown. "Don't get discouraged just by a small dot! " continued Mr. Brown. "I'm not going to grade you on this test; I just wanted you to know this." "Likewise, the black dots you talked about as your weaknesses are nothing compared to the other merits you've possessed." Then he praised Tom for what he had done for the volunteer work in school. "You are such a kind and helpful boy. You should take pride in yourself! I believe you will have a promising future.", said Mr. Brown, giving Tom a warm hug. Deeply struck by what Mr. Brown said, Tom nodded his head, his eyes glistening with light.

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