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专题08 读后续写遇困脱险类话题（讲义）解析版
目录
【遇困脱险六年考情】 P1
【遇困脱险话题解读】 P2
【读后续写常犯问题】 P2
【读后续写写作步骤】 P3
【遇困脱险主题语境满分语料】 P4
【遇困脱险金句分类背诵】 P4
【遇困脱险优秀片段欣赏】 P6
一、生死瞬间：鳄鱼口下的逃脱与猎人的援手
二、少年勇救双亲：从绝境游泳求救到全家团圆
【遇困脱险话题高考真题调研】 P8
（2020浙江6月卷）营地危机：凶猛北极熊来袭，面包与直升机如何化险为夷
【遇困脱险话题名校好题调研】 P12
（24-25高三下·山东济南·开学考试）山野遇险：少年们以勇气与友情跨越艰难
（24-25高三上·重庆·阶段练习）冰窟惊魂与风雪归途：人犬携手共渡生死风雪关
【遇困脱险话题六年考情】
年份 卷别 主题 话题 类型
2025 浙江1月卷 人与社会/自我 勇寻真相并且学会共情的重要性 生活故事类
八省联考卷 人与社会/动物 铁汉柔情让我感动流浪犬守护者 个人成长类
2024 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 车站履行承诺还钱给出租车司机 个人成长类
浙江1月卷 人与自我 利用脑图来确定方位找到教学楼 校园生活类
九省联考卷 人与自然 志愿者训练意外发现海豚的秘密 人与动物类
2023 新课标I&II卷 人与自我 老师鼓励参加作文比赛终获大奖 校园生活类
浙江1月卷 人与自然 作者两次与蜂鸟的神奇邂逅感悟 人与动物类
2022 新课标I&II卷 人与自我 鼓励身残志坚男孩参加校越野赛 校园生活类
浙江6月卷 人与社会 为社区无家可归的人们发放食物 助人为乐类
浙江1月卷 人与社会 与“最不合拍”搭档终成为好朋友 校园生活类
2021 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 孩子母亲节给妈妈做早餐送惊喜 家庭亲情类
浙江6月卷 人与自我 作者上学时一次打工挣钱的经历 个人成长类
浙江1月卷 人与社会 少年头意外卡在南瓜中爆红网络 生活故事类
2020 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 三个孩子帮助贫困家庭孩子挣钱 个人成长类
浙江7月卷 人与自然 与北极熊面对面的一次脱险经历 遇困脱险类
浙江1月卷 人与自然 帮助宠物狗重获快乐收获新伙伴 人与动物类
【遇困脱险话题解读】
遇困脱险是读后续写中常见话题，涉及人与自然或者人与社会主题语境，会有火灾、洪水、溺水、迷路、交通事故、突发疾病等紧急情况。从最初遇险的惊慌害怕，绝望无助，到想办法救援，到最后获救的宽慰和感激，涉及到一系列的表达。情节线：遭遇危险（恶劣环境/危险描写&情感描写）—出现转机（想到办法&呼救求助）—救援脱险（救援描述&情感描写）—感悟升华（历险者/救援者）。情感线：焦急紧张/恐惧无助—筋疲力尽--欣喜/欣慰（relieved）—感动/感谢/感悟。
【读后续写常犯问题】
一、文本解读能力差，无法识别原作者的写作意图。
只看表象，不求深入。读不懂原作者的写作意图，挖不出故事背后的主旨大意，听不出人物对话的弦外之音，抓不住所给材料的内涵实质。这类考生常常缺乏高阶思维能力（HOT Skills），只看到了所给材料的浅层表面，就凭自己的主观臆断得出结论，写作时就事论事，绕来绕去都在一个思维层面上兜圈子。
对策：多预留时间充分阅读+重点研读材料后三段（有伏笔）。
二、因果链断裂，情节设计颠三倒四，前言不搭后语。
情节是按照因果逻辑组织起来的一系列事件。如果事件之间没有逻辑推理关系，阅卷教师就会质疑它的连贯性。情节是对人类生活的创造性模仿，如果其中的结果与理由互相印证，我们就会觉得它有意义；结果与理由相悖，就没有意义。
对策：学会根据两个段首句和文章线索快速提炼情节+研读三年高考真题揣摩情节把控。
三、内存不足，平时积累的存量知识太少，有话说不出。
要讲好一个故事，考生必须具备足量的好词好句和语法知识，背诵足量描绘典型人物和场面的美文段落。巧妇难为无米之炊，没有扎实的知识储备，再好的方法策略也是徒劳。
对策：加强“背”功（喜怒哀乐情感表达法）+提升高频句式模仿能力。
四、投机取巧，缺乏通盘规划，导致在主题知识存在盲区。
平时的训练存在投机取巧的押题心态，缺乏系统规划，知识框架有盲区。平时的作文训练“随机播放”，没有通盘安排，没有系统的教学计划；存在严重“押题”的投机取巧心态，缺乏稳扎稳打的认真态度，没有对所有的写作专题进行全覆盖，知识框架存在漏洞或盲区。
对策：重视考后“复盘”能力培养（情节+情感+词汇+结尾），学会rewrite（范文+讲评）。
五、不善挖掘隐含信息，缺乏“瞬间解码”的解题技巧。
在读后续写题的给定材料中，命题者往往直接阐明或若隐若现地给出文章的主旨大意，它是考生续写的方向、前提假设和已知条件。学生在审题时要读懂给定材料，快速解码其主旨大意，挖掘出隐藏信息，才能写出融合度高的故事来，否则就容易出现文不对题的偏题情况。
对策：考后和自己对话（分数扣在哪里）+和老师对话（提升点在哪里）。
六、训练方式不科学，迷信“偏方或怪招”，不肯下苦功夫。
有些学生闭门造车，对事半功倍的科学训练方法置之不理。有些学生蛮干苦干，对作文命题趋势没有精准的研判。有些学生不走大路，迷信“偏方或怪招”，对评分标准不熟悉。解题思路不科学，对考场应试作文的游戏规则不遵守。
对策：树立“久久为功”意识+重视词汇积累+提升句式模仿能力。
七、训练不足或时间分配不足导致卷面出现 “硬伤”。
这些硬伤具体表现有：写作烂尾因未写完导致分数很低；写作放在第一位，时间充足导致所给行数不够用出现“超限”，导致卷面严重受到影响；因为时间不足虽仓促完成但是书写质量严重下降导致“目不忍睹”；因为时间仓促审题不清造成跑题，偏题，导致分数很低。
对策：平时书写训练定时定量；后期使用标准答题卡写作卡时间、卡行数、卡审题。
【读后续写写作步骤】
第一步：提炼六个要素，把握材料要领。
读后续写的阅读文本基本上都是记叙文，所以要提炼出六个基本要素：who, where, when, what, why和how。考生在阅读文本过程中只有把握好这六个要素，才能总结出文章大意和故事情节，进而推断出作者的写作意图，轻松获取故事的主旨大意。
第二步：理清故事脉络，把握情感变化。
线索是叙事性作品中贯穿整个故事的脉络，所有的情节均围绕文本主要线索展开。记叙文一般有两条故事发展线索：情节(plots)线索和情感(emotions)线索。考生可以利用图表法或思维导图法理清故事的发展脉络，把握作者的情感变化。这样，考生在续写时才可以更好地遵循原文的思路、风格和语言。
第三步：紧扣段落首句，精心谋划情节。
分析续写后所给的两个段首句对提高所写内容和原文的融洽度至关重要。考生可以先分析一下所给的两个段首句之间的逻辑关系是顺承关系、转折关系还是因果关系等。然后，根据自己的判断设计小问题：根据段首句得知什么？续写开始写什么？接下来写什么？续写第一段的段尾如何衔接第二段的开头？续写第二段的段尾如何才能照应故事的主旨大意？
第四步：设计结尾情节，提升价值取向。
考生必须紧紧围绕故事的发展脉络，展开合理的想象，巧妙地设计所续写的两段的故事结尾情节。设计结尾情节时，考生可以借助前文的故事脉络设计一些具体的问题。还要注意设计好续写的第二段的结尾，让结尾处的情感得到升华或拔高，把故事所折射出的人生观、价值观充分体现出来。
第五步：逻辑关键词汇，高频句式提炼。
设计好要续写的两段的情节后，考生可以先在草稿纸上把原文出现的主要人物、发生的主要事件和描写人物或事件的情感词罗列出来，并按事件的发生顺序逐一理清。最后，考生用这些关键词汇重构句子，写出连贯一致的句群。
第六步：升格词汇句式，誊写完善成文。
考生在写好两段的内容后，可以根据语法知识把一些低级的词汇或句式进行润色升格。升格低级词句的目的是让续写的内容更加符合原文的语言风格，与原文在衔接上更加融洽。完成这一步后，考生要迅速把写好的两段英文以清晰、规范、美观、流畅的书写誊写在答题纸上。
【遇困脱险主题语境满分语料】
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一、雪山脱险类
1. Exhausted as we were, we didn’t stop. Gritting our teeth, we kept digging the trench.
尽管我们筋疲力尽，但是我们没有停下来，我们咬紧牙关继续挖沟槽。
2. Inch by inch, we dug the snow out. After what seemed a century, we made it.
我们一点一点的把雪挖出来，在经历了似乎一个世纪之后（夸张手法），我们终于成功了。
二、冰上救援类
1. The icy wind started howling, cutting my face like a sharp knife.
寒风开始咆哮，像锋利的小刀刺痛了我的脸。
2. He pushed the branch toward me. I grabbed immediately and was dragged out of the icy water by Harry. What a narrow escape!
他把树枝推向我。我立刻抓住它，最终被哈利从冰冷的水中拖了出来。真是死里逃生。
三、困洞营救类
1. No sooner had we arrived where the child was trapped than the man started to scan the surroundings. Then he inched toward the hole and stretched out to seize the child's hands, pulling him out without reserve.(动作链）
我们一到孩子被困的地方，那个男人就开始观察周国的环境，然后慢慢向洞口走去，仲手抓住孩子的手，把他完全拉了出来。
2. Slowly and cautiously, moving forward, we held our hands tightly in order not to be separated.
慢慢且小心翼翼地往前走，我们紧紧地握着手，不让彼此分开。
四、动物描写类
1. It exposed his sharp teeth, glaring at us as it ran forward.
他露出锋利的牙齿，向前跑时怒视着我们。
2. It seemed that his mouth was full of blood, his eyes red with anger and the mouth widely open.
他的嘴里似乎满是血，眼睛因愤怒而发红，嘴巴张大了。
五、自救他救类
1. I shouted for help at the top of my voice but in vain.
我声嘶力竭地喊叫求助，但都是徒劳。
2. I picked my courage and tried to frighten him away with the pepper spray.
我不得不采取行动，所以我鼓起勇气，试图用胡椒喷雾把他吓跑。
3. I took out a metal bar from the car at once and started a fight with the wolf.
我立刻从车里拿出一根金属棒，开始与狼搏斗。
4. Terrified by the noises of the helicopter and the shot, the bear was startled to leap into the bush and galloped toward the forest like a shot.
这只熊被直升机的噪音和枪声吓了一跳，跳进灌木丛，像枪声一样冲向森林。
六、情感描写类
1. Seeing this, she felt terror welling up in her heart and surging through her.
当她看到这个时，她感到恐惧涌上心头并且涌向全身。
2. When she saw the beast, so terrified was she that the throat tightened and the knees weakened.
当她看到这只野兽的时候，她是如此害怕以致于喉咙发紧，膝盖发软。
3. Extremely frightened, I found my body was trembling and my palms were sweating.
非常害怕，我发现我身体正在发抖，手心正在冒汗。
4. I breathed a sigh of relief, throwing my arms around him and hugged him tightly.
我如释重负的松了口气，伸出双臂紧紧地保住了他。
5. Smiling in relief, I felt a rush of gratitude welling up in my heart.
我如释重负的笑了笑，心里涌起一阵感恩。
6. With tears filling his eyes, Richard expressed his gratitude in a weak voice.
理查德眼里充满泪水，用微弱的声音表达了他的感激之情
【遇险脱困话题主题升华句】
1. What a narrow escape! It turned out that there is always a way out of any difficult situations as long as we stay calm.
1.真是九死一生啊！事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，任何困境都有出路。
2. Only then did I realize that actions can cure fear and bravery can conquer difficulties.
2.直到那时，我才意识到行动可以治愈恐惧，勇敢可以战胜困难。
3. Never should we give up our hope whatever setbacks we are faced with.
3.我们绝不该放弃希望无论遇到什么挫折。
4. This painful adventure teaches me not to despair even in the darkest hour, because after every night there is a day .
4.这次痛苦的冒险教会了我即使在最黑暗的时刻也不要绝望，因为黑夜之后就是黎明。
5. “Be patient ! The rescue team is on the way." these words brought a ray of hope to the seemingly hopeless situation.
5. “救援队已经在路上了。”这句话给看似绝望的处境带来了一线希望。
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【遇困脱险话题金句分类背默】
恶劣环境描写
1. The heavy rain was violently beating against the window.
1. 大雨疯狂地击打窗户。
2. Dark clouds covered the sky, and then it started to rain heavily.
2. 乌云笼罩着天空，随之而来的是倾盆大雨。
3. The comforting forest sounds quickly turned into a terrifying symphony of thunder and wind.
3. 大风从耳边呼啸而过，我们被推离海岸越来越远。
4. The big wind roared through our ears, and we were pushed away from the shore farther and farther.
4. 令人欣慰的森林之声很快就变成了雷鸣和狂风的恐怖交响乐。
5. With rain pouring down and the river swelling, they rowed against the current, their will as strong as steel.
5. 大雨倾盆，河水上涨，他们逆水行舟，意志坚不可摧。
被困心理描写
1. Fingers numbed by the chilly water, throat choked by icy wind, l felt on theverge of collapsing.
1. 手指被冰冷的海水弄得麻木，喉咙被寒风吹得哽咽，我感到快要崩溃了。
2. Frozen with fear, he stood rooted to the spot, various terrible thoughts flooding in.
2. 吓得僵住了，他站在那里一动不动，各种可怕的想法向他涌来。
3. Having suffered so much, Tom couldn’t contain his emotions and tears of gratitude trickled down his cheeks.
3. 受了这么多苦，汤姆再也不能抑制自己的情绪，感激的泪水滚下他的脸颊。
4. Nervous and anxious, Norwood struggled to calm herself down and carried out first aid to Simmons.
4. 诺伍德既紧张又焦虑，努力让自己镇定下来，对西蒙斯实施急救。
5. As time ticked by, fear crept upon my heart and l could hardly tell how long I could stand.
5. 随着时间的流逝，恐惧爬上了我的心，我几乎不知道我还能坚持多久。
救援行动描写
1.To my delight, we managed to dig out the trench and took these horses down the mountain with the help of others.
1. 令我欣喜的是，在大家的帮助下，我们成功挖好了沟槽，马儿被带到山下。
2. With desperate tears, she suddenly spotted a boat with a figure walking on it. She waved and cried for help with all her strength.
2. 带着绝望的泪水，她突然看到一条船，上面有一个人在走动。她挥挥手，用尽全身力气喊救命。
3. Eyes fixed on the beast, he pulled out the sausages in his backpack, aimed at the furry giant and threw it straight to the fierce animal, hoping the flavor would attract it.
3. 他盯着这个野兽，从包里掏出香肠，瞄准毛乎乎的巨熊直接扔向这个凶兽，希望香味能够吸引它的注意力。
4. The wolf jumped up, and rushed towards one of them, but was beaten back. Seeing that he couldn’t win, the wolf ran away down the hill.
4. 狼跳了起来，冲向其中一只，但被击退了。狼看到自己赢不了，就跑下山去了。
5. With tears of appreciation rolling down his cheeks，Peter said thankfully, “you have saved me today. I couldn’t thank you enough.”
5. 感激的泪水顺着脸颊流下，他感激地说：“今天你救了我，我对你感激不尽”
【遇困脱险故事情节构建】
阶段 情节发展 情绪刻画
第一阶段 困难处境描写— 困难处境+消极情绪 ---困难处境：冰雪覆盖、道路泥泞、气温降低…… --情感表现：焦虑、紧张、恐惧、绝望、难过……
第二阶段 救人过程呈现— 想到办法+如释重负 --救他型：发现困境—克服困难—提供帮助 --他救型：遇到困境—寻求帮助—给与施救
第三阶段 皆大欢喜结局— 感激+感动+升华 --问题解决：欣慰、开心、拥抱、感谢…… --主旨升华：难忘记忆、传递快乐、团结坚持……
【遇困脱险优秀片段欣赏】
一、生死瞬间：鳄鱼口下的逃脱与猎人的援手
【原文内容】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在池塘里玩耍时遇到了一只鳄鱼的袭击，作者的腿被鳄鱼咬伤，伙伴们用石头砸向鳄鱼，将鳄鱼的注意力从作者身上引开。作者挣扎到了岸上，流了一地的血。幸好附近的猎人赶来开枪赶走了鳄鱼。作者在医院里醒来时心有余悸。
【续写范文】
I fell onto the ground, lying in a pool of blood. Meanwhile, our screams were heard by two hunters who were not far away from us. They rushed over to where we were. On seeing what was happening and the crocodile, which was still floating in the water behind me, one of them fired a shot in the air to frighten the crocodile away. It had the desired effect. The crocodile stopped in his tracks moved back a few steps from the edge of the pond, and disappeared hurriedly into the water: Then, I passed out.
When I came to myself, I found myself in an unfamiliar environment. The smell of antiseptic told me that I was in the hospital. I later learned from my mother that I was rushed to the casualty ward immediately by the two hunters. I was treated for opening wounds on my right ankle and a long deep cut which required fifty six stitches. Mum reminded me of how fortunate I was to have had the two hunters nearby and have escaped from the jaws of the crocodile. What a narrow escape it really was!
【范文译文】我倒在地上，倒在血泊中。与此同时，离我们不远的两名猎人也听到了我们的尖叫声。他们冲到我们所在的地方。看到发生了什么事，鳄鱼还在我身后漂浮在水中，其中一个人朝空中开了一枪，把鳄鱼吓跑了。它达到了预期的效果。鳄鱼停住了脚步，从池塘边往后退了几步，匆匆消失在水里：然后，我昏倒了。
当我回过神来时，我发现自己身处一个陌生的环境。防腐剂的气味告诉我我在医院。后来我从妈妈那里得知，我被两个猎人立即赶到了伤员病房。我因右脚踝的开放性伤口和一个需要缝五十六针的长而深的伤口接受了治疗。妈妈提醒我，有两个猎人在附近，并从鳄鱼的嘴里逃了出来，我是多么幸运。这真是一次险情！
二、少年勇救双亲：从绝境游泳求救到全家团圆
【原文内容】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了7岁的Chase Poust、4岁的妹妹Abigail和父亲Steven在在佛罗里达的圣约翰河上划船，那里没有人迹，几乎没有人知道。附近也没有救援中心。Chase和Abigail在抛锚的船后面游泳，而史蒂文在甲板上钓鱼。突然一股强大的水流将Abigail冲走了。Steven指导Chase Poust游到岸边寻求帮助。
【续写范文】
An hour later, Chase swam to the shore, anyhow. Exhausted and tired, he managed to find a man who was willing to help him. The man took him to the nearest rescue center where Chase told the story clearly. The rescue workers took action and headed for the location without hesitation. At the same time, Chase was taken well care of, left in the rescue center.
Luckily, Steven and Abigail were found and rescued. Steven could hardly believe that they were still alive. When he saw them coming from afar, he was excited to burst into tears. Steven and Abigail were also taken to the center , where they hugged each other, crying. Steven said “I am grateful to the men and proud of my son .Young as Chase is ,he is a brave man.”This frightening experience left a deep impression on them, which made them realize that they should cherish the moment which they spent.
【范文译文】
一个小时后，无论如何，蔡斯游到了岸边。筋疲力尽，他设法找到一个愿意帮助他的人。该男子将他带到最近的救援中心，蔡斯清楚地讲述了这个故事。救援人员采取行动，毫不犹豫地前往现场。与此同时，蔡斯也得到了很好的照顾，被留在了救援中心。
幸运的是，史蒂文和阿比盖尔被发现并获救。史蒂文简直不敢相信他们还活着。当他看到他们从远处走来时，他激动得泪流满面。史蒂文和阿比盖尔也被带到了中心，他们互相拥抱，哭了起来。史蒂文说：“我很感激这些人，为我的儿子感到骄傲。蔡斯年轻，他是一个勇敢的人。”这次可怕的经历给他们留下了深刻的印象，让他们意识到他们应该珍惜他们度过的那一刻 .
【遇困脱险话题高考真题调研】
【2020浙江6月卷】--营地危机：凶猛北极熊来袭，面包与直升机如何化险为夷
熊返回营地--紧张害怕--面包攻击--直升机赶到--快速登上飞机--熊把篱笆推到--拍下熊“打劫”的画面
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”-the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears-like all wild animals should be photographed from a safe distance. When I'm face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes，that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard，and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though-he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter(相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and，through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar(吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
____________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp, then we realized the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he eat up all the bread and came back again.
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. “Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to the spot that the bear had finally tore down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene- we were robbed by a polar bear.
【分析】本文以事件为线索展开，讲述了作者和妻子前往被称为“北极熊之都”的加拿大丘吉尔镇拍摄北极熊。夫妻二人做饭之时，一头饥饿的雄性幼熊跟着面包的蒜香味，靠近了营地，猛烈撞击营地边上的铁丝围栏。作者和妻子使出浑身解数，想吓退这头熊，不料它“不破篱笆誓不归”。无奈之下，作者求助营地管理员，被告知救援直升机要30分钟后才能赶到，只得先尝试用胡椒喷雾喷洒北极熊的眼睛，不料这使熊变得更加暴躁，在千钧一发之际直升机及时赶到，他们得救了的故事。
【详解】1.段落续写：
由第一段首句内容“几分钟后，熊返回了我们的营地。”可知，第一段可描写作者夫妻二人如何再次对付熊及两人在此过程中的紧张害怕。
由第二段首句内容“就在那时，直升机赶到了。”可知，第二段可描写作者夫妻二人获救时的心情。
2.续写线索：熊返回营地——紧张害怕——用面包攻击——直升机赶到——快速登上飞机——熊把篱笆推到——拍下熊“打劫”的画面
3.词汇激活
行为类
①激怒：anger/provoke / enrage
②抓起：grab/snatch up
③拿出：take out/fetch out
情绪类
①疯狂的：mad/crazy
②兴奋的：excited/thrilled
【点睛】[高分句型1] then we realized the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly.（for引导的原因状语从句）
[高分句型2] My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. （现在分词作状语）
[高分句型3] Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. (once引导时间状语从句和形容词作状语)
【遇困脱险话题名校好题调研】
【调研1】（24-25高三下·山东济南·开学考试）--山野遇险：少年们以勇气与友情跨越艰难
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On a sunny weekend, Lily, an adventurous high-school senior, and her close friends, Jack and Emma, decided to go hiking in the nearby mountains. Equipped with backpacks filled with water, snacks, and a map, they were excited to explore the great outdoors.
As they walked along the well-marked track, chatting and laughing, the weather took an unexpected turn. Dark clouds rolled in quickly, swallowing the sun. The wind started to roar, and soon, rain poured down heavily. The path became slippery, and visibility dropped significantly.
Lily, trying to keep up everyone’s spirits, suggested they find a place to take shelter. They spotted a small cave on the side of the hill and made their way towards it. Inside the cave, the air was damp and cold. As they gathered closely together, waiting for the storm to pass, they realized they had left their emergency flashlight in Jack’s backpack, which he had accidentally dropped on the trail during their rush to the cave.
After what seemed like hours, the rain finally stopped, but the sky remained cloudy. When they stepped out of the cave, they were shocked to find that the track was no longer recognizable. Mudslides had occurred, and large stones blocked their way back. To make matters worse, Jack checked his phone and found that there was no signal.
With a sense of unease coming in, they knew they had to find a way out of the mountains before nightfall. They decided to follow a small stream they saw, hoping it would lead them to a more familiar path or a nearby village. As they walked along the stream, the path became increasingly difficult, with steep slopes (陡坡) and thick underbrush.
Suddenly, Emma let out a scream. She had stepped on a loose rock and twisted her ankle badly. Lily and Jack rushed to her side, their faces filled with worry. Now, not only did they have to find their way out, but they also had to help their injured friend.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Lily and Jack exchanged anxious looks, their minds racing for solutions.
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Just when they felt tired and hungry, Lily spotted a village in the distance.
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【满分范文】
Lily and Jack exchanged anxious looks, their minds racing for solutions. Jack quickly took off his backpack and looked through it, finding a bandage to wrap Emma’s ankle as best as he could. “We can’t leave her here,” Lily said firmly, her voice echoing with determination. They made a makeshift stretcher using branches and their jackets, carefully placing Emma on it. The going was slow and difficult as they navigated the rough path. Every step was a struggle, but their bond as friends kept them going. As the afternoon wore on, tiredness began to set in.
Just when they felt tired and hungry, Lily spotted a village in the distance. Heart pounding with hope, they made their way towards it. To their joy, they found a well-used path that led down the village. With renewed energy, they quickened their pace. Finally, they reached the small village at the foot of the mountain. The villagers, kind-hearted and helpful, provided them with food, shelter, and called for medical help for Emma. Safe and sound, Lily, Jack, and Emma learned the true meaning of friendship and courage in the face of adversity.
【导语】本文以人物的冒险经历为线索展开，讲述了在一个阳光明媚的周末，Lily和她的朋友Jack、Emma去附近山上远足。天气突变，大雨倾盆，他们躲进洞穴避雨，却发现应急手电筒遗落在路上。雨停后，山路被泥石流阻断，手机也没有信号。他们沿小溪前行，Emma不慎扭伤脚踝。Lily和Jack用临时担架抬着Emma艰难前进，最终发现村庄并获救。
【详解】1. 段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Lily和Jack交换了一下焦虑的眼神，脑子里都在争分夺秒地想办法。”可知，第一段可描写Lily和Jack没有抛下Emma不管，而是想出办法处理了Emma的伤处，并带着Emma一同艰难前行。
②由第二段首句内容“就在他们感到又累又饿的时候，Lily看到了远处的一个村庄。”可知，第二段可描写他们找到了通往村庄的小路，赶紧走过去，村民们帮助了他们，三人对友谊和勇气有了更深的领悟。
2. 续写线索：Lily和Jack想办法——Lily和Jack救助Emma——三人艰难前行——Lily发现村庄——三人前往村庄，得到帮助——领悟
3. 词汇激活
行为类
①查看：look through/go over
②找到：find/discover
③到达：reach/get to
④提供：provide/give/offer
情绪类
①决心：determination/resolve/resolution
②高兴：joy/delight/happiness
【点睛】[高分句型1] Heart pounding with hope, they made their way towards it. (运用了独立主格结构作状语)
[高分句型2] To their joy, they found a well-used path that led down the village. (运用了that引导限制性定语从句)
【调研2】（24-25高三上·重庆·阶段练习）---冰窟惊魂与风雪归途：人犬携手，共渡生死风雪关
阅读下面材料， 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In the frozen wilderness of Antarctica, Dr. Davis McClaren, a UCLA professor renowned for his work in astronomy, was on the verge of achieving his lifelong dream. He was determined to locate a rare meteorite (陨石) from Mercury (水星), believed to have landed somewhere in this vast, uninhabited landscape. Guiding him was Jerry Shepard, an experienced researcher from the National Science Foundation, accompanied by a team of sled dogs led by the fearless and intelligent Maya.
The journey was punishing from the start. Bitter winds tore at their exposed faces, while the biting cold filtered through their layers of clothing. Every step was harder than the last, but Dr. McClaren’s excitement drove him forward, his eyes constantly scanning the snow- covered horizon. Jerry, experienced in the dangers of the Antarctic, grew increasingly uneasy. He could see the signs of a storm gathering on the distant horizon. “We need to turn back.” Jerry urged, his voice barely audible over the strong wind. But McClaren, blinded by his ambition and so close to his goal, waved off the warning. Nothing would stop him now.
Just as the heavy snow began to fall, McClaren’s persistence paid off — he spotted the meteorite, half- buried beneath the ice. His heart raced as he shouted, “I found it!” He rushed toward it, unable to contain his excitement. But in his rush, he misjudged the fragile ground beneath him. A sharp crack echoed through the air, and before he could react, McClaren dropped into a hidden gap, crashing into freezing water below.
The fall was brutal. Soaked and disoriented, McClaren gasped for breath as the icy water enveloped him. His leg ached in pain, and panic surged through him as he realized he couldn’t move. Above him, Jerry acted swiftly, knowing the professor’s survival depended on immediate action. Their only hope lay in the paws of his trusted lead dog, Maya.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Securing a rope around her, Jerry commanded the lead dog to go.
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Finally, Dr. McClaren was free, but the raging snowstorm made the journey back to the base even more dangerous.
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【满分范文】
Securing a rope around her, Jerry commanded the lead dog to go. With Maya leading the way, Jerry quickly tied the other end of the rope around his waist and began lowering himself into the gap where McClaren had fallen. The dogs barked nervously, sensing the urgency of the situation. Jerry’s hands were numb with cold, but he griped the rope tightly. As he reached the bottom, he found McClaren clinging to a piece of ice, his face pale and eyes wide with fear. Jerry quickly wrapped the rope around McClaren and signaled the dogs to pull them up.
Finally, Dr. McClaren was free, but the raging snowstorm made the journey back to the base even more dangerous. Jerry helped McClaren to his feet, supporting him as they stumbled through the blinding snow. Maya and the rest of the sled dogs struggled to march forward, their breaths visible in the freezing air. Every step was a test of their endurance and resolve. With Maya leading the way and Jerry’s determined spirit guiding them, they pushed forward. Finally, they reached the safety of their base before the storm claimed them all.
【导语】本文是一篇记叙文，以人物和狗为线索。Davis McClaren和Jerry Shepard一起去南极寻找水星陨石，他们还带着一队由Maya领队的雪橇犬。McClaren不小心掉进了冰冷的水中，Jerry在雪橇犬的帮助下将他救了上来，他们最终成功返回基地。
【详解】1. 续写线索：
①由续写第一段首句“Jerry用绳子把她栓起来，命令领头的狗走。”可知，第一段可以描写Jerry在雪橇犬的帮助下将同伴救出来的过程。
②由续写第二段首句“最终，McClaren博士重获自由，但肆虐的暴风雪使返回基地的旅程变得更加危险。”可知，第二段可以描写二人在雪橇犬的忠诚护送下成功到达基地。
2. 段落续写：Jerry将绳子分别系在Maya和自己身上——Jerry下去成功找到McClaren——将McClaren救上来——在雪橇犬的带领下成功回到安全地带
3. 词汇激活
行为类：
①使下降：lower/drop
②抓住：grip/hold/grasp
③引导：guide/direct
情绪类：
①紧张地：nervously/tensely
②害怕：fear/scare
【点睛】【高分句型1】With Maya leading the way, Jerry quickly tied the other end of the rope around his waist and began lowering himself into the gap where McClaren had fallen.(使用了With复合结构、begin doing结构、where引导定语从句)
【高分句型2】As he reached the bottom, he found McClaren clinging to a piece of ice, his face pale and eyes wide with fear. (使用了As引导时间状语从句、“find+宾语+宾补”结构、独立主格结构)
21世纪教育网(www.21cnjy.com)专题08 读后续写遇困脱险类话题（讲义）解析版
目录
【遇困脱险六年考情】 P1
【遇困脱险话题解读】 P2
【读后续写常犯问题】 P2
【读后续写写作步骤】 P3
【遇困脱险主题语境满分语料】 P4
【遇困脱险金句分类背诵】 P4
【遇困脱险优秀片段欣赏】 P6
一、生死瞬间：鳄鱼口下的逃脱与猎人的援手
二、少年勇救双亲：从绝境游泳求救到全家团圆
【遇困脱险话题高考真题调研】 P8
（2020浙江6月卷）营地危机：凶猛北极熊来袭，面包与直升机如何化险为夷
【遇困脱险话题名校好题调研】 P12
（24-25高三下·山东济南·开学考试）山野遇险：少年们以勇气与友情跨越艰难
（24-25高三上·重庆·阶段练习）冰窟惊魂与风雪归途：人犬携手共渡生死风雪关
【遇困脱险话题六年考情】
年份 卷别 主题 话题 类型
2025 浙江1月卷 人与社会/自我 勇寻真相并且学会共情的重要性 生活故事类
八省联考卷 人与社会/动物 铁汉柔情让我感动流浪犬守护者 个人成长类
2024 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 车站履行承诺还钱给出租车司机 个人成长类
浙江1月卷 人与自我 利用脑图来确定方位找到教学楼 校园生活类
九省联考卷 人与自然 志愿者训练意外发现海豚的秘密 人与动物类
2023 新课标I&II卷 人与自我 老师鼓励参加作文比赛终获大奖 校园生活类
浙江1月卷 人与自然 作者两次与蜂鸟的神奇邂逅感悟 人与动物类
2022 新课标I&II卷 人与自我 鼓励身残志坚男孩参加校越野赛 校园生活类
浙江6月卷 人与社会 为社区无家可归的人们发放食物 助人为乐类
浙江1月卷 人与社会 与“最不合拍”搭档终成为好朋友 校园生活类
2021 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 孩子母亲节给妈妈做早餐送惊喜 家庭亲情类
浙江6月卷 人与自我 作者上学时一次打工挣钱的经历 个人成长类
浙江1月卷 人与社会 少年头意外卡在南瓜中爆红网络 生活故事类
2020 新课标I&II卷 人与社会 三个孩子帮助贫困家庭孩子挣钱 个人成长类
浙江7月卷 人与自然 与北极熊面对面的一次脱险经历 遇困脱险类
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【遇困脱险话题解读】
遇困脱险是读后续写中常见话题，涉及人与自然或者人与社会主题语境，会有火灾、洪水、溺水、迷路、交通事故、突发疾病等紧急情况。从最初遇险的惊慌害怕，绝望无助，到想办法救援，到最后获救的宽慰和感激，涉及到一系列的表达。情节线：遭遇危险（恶劣环境/危险描写&情感描写）—出现转机（想到办法&呼救求助）—救援脱险（救援描述&情感描写）—感悟升华（历险者/救援者）。情感线：焦急紧张/恐惧无助—筋疲力尽--欣喜/欣慰（relieved）—感动/感谢/感悟。
【读后续写常犯问题】
一、文本解读能力差，无法识别原作者的写作意图。
只看表象，不求深入。读不懂原作者的写作意图，挖不出故事背后的主旨大意，听不出人物对话的弦外之音，抓不住所给材料的内涵实质。这类考生常常缺乏高阶思维能力（HOT Skills），只看到了所给材料的浅层表面，就凭自己的主观臆断得出结论，写作时就事论事，绕来绕去都在一个思维层面上兜圈子。
对策：多预留时间充分阅读+重点研读材料后三段（有伏笔）。
二、因果链断裂，情节设计颠三倒四，前言不搭后语。
情节是按照因果逻辑组织起来的一系列事件。如果事件之间没有逻辑推理关系，阅卷教师就会质疑它的连贯性。情节是对人类生活的创造性模仿，如果其中的结果与理由互相印证，我们就会觉得它有意义；结果与理由相悖，就没有意义。
对策：学会根据两个段首句和文章线索快速提炼情节+研读三年高考真题揣摩情节把控。
三、内存不足，平时积累的存量知识太少，有话说不出。
要讲好一个故事，考生必须具备足量的好词好句和语法知识，背诵足量描绘典型人物和场面的美文段落。巧妇难为无米之炊，没有扎实的知识储备，再好的方法策略也是徒劳。
对策：加强“背”功（喜怒哀乐情感表达法）+提升高频句式模仿能力。
四、投机取巧，缺乏通盘规划，导致在主题知识存在盲区。
平时的训练存在投机取巧的押题心态，缺乏系统规划，知识框架有盲区。平时的作文训练“随机播放”，没有通盘安排，没有系统的教学计划；存在严重“押题”的投机取巧心态，缺乏稳扎稳打的认真态度，没有对所有的写作专题进行全覆盖，知识框架存在漏洞或盲区。
对策：重视考后“复盘”能力培养（情节+情感+词汇+结尾），学会rewrite（范文+讲评）。
五、不善挖掘隐含信息，缺乏“瞬间解码”的解题技巧。
在读后续写题的给定材料中，命题者往往直接阐明或若隐若现地给出文章的主旨大意，它是考生续写的方向、前提假设和已知条件。学生在审题时要读懂给定材料，快速解码其主旨大意，挖掘出隐藏信息，才能写出融合度高的故事来，否则就容易出现文不对题的偏题情况。
对策：考后和自己对话（分数扣在哪里）+和老师对话（提升点在哪里）。
六、训练方式不科学，迷信“偏方或怪招”，不肯下苦功夫。
有些学生闭门造车，对事半功倍的科学训练方法置之不理。有些学生蛮干苦干，对作文命题趋势没有精准的研判。有些学生不走大路，迷信“偏方或怪招”，对评分标准不熟悉。解题思路不科学，对考场应试作文的游戏规则不遵守。
对策：树立“久久为功”意识+重视词汇积累+提升句式模仿能力。
七、训练不足或时间分配不足导致卷面出现 “硬伤”。
这些硬伤具体表现有：写作烂尾因未写完导致分数很低；写作放在第一位，时间充足导致所给行数不够用出现“超限”，导致卷面严重受到影响；因为时间不足虽仓促完成但是书写质量严重下降导致“目不忍睹”；因为时间仓促审题不清造成跑题，偏题，导致分数很低。
对策：平时书写训练定时定量；后期使用标准答题卡写作卡时间、卡行数、卡审题。
【读后续写写作步骤】
第一步：提炼六个要素，把握材料要领。
读后续写的阅读文本基本上都是记叙文，所以要提炼出六个基本要素：who, where, when, what, why和how。考生在阅读文本过程中只有把握好这六个要素，才能总结出文章大意和故事情节，进而推断出作者的写作意图，轻松获取故事的主旨大意。
第二步：理清故事脉络，把握情感变化。
线索是叙事性作品中贯穿整个故事的脉络，所有的情节均围绕文本主要线索展开。记叙文一般有两条故事发展线索：情节(plots)线索和情感(emotions)线索。考生可以利用图表法或思维导图法理清故事的发展脉络，把握作者的情感变化。这样，考生在续写时才可以更好地遵循原文的思路、风格和语言。
第三步：紧扣段落首句，精心谋划情节。
分析续写后所给的两个段首句对提高所写内容和原文的融洽度至关重要。考生可以先分析一下所给的两个段首句之间的逻辑关系是顺承关系、转折关系还是因果关系等。然后，根据自己的判断设计小问题：根据段首句得知什么？续写开始写什么？接下来写什么？续写第一段的段尾如何衔接第二段的开头？续写第二段的段尾如何才能照应故事的主旨大意？
第四步：设计结尾情节，提升价值取向。
考生必须紧紧围绕故事的发展脉络，展开合理的想象，巧妙地设计所续写的两段的故事结尾情节。设计结尾情节时，考生可以借助前文的故事脉络设计一些具体的问题。还要注意设计好续写的第二段的结尾，让结尾处的情感得到升华或拔高，把故事所折射出的人生观、价值观充分体现出来。
第五步：逻辑关键词汇，高频句式提炼。
设计好要续写的两段的情节后，考生可以先在草稿纸上把原文出现的主要人物、发生的主要事件和描写人物或事件的情感词罗列出来，并按事件的发生顺序逐一理清。最后，考生用这些关键词汇重构句子，写出连贯一致的句群。
第六步：升格词汇句式，誊写完善成文。
考生在写好两段的内容后，可以根据语法知识把一些低级的词汇或句式进行润色升格。升格低级词句的目的是让续写的内容更加符合原文的语言风格，与原文在衔接上更加融洽。完成这一步后，考生要迅速把写好的两段英文以清晰、规范、美观、流畅的书写誊写在答题纸上。
【遇困脱险主题语境满分语料】
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一、雪山脱险类
1. Exhausted as we were, we didn’t stop. Gritting our teeth, we kept digging the trench.
尽管我们筋疲力尽，但是我们没有停下来，我们咬紧牙关继续挖沟槽。
2. Inch by inch, we dug the snow out. After what seemed a century, we made it.
我们一点一点的把雪挖出来，在经历了似乎一个世纪之后（夸张手法），我们终于成功了。
二、冰上救援类
1. The icy wind started howling, cutting my face like a sharp knife.
寒风开始咆哮，像锋利的小刀刺痛了我的脸。
2. He pushed the branch toward me. I grabbed immediately and was dragged out of the icy water by Harry. What a narrow escape!
他把树枝推向我。我立刻抓住它，最终被哈利从冰冷的水中拖了出来。真是死里逃生。
三、困洞营救类
1. No sooner had we arrived where the child was trapped than the man started to scan the surroundings. Then he inched toward the hole and stretched out to seize the child's hands, pulling him out without reserve.(动作链）
我们一到孩子被困的地方，那个男人就开始观察周国的环境，然后慢慢向洞口走去，仲手抓住孩子的手，把他完全拉了出来。
2. Slowly and cautiously, moving forward, we held our hands tightly in order not to be separated.
慢慢且小心翼翼地往前走，我们紧紧地握着手，不让彼此分开。
四、动物描写类
1. It exposed his sharp teeth, glaring at us as it ran forward.
他露出锋利的牙齿，向前跑时怒视着我们。
2. It seemed that his mouth was full of blood, his eyes red with anger and the mouth widely open.
他的嘴里似乎满是血，眼睛因愤怒而发红，嘴巴张大了。
五、自救他救类
1. I shouted for help at the top of my voice but in vain.
我声嘶力竭地喊叫求助，但都是徒劳。
2. I picked my courage and tried to frighten him away with the pepper spray.
我不得不采取行动，所以我鼓起勇气，试图用胡椒喷雾把他吓跑。
3. I took out a metal bar from the car at once and started a fight with the wolf.
我立刻从车里拿出一根金属棒，开始与狼搏斗。
4. Terrified by the noises of the helicopter and the shot, the bear was startled to leap into the bush and galloped toward the forest like a shot.
这只熊被直升机的噪音和枪声吓了一跳，跳进灌木丛，像枪声一样冲向森林。
六、情感描写类
1. Seeing this, she felt terror welling up in her heart and surging through her.
当她看到这个时，她感到恐惧涌上心头并且涌向全身。
2. When she saw the beast, so terrified was she that the throat tightened and the knees weakened.
当她看到这只野兽的时候，她是如此害怕以致于喉咙发紧，膝盖发软。
3. Extremely frightened, I found my body was trembling and my palms were sweating.
非常害怕，我发现我身体正在发抖，手心正在冒汗。
4. I breathed a sigh of relief, throwing my arms around him and hugged him tightly.
我如释重负的松了口气，伸出双臂紧紧地保住了他。
5. Smiling in relief, I felt a rush of gratitude welling up in my heart.
我如释重负的笑了笑，心里涌起一阵感恩。
6. With tears filling his eyes, Richard expressed his gratitude in a weak voice.
理查德眼里充满泪水，用微弱的声音表达了他的感激之情
【遇险脱困话题主题升华句】
1. What a narrow escape! It turned out that there is always a way out of any difficult situations as long as we stay calm.
1.真是九死一生啊！事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，任何困境都有出路。
2. Only then did I realize that actions can cure fear and bravery can conquer difficulties.
2.直到那时，我才意识到行动可以治愈恐惧，勇敢可以战胜困难。
3. Never should we give up our hope whatever setbacks we are faced with.
3.我们绝不该放弃希望无论遇到什么挫折。
4. This painful adventure teaches me not to despair even in the darkest hour, because after every night there is a day .
4.这次痛苦的冒险教会了我即使在最黑暗的时刻也不要绝望，因为黑夜之后就是黎明。
5. “Be patient ! The rescue team is on the way." these words brought a ray of hope to the seemingly hopeless situation.
5. “救援队已经在路上了。”这句话给看似绝望的处境带来了一线希望。
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【遇困脱险话题金句分类背默】
恶劣环境描写
1. The heavy rain was violently beating against the window.
1. 大雨疯狂地击打窗户。
2. Dark clouds covered the sky, and then it started to rain heavily.
2. 乌云笼罩着天空，随之而来的是倾盆大雨。
3. The comforting forest sounds quickly turned into a terrifying symphony of thunder and wind.
3. 大风从耳边呼啸而过，我们被推离海岸越来越远。
4. The big wind roared through our ears, and we were pushed away from the shore farther and farther.
4. 令人欣慰的森林之声很快就变成了雷鸣和狂风的恐怖交响乐。
5. With rain pouring down and the river swelling, they rowed against the current, their will as strong as steel.
5. 大雨倾盆，河水上涨，他们逆水行舟，意志坚不可摧。
被困心理描写
1. Fingers numbed by the chilly water, throat choked by icy wind, l felt on theverge of collapsing.
1. 手指被冰冷的海水弄得麻木，喉咙被寒风吹得哽咽，我感到快要崩溃了。
2. Frozen with fear, he stood rooted to the spot, various terrible thoughts flooding in.
2. 吓得僵住了，他站在那里一动不动，各种可怕的想法向他涌来。
3. Having suffered so much, Tom couldn’t contain his emotions and tears of gratitude trickled down his cheeks.
3. 受了这么多苦，汤姆再也不能抑制自己的情绪，感激的泪水滚下他的脸颊。
4. Nervous and anxious, Norwood struggled to calm herself down and carried out first aid to Simmons.
4. 诺伍德既紧张又焦虑，努力让自己镇定下来，对西蒙斯实施急救。
5. As time ticked by, fear crept upon my heart and l could hardly tell how long I could stand.
5. 随着时间的流逝，恐惧爬上了我的心，我几乎不知道我还能坚持多久。
救援行动描写
1.To my delight, we managed to dig out the trench and took these horses down the mountain with the help of others.
1. 令我欣喜的是，在大家的帮助下，我们成功挖好了沟槽，马儿被带到山下。
2. With desperate tears, she suddenly spotted a boat with a figure walking on it. She waved and cried for help with all her strength.
2. 带着绝望的泪水，她突然看到一条船，上面有一个人在走动。她挥挥手，用尽全身力气喊救命。
3. Eyes fixed on the beast, he pulled out the sausages in his backpack, aimed at the furry giant and threw it straight to the fierce animal, hoping the flavor would attract it.
3. 他盯着这个野兽，从包里掏出香肠，瞄准毛乎乎的巨熊直接扔向这个凶兽，希望香味能够吸引它的注意力。
4. The wolf jumped up, and rushed towards one of them, but was beaten back. Seeing that he couldn’t win, the wolf ran away down the hill.
4. 狼跳了起来，冲向其中一只，但被击退了。狼看到自己赢不了，就跑下山去了。
5. With tears of appreciation rolling down his cheeks，Peter said thankfully, “you have saved me today. I couldn’t thank you enough.”
5. 感激的泪水顺着脸颊流下，他感激地说：“今天你救了我，我对你感激不尽”
【遇困脱险故事情节构建】
阶段 情节发展 情绪刻画
第一阶段 困难处境描写— 困难处境+消极情绪 ---困难处境：冰雪覆盖、道路泥泞、气温降低…… --情感表现：焦虑、紧张、恐惧、绝望、难过……
第二阶段 救人过程呈现— 想到办法+如释重负 --救他型：发现困境—克服困难—提供帮助 --他救型：遇到困境—寻求帮助—给与施救
第三阶段 皆大欢喜结局— 感激+感动+升华 --问题解决：欣慰、开心、拥抱、感谢…… --主旨升华：难忘记忆、传递快乐、团结坚持……
【遇困脱险优秀片段欣赏】
一、生死瞬间：鳄鱼口下的逃脱与猎人的援手
【原文内容】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在池塘里玩耍时遇到了一只鳄鱼的袭击，作者的腿被鳄鱼咬伤，伙伴们用石头砸向鳄鱼，将鳄鱼的注意力从作者身上引开。作者挣扎到了岸上，流了一地的血。幸好附近的猎人赶来开枪赶走了鳄鱼。作者在医院里醒来时心有余悸。
【续写范文】
I fell onto the ground, lying in a pool of blood. Meanwhile, our screams were heard by two hunters who were not far away from us. They rushed over to where we were. On seeing what was happening and the crocodile, which was still floating in the water behind me, one of them fired a shot in the air to frighten the crocodile away. It had the desired effect. The crocodile stopped in his tracks moved back a few steps from the edge of the pond, and disappeared hurriedly into the water: Then, I passed out.
When I came to myself, I found myself in an unfamiliar environment. The smell of antiseptic told me that I was in the hospital. I later learned from my mother that I was rushed to the casualty ward immediately by the two hunters. I was treated for opening wounds on my right ankle and a long deep cut which required fifty six stitches. Mum reminded me of how fortunate I was to have had the two hunters nearby and have escaped from the jaws of the crocodile. What a narrow escape it really was!
【范文译文】我倒在地上，倒在血泊中。与此同时，离我们不远的两名猎人也听到了我们的尖叫声。他们冲到我们所在的地方。看到发生了什么事，鳄鱼还在我身后漂浮在水中，其中一个人朝空中开了一枪，把鳄鱼吓跑了。它达到了预期的效果。鳄鱼停住了脚步，从池塘边往后退了几步，匆匆消失在水里：然后，我昏倒了。
当我回过神来时，我发现自己身处一个陌生的环境。防腐剂的气味告诉我我在医院。后来我从妈妈那里得知，我被两个猎人立即赶到了伤员病房。我因右脚踝的开放性伤口和一个需要缝五十六针的长而深的伤口接受了治疗。妈妈提醒我，有两个猎人在附近，并从鳄鱼的嘴里逃了出来，我是多么幸运。这真是一次险情！
二、少年勇救双亲：从绝境游泳求救到全家团圆
【原文内容】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了7岁的Chase Poust、4岁的妹妹Abigail和父亲Steven在在佛罗里达的圣约翰河上划船，那里没有人迹，几乎没有人知道。附近也没有救援中心。Chase和Abigail在抛锚的船后面游泳，而史蒂文在甲板上钓鱼。突然一股强大的水流将Abigail冲走了。Steven指导Chase Poust游到岸边寻求帮助。
【续写范文】
An hour later, Chase swam to the shore, anyhow. Exhausted and tired, he managed to find a man who was willing to help him. The man took him to the nearest rescue center where Chase told the story clearly. The rescue workers took action and headed for the location without hesitation. At the same time, Chase was taken well care of, left in the rescue center.
Luckily, Steven and Abigail were found and rescued. Steven could hardly believe that they were still alive. When he saw them coming from afar, he was excited to burst into tears. Steven and Abigail were also taken to the center , where they hugged each other, crying. Steven said “I am grateful to the men and proud of my son .Young as Chase is ,he is a brave man.”This frightening experience left a deep impression on them, which made them realize that they should cherish the moment which they spent.
【范文译文】
一个小时后，无论如何，蔡斯游到了岸边。筋疲力尽，他设法找到一个愿意帮助他的人。该男子将他带到最近的救援中心，蔡斯清楚地讲述了这个故事。救援人员采取行动，毫不犹豫地前往现场。与此同时，蔡斯也得到了很好的照顾，被留在了救援中心。
幸运的是，史蒂文和阿比盖尔被发现并获救。史蒂文简直不敢相信他们还活着。当他看到他们从远处走来时，他激动得泪流满面。史蒂文和阿比盖尔也被带到了中心，他们互相拥抱，哭了起来。史蒂文说：“我很感激这些人，为我的儿子感到骄傲。蔡斯年轻，他是一个勇敢的人。”这次可怕的经历给他们留下了深刻的印象，让他们意识到他们应该珍惜他们度过的那一刻 .
【遇困脱险话题高考真题调研】
【2020浙江6月卷】--营地危机：凶猛北极熊来袭，面包与直升机如何化险为夷
熊返回营地--紧张害怕--面包攻击--直升机赶到--快速登上飞机--熊把篱笆推到--拍下熊“打劫”的画面
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”-the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears-like all wild animals should be photographed from a safe distance. When I'm face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes，that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard，and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though-he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter(相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and，through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar(吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
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2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
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Paragraph1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp, then we realized the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he eat up all the bread and came back again.
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. “Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to the spot that the bear had finally tore down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene- we were robbed by a polar bear.
【分析】本文以事件为线索展开，讲述了作者和妻子前往被称为“北极熊之都”的加拿大丘吉尔镇拍摄北极熊。夫妻二人做饭之时，一头饥饿的雄性幼熊跟着面包的蒜香味，靠近了营地，猛烈撞击营地边上的铁丝围栏。作者和妻子使出浑身解数，想吓退这头熊，不料它“不破篱笆誓不归”。无奈之下，作者求助营地管理员，被告知救援直升机要30分钟后才能赶到，只得先尝试用胡椒喷雾喷洒北极熊的眼睛，不料这使熊变得更加暴躁，在千钧一发之际直升机及时赶到，他们得救了的故事。
【详解】1.段落续写：
由第一段首句内容“几分钟后，熊返回了我们的营地。”可知，第一段可描写作者夫妻二人如何再次对付熊及两人在此过程中的紧张害怕。
由第二段首句内容“就在那时，直升机赶到了。”可知，第二段可描写作者夫妻二人获救时的心情。
2.续写线索：熊返回营地——紧张害怕——用面包攻击——直升机赶到——快速登上飞机——熊把篱笆推到——拍下熊“打劫”的画面
3.词汇激活
行为类
①激怒：anger/provoke / enrage
②抓起：grab/snatch up
③拿出：take out/fetch out
情绪类
①疯狂的：mad/crazy
②兴奋的：excited/thrilled
【点睛】[高分句型1] then we realized the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly.（for引导的原因状语从句）
[高分句型2] My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. （现在分词作状语）
[高分句型3] Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. (once引导时间状语从句和形容词作状语)
【遇困脱险话题名校好题调研】
【调研1】（24-25高三下·山东济南·开学考试）--山野遇险：少年们以勇气与友情跨越艰难
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On a sunny weekend, Lily, an adventurous high-school senior, and her close friends, Jack and Emma, decided to go hiking in the nearby mountains. Equipped with backpacks filled with water, snacks, and a map, they were excited to explore the great outdoors.
As they walked along the well-marked track, chatting and laughing, the weather took an unexpected turn. Dark clouds rolled in quickly, swallowing the sun. The wind started to roar, and soon, rain poured down heavily. The path became slippery, and visibility dropped significantly.
Lily, trying to keep up everyone’s spirits, suggested they find a place to take shelter. They spotted a small cave on the side of the hill and made their way towards it. Inside the cave, the air was damp and cold. As they gathered closely together, waiting for the storm to pass, they realized they had left their emergency flashlight in Jack’s backpack, which he had accidentally dropped on the trail during their rush to the cave.
After what seemed like hours, the rain finally stopped, but the sky remained cloudy. When they stepped out of the cave, they were shocked to find that the track was no longer recognizable. Mudslides had occurred, and large stones blocked their way back. To make matters worse, Jack checked his phone and found that there was no signal.
With a sense of unease coming in, they knew they had to find a way out of the mountains before nightfall. They decided to follow a small stream they saw, hoping it would lead them to a more familiar path or a nearby village. As they walked along the stream, the path became increasingly difficult, with steep slopes (陡坡) and thick underbrush.
Suddenly, Emma let out a scream. She had stepped on a loose rock and twisted her ankle badly. Lily and Jack rushed to her side, their faces filled with worry. Now, not only did they have to find their way out, but they also had to help their injured friend.
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1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Lily and Jack exchanged anxious looks, their minds racing for solutions.
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Just when they felt tired and hungry, Lily spotted a village in the distance.
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【满分范文】
Lily and Jack exchanged anxious looks, their minds racing for solutions. Jack quickly took off his backpack and looked through it, finding a bandage to wrap Emma’s ankle as best as he could. “We can’t leave her here,” Lily said firmly, her voice echoing with determination. They made a makeshift stretcher using branches and their jackets, carefully placing Emma on it. The going was slow and difficult as they navigated the rough path. Every step was a struggle, but their bond as friends kept them going. As the afternoon wore on, tiredness began to set in.
Just when they felt tired and hungry, Lily spotted a village in the distance. Heart pounding with hope, they made their way towards it. To their joy, they found a well-used path that led down the village. With renewed energy, they quickened their pace. Finally, they reached the small village at the foot of the mountain. The villagers, kind-hearted and helpful, provided them with food, shelter, and called for medical help for Emma. Safe and sound, Lily, Jack, and Emma learned the true meaning of friendship and courage in the face of adversity.
【导语】本文以人物的冒险经历为线索展开，讲述了在一个阳光明媚的周末，Lily和她的朋友Jack、Emma去附近山上远足。天气突变，大雨倾盆，他们躲进洞穴避雨，却发现应急手电筒遗落在路上。雨停后，山路被泥石流阻断，手机也没有信号。他们沿小溪前行，Emma不慎扭伤脚踝。Lily和Jack用临时担架抬着Emma艰难前进，最终发现村庄并获救。
【详解】1. 段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Lily和Jack交换了一下焦虑的眼神，脑子里都在争分夺秒地想办法。”可知，第一段可描写Lily和Jack没有抛下Emma不管，而是想出办法处理了Emma的伤处，并带着Emma一同艰难前行。
②由第二段首句内容“就在他们感到又累又饿的时候，Lily看到了远处的一个村庄。”可知，第二段可描写他们找到了通往村庄的小路，赶紧走过去，村民们帮助了他们，三人对友谊和勇气有了更深的领悟。
2. 续写线索：Lily和Jack想办法——Lily和Jack救助Emma——三人艰难前行——Lily发现村庄——三人前往村庄，得到帮助——领悟
3. 词汇激活
行为类
①查看：look through/go over
②找到：find/discover
③到达：reach/get to
④提供：provide/give/offer
情绪类
①决心：determination/resolve/resolution
②高兴：joy/delight/happiness
【点睛】[高分句型1] Heart pounding with hope, they made their way towards it. (运用了独立主格结构作状语)
[高分句型2] To their joy, they found a well-used path that led down the village. (运用了that引导限制性定语从句)
【调研2】（24-25高三上·重庆·阶段练习）---冰窟惊魂与风雪归途：人犬携手，共渡生死风雪关
阅读下面材料， 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In the frozen wilderness of Antarctica, Dr. Davis McClaren, a UCLA professor renowned for his work in astronomy, was on the verge of achieving his lifelong dream. He was determined to locate a rare meteorite (陨石) from Mercury (水星), believed to have landed somewhere in this vast, uninhabited landscape. Guiding him was Jerry Shepard, an experienced researcher from the National Science Foundation, accompanied by a team of sled dogs led by the fearless and intelligent Maya.
The journey was punishing from the start. Bitter winds tore at their exposed faces, while the biting cold filtered through their layers of clothing. Every step was harder than the last, but Dr. McClaren’s excitement drove him forward, his eyes constantly scanning the snow- covered horizon. Jerry, experienced in the dangers of the Antarctic, grew increasingly uneasy. He could see the signs of a storm gathering on the distant horizon. “We need to turn back.” Jerry urged, his voice barely audible over the strong wind. But McClaren, blinded by his ambition and so close to his goal, waved off the warning. Nothing would stop him now.
Just as the heavy snow began to fall, McClaren’s persistence paid off — he spotted the meteorite, half- buried beneath the ice. His heart raced as he shouted, “I found it!” He rushed toward it, unable to contain his excitement. But in his rush, he misjudged the fragile ground beneath him. A sharp crack echoed through the air, and before he could react, McClaren dropped into a hidden gap, crashing into freezing water below.
The fall was brutal. Soaked and disoriented, McClaren gasped for breath as the icy water enveloped him. His leg ached in pain, and panic surged through him as he realized he couldn’t move. Above him, Jerry acted swiftly, knowing the professor’s survival depended on immediate action. Their only hope lay in the paws of his trusted lead dog, Maya.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Securing a rope around her, Jerry commanded the lead dog to go.
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Finally, Dr. McClaren was free, but the raging snowstorm made the journey back to the base even more dangerous.
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【满分范文】
Securing a rope around her, Jerry commanded the lead dog to go. With Maya leading the way, Jerry quickly tied the other end of the rope around his waist and began lowering himself into the gap where McClaren had fallen. The dogs barked nervously, sensing the urgency of the situation. Jerry’s hands were numb with cold, but he griped the rope tightly. As he reached the bottom, he found McClaren clinging to a piece of ice, his face pale and eyes wide with fear. Jerry quickly wrapped the rope around McClaren and signaled the dogs to pull them up.
Finally, Dr. McClaren was free, but the raging snowstorm made the journey back to the base even more dangerous. Jerry helped McClaren to his feet, supporting him as they stumbled through the blinding snow. Maya and the rest of the sled dogs struggled to march forward, their breaths visible in the freezing air. Every step was a test of their endurance and resolve. With Maya leading the way and Jerry’s determined spirit guiding them, they pushed forward. Finally, they reached the safety of their base before the storm claimed them all.
【导语】本文是一篇记叙文，以人物和狗为线索。Davis McClaren和Jerry Shepard一起去南极寻找水星陨石，他们还带着一队由Maya领队的雪橇犬。McClaren不小心掉进了冰冷的水中，Jerry在雪橇犬的帮助下将他救了上来，他们最终成功返回基地。
【详解】1. 续写线索：
①由续写第一段首句“Jerry用绳子把她栓起来，命令领头的狗走。”可知，第一段可以描写Jerry在雪橇犬的帮助下将同伴救出来的过程。
②由续写第二段首句“最终，McClaren博士重获自由，但肆虐的暴风雪使返回基地的旅程变得更加危险。”可知，第二段可以描写二人在雪橇犬的忠诚护送下成功到达基地。
2. 段落续写：Jerry将绳子分别系在Maya和自己身上——Jerry下去成功找到McClaren——将McClaren救上来——在雪橇犬的带领下成功回到安全地带
3. 词汇激活
行为类：
①使下降：lower/drop
②抓住：grip/hold/grasp
③引导：guide/direct
情绪类：
①紧张地：nervously/tensely
②害怕：fear/scare
【点睛】【高分句型1】With Maya leading the way, Jerry quickly tied the other end of the rope around his waist and began lowering himself into the gap where McClaren had fallen.(使用了With复合结构、begin doing结构、where引导定语从句)
【高分句型2】As he reached the bottom, he found McClaren clinging to a piece of ice, his face pale and eyes wide with fear. (使用了As引导时间状语从句、“find+宾语+宾补”结构、独立主格结构)
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