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In the beautiful town Riverview, surrounded by rolling hills, lived two brothers, Jack and Tom.
They were as different as night and day—Jack, the older by two years, was a keen reader with a preference for quiet moments spent in academic books, his nose often buried in the pages of historical texts or scientific pared with him, Tom was totally different, full of energy and enthusiasm, always longing for the outdoors. He found joy that came from playing soccer and basketball. The differences between them often led to arguments, creating a gap that seemed impossible to bridge.
One summer, their parents, hoping to mend the growing divide between them, decided to send them on a camping trip in the nearby Blue Ridge Mountains. They thought that the fresh mountain air, coupled with outdoor activities, would bring them closer.
Unwillingly, the two brothers packed their bags, each secretly hoping that the other would give up at the last minute. But neither did, and soon enough, they found themselves setting up camp under a canopy (顶篷) of twinkling stars, the cool night breeze whispering through the trees.
The first few days were tense. They quarrelled over insignificant matters—who should carry the water bottle, who got to choose the music during meals, and whose turn it was to gather firewood. Their unpleasant quarrel echoed (回响) through the quiet forest, breaking the peace that enveloped them. Each disagreement seemed to widen the crack between them until one evening when things took a dramatic turn.
A sudden storm rolled in. The wind howled through the trees, and rain began to pour. In the disorder of securing the tent and gathering supplies to prevent them from getting wet, Tom slipped on a muddy path and hurt his ankle badly. Struggling with extreme pain, he knew that he had to turn to the campsite medical tent.
Paragraph 1: Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately.
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Paragraph 2: As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip.
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故事中文梗概
在风景如画的 Riverview 小镇，住着两兄弟 Jack 和 Tom。他们性格截然不同——哥哥 Jack 热爱阅读，喜欢安静地沉浸在书本中，而弟弟 Tom 精力充沛，热衷于户外运动。两人的差异导致频繁争吵，关系逐渐疏远。
一个夏天，父母希望他们能和解，便特意安排他们去 Blue Ridge Mountains 露营。然而，旅途伊始，他们因琐事争执不断，使得紧张关系加剧。直到一场突如其来的暴风雨袭来，Tom 在湿滑的小路上摔伤脚踝，痛苦难忍，急需前往营地医疗帐篷求助……
主要人物：Tom、Jack
次要人物：parents
叙事视角：第三人称视角
故事主题：成长与和解（growth & reconciliation） 、兄弟关系（sibling relationship）
续写思路建议
第一段，考生应该主要写两个主要人物之间的互动。具体的说，Jack在看到自己的弟弟Tom受伤后做出的举动（安慰的话语和动作、医疗协助等）以及Tom的反应。由于原文中明确提到了“dramatic turn”，在这段续写中一定要明确提到兄弟开始和解（或者已经和解）。
第二段，考生可以沿着“complete the camping trip”写下去。比如，可以设置兄弟二人合作收拾营地、Jack协助弟弟Tom安全返回家中。本着不遗漏次要人物的原则，到家之后，应该给到parents一定的戏份。最后，稍微升华主题，往兄弟关系或者矛盾与和解主题上靠一靠就很不错了。
伏笔以及在续写中的回应
兄弟俩性格差异大：杰克爱读书喜静，汤姆充满活力爱户外运动。这一伏笔在露营初期争吵不断中得到回应，因性格不同在小事上意见不合。在续写中，也正是这种差异促使他们在面对困难时发挥各自优势，汤姆受伤后，杰克凭借冷静和知识帮助他，体现性格互补。
父母希望修复关系送他们露营：这暗示露营会是他们关系转变的契机。在续写中，汤姆受伤后，两人共同面对困难，露营成为修复关系的关键，印证父母期望。
露营初期争吵不断：表明他们关系紧张，为后面的矛盾激化做铺垫。而汤姆受伤则是矛盾激化的转折点，之后两人关系开始缓和，从争吵到互相帮助。
露营地环境描写：如 “under a canopy of twinkling stars, the cool night breeze whispering through the trees”，营造宁静氛围，与后面暴风雨形成对比。暴风雨来临时恶劣的环境增加了故事的紧张感，也为汤姆受伤和两人关系转变提供背景。
兄弟俩都不情愿去露营：体现他们对彼此的抵触情绪。在续写中，这种情绪在面对困难时逐渐消散，共同克服困难让他们意识到彼此的重要性。
情感线
起初，兄弟俩因性格差异矛盾重重，互相抵触，情感冰冷。露营初期争吵不断，矛盾激化。汤姆受伤成为转折点，杰克心生怜悯，开始关心汤姆，两人情感开始升温。在后续相处中，他们相互协作完成露营，情感进一步加深，从关系紧张到相互理解、相互支持。
故事线
兄弟俩性格差异产生矛盾：杰克爱静爱读书，汤姆好动爱运动，日常矛盾不断。
父母安排露营：希望借此修复他们的关系，兄弟俩不情愿踏上旅程。
露营初期争吵：因小事频繁争吵，关系愈发紧张。
汤姆受伤：暴风雨中滑倒受伤，使故事进入高潮。
杰克照顾汤姆：杰克放下成见，帮助受伤的汤姆，关系开始缓和。
共同完成露营：汤姆伤好后，两人携手完成露营，关系彻底改善。
主旨升华句（英文）
Through the hardships of the camping trip, the brothers learned that differences could be a source of strength rather than conflict, and true brotherhood could overcome any obstacle.
The unexpected storm and Tom's injury turned out to be a blessing in disguise, as they forged a deeper bond between the two brothers, teaching them the value of unity in the face of adversity.
What seemed like an endless rift between Jack and Tom was finally healed by the power of empathy and cooperation during the camping adventure, showing that family bonds are unbreakable.
In the journey of life, just like in this camping trip, the difficulties we encounter can become the catalysts for growth and the strengthening of relationships, especially those with our loved ones.
The story of Jack and Tom in the Blue Ridge Mountains serves as a reminder that no matter how wide the gap between people may seem, understanding, compassion, and shared experiences can bridge it and bring hearts closer.
写作示范
示范一
Paragraph 1: Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately. Without hesitation, he rushed to Tom's side. Ignoring the pouring rain, he carefully examined Tom's ankle, trying to recall the first - aid knowledge he had read in books. He gently wrapped the injured area with a bandage from the first - aid kit and supported Tom to the medical tent. All the while, he comforted Tom, telling him that everything would be okay. His voice, usually sharp during their arguments, was now filled with warmth and concern.
Paragraph 2: As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip. They planned their daily activities jointly, taking turns to choose what to do. Jack even joined Tom in some simple outdoor games, and Tom listened attentively when Jack shared interesting stories from his books. They no longer argued over trivial matters but communicated with patience and understanding. When they finally packed up to leave the campsite, they looked back with a sense of accomplishment, knowing that this trip had not only been about camping but also about mending their relationship and growing closer as brothers.
示范二
Paragraph 1: Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately. He quickly realized that this was not the time for petty arguments. He shielded Tom from the rain with his own body, trying to keep him dry. With great effort, he carried Tom on his back, slipping and sliding on the muddy path, but never once thinking of giving up. The cold rain soaked through his clothes, but his determination to help his brother burned even brighter. When they finally reached the medical tent, he stayed by Tom's side, his eyes full of worry and care.
Paragraph 2: As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip. They explored the mountains together, sharing the beauty of nature that they had previously overlooked due to their conflicts. Jack pointed out different plants and their uses, while Tom showed Jack the best spots for bird - watching. They cooked meals together, laughing and chatting as they shared their experiences. The once - tense atmosphere was replaced by a warm and harmonious one. When they returned home, they were no longer the brothers who were always at odds but a united pair, ready to face life's challenges together.
参考答案
Noticing his brother in such a situation, Jack’s heart softened immediately. Without hesitation, he rushed to Tom’s side, wrapping an arm around him. “Lean on me,” he said with concern.（肢体动作和语言结合）Slowly, they made their way through the rain-soaked path to the medical tent. Jack shielded Tom from the storm, ignoring the mud. The staff examined Tom’s ankle and assured them it was only a sprain.（非必要不增加新人物戏份，把医护人员称之为medical staff即可）Relieved, Jack stayed by his side, fetching water and ensuring his comfort. For the first time in years, their arguments were replaced by quiet understanding.（明确提到转变为彻底和解铺路）That night, as the storm passed, Jack realized how much he had taken his brother for granted. (96 words)
As Tom healed, the brothers worked together to complete the camping trip. With Tom unable to walk properly, Jack took on most responsibilities—gathering firewood, preparing meals, and carrying Tom’s bag.（刻意和原文概念互动）In return, Tom cheered him on, laughing at his clumsy attempts Slowly, the gap between them shrank.（矛盾在笑声中进一步和解）On their final night, they reminisced around the campfire, their laughter echoing through the forest.（彻底转变）When they returned home, their parents noticed a change—not just in attitude but in their bond.（次要人物也别写漏，给到一点点戏份）The trip had done more than bring them closer. The dramatic turn had transformed them from rivals into true brothers.（自然提炼主题） (90 words)
词汇和表达推荐
lean on sb 倚靠在某人身上
rain-soaked path 被雨水浸湿的小路
shield v. 保护，遮挡
sprain n. 扭伤
taken sb for granted 视某人为理所当然
cheer sb on 为某人加油，鼓励某人
shrink v. 缩小，减少
reminisce v. 回忆，追忆
rival n. 竞争对手，敌手

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