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读后续写
What’s the genre of the passage
narrative
what the clue of the passage
the rocking horse
2. Where
3. When
1. Who
4. What happened
a small shop in the busy streets of Los Angeles
Not mentioned
“I” happened to encounter the rocking horse, recalling the past related to the rocking horse, and decided to buy the rocking horse in the store.
I, my two kids, my grandfather,my grandmother, my mom, the shopkeeper
2. Read for important information.
(1) I noticed a white wooden rocking horse near the door. It looked just like the one my grandfather had bought for me when 1 was young.
(2)Then, I led them back to where the white rocking horse was.
(3)Looking at the rocking horse brought back a flood of memories.
(4)One day, he brought home a beautiful white rocking horse and called it my "dream horse."
(5) "Remember when you accidentally scratched its neck " my mom once told me. "Your grandfather just laughed and said it gave the horse character." (6)
(6) But when I was in high school, my grandfather passed away. Soon after, we moved. With so much to pack and not enough space, we had to sell some big things, like my favorite rocking horse. Letting it go felt like losing a part of my childhood.
Paragraph 1
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop.
Paragraph 2
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse.
一、文本核心内容
1. 主题脉络：通过"摇马"这一意象串联起三代人的情感纽带（祖父→自己→子女），体现记忆传承与亲情延续。
2. 情感脉络：怀旧（发现摇马）→回忆（与祖父的温情时光）→失落（祖父离世/卖掉摇马）→怅惘（现实触发的回忆）→转折（续写部分的情感复苏）
Paragraph 1: Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop.
衔接：
过渡：
衔接：
Found the scratch in the horse’s neck.
The reaction of the author.
Recall the happy moments with grandfather.
The communication with the shopkeeper and ask for the price.
Paragraph 2: With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse.
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过渡：
主题：
The feelings of purchasing the white wooden rocking horse.
The children’s reactions after buying the wooden horse.
The continuation of family affection.
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop. I reached out and gently touched the rocking horse with a scratch in its neck. A sense of warmth spread through me, as if my grandfather was right there, smiling at me. The smooth wood under my fingers made me remember my grandfather’s kind face. I didn’t want to lose it again. So, I turned to the shopkeeper, Mr. Johnson, and asked, “How much is this rocking horse ” Mr. Johnson looked at me and smiled. His eyes were kind as he said, “It’s been here for a while. I can give you a good price, just for you.”
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse. After so many years, the white horse, which accompanied me through my childhood, finally found its way home just like a long lost friend. Holding it in my arms, I headed for home with my kids. As we reached home, my heart was full of excitement. I couldn’t wait to share with my kids the wonderful times my grandfather and I had with this very horse. I was certain this old toy would not only preserve my memories but also create new, precious ones for my children, becoming an unforgettable part of their childhood.
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop. I reached out and gently touched the rocking horse with a scratch in its neck. A sense of warmth spread through me, as if my grandfather was right there, smiling at me. The smooth wood under my fingers made me remember my grandfather’s kind face. I didn’t want to lose it again. So, I turned to the shopkeeper, Mr. Johnson, and asked, “How much is this rocking horse ” Mr. Johnson looked at me and smiled. His eyes were kind as he said, “It’s been here for a while. I can give you a good price, just for you.”
三、写 作——读后续写——试题解读（范文一）
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse. After so many years, the white horse, which accompanied me through my childhood, finally found its way home just like a long lost friend. Holding it in my arms, I headed for home with my kids. As we reached home, my heart was full of excitement. I couldn’t wait to share with my kids the wonderful times my grandfather and I had with this very horse. I was certain this old toy would not only preserve my memories but also create new, precious ones for my children, becoming an unforgettable part of their childhood.
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop. I reached out and gently touched the rocking horse with a scratch in its neck. A sense of warmth spread through me, as if my grandfather was right there, smiling at me. The smooth wood under my fingers made me remember my grandfather’s kind face. I didn’t want to lose it again. So, I turned to the shopkeeper, Mr. Johnson, and asked, “How much is this rocking horse ” Mr. Johnson looked at me and smiled. His eyes were kind as he said, “It’s been here for a while. I can give you a good price, just for you.”
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse. After so many years, the white horse, which accompanied me through my childhood, finally found its way home just like a long lost friend. Holding it in my arms, I headed for home with my kids. As we reached home, my heart was full of excitement. I couldn’t wait to share with my kids the wonderful times my grandfather and I had with this very horse. I was certain this old toy would not only preserve my memories but also create new, precious ones for my children, becoming an unforgettable part of their childhood.
Suddenly, I was back in the present, standing in that small shop. Feeling as if I was reclaiming a piece of my childhood, I reached out and gently touched the rocking horse with a scratch in its neck. This familiar object connected me to moments of happiness and warmth with my grandfather, and I wanted my children to experience even a fraction of that love through it. Watching my children marvel (惊奇) at the simple yet sturdy (坚固的) toy, I couldn’t help but feel a sense of joy in sharing this part of my past with them, hoping it would create new memories for our family.
三、写 作——读后续写——试题解读（范文二）
With tears in my eyes, I bought the rocking horse. I asked the shop owner if there was any history behind it, half-hoping to find out that it actually was my original toy. Though there was no such luck, the shopkeeper’s warmth and understanding were comforting. As we left the shop, I glanced back at the colorful, inviting entrance, feeling a sense of closure. The rocking horse, now secure in our hands, wasn’t just a connection to my past but a bridge to the future my kids and I would build together, full of cherished moments and love..
三、写 作——读后续写——评分细则
【内容（情节+情感）+ 语言 + 连贯】
1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
2. 评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3. 词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
4. 评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑:
(1) 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;
(2) 内容的丰富性;
(3) 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;
(4) 上下文的连贯性。
5. 如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
6. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。
特例：
1. 只写一段，最高13分
2. 字数不够，降一档
3. 字数严重不足，最高三档中线（13分）
三、写 作——读后续写——内容界定
第一段续写（关于在商店的反应和行动）
1. 能细腻地描述看到rocking-horse后的情感反应，如回忆起与祖父的美好时光；
2. 合理描述与店主的交流，包括询问价格等情节；
3. 对rocking-horse的细节描写，如触摸rocking-horse的感受 ……
第二段续写（购买摇马及后续情感）
1. 清晰描述购买rocking-horse的过程及心情；
2. 表达对rocking-horse能给孩子带来新回忆的期待；
3. 强调rocking-horse对自己和家庭的特殊意义 ……
注意：不作为扣分点：1. 没有显性主题升华
2. 表达逻辑合理，但不包含在上面列举之内
3. 续写出现前文个别句子，但使用合理（如加again…）

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