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Continuation Writing
What difficulties
are you faced with
in continuation
writing
Language
Content
评分时，应主要从内容、词汇和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体
为：
logical and reasonable
（1）
（2）
（3）
accurate / rich / vivid
。
coherent (well connected)
Read for the elements and mai n idea
ho
hen
The feeling of the
at main character.
1. Read for the plot & emotional change
Para4: The next Moring, Maria
more worried
Climax
still did
nandez.
Para3: Maria told that to her
family.
worried
Para1:
a’s mother
ed to go with
ed daughter to
neighbor's house
Para2: Maria did n
Main idea of the story
a little worrie
He
Para1: Maria knew
neighbor, Mrs. Hernandez
's routine andfriendly ood
friends.
Para2:
Then, Maria and
her mother waited
there anxiously.
g
Ending
2.Read for Characters
always enjoy their small
talks and specially-made
cookies from her neighbor.
Mrs.
Hernandez
ends
ri
f
&good
bor
gh
ei
kind
a _________neighbor
n
Maria
Always smiled and stopped
to chat, and gave Maira a
box of her specially-made
cookies with a note .
caring
warm-hearted
a（ n ） ______, _______,school girl
Question :
Why did Mrs. Hernandez and her
dog fail to show up at the regular
time
Para.1: Maria’s mother agreed to go with her worried daughter to
their neighbor’s house.
① How did Maria make sure whether Mrs. Hernandez was at home
(details) knock the door but nobody anwsered
or not
② How was Mrs. Hernandez and her dog What happened to them
(maybe something terrible happened to her)
③ what did Maria and her mother do
Para.2: Then, Maria and her mother w(aTihteedythpehreonanexdiothuselyh.ospital)
Moments later, some doctors arrived in an ambulance.
①What did the doctors do
②What did the doctors say (expressing her concern for Mrs.
③What’s the reaction of MariaH、ernhaenrdmezo)ther and the neighbor
④ The ending.
any details can be reused to the text
Since Mrs. Hernandez was asleep, Maria left her some
cookies with a note that read: “To my good friend Mrs.
Hernandez: Feel better, I’ll look after Marisol, and I miss
you—Maria.”
Coherence
3. Read for the theme
By writing the article, the writer intends to ______
describe a terrible experience of Mrs. Hernandez
highlight an act of kindness and the friendship between
neighbors
It's wise and necessary to share a
story with a bright and positive
theme.
the theme
Principle: Positive
1. Care is just like the quilt( 被子)
in the cold night that can give
warmth.
2. People come to their
neighbors in trouble.
人到难处邻里来。
3. Love and kindness can work
wonders.
Continuation Writing
Para.1: Maria's mother agreed to go with her
worried daughter to their neighbor's house.
Maria came to the house and rang the bell to find_
out whether Mrs. Hernandez was at home. Maria saw
the dog Marisol and Mrs. Hernandez lying on the___
floor. She and her mother rang the hospital.________
___________________________________________
___________________________________________
Emotion, Action,
Speech,
Linguistic description:
Environment
(EASE:emotion +actions + speech+environment )
Maria come to the house and rang the bell to find out whether
Mrs. Hernandez was at home.
Peer： to look
closely or carefully at
Uneasy, fearful,
nervous, anxious,
concerned,
sth, especially when
you cannot see it
clearly
Maria saw the dog Marisol ，and Mrs. Hernandez lying on
the floor. She and her mother rang the hospital.
lean against the floor
Sprawl on the bed
lie flat on one's back
Jump
leap to its feet
wag the tail
Para.1: Maria's mother agreed to go with her worried daughter to their
neighbor's house.
As they approached Mrs. Hernandez’s house, Maria
felt uneasy, She rang the doorbell several times. Maria’s
mother repeatedly called out to Mrs. Hernandez. Inside,
Marisol began to bark. “something terrible must happen to
Mrs. Hernandez”,Maria spoke to her mother. Feeling
extremely fearful, Maria pushed aside the bushes by the
front window and peered inside.
2. Maria saw the dog Marisol and Mrs. Hernandez lying on the floor. She and her
mother rang the hospital.
The first thing she saw was Marisol, jumping
excitedly and barking desperately. Then she saw
Mrs. Hernandez’s motionless body sprawled on the
floor. Maria felt helpless. “Mom,” she screamed, “get
help!” Maria’s mother rushed to a neighbor’s house
and telephoned the hospital.
Writing guidelines
1. Use environmental descriptions to impress readers.
2. Use actions to develop the story and show feelings.
3. Use inner speech and dialogues to illustrate feelings
and thread event
4. Use rich/accurate language to make it vivid and
authentic.
Para.2: 3.Mrs.Hernandez fell over herself and hurt herself .
Maria an her mother visited her in the hospital.
They discovered that Mrs. Hernandez had slipped and
broken her hip, and they took her to hospital at once. That
afternoon, Maria and her mother dropped by the hospital.
A nurse said Maria’s concern for her neighbor’s safety had
saved Mrs. Hernandez’s life. She said Mrs. Hernandez
would recover completely. Since Mrs. Hernandez was
asleep, Maria left her some cookies with a note that read:
“To my good friend Mrs. Hernandez: Feel better, I’ll look
Slip，
fall over onesel
have a fall
after Marisol, and I miss you—Maria.”
Coherence
Maria’s mother agreed to go with her worried daughter to their neighbor’s
house. As they approached Mrs. Hernandez’s house, Maria felt uneasy. She rang
the doorbell several times. Maria’s mother repeatedly called out to Mrs.
Hernandez. Inside, Marisol began to bark. Now extremely fearful, Maria pushed
aside the bushes by the front window and peered inside. The first thing she saw
was Marisol, jumping excitedly and barking desperately. Then she saw Mrs.
Hernandez’s motionless body sprawled on the floor. Maria felt helpless. “Mom,”
she screamed, “get help!” Maria’s mother rushed to a neighbor’s house and
telephoned the hospital.
Then, Maria and her mother waited there anxiously. Moments later, some
doctors arrived in an ambulance. They discovered that Mrs. Hernandez had
slipped and broken her hip, and they took her to hospital at once. That afternoon,
Maria and her mother dropped by the hospital. A nurse said Maria’s concern for
her neighbor’s safety had saved Mrs. Hernandez’s life. She said Mrs. Hernandez
would recover completely. Since Mrs. Hernandez was asleep, Maria left her some
cookies with a note that read: “To my good friend Mrs. Hernandez: Feel better, I’ll
look after Marisol, and I miss you—Maria.”
评分细则
维度
语言
序号
评价项目
维度
立意
序号
评价项目
紧扣主题、弘扬正能量
结尾、完整
1
2
时态正确
11
12
13
14
15
16
17
词汇准确、丰富、地道
有多种高级句式
逻辑
内容
3
逻辑清晰、顺承上文
与段首句衔接合理
适当的有效对话
场景描写
4
5
有效使用语句连接
拼写、大小写、标点
150词
6
7
修辞手法
8
人物 外貌
塑造
9
心理
动作
书写干净、整洁、美观
10
7个不：一不增加新人物；二不增加旁支情节；三不用过多对话；四不能
负能量结局；五不在文末设置悬念；六不偏高原文主题；七不违背逻辑
常理
Maria knew her neighbor's routine. Every day, Mrs. Hernandez
walked her dog Marisol past Maria’s house, usually Just as Maria
was hurrying for school in the morning and again when Maria was
returning in the afternoon. Mrs. Hernandez, always smiling, always
stopped to chat. Maria enjoyed their small talks. Then one day Mrs.
Hernandez discovered that Maria like homemade cookies. From then
on, she gave Maria a box of her specially-made cookies with a note
that read,”To Maria-my good friend!”
One cold November morning when Maria left for school, she didn
’t see Mrs. Hernandez and Marisol. Maria didn't know why. That
afternoon her neighbor again failed to appear at the regular time.
Maria became a little worried. As she walked by Mrs. Hernandez's
house, she looked at the house carefully and saw nothing
unusual."Mrs. Hernandez just isn't home today, I guess, "she spoke
to herself.
Later that night, Maria told her parents and her brother Ramon about not
seeing Mrs. Hernandez. She asked them if they knew where their neighbor had
gone. While Maria was worried Ramon thought that nothing was wrong. Maria's
mother also tried to make Maria feel better: "She probably went to see a doctor.
Or maybe shes in another city visiting her daughter " Still, Maria was not
satisfied. She asked her parents if perhaps she should knock on Mrs. Hernandez's
door.
Maria's father was not worried either. He thought that they shouldn't bother
Mrs. Hernandez.“Maria, honey, I'm certain shes just fine. We needn't spend time
worrying about her.
The next morning, Maria still didn't see Mrs. Hernandez. Maria became even
more worried Instead of waiting for the school bus, she rushed back home.
Maria's mother was washing the breakfast dishes. "I didn't see Mrs. Hernandez
again this morning, and now I'm terribly worried about her. "Maria said. " She
didn't talk about going away, so I want to check on her before going to school. I
hope you'll come with me.
Paragraph 1:Maria’s mother agreed to go with her worried daughter to their neighbor’s house.
Paragraph 2:Then, Maria and her mother waited there anxiously. Moments later, some doctors arrived in
5·3 C with EASE（你的5·3很简单）
Response
1. Action- ___________
Read for the p__lo_t_/
emotional change character
Solution
________________/ ______/
conflict theme
2. Conflict- __________
Positive
_______/ ________
3. Negative- __________
Linguistic（语言）
Coherence
（衔接）
description:
Emotion Action
________, ________,
Speech
_________, E__n_v_ir_o_n_m__e_n_t
2. Read for the Conflict
Principle: Conflict-Solution
· One cold November morning when Maria ..she
didn’t see Mrs. Hernandez…..Maria became a
little worried
·“Mrs. Hernandez just isn’t home today, I
guess”
Conflict 1:
Why did Mrs.
Hernandez fail
to show up at the
regular time
· That afternoon her neighbor again failed to
appear at the regular time.
The next morning ,Maria still didn’t see
Mrs. Hernandez Maria become even more worried.
· “she didn’t talk about going away”
Conflict2 :
Where did Mrs. Hernandez go

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