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One holiday, my two cousins and I decided to play a trick on our grandma. We planned to do it --- not because we didn’t like her. She was the sweetest grandma a kid could ever have, and we really loved her. We decided to play the trick just wanting to have some fun. And at that time, to our mind, it was just a harmless joke by little kids.
Early in the evening of that holiday, we began our trick. Carrying a can of red paint, we secretly walked up to Grandma’s doorstep. She was hard of hearing, so we didn’t have to worry about being noticed by her. Every time we thought about how funny it would be to see Grandma try to pick up a gift that was just painted on her doorstep, we couldn’t stop laughing. It didn’t take long to finish painting the gift --- two red roses. They weren’t very artistic. But for us little farm kids and an old woman with poor eyesight, they would do.
Satisfied with the painting, we knocked on the door and quickly hid behind bushes and trees near the house to watch the fun. There was a lot of giggling (咯咯地笑) going on as we were waiting for Grandma to open the door. When she finally appeared, she stood in the doorway for a minute. She looked into the darkness, with her gray hair pulled back tightly into her usual style, wiping her hands on her white apron (围裙). With nothing in sight, she said, “Who could be knocking at my door this hour of the night ” Hearing that, I couldn’t hold back the laughter till my stomach and cheeks ached. Then she looked down at her doorstep. Even from fifteen meters away, we could see the joy that shone in her eyes when she spotted the red gift at her feet.
“Oh, how wonderful!” she called out happily. “A holiday gift for Grandma!I thought I was going to be forgotten again this year!” Grandma bent down to pick up her gift. This was the moment we had been waiting for.
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But somehow it wasn’t as much fun as we had expected.
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At that moment, I regretted playing the trick and wanted to do something to make up for it.
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文章大意：在一个假期，“我” 和两个堂兄弟决定捉弄奶奶，在她家门前台阶上用红漆画了两朵玫瑰作为 “礼物”。奶奶开门后，看到地上的 “礼物”，满心欢喜以为是有人送她的节日礼物，试图捡起，却怎么也拿不起来。
故事山分析
开端：假期里，“我” 和堂兄弟们决定捉弄奶奶，准备在她家门口画 “礼物”。
发展：孩子们带着红漆来到奶奶家门口，画了两朵并不美观的红玫瑰，随后躲起来准备看奶奶的反应。
高潮：奶奶开门后，看到 “礼物” 表现出的喜悦，与孩子们预期的效果不同，孩子们开始感到愧疚。
结局（续写部分）：孩子们意识到错误，决定弥补，买了真正的玫瑰送给奶奶，奶奶再次开门看到真花后十分开心。
伏笔以及在续写中的回应
伏笔一：文中提到奶奶是个听力不好的人，这使得孩子们在实施恶作剧时不用担心被提前发现。在续写中，这一特点让孩子们能够再次悄悄回到奶奶家门口送真花，而不被奶奶察觉。
伏笔二：奶奶说 “我以为今年又要被大家忘了”，这体现出奶奶对被关注的渴望。在续写中，孩子们听到这句话后深受触动，决定买花弥补，满足奶奶的期待。
伏笔三：孩子们画的玫瑰并不美观，这为奶奶难以辨别真假玫瑰埋下伏笔。续写里，奶奶试图捡起画的玫瑰失败，也正因画得不像真花，才让孩子们更深刻认识到自己的错误。
伏笔四：孩子们躲在十五米外偷看奶奶的反应，这个距离既保证奶奶看不到他们，又能让他们清晰看到奶奶的举动。续写时，他们依旧在这个距离外观察奶奶收到真花时的喜悦。
伏笔五：文中描述奶奶把灰白头发紧紧梳成平常的样式，擦拭白色围裙，展现出奶奶爱整洁的形象。续写中，孩子们选择送玫瑰，与奶奶的形象和喜好相契合，希望给奶奶一份美好的礼物。
续写要点
第一段要点：着重描写孩子们看到奶奶试图捡起画的玫瑰时的内心感受，如愧疚、自责等。同时，描述奶奶的动作和表情，进一步突出孩子们的心理变化。
第二段要点：详细叙述孩子们决定弥补错误的过程，包括如何凑钱买花、送花的细节等。最后描写奶奶收到真花时的喜悦，以及孩子们看到奶奶开心后的欣慰。
情感线（150 字）：起初，孩子们满心期待恶作剧带来的欢乐，在看到奶奶因 “礼物” 而喜悦时，内心开始动摇，愧疚感逐渐取代兴奋。随着奶奶不断尝试捡起画的玫瑰，孩子们的愧疚愈发强烈。决定弥补错误后，他们满心都是紧张与期待，直到看到奶奶收到真花后的开心，孩子们才感到如释重负，收获了真正的快乐，也明白了关爱他人的重要性。
故事线
故事线一：孩子们策划并实施捉弄奶奶的恶作剧。
故事线二：奶奶开门看到 “礼物”，表现出喜悦。
故事线三：孩子们看到奶奶的反应，内心从兴奋转为愧疚。
故事线四：孩子们决定弥补错误，凑钱买花。
故事线五：孩子们再次来到奶奶家门口送花。
故事线六：奶奶收到真花，十分开心，孩子们也感到欣慰。
主旨升华句
True happiness lies not in playing tricks, but in bringing joy to those we love. 真正的幸福不在于捉弄他人，而在于给我们所爱的人带来快乐。
A simple act of kindness can make up for the mistakes we've made and warm the hearts of others. 一个简单的善举可以弥补我们犯下的错误，温暖他人的心。
Through this experience, we learned that love and respect should always be at the forefront of our actions. 通过这次经历，我们明白了爱与尊重应该始终是我们行动的首要准则。
Our small act of redemption not only mended our relationship with Grandma but also taught us the value of empathy. 我们小小的弥补行为不仅修复了与奶奶的关系，还让我们懂得了同理心的价值。
In the end, we realized that the greatest gift we can give is not a painted rose, but a genuine expression of love. 最后，我们意识到，我们能给予的最珍贵的礼物不是画出来的玫瑰，而是真挚的爱。
写作示范一
But somehow it wasn’t as much fun as we had expected. Instead of laughing heartily, a lump formed in my throat as I watched Grandma's futile attempts to pick up the painted roses. Her wrinkled hands trembled slightly, and the confusion on her face was heart - wrenching. We had intended to amuse ourselves, but now, we were the ones who felt foolish and ashamed.
At that moment, I regretted playing the trick and wanted to do something to make up for it. Without a word, I signaled to my cousins, and we sprinted home as fast as our legs could carry us. We emptied our piggy banks, pooled our savings, and rushed to the local flower shop. With a bouquet of fresh red roses in hand, we returned to Grandma's doorstep. As we placed the flowers there and knocked on the door, my heart pounded with anticipation. When Grandma opened the door and saw the real roses, her eyes sparkled with delight. A smile spread across her face, and this time, our joy was genuine, knowing that we had finally made her truly happy. True happiness lies not in playing tricks, but in bringing joy to those we love.
9. 写作示范二
But somehow it wasn’t as much fun as we had expected. The moment Grandma bent down, struggling to lift the non - existent gift, our giggles died down. Guilt washed over us like a cold wave. We watched, frozen in place, as her expression changed from joy to disappointment, realizing our thoughtless act had hurt her deeply.
At that moment, I regretted playing the trick and wanted to do something to make up for it. We quickly discussed a plan and ran to the nearest store. After searching through our pockets for change, we managed to buy a beautiful bunch of red roses. Returning to Grandma's house, we carefully placed the roses on the doorstep. When Grandma opened the door again, her face lit up like a Christmas tree. Her smile was so bright that it melted away our guilt. Through this experience, we learned that love and respect should always be at the forefront of our actions.
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But somehow it wasn’t as much fun as we had expected. Confused, Grandma touched the fresh paint for a moment. She quickly became aware of our kids’ childish trick. Her delight at having been remembered by a sweetheart on the happy holiday was short - lived. Grandma tried to smile to hide the embarrassment. Then, with as much self - respect as she could gather, she turned and walked back into her house, absently wiping the red paint on her clean, white apron.
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At that moment, I regretted playing the trick and wanted to do something to make up for it. Soon an idea occurred to me. I should give Grandma a real gift on the approaching Thanksgiving Day. The day after we kids made the trick, I began to prepare the gift for her. I used my pocket money I had saved for a long time before to buy roses and snacks she loved, and then I carefully packed them into a beautiful box. When the day finally came, I happily marched into Grandma’s house, with the box in my hands.

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