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新高考英语
读后续写提分技能及其点题例析
人物情感描写高分技巧
目录
Can you write down the expressions of emotions for the mind-map
happy
sad
afraid
nervous
angry
surprised
thankful
moved
tired
satisfied
How do you feel
Mind-map：Emotions
▲情感形容词的后缀常有：
-ed(人，感到...的),
-ing(物，令人..的),
-ful/-less(人/物,...的)
1.happy: happy,delighted,cheerful,excited/exciting, thrilled, shout with joy
2.sad: sad, heart-broken,upset, disappointed, depressed/frustrated,
sorrowful, desperate, tears streaming
down one’s cheek(泪流满面)…
3.afraid: afraid, scared, frightened, fearful, palms are sweating(手心出汗)…
Mind-map：Emotions
4.nervous:
nervous, anxious,worried, stressed,stressful(令人有压力的)
5.angry:
angry,mad,bad-temered,lose one's temper(发火),
burn with anger(怒火中烧)
6.surprised:
surprised/surprising, amazed/amazing,astonished/shocked(震惊的)
7.thankful: thankful,grateful, thank sb for
8.moved: moved/moving, touched/touching
9.tired: tired, exhausted
10.satisfied: satisfied, pleased,content
11.relaxed: relaxed, take it easy, relieved
12.hopeful：hopeful,with hope in one's eyes,hopeless(无希望的)
13.determined: determined,firm, have a will/ have a strong mind(意志坚定)
14.quiet：quiet, silent,calm
15.brave:brave,fearless,couragoushopeful型：hopeful,with hope in one's eyes,hopeless(无希望的)
情感描写技巧
1.be/feel/become +adj. (系表结构)
2.Feeling+adj，主+谓+宾 (非谓语短语，作原因/伴随状语)
3.adj+adj, 主+谓+宾（形容词短语，作原因/伴随状语）
4.形容词+ly→副词（修饰动词/形容词/副词/介词短语/句子）5.with+n.（介词短语，作原因/伴随状语）
技巧1. be/feel/become +adj. (系表结构)
2. 听到那个坏消息，她很伤心。
He _________________ and sweet.
was very happy
1. 他又高兴又甜蜜。
Hearing the bad news, she ________________.
felt very sad
3. 天黑了，她非常担心她儿子的安全,情不自禁哭了。
she ______________________about her son's safety
when it was dark, and couldn't help crying.
felt very worried
技巧 2. Feeling+adj，主+谓+宾 (非谓语短语,作原因/伴随状语)
1. 他感到很激动，立刻拿出手机，迫不及待地告诉他的朋友这次经历。
she went on her way,_______________, and soon met an old man on the road.
feeling upset
2. 她不开心地继续赶路，不久就在路上遇到一位老人。
_________________, he took out his phone atonce, eager to tell his friends the experience.
Feeling excited
Wang Peng sat in his empty restaurant, _____________________.
feeling very frustrated/depressed
3. 王鹏坐在空荡荡的饭店里面，感到非常沮丧。
技巧 3. adj, 主+谓+宾（形容词短语，作原因/伴随状语）
3. 难过但不恐惧，他决定要改变这一切。
We finally arrived at our destination，______________．
tired and hungry
2. 我们终于到达了目的地，又累又饿.
Heartbroken but fearless
_________________, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew.
1. 吓坏了，埃利和我尝试了所有我们知道的防御熊的行动。
Frighted/Terrified
_______________________________,he decided to turn everything around.
技巧 4. 形容词+ly→副词（修饰动词/形容词/副词/介词短语/句子）
1.他高兴地笑了，露出了一排洁白整齐的牙齿。
______________, I had taught Anthony to sew when he was 13, when he still respected me.
Luckily/Fortunately
2.幸运地,在安东尼13岁时我已经教过他缝纫, 那时他还在崇拜我.
He _____________, revealing a row of white and even teeth.
smiled happily
技巧 5. with/in+n.（介词短语）
2. “但是我知道他刚才就在那儿。”露茜说，眼里带着泪水。
She looked at me ________________.
1.她惊奇地看着我。
" But I know he was, " said Lucy, ___________ in her eyes .
with tears
in amazement
如 in surprise/amazement,with joy/tears/ worry(忧虑)
典题分析
文本分析
part1
1. Have you ever heard anything interesting about the bank robber
2. What will you do if you meet a bank robber
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.
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“I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there something I can do to help ” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
02
03
“No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.”
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.
It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (抢劫)!
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05
06
Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
07
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.
She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that ” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!”
08
09
Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.
10
着急
介词 in +名词
in danger
in need
in trouble
in a big hurry
单词大师 Word Master
just as
单词大师 Word Master
正当，好像
单词大师 Word Master
正当我开始觉得自己永远都好不
了了的时候，我的病开始好转了。
Just as I started to think that
I was never going to get well,
the illness began to recede.
充满
be filled with
单词大师 Word Master
The boy’s eyes filled
with tears.
单词大师 Word Master
篇章大师 Passage Person
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.
记叙文
文体
一般过去时
时态
第三人称
人称
篇章大师 Passage Person
Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
语言描写 ： “What happened ”
篇章大师 Passage Person
环境描写：was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people
Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
篇章大师 Passage Person
隐含线索：cars stopped, joined the crow in front of the bank, a different answer
Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
篇章大师 Passage Person
事件：Arthur 的危机是被误会为 bank thief
Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
一个有趣的并且难忘的经历
人与社会
阅读小组长（Discussion Leader)
人物分析
情节发展
主题语境
主 旨
Reread the story and figure out the plot.
On his way to work, Arthur helped the young man who had got a problem.
Arthur agreed to help the young man carry the suitcase.
Arthur heard the alarm, looked around at the crowd of people and started to run.
frightened
续写部分
续写部分
本文情节线
setting
环境
rising action
发展
falling action
结局
climax
高潮
人物
时间
地点
Arthur 在去上班的路上帮助一个年轻人拿箱子
银行发生抢劫，警铃大响
Arthur 拿着箱子看着周围人群开始奔跑
kind
nervous
terrified
本文情节线
setting
环境
rising action
发展
falling action
结局
climax
高潮
人物
时间
地点
Arthur 在去上班的路上帮助一个年轻人拿箱子
银行发生抢劫，警铃大响
Arthur 拿着箱子看着周围人群开始奔跑
kind
nervous
terrified
resolution
解决
ending
尾声
续写部分
续写部分
篇章概括者 Summarizer
Arthur 在上班的路上遇到了一个需要帮助的年轻人。在他帮助这个年轻人拿箱子的时候，突然旁边的银行发出警报声，Arthur看着聚集的人群，拿着箱子就跑。然后？
On the way to work, Arthur met a young man who needed a hand. While Arthur was carrying the suitcase for the young man, suddenly, the long loud noise of an alarm broke out from the bank. Seeing the crowd gathering, Arthur was so frightened that he ran away without another thought. Then...
Arthur Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.
warm-hearted
Arthur “Is there something I can do to help ” Arthur asked. “No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.” positive
warm-hearted
the young man Near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving.
be in trouble
anxious
the young man The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
anxious
polite
the people Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
curious
the people The young woman in front of him, she looked at the suitcase and then at him. suspicious
My dad “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” careful
cautious
写作构架
part2
平行性
延续性
三种叙述模式
交叉性
浙江省高考真题 2020年1月
Paragraph 2：
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
Paragraph 1：
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
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stopped a taxi and went into
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realized that the young man might be the bank robber
03
continued running faster
Paragraph 1：
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
Plot Design
04
asked the taxi driver to go to the police station
Paragraph 1
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” However, Arthur continued running faster just as realizing the young man following behind was the real bank robber. Arthur stopped a taxi and went into it fleetly. He asked the taxi driver to go to the police station as fast as possible and told the driver what had happened.
平行叙述
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02
03
04
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
However, Arthur continued running faster just as realizing the young man following behind was the real bank robber.
Arthur stopped a taxi and went into it fleetly.
He asked the taxi driver to go to the police station as fast as possible and told the driver what had happened.
浙江省高考真题 2020年1月
Paragraph 2：
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
Paragraph 1：
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
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rushed out of the taxi and ran to the police office
02
the police got to know what had happened to him.
03
Arthur smiled at the young man and passed him his suitcase.
Paragraph 2：
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
Plot Design
Paragraph 2
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur rushed out of the taxi and ran to the police office straightly. There, the police got to know what had happened to him. Arthur returned to the spot, accompanied by the police. The police found the young man who was surrounded by the people. After hearing the young man’s states, everyone was relieved that the young men was not the bank robber and the loud noise of the alarm was incorrectly made by the bank’s system. Arthur smiled at the young man and passed him his suitcase.
延续性叙述
01
02
03
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
rushed out of the taxi and ran to the police office straightly.
There, the police got to know what had happened to him.
Arthur returned to the spot , accompanied by the police.
The police found the young man who was surrounded by the people.
延续性叙述
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02
03
04
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The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
rushed out of the taxi and ran to the police office straightly.
There, the police got to know what had happened to him.
Arthur returned to the spot , accompanied by the police.
The police found the young man who was surrounded by the people.
After hearing the young man’s states, everyone was relieved that the young men was not the bank robber and the loud noise of the alarm was incorrectly made by the bank’s system.
Arthur smiled at the young man and passed him his suitcase..
润色批改
part3
词汇润色
went into the taxi fleetly --- rolled onto it and
slammed the door shut.
In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi, rolled
onto it and slammed the door shut.
一般动词
细节动词
词汇润色
---and said: “Hurry up! Police station, please.”
---stammered, “Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!”
---utter 以口发出声音
一般动词
细节动词
词汇润色
he could hardly utter a complete sentence, but stammered, “Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!”
一般动词
细节动词
词汇润色
tell the story to the police officer — narrated the
whole story to the police officer narrated the whole
story to the police officer in great detail.
narrate 更好的表达了细节表达— Arthur 着急把所
有发生的事情讲出来
一般动词
细节动词
词汇润色
---found the young man
---recognized the young man
---the police, Arthur returned to the spot where the
incident happened and immediately recognized the
young man who he suspected was the bank robber.
一般动词
细节动词
词汇润色
着急(连贯的身体动作)
In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi,
rolled onto it and slammed the door shut.
情绪状态
身体表征
词汇润色
着急(动作表明着急紧张)
Running inside without pausing for breath, Arthur narrated the whole story to the police officer in great detail. ......
保持了正片续写文章的情绪和节奏。
情绪状态
身体表征
词汇润色
形式主语：It suddenly dawned on him that
强调：It was only after the taxi screeched forward, leaving the young man far behind, that Arthur caught his breath.
状语从句
单一状语
多样状语
词汇润色
独立主格：
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching, he
could hardly utter a complete sentence, but
stammered, …
定语从句：
... recognized the young man ... who he suspected
was the bank robber.
状语从句
单一状语
多样状语
Paragraph 1
As he was running, Arthur heard young man shouting behind. 【1】However, Arthur ignored it and continued running at full speed, holding the suitcase tightly. 【2】It suddenly dawned on him that the young man following behind might be the real bank robber. 【3】In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi, rolled onto it and slammed the door shut. 【4】Lips quivering and face muscles twitching, he could hardly utter a complete sentence, but stammered, “Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!” 【5】It was only after the taxi screeched forward, leaving the young man far behind, that Arthur caught his breath and told the driver what had happened just now.
细节动词
ignored/continued/hold tightly表明Arthur着急离开，而且有点紧张
身体表征
holding the suitcase tightly 描写出Arthur紧张的情绪。
多样状语
at full speed (介词短语.)/ tightly(adv.)
However, Arthur ignored it and continued running at full speed, holding the suitcase tightly.
Paragraph 1
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细节动词
rolled onto it / slammed the door shut 一系列的动作表明着急紧张
身体表征
roll onto it 描写Arthur很着急
多样状语
in a flurry of activities(介词短语)
It suddenly dawned on him that the young man following behind might be the real bank robber. In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi, rolled onto it and slammed the door shut.
02
Paragraph 1
细节动词
utter a sentence / stammered 写出了Arthur着急和紧张害怕的情绪
身体表征
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching 通过面部的描述，加强他的着急紧张情绪
多样状语
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching(独立主格)
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching, he could hardly utter a complete sentence, but stammered, “ Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!”
04
Paragraph 1
细节动词
screeched forward 动态动作和文章表达的紧张感一致
身体表征
caught his breath 对于上文的紧张和着急的进一步加强
多样状语
It was only after...(强调句)
It was only after the taxi screeched forward, leaving the young man far behind, that Arthur caught his breath and told the driver what had happened just now.
05
Paragraph 1
Paragraph 2
The taxi stopped in front of the police station and Arthur jumped out of the taxi. 【1】Running inside without pausing for breath, Arthur narrated the whole story to the police officer in great detail.【2】 Accompanied by the police, Arthur returned to the spot where the incident happened and immediately recognized the young man who he suspected was the bank robber. 【3】It is not until they hearing the young man’s explantion that everyone knew the young men was innocent and the alarm in the bank was actually falsely triggered. 【4】Smiling apologetically at the young man, Arthur passed him his suitcase.
细节动词
narrated 相比 say, tell 等更生动，并且和句尾的介词短语呼应，详细的描述了发生的事情
身体表征
Running inside without pausing for breath 描写出Arthur着急的情绪
多样状语
in great detail(介词短语)
Running inside without pausing for breath, Arthur narrated the whole story to the police officer in great detail.
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Paragraph 2
细节动词
recognized / suspected 表明到了现场 对于之前认为这个男人是窃贼的迟疑
身体表征
immediately recogized 副词增强了动词的意义
多样状语
accompanied by the police (分词短语)
Accompanied by the police, Arthur returned to the spot where the incident happened and immediately recognized the young man who he suspected was the bank robber.
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Paragraph 2
细节动词
smile / pass 最后误解解除，Arthur微笑着把手提包还给了年轻人。
身体表征
smiling apologetically 用副词表达表情动作
多样状语
It is not until ... that ... (强调句)
It is not until they hearing the young man’s explantion that everyone knew the young men was innocent and the alarm in the bank was actually falsely triggered.
Paragraph 2
03
However, Arthur ignored it and continued running at full speed, holding the suitcase tightly.
It suddenly dawned on him that the young man following behind might be the real bank robber.
01
02
简单句
状语：非谓语
复杂句
形式主语+从句
Paragraph 1
In a flurry of activities, Arthur stopped a taxi, rolled onto it and slammed the door shut.
Lips quivering and face muscles twitching, he could hardly utter a complete sentence, but stammered, “Please.... the police station, ... hurry up!”
03
04
简单句
状语：介词短语
简单句
状语：独立主格
Paragraph 1
It was only after the taxi screeched forward, leaving the young man far behind, that Arthur caught his breath and told the driver what had happened just now.
05
复杂句
状语：非谓语
Paragraph 1
强调句
Running inside without pausing for breath, Arthur narrated the whole story to the police officer in great detail.
01
简单句
状语：非谓语
Paragraph 2
Accompanied by the police, Arthur returned to the spot where the incident happened and immediately recognized the young man who he suspected was the bank robber.
02
复杂句
状语：非谓语
Paragraph 2
定语从句
It is not until they hearing the young man’s explantion that everyone knew the young men was innocent and the alarm in the bank was actually falsely triggered.
03
强调句+复合句
状语从句
Paragraph 2
内容互批表
得分点 是 否 改正次数
P1第一句“承上”
P1最后一句“启下”
P1主要分别描写第1/2主人公或第1/2主人公的互动
P2第一句“承上”
P2三句话以内解决矛盾
内容互批表
得分点 是 否 改正次数
P2结尾句升华主旨/以景衬情/回扣原文
P2主要分别描写第1/2主人公或第1/2主人公的互动
工具人之描写1次，解决矛盾后就退场
埋伏笔1-3处
直接引语2-3句
易错点互批表
问题 是 否 改正次数
每句话都有一个名词性从句（名词、代词、动名词、主语从句...）
非谓语的逻辑主语和主句的主语一致
时态一致（都是“过去的某种时态”）
每个单词的拼写都正确
动词的过去式都正确
易错点互批表
问题 是 否 改正次数
全文长句短句错落有致
正确使用标点符号（！/？/，/.）
逗号和句号区分明显
不乱点点
不连笔

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