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The side door of the small aircraft was opened wide, and the wind rushed through the cargo hold（货仓）. Packed tightly were fourteen silent people. Two of them were my adult children. Holding themselves perfectly still, they stared out at the endless sky.
When we reached a height of 4,300 feet, my son’s face turned pale as he carefully inched next to the opening, leaned（倾斜）sideways, and fell out of the airplane. Something went cold in my heart when I realized he was gone. But, only seconds later, instructions were being barked, and my daughter suddenly appeared in the same space just occupied by my son. She seemed a little nervous and then fell away into the wild blue sky after her brother.
For a quick moment, a desperate fear overcame me, and I wondered if that was the last time I would see them and whether they would land safely. But the thought soon passed as I felt a strong pull on my pack and was moved into position by our instructor.
With a big birthday approaching, two of my adult children had chosen to surprise me with an unforgettable way. I’d wanted to chicken out once we reached the airport, but when I heard a woman celebrating her fiftieth wedding anniversary decided to skydive, I thought that I had the courage to do it, too.
The wind blew louder as we went up further, each second feeling like an eternity（永生）. My heart pounded in my chest quickly. Below me, the world seemed so distant, a patchwork of green fields and shining water. As I watched my children disappear into the vastness, a part of me wanted to scream, to pull them back into the safety of the aircraft. But another part, a deeper part, understood the excitement they sought and the freedom they had although they were afraid before skydiving.
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The instructor’s voice showed it was my turn.
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My son and daughter rushed to me when I landed.
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文章大意
文章讲述了作者与成年子女一起参与跳伞的经历。飞机舱门打开，狂风灌进货仓，十四人安静地准备着。到达 4300 英尺高空时，儿子脸色苍白，小心地挪到舱口侧身跃出，随后女儿也紧张地跟着跳了下去。作者心生恐惧，担心子女安危，但很快这种想法被抛却。原来，在作者生日将至时，子女们用跳伞给作者惊喜，作者本想临阵脱逃，却因一位庆祝金婚的女士也选择跳伞而鼓起勇气。飞机不断上升，风声呼啸，作者看着子女消失在广阔天空，内心既想呼喊他们回来，又理解他们对刺激和自由的追求。
故事山分析
开端：作者和子女在飞机上准备跳伞，气氛紧张。
发展：儿子和女儿先后跳出飞机，作者心生恐惧与担忧。
高潮：轮到作者跳伞，这是故事的高潮，充满紧张与刺激。
结局（待续写）：作者完成跳伞，与子女团聚，分享感受，获得感悟，这将是故事的结局。
伏笔以及在续写中的回应
1.儿子脸色苍白，小心地挪到舱口侧身跃出：在续写中可体现儿子虽然害怕但勇敢完成跳伞，和作者团聚时分享紧张心情，回应其跳伞时的状态。
2.女儿似乎有点紧张，然后跟着跳下去：续写时可描述女儿着陆后的表现，如兴奋与紧张交织，与作者交流跳伞感受，回应她跳伞前的紧张情绪。
3.作者心生恐惧，担心子女安危：在续写中，作者着陆后看到子女平安，内心的恐惧转为喜悦与欣慰，体现对子女的关心。
4.作者本想临阵脱逃，因看到别人跳伞而鼓起勇气：续写中，作者成功跳伞后会为自己的勇敢感到自豪，回忆起最初的犹豫，更珍惜这次经历。
5.作者看着子女消失在广阔天空，理解他们对刺激和自由的追求：在续写中，作者和子女团聚后，会与他们交流对跳伞的感受，表达对这种追求刺激和自由体验的认同。
续写要点（两段）
第一段：着重描写作者跳伞时的心理变化，如从紧张害怕到勇敢面对，描述跳伞过程中的身体感受和看到的景象，如风声、快速掠过的景物等。
第二段：描写着陆后与子女团聚的场景，包括他们的动作、表情和对话，分享各自跳伞的感受，表达对这次经历的难忘和对子女的爱。
情感线
起初，作者在飞机上充满紧张和不安，看到子女先后跳伞，内心恐惧担忧，害怕失去他们。轮到自己跳伞时，紧张达到顶点，随着跳伞过程展开，勇敢逐渐战胜恐惧。着陆后看到子女平安，恐惧转为喜悦与欣慰，和子女团聚交流，感受到亲情的温暖，对这次经历充满感慨，为自己和子女的勇敢感到自豪。
故事线
作者和子女在飞机上准备跳伞。
儿子和女儿先后跳出飞机。
作者心生恐惧，担心子女安危。
轮到作者跳伞，经历紧张刺激的过程。
作者着陆后与子女团聚。
作者和子女分享跳伞感受，感慨这次经历。
主旨升华句
This skydiving experience not only tested our courage but also deepened the bond of our family, teaching us that shared adventures can bring us closer together.（这次跳伞经历不仅考验了我们的勇气，还加深了我们家庭的纽带，让我们明白共同的冒险能让我们更加亲密。）
In the face of fear, we found the strength to overcome it, and through this leap of faith, we discovered a new version of ourselves that was braver and more confident.（在恐惧面前，我们找到了克服它的力量，通过这次信念的飞跃，我们发现了一个更勇敢、更自信的全新自我。）
The moment we landed safely, we realized that the thrill of the adventure was not just about the physical experience but also about the emotional growth and the memories we created together.（我们安全着陆的那一刻，意识到这次冒险的刺激不仅在于身体的体验，还在于情感的成长以及我们共同创造的回忆。）
Skydiving with my children was a journey of self - discovery and a celebration of our family's spirit of adventure, reminding us that life is full of opportunities to step out of our comfort zones.（和子女一起跳伞是一次自我发现之旅，也是对我们家庭冒险精神的颂扬，提醒我们生活中充满了走出舒适区的机会。）
This unforgettable skydiving adventure taught us that the most precious things in life often come from the moments when we dare to take risks and embrace the unknown with our loved ones.（这次难忘的跳伞冒险让我们明白，生活中最珍贵的东西往往来自我们敢于冒险，与所爱之人一同拥抱未知的时刻。）
写作示范一
The instructor’s voice showed it was my turn. My hands trembled slightly as I inched towards the opening. The howling wind seemed to be trying to push me back. But I took a deep breath, closed my eyes, and let myself fall. For a split second, I felt weightless, as if I was floating in the air. Then, the wind rushed past my ears, making a loud noise. The ground below was getting closer and closer at an alarming speed. I opened my eyes and was amazed by the view - the vast landscape stretching out beneath me like a beautiful painting. As the parachute opened, I gently swayed in the air, filled with a sense of accomplishment.
My son and daughter rushed to me when I landed. Their faces were glowing with excitement. “Mom, that was amazing!” my daughter shouted, giving me a big hug. My son nodded in agreement, his eyes shining. “We were so proud of you, Mom,” he said. We shared our experiences, laughing and talking about the moments of fear and the thrill of free - falling. At that moment, I realized that this adventure had not only brought us closer but also made me understand the value of courage and family.
写作示范二
The instructor’s voice showed it was my turn. My heart was pounding so hard that I thought it would burst out of my chest. With every fiber of my being screaming to stay in the plane, I forced myself to move forward. As I stepped out of the aircraft, a rush of adrenaline hit me. I tumbled through the air, the world spinning around me. The cold wind stung my face, but I was too focused on the ground approaching rapidly. Suddenly, the parachute deployed, and I was jerked upwards. Suspended in the air, I looked around in wonder at the beautiful scenery. It was a view I would never forget.
My son and daughter rushed to me when I landed. They were both grinning from ear to ear. “You did it, Mom!” my son exclaimed, patting me on the back. My daughter took my hand and said, “That was the best thing ever! I'm so glad we did this together.” We sat on the grass, reliving the moments of the jump. We laughed at our silly fears and shared the feelings of exhilaration. This skydiving experience had not only been a physical challenge but also a memorable family moment that would stay with us forever.
One possible version:
The instructor’s voice showed it was my turn. He guided me to the edge, telling me to relax. I hesitated, my feet feeling like that they were rooted to the floor. But then I remembered my children’s faces and their courage. It was their courage that motivated me to skydive. Taking a deep breath, I inched forward, the wind pulling at my ears. And then, I fell into the blue sky. It was as if I had been freed from all constraints, my body weightless and my soul going up.
My son and daughter rushed to me when I landed. We had an enjoyable three-way hug and they gave me a thumbs-up sign for my courage. It was only one small step to leave the relative safety and comfort of the small plane to throw myself into the wind, but something transformative happened in the sky. I drifted in wonder, but I was surprisingly calm and satisfied, enjoying the freedom. Learning to let go of what appeared safe helped me understand how to overcome fears that held me back.

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