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读后续写大讲堂（4）
Arthur English Research Centre
20250928
Ⅰ基本讲析
1.善于反思，自我提高
序号 自我评价内容 A级 B级 C级 D级 E级
1 书写漂亮吗？
2 单词准确并拼写正确吗？
3 句子首字都大写了吗？
4 专有名词首字母都大写吗？
5 句末标点符号正确吗？
6 句子都有主语和谓语吗？
7 句型句式正确并富于变化吗？
8 谓语和主语在人称和数上一致吗？
9 句子都使用了正确的时态吗？
10 人物关系清晰，人称代词使用正确吗？
11 两个续写段落长度大致差不多吗？
12 字数大概在150到170之间吗？
2.续写扣分理由
一、书写潦草，卷面涂改；
二、上下文的连贯性差；
三、错词错句多，好词好句少；
四、没有丰富和生动的细节推动情节的发展；
五、与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度差
六、无逻辑性，故事主题跑偏。
3.获得高分的写作技巧
Tip 1: 故事要围绕着主要人物展开。
Tip 2: 详细刻画角色及其情感。
Tip 3: 使用恰当的衔接词以使故事更有连贯性。
Tip 4: 使用恰当的修饰词以使描写更加生动。
Tip 5: 做到首尾呼应以使故事更加有条理。
Tip 6: 确保第二段和第一段的衔接有逻辑。
Ⅱ技能培养与训练
解题技能3解决冲突，圆满逻辑
　　矛盾冲突是好故事的基础,是情节发展的原动力, 因此是构思情节时的主要切入点。在读后续写原文中,原作者往往会设置一个冲突、问题或悬念,在续写之前学生首先要确认冲突、问题或悬念是什么,为续写的情节设计打下基础,结尾的构建则要基于problem-solution原则,让问题最终得到圆满解决,从而完成续写任务。除了要解决文本中的大冲突,在续写段落的构思中,适当营造小冲突、解决冲突,也可以使文章细节更加丰满生动,增加可读性。
【作文示例】
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Reuben sat on the bench during the gym class, daydreaming. As his classmates hustled up and down the basketball court, he was imagining a different game—one in which a group of colourful bricks turned around quickly and sidestepped and dunked (扣篮). At the centre of this spinning circle he could see a giant basketball…made out of Lego bricks(乐高积木).
A few weeks earlier, he had built exactly that kind of huge Lego basketball. It was for a citywide art contest that everyone was excited about: the prize was a $100 check for the student artist and a visit to the winner’s school by the world-famous basketball team—the Lakers. Since he had submitted his entry, Reuben kept dreaming about his creation, imagining it would show his classmates how good he was at something!
Reuben was caught up in his basketball ballet, imagining the bricks move closer and closer. Suddenly, a sharp whistle abruptly interrupted his thoughts, followed by an urgent shout from the teacher: “Reuben!”
Surprised, he jumped to his feet.
“Where is your attention, young man I had to call you three times. Now go take Lamar’s place.” “Who, Reuben He’s too busy building Lego things in his head,” Lamar yelled as their classmates laughed.
Of course Lamar was right. Worse still, Reuben was the tallest boy in his class, and his combination of his height, long arms, and wiry fingers screamed “basketball player”. Therefore, Reuben was expected not just to be good at basketball, but he was expected to be great!
But he was neither. Chasing and shooting balls was not his thing. He was clumsy (笨拙的) on the court. He loved to build and design and draw things. Once, he even recreated a mouse trap, making it humane (人性化的).
“Why worry about mice ” Mum complained. “They eat our rice!”
“But mice sing to communicate and feel empathy for other mice, mum. And some carry seeds to other parts of the environment, which helps things grow!”
“Huh,” his mum said, then frowned and replied, “even so, mice are no use to no one.” “Mice matter too, mum!” Reuben replied.
注意:续写词数应为150个左右。
Paragraph 1:
Back on the court today, Reuben felt like an oversized mouse himself.

Paragraph 2:
Just after the gym class, an excited voice came over the loudspeaker.

【思路点拨】
1.原文情节情感线,确认矛盾冲突
　　精读原文材料,理清情节脉络,把握基本信息,抓住情感主线,确认矛盾冲突。
When 　During the gym class
Where 　On the basketball court
Who 　Reuben, the teacher, Lamar and the other classmates, Mother
What 　Reuben was asked to take the place of Lamar in the basketball game.
Events Emotions Conflicts Theme
Paras.1—2 　his classmates hustled on the basketball court, he was imagining a different game,imagining it would show his classmates how good he was at something expectant 　人与人之间的冲突:期待被认可 　认可与接纳
Paras.3—5 　he was asked to take the place of Lamar and was laughed at embarrassed(没有提,但可以推断出来) 　人与人之间的冲突:被嘲笑
Paras.6—10 　he was expected to be a great basketball player,clumsy on the court,loved to build and design and draw things, recreated a mouse trap, making it humane, mice matter too sympathetic, sensitive 　人与自我的冲突:在球场上达不到别人的预期,却有其他的爱好
冲突与问题 　能否被别人认可
2.续文情节推理
根据上面的情节梳理,我们可以看到原文中多次展现了Reuben与他周围的人之间的冲突:Reuben不擅长篮球,他喜欢建造、设计和画画, 希望得到周围人的认可。顺着Reuben想解决并最终解决了这一矛盾的思路,我们可以确定续写部分的基调和基本走向。
由第一段首句内容“Back on the court today, Reuben felt like an oversized mouse himself.” 可知,这一段主要是延续原文中的冲突,可描写Reuben在篮球场上的拙劣表现。
由第二段首句内容“Just after the gym class, an excited voice came over the loudspeaker.”可知,第二段可描写校长宣布艺术比赛的获胜者是Reuben,其他同学向他表示祝贺。
3.情节流程
回到球场→表现拙劣→同学嘲笑→体育课结束→校长宣布Reuben是艺术比赛的获胜者→同学祝贺→感悟
【参考范文1】
Back on the court today, Reuben felt like an oversized mouse himself. He was caught in a flurry of arms, elbows, and more screeching sneakers sliding across the gym floor(分词短语作后置定语). “Shoot, Reuben, shoot!” He heard Lamar yell. Reuben threw the ball towards the net, praying it would go in(分词短语作状语). Would it Could it Nope, it barely reached the backboard and bounced away. “Nice shot, Reuben!” Lamar teased from the bench. Hands on knees, Reuben gasped for air, desperately screaming inside(分词短语作状语): “Why didn’t people see my usefulness The basketball court wasn’t the only place that counted(定语从句), was it ”
Just after the gym class, an excited voice came over the loudspeaker. “Good afternoon, students,” said the principal. “The citywide art contest has made its choice, and the winner is one of our students!” Reuben’s heart skipped a beat. Could it be him “Congratulations to fifth-grade Reuben!” the principal continued. “Besides, the Lakers will be coming to our school next month.” Reuben’s classmates cheered, and even ran up to offer him a high-five. And from the bench, he heard a voice call, “Hey, dude, it looks like you finally find a way to win!” Reuben turned around and saw Lamar holding up a thumbs-up(分词短语作宾补). “Finally, this mouse matters,” Reuben thought. “Finally, this mouse scored!”
【参考范文2】
Back on the court today, Reuben felt like an oversized mouse himself. His movements were clumsy and he had trouble keeping up with the pace of the game. Suddenly, one teammate passed the ball to him, but so fast did the ball fly that Reuben was too nervous to jump for it(部分倒装). The ball fell on his shoulder heavily and the opponent seized it. “Another miss, Reuben!” shouted Lamar. Though feeling great pain on the shoulder(状语从句的省略), he smiled awkwardly without a word. His face flushing(独立主格), Reuben was dying for the whistle of the dismissal.
Just after the gym class, an excited voice came over the loudspeaker. “Reuben wins the first place in the citywide art contest and the Lakers will visit our school next Monday,”announced the headmaster. After a short silence, there was thunderous applause and cheers coming from the students(分词短语作后置定语), who were crazy fans of the Lakers(定语从句). Some students came over to congratulate Reuben(不定式短语作目的状语) and the big smile on his face showed how proud he was(宾语从句). At that moment, he knew everyone can be good at something, just like him.
Ⅲ真题示例与解析
【2025浙江1月卷】
Kevin was pretty bored. His mother was at work, and his father had been away on business. Therefore, he was left in the care of Mrs. Hill, an old lady who lived next door. His parents had raised the 12-year-old to be a good boy. He never got into trouble, though sometimes he wanted to do risky things. Mrs. Hill was asleep. Kevin sighed (叹息) and hoped something exciting would happen. Suddenly, a movement outside caught his eye.
Mrs. Hill’s front window faced Mr. and Mrs. Green’s house across the street. The couple had both gone to work, so it was strange that someone was over there. Kevin stared at the man at their front door. Suddenly, the man jumped through an open window into the house. With his heart in his mouth, Kevin grabbed Mrs. Hill’s home phone and called the police.
Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted before the police arrived, Kevin decided to do something. He rushed out of Mrs. Hill’s house and crossed the street quickly. Grabbing a branch from a cut-down tree, he jumped in through the window. “Stop right there! You must leave right now!” he called out, holding the branch with both hands.
The man froze for a second, but when he saw the skinny boy he breathed a sigh of relief. “Hey, kid, put that down. It was my home. My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here,” he explained, trying to lift a floorboard.
At that moment, the sounds of a police car echoed (回响) in the air. The man stood up in a panic, then ran through the house toward the window and jumped out. Kevin followed out and told the arriving police officers what had happened. They pursued and arrested the man.
Kevin went back to Mrs. Hill’s house. Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing. “What if he has told the truth ” he thought to himself. The man’s words sounded pretty convincing. 注意：
(1) 续写词数应为150左右；
(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them.
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Paragraph 2: Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station.
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【答案】One possible version:
When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. He explained how he had witnessed the strange man entering their house and how he was arrested. Mr. and Mrs. Green listened attentively, with a mixture of surprise and gratitude on their faces. Mrs. Green hugged Kevin, thanking him for his bravery. Mr. Green, however, looked thoughtful. He asked Kevin to describe the man in detail and then revealed that the man was indeed his younger brother, who had come to retrieve a watch their father had left behind. Kevin's eyes widened in shock.
Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station. On the way, Mr. Green explained that the watch was a family heirloom, passed down from generation to generation. At the police station, they explained the situation to the officers, who were surprised but understanding. The man, who had been released after his identity was verified, was waiting outside. He smiled weakly at Kevin, who felt a mix of embarrassment and relief. Mr. Green handed over the watch to his brother with a pat on the back, and they all agreed to keep in touch. Kevin learned an important lesson that day: always verify the facts before taking action, but never hesitate to help those in need.
【导语】本文人物为线索展开，讲述Kevin在父母不在家时，看到一男子闯入格林夫妇家，他报警并阻止男子，男子被捕后他怀疑自己是否做对。
【详解】1. 段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“当格林夫妇回到家时，凯文去和他们交谈。”可知，第一段可描述Kevin向格林夫妇解释他所做的事情，以及格林夫妇的反应和真相的揭露。
②由第二段首句内容“凯文和格林先生带着他们找到的手表去了警察局。”可知，第二段可描述第二段可描写Kevin和Mr. Green去警察局解释情况，以及事情解决后他们的感受和Kevin学到的教训。
2. 续写线索：Kevin向Green夫妇解释——Green夫妇的反应——真相揭露——Kevin和Green去警察局——事情解决——Kevin的感受和教训
3. 词汇激活：
行为类
①进入：enter/come into
②拥抱：hug/embrace
③找回：retrieve/get back
④核实：verify/confirm
情绪类
①吃惊：surprise/astonishment
4. 多维解析
助人类 5年3考【善行善举类】
通过对近5年高考真题以及大型模考中相关故事的分析发现，善行善举类故事主要讲述主人公发现他人陷人困境或社会问题时，通过行动与坚持解决问题，最终实现助人者自身成长与社会价值的双重升华。基于此，我们归纳出该类故事的情节发展示例，具体如下：
Ⅳ 语篇训练
　　[2025·河北部分高中高三二模]
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Another way
The train ran smoothly on a spring afternoon. At one station, the doors opened, and came in a man. He wore labourer’s clothing, big, drunk and dirty. Screaming, he swung at an elderly couple. Terrified, the couple jumped up and quickly walked away. The labourer aimed a kick at the back of the old woman but missed. The passengers froze with fear.
I’ve been putting in a solid eight hours of martial arts (武术) training nearly every day for the past three years. “We study how to resolve conflict, not how to start it,” my teacher had said again and again. I listened to his words. In my heart, however, I wanted to save the innocent by destroying the guilty.
“This is it!” I said to myself as I got to my feet. Seeing me stand up, the drunk recognized a chance to focus his rage (怒火). His fists upraised, he gathered himself for a rush at me. A second before he could move, someone shouted “Hey!”
I remembered the strangely joyous quality of the voice. We both stared down at a little old man. “Come here and talk with me,” the old man said in an easy voice. He waved his hands lightly. The big man followed, as if on a string. He planted his feet in front of the old gentleman, “Why should I talk to you ” The old man continued, “What have you been drinking ” “Beer,” the labourer replied, “and it’s none of your business!”
“Oh, that’s wonderful,” the old man said with interest. “You see, I love beer, too. Every night, my wife and I take beer out into the garden, and we sit on an old wooden bench. We look to see how our persimmon (柿子) tree is doing. We worry about whether it will recover from those ice storms we had last winter. Our tree has done better than I expected, though, especially when you consider the poor quality of the soil.”
注意:续写词数应为150个左右。
Paragraph 1:
As the labourer struggled to follow the old man, his face began to soften.

Paragraph 2:
I turned my head for one last look before getting off the train.

Ⅴ素养提升与背诵
读后续写高级句型
句型六：主句+as if/though +从句
1. She smiled warmly at us, her eyes crinkling at the corners, as though she were greeting old friends she hadn't seen in years.
（她对我们温暖地微笑着，眼角泛起皱纹，就好像在问候多年未见的老朋友一样。）
2. He acted as if he owned the entire place, striding into the room with an unshakable air of confidence.
（他表现得仿佛拥有整个地方一样，带着不可动摇的自信气场步入了房间。）
3. A heavy silence fell upon the house, as if all sound had been swallowed by the overwhelming grief.
（一阵沉重的寂静笼罩了房子，仿佛所有的声音都已被那巨大的悲伤所吞噬。）
4. Her voice softened as she spoke to the child, as though she were handling the most fragile porcelain in the world.
（她对孩子说话时声音变得柔软，就好像她在触碰世界上最易碎的瓷器。）
5. My heart was pounding so violently against my ribs as if it were a frantic bird desperate to escape its cage.
（我的心脏如此猛烈地撞击着我的肋骨，仿佛它是一只拼命想要逃离笼子的疯狂小鸟。）
句型七：It +was 被强调部分+that从句
1. 强调时间状语 :It was not until that moment, with the letter in her hand, that she truly understood the depth of his sacrifice.
（直到那一刻，手里握着那封信，她才真正理解他牺牲的深度。）
2. 强调地点状语 : It was in that dusty attic, forgotten by time, that she stumbled upon the secret that would change everything.
（正是在那个被时光遗忘的、布满灰尘的阁楼里，她偶然发现了那个将改变一切的秘密。）
3. 强调方式状语: It was with a trembling voice and a heart full of hope that he finally confessed his feelings.
（是用颤抖的声音和一颗充满希望的心，他终于表白了自己的感情。）
4. 强调主语 : It was his unwavering belief in me, not his words of advice, that gave me the strength to start all over again.
（是他对我坚定不移的信念，而不是他的建议，给予了我从头再来的力量。）
5. 强调宾语: It was a sense of profound peace, not excitement, that she found at the end of her long journey.
（是一种深刻的平静感，而非兴奋，是她在漫长旅程终点所找到的东西。）
句型八：An inner voice whispered from his heart，“…”.
1. An inner voice whispered from his heart, “The easy path leads to a comfortable end, but only the courageous one, fraught with thorns, leads to a legacy.”
（一个声音从他心中低语：“轻松的道路通向舒适的终点，但唯有那条充满荆棘的勇者之路，才能通向不朽。”）
2. An inner voice whispered from his heart, “Fear is but an illusion; the greatest prison is the one you build for yourself in your mind. Step forward.” （一个声音从他心中低语：“恐惧不过是幻影；最大的监狱是你在脑海中为自己建造的那一座。向前迈步吧。”）
3. An inner voice whispered from his heart, “You have been chasing the spotlight so desperately that you blinded yourself to the one who was always your audience.”
（一个声音从他心中低语：“你一直如此拼命地追逐聚光灯，以至于对那个始终是你观众的人视而不见。”）
4. An inner voice whispered from his heart, “Even the longest night will yield to dawn. Just hold on a little longer.”
（一个声音从他心中低语：“即便最漫长的黑夜也会向黎明屈服。只需再坚持一会儿。”）
5. An inner voice whispered from his heart, “You are not defined by your failures, but forged by them. Now, rise.”
（一个声音从他心中低语：“你并非由你的失败定义，而是被它们锻造。现在，站起来。”）
句型九：What + 主语 + had learned/gained/found + was...
1. What the young athlete had gained through the relentless training was not just a gold medal, but an unbreakable will that would last a lifetime.（这位年轻的运动员通过不懈训练所获得的，不仅仅是一枚金牌，更是一种能持续一生的、不屈不挠的意志。）
2. What she had found in the dusty old diary was the shocking truth behind her family's decades-long silence, a truth that finally brought her closure.（她在布满灰尘的旧日记中发现的是，她家族长达数十年沉默背后令人震惊的真相，一个最终让她得以释怀的真相。）
3. What he had learned from the painful farewell was to cherish every mundane moment of togetherness, for it might become the most beautiful memory one day.
（他从那次痛苦的告别中学到的是，要珍惜每一个平凡的相聚时刻，因为它终有一天会成为最珍贵的回忆。）
4. What the journey had given him was a brand-new perspective on life: that happiness is not a destination to be reached, but a manner of traveling.
（这段旅程给予他的是一种全新的人生视角：幸福并非要抵达的终点，而是一种旅行的方式。）
5. What the little girl's smile had brought to the lonely old man was a long-lost sense of purpose, making him feel needed and loved again.
（那个小女孩的微笑为孤独老人带来的，是一种久违的目标感，让他再次感到自己被需要、被爱着。）
句型十：万能结尾金句
It’s no exaggeration to say that this experience was like a permanent flower, blooming in my rivers of memories.
（毫不夸张的说这次经历就像一朵永恒的花，绽放在我的记忆脑海中）
What he had finally learned was that true courage was not the absence of fear, but the triumph over it.
（他终于明白，真正的勇气不是没有恐惧，而是战胜恐惧。）
She felt as if a heavy weight had been lifted from her shoulders, and a new path, bathed in sunlight, was unfolding before her.
（她感觉如释重负，一条沐浴在阳光下的新道路正在她面前展开。）
With a heart full of peace and a smile etched on her face, she watched the sun set on the horizon, knowing that she was home.
（内心充满平静，脸上挂着微笑，她望着地平线上的日落，知道她回家了。）
It was the long and lonely journey that taught him the invaluable lesson that the most beautiful landscapes are often found on the most unexpected paths.
（正是这段漫长而孤独的旅程教会了他一个宝贵的道理：最美丽的风景，往往就在最意想不到的路上。）

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