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Our group had stopped to remove our boots before a small stream crossing after a morning of exploring the seaside foothills of Canada’s Torngat Mountains National Park in Newfoundland and Labrador. I looked up and there it was, about 150 yards away, staring at us: a polar bear. Our guides had warned us about the dangers of polar bear country, but I thought I’d be lucky if I saw one in the wild.
I’ve seen plenty of black bears, but never anything this big. This guy was a bruiser. We gathered together and began shouting at the bear, but when that didn’t frighten it, our guide, Rich, shot a flare(照明弹). The bear escaped to a ledge, and we crossed the stream into camp. It stayed there as we cooked and ate our dinner. When bedtime rolled around, I glanced up. The bear hadn’t moved. I started cycling through all the worst- case scenarios that could hap- pen, but I tried to remember everything we’d prepared to keep us safe.
Our guides had put up an electric fence meant to frighten bears away from our tents. It ran off a couple of batteries like you would put in a flashlight. The outfitter said if we touched it, the shock would blow us out of our hiking boots. I crawled into my tent and tried to get some rest.
I lay awake, trembling with anxiety, but eventually, sleep got the best of me. A few hours later, I stepped out of my tent to go to the bathroom, and the bear was gone. I felt relieved.
The sounds of rain and snow made me back to sleep. Around 2:30 a. m., movement outside woke me. I had been sleeping on my back and looked up to see a shadow towering over my tent. I recognized the shape immediately; two big bear legs, Obviously, the electric fence didn’t work.
I screamed, and tried to take flight.
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Then, I heard a swoosh— Rich had about off a flare.
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文章大意
作者一行人在加拿大的托尔加特山国家公园海滨山麓探险，过河前看到一只北极熊。他们呼喊、发射照明弹将其驱离，之后在营地做饭、休息，营地设有电围栏防熊。作者入睡后，半夜起来上厕所发现熊不见了，可凌晨 2 点半，一只北极熊出现在作者帐篷外，电围栏失效。
故事山分析
开端：作者一行在探险途中遇到北极熊，采取措施驱赶。
发展：在营地做饭、休息，依靠电围栏防范北极熊，作者入睡。
高潮：半夜北极熊出现在作者帐篷外，电围栏失效，作者尖叫，此时故事发展到最紧张的时刻，后续如何应对是高潮部分。
结局：作者等人成功摆脱北极熊，对这次经历有深刻感悟，重新审视探险的意义与自身的勇气。
五处伏笔以及在续写中的回应
伏笔：导游警告过北极熊的危险，作者看到熊后感到幸运又紧张。回应：为后续熊的出现以及作者的恐惧反应做铺垫，当熊出现在帐篷外，作者的恐惧达到顶点。
伏笔：用电围栏防范北极熊，称其能将人电出靴子。回应：电围栏失效，北极熊靠近帐篷，形成强烈反差，增加故事紧张感，也推动情节发展，促使作者等人采取其他应对措施。
伏笔：作者看到熊后开始设想最坏的情况。回应：熊出现在帐篷外时，作者的设想似乎要成真，进一步渲染紧张氛围，同时凸显作者的恐惧心理。
伏笔：作者入睡后半夜起来上厕所看到熊消失。回应：熊的再次出现出乎作者意料，与之前消失形成对比，使故事更具戏剧性。
伏笔：作者入睡时带着焦虑，辗转反侧。回应：这种焦虑情绪延续到熊出现时，加剧作者的恐惧，使其反应更强烈。
续写要点（两段）
第一段：详细描述作者尖叫试图逃跑时的情景，如身体的反应（双腿发软、心跳加速），心理活动（极度恐惧，后悔参加探险），帐篷内的状况（被自己的动作弄乱），北极熊的反应（是否有进一步靠近的动作，发出的声音）。
第二段：描写照明弹发射后的场景，如照明弹的亮光、声音，北极熊的反应（被惊吓后逃窜的方向、动作），作者的感受（从极度恐惧到逐渐放松），以及之后大家的反应（是否都被惊醒，相互交流情况）。
情感线
起初作者看到北极熊紧张又兴奋，之后在营地休息时焦虑，半夜发现熊消失短暂放松，熊再次出现时极度恐惧，照明弹发射后逐渐放松，最后对这次经历心有余悸又有新的感悟。
故事线
作者一行探险途中遇到北极熊，采取措施驱赶。
在营地设电围栏，作者入睡。
作者半夜上厕所发现熊消失。
凌晨 2 点半北极熊出现在作者帐篷外，电围栏失效。
作者尖叫试图逃跑。
照明弹发射，驱赶北极熊，作者等人应对。
主旨升华句（5 句英文）
This encounter with the polar bear taught us that in the face of nature's might, our courage and the presence of mind can be our greatest defenses.
The experience in the wild reminds us that even the most carefully laid plans can go awry, and it's our ability to adapt and react that determines our safety.
Through this terrifying encounter, we learned that fear can be a powerful motivator, but it's how we overcome it that defines our true strength.
The polar bear incident shows that nature is both beautiful and dangerous, and our respect for it should never waver, even in the face of unexpected challenges.
This adventure in the polar bear's territory taught us that sometimes, the most unforgettable experiences are the ones that push us to the edge of our comfort zones and force us to grow.
写作示范一
I screamed, and tried to take flight. My heart was pounding so hard that I could hear it in my ears. My legs felt like jelly, and I stumbled over my sleeping bag in my haste to get away. The bear let out a low growl, and I could see its massive body shifting in the dim light. I was terrified, thinking that this could be the end. I cursed myself for ever coming on this trip. My tent was in chaos, with my belongings strewn everywhere as I desperately tried to find a way out.
Then, I heard a swoosh— Rich had let off a flare. The bright light filled the area, momentarily blinding me. The bear, startled by the sudden light and noise, reared up on its hind legs and let out a loud roar. It then turned and bounded away into the darkness. I let out a long, shaky breath, my body still trembling. The rest of the camp woke up, and we all gathered together, sharing our relief and recounting the terrifying moment. I realized that although the experience was terrifying, it had also taught me the importance of being prepared and the power of hope in the face of danger.
写作示范二
I screamed, and tried to take flight. Panic surged through my veins as I fumbled with the zipper of my tent. My hands were shaking so much that it seemed impossible to open it. The bear seemed to be getting closer, its heavy breathing audible. I was frozen in fear, my mind racing with thoughts of what might happen next. The tent walls felt like they were closing in on me, and I was desperate to escape. I could feel the adrenaline coursing through my body, but my fear was paralyzing me.
Then, I heard a swoosh— Rich had let off a flare. The flare shot up into the sky, painting the night with a brilliant red light. The bear was startled by the sudden brightness and noise. It backed away a few steps, its eyes wide with surprise. I watched as it turned and ran away, its large body disappearing into the shadows. I slumped to the ground, exhausted and relieved. The other members of the group rushed over to check on me. We talked about what had just happened, and I realized that this experience had changed me. It had made me more aware of the power of nature and the importance of being cautious in the wild.
【答案】One possible version:
I screamed, and tried to take flight. But there was no way out and the extreme terror made me rooted to the ground. The creature crashed down on top of me and started clawing at me through the fabric. I covered my head with my hands as its massive teeth reached for my face. Next thing I knew, my head was in its jaws. The bear started running, dragging my helpless body away from our campsite. I could feel the bones cracking where the bear was biting my neck. My fear gave way to desperation.
Then, I heard a swoosh Rich had shot off a flare. The bear dropped me and withdrew about 50 yards away. I tried to get up, but I was too broken to move. And the danger wasn’t gone: the bear was inching closer. Rich shot another flare, and this time, it was scared away. My trip-mates carried me back to camp and gave me simple treatment. I could hear someone trying to call for help on a satellite phone and a helicopter was on the way. Despite the pain, relief washed over me. I was alive and that’s what mattered most. What a thrilling experience!

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