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Dear teachers and classmates:
I hoped you are doing well! I am writing this letter to talked about weight management. It was a very important topic, and I think we should pay attention to it.
Some people were too fat, and some are too thin. I think weight management is good. If you are fat, you should eat less. If you are thin, you can eat more. Runing is good. Swiming is also good.
In conclusion, I hope my advice can help you. If you have any questions, please let me know. I look forward to your reply.
1.时态混用
2.体裁错误
6.书写潦草
5.拼写错误和缺乏过渡词
3.要点空洞
4.要点错误
Dear teachers and classmates,
It’s my great honor to talk about the importance of scientific weight management. Weight management is not just about looking good, but also about long-term health. Proper weight management lowers the risk of diseases and improves our quality of life.
Here are some suggestions. First, adopting a balanced diet is crucial, which means eating more vegetables and fruits while cutting down on junk food. Besides, regular exercise matters as well, such as jogging, cycling, or dancing each week. In addition, it’s vital to ensure adequate sleep, as it facilitates regulating our weight and boosts our daily energy.
Remember, managing weight is a long-term commitment, requiring our continuous effort and patience. Let’s start today and build healthier habits for a better future! Thank you！
总结-评分标准
体裁错误：写成书信而非演讲稿
时态混乱和拼写错误
要点错误：错误的健康观念
要点空泛：没有解释为什么好、具体好在哪里
缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯和书写较差
应用文评分标准
文本格式正确
较少语法结构或词汇方面的错误
覆盖所有内容要点,表达清楚、合理;
覆盖所有内容要点,表达清楚、合理;
内容连贯，书写工整
A
B
C
D
E
3 Tips
Tips
A
B
C
正确审题:抓题目体裁，定格式
充实内容: 横向——要点多维度
纵向——细节要具体
过渡词与书写：积累与练习
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Tip 1：审题
体裁
时态
人称
要点
文体
时间
对象
话题+事件
演讲稿
一般现在时
第一人称
1.演讲背景
2.体重管理的意义
3.你的建议
Tip 1：审题
书信
约稿信，邀请信，咨询信，求助信，申请信，道歉信，建议信，祝贺信，告知信，感谢信，推荐信，
非书信
通知，报道，发言稿 ，欢迎词，介绍，评论，投稿
I am writing to
Match the text type
Good morning, everyone! I feel greatly honored to stand here and extend a warm welcome to you on behalf of the whole students.
...
That’s it! Thanks for listening.
NOTICE
In order to enrich students’ life, an outstanding English short movie will be shown in the library from 3:00-4:00 in the afternoon on June 9th, organized by the student union. Here are relevant details about it....
Students’ Union
A Cross-Country Running Race
Last Sunday, our school held a 5km cross country running race, which attracted many enthusiastic participants, including students and teachers.
Dear Jack,
Delighted hearing that you are planning a club activity themed “Green Beijing”, I am writing to share my suggestions for the event with you.
建议信
书面通知
演讲
报道
Tip2:扩充内容：横向与纵向
Tip2: 横向——要点多维度
Tip2: 纵向——细节要具体
Tip2:扩充内容:横向——要点多维度
"横向——要点多维度"指的是针对同一个核心要点，从不同角度进行拓展论述，使内容更全面、立体。
身体健康
心理健康
生活质量
社会形象
意义
1.体重管理的意义
Healthy body
mental health
quality of life
social image
athletic ability…
Tip2:扩充内容:横向——要点多维度
饮食建议
运动建议
生活习惯
监测方面
建议
2.你的建议
Exercise
Diet
Living habits
Weekly measurements….
Tip2:扩充内容:横向——要点多维度
Managing our weight scientifically is very important. It helps us stay healthy and avoid diseases. It also improves our confidence and social image.
Here are some suggestions. We should have a balanced diet. We need to exercise regularly. Lastly, we should try to reduce stress.
多维度要点必须搭配具体细节才能有效支撑论点，否则就像只有骨架没有骨肉。
Tip2:扩充内容:纵向——细节要具体
身体健康
心理健康
生活质量
社会形象
意义
1.体重管理的意义
“纵向——细节要具体”就是要深入剖析一个要点，提供具体的例子、数据、步骤或结果，使内容更加有说服力和可操作性。
横向多维度是设计不同房间（厨房/卧室/客厅）
纵向具体化是把每个房间装修到位（厨房要有几个灶台/卧室床的尺寸）
Maintaining a healthy weight can reduce the risk of developing type 2 diabetes by up to 58%。
It also improves our confidence and social image. For instance, people who manage their weight well are more likely to participate in group activities and feel better about how they look in photos.
数据
举例
Healthy body
mental health
quality of life
social image
athletic ability…
Avoid disease
impression
Tip2:扩充内容:纵向——细节要具体
2.你的建议
饮食建议
运动建议
生活习惯
监测方面
建议
we should have a balanced diet. This means including more fruits and vegetables in our daily meals.
Regular exercise, such as 30 minutes of daily walking or jogging, is essential for maintaining our weight and overall health.
For lifestyle, ensuring 7-8 hours of sleep every night and managing stress are key.
For monitoring, checking your weight weekly and adjusting your habits as needed can help you stay on track.
Exercise
Diet
Living habits
Weekly measurements….
数据+举例
举例
举例
举例
fruit
walking
Enough sleep
Check weekly
Tip2:扩充内容:纵向——细节要具体
Managing our weight scientifically is very important. It helps us stay healthy and avoid diseases. Maintaining a healthy weight can reduce the risk of developing type 2 diabetes by up to 58%. It also improves our confidence and social image. For instance, people who manage their weight well are more likely to participate in group activities and feel better about how they look in photos.
Here are some suggestions. We should have a balanced diet. This means including more fruits and vegetables in our daily meals. Regular exercise, such as 30 minutes of daily walking or jogging, is essential for maintaining our weight and overall health.
缺乏过渡词从而使句子之间的逻辑不清晰，使内容不连贯。否则就像只有骨架和骨肉，没有血液。
Tip3:积累过渡词和练习书写
一. 表示递进关系的过渡词
additionally 加之；又
besides 此外；除……之外
equally important 同样重要的是
furthermore 此外；而且
in addition 另外
in other words 换句话说
last but not least 最后但同样重要的是
二. 表示转折关系的过渡词
although 虽然；尽管
at the same time 同时；
despite 不管；尽管；不论
even if 即使
even though 即使
however 然而；可是
in spite of 不管
instead 代替；而不
三. 表示选择关系的过渡词
either…or… ……或……
instead of… ……，而不是……
neither…nor… ……和……都不…
四. 表示比较关系的过渡词
compared with / to 与……比较
equally 相等地；平等地　　　
in contrast to 和……对比
in the same way 同样地
instead 代替；相反
on the contrary 正相反
五. 表示因果关系的过渡词
accordingly 因此；从而
as a result of 作为结果
because (of) 因为
consequently 从而；因此
due to 由于；应归于
hence 因此；从此
in that 由于；因为；既然
六. 用于表示总结的过渡词
above all 最重要的是
at last 最后
briefly 简单扼要地
consequently 因此
eventually 最后
in a word 总之
in brief 简言之
in conclusion 总之；最后
in short 简而言之
in summary 简要地说
in sum 总之；简而言之
obviously 显然
Tip2:扩充内容:纵向——细节要具体
Managing our weight scientifically is very important. It helps us stay healthy and avoid diseases. In particular, maintaining a healthy weight can reduce the risk of developing type 2 diabetes by up to 58%. Moreover, it improves our confidence and social image. For instance, people who manage their weight well are more likely to participate in group activities and feel better about how they look in photos.
Here are some suggestions. First, we should have a balanced diet. This means including more fruits and vegetables in our daily meals. Additionally, Regular exercise, such as 30 minutes of daily walking or jogging, is essential for maintaining our weight and overall health.
正确审题
Tip1:定体裁，时态，人称，要点
充实内容
Tip2: 横向——要点多维度
纵向——细节要具体
Tip3:过渡词与书写
过渡/书写
SUMMARY
正确审题
2. 人称： 3.时态 4.要点：
。
充实内容
3. 横向：要点多维度 4. 纵向：细节要具体
problem+consequence
①
②
...
suggestion+reason
①
②
...
（2023全国I）假定你是李华，外教Ryan准备将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，你认为这样分组存在问题。请你给外教写一封邮件，内容包括:
1. 说明问题；2. 提出建议。
1. The text type is
GROUP WORK
第一人称
一般现在时
difference in preferred topics
It may ignore that students may be interested in different topics.
It may result in students with vastly different speaking abilities being paired together.
learning gap
说明问题
difference in learning style
Some students may prefer a quieter environment while some may prefer a more interactive style.
decrease in confidence
It may let the less competent ones feel overwhelmed and less confident.
The problems could be:
02
01
03
04
The suggestions are:
interest-based pairing
This could lead to dynamic and engaging conversations that help both parties improve.
peer mentorship同伴指导
The mentor student can enhance their knowledge and the other side can receive support and guidance.
ability-based pairing
They can challenge and motivate each other without feeling unconfident.
Weekly changing-partner system
This would allow everyone to learn from a variety of peers and adapt to different conversational styles.

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