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读后续写练习
讲解
Learning Objectives:
1.学会梳理故事情节。
2.学会一些描写方法，如动作描写，心理描写等。
3.学会根据续写策略进行读后续写。
第二节(满分25分)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构
成一篇完整的短文。
I vividly remember the day when, as a nine-year-old, I participated in a primary school sing-along. While everyone else sang the main tune,I automatically harmonized, but the sound I sang was out of tune with
everyone else. At that moment, I suddenly saw my classmates looking at me, and I felt embarrassed. That experience left a lasting impact. I promised myself that I would never sing in public again, but it didn't
stop there. My fear of embarrassment grew so strong that I began to
close myself off from sharing anything — my thoughts, my feelings, and
my ideas — with others.
Throughout my primary and high school years, I remained quiet.
When teachers asked questions in class, I stayed silent, too afraid of
being wrong, though I knew the answers to questions. Even when I had
ideas to contribute to group discussions, I held back. I wanted to speak
up, but the fear of embarrassment always outweighed my desire to be
heard.
I had built a cage around my own potential, letting fear and
self-doubt control my life. But over time, I realized that living in this
self-made prison was far more painful than the risk of stepping outside
of it. I was in a place that Anais Nin described well when she said,
"Then the day came when the risk it took to remain tightly closed in a
bud (花蕾) became more painful than the risk to bloom (开花)."
That realization sparked (引发) something within me, but it took
another small moment to set the change in motion. During my first year
of college, I was chatting with a friend in a quiet cafe, talking about life,
dreams, and fears. I watched her speak so openly and confidently about
her experiences and thoughts. It amazed me how free she was in
expressing herself, unafraid of what others might think. She shared a
story about an art project she was working on. She wasn't afraid to be
herself and it struck me deeply.
注意:1. 续写词数应为150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
At that moment, I decided to change and began with small steps.
Today, I can go confidently in the direction of my dreams.
1. 故事情节？
2. 接下来会发生什么事情？(第一段？第二段？)
3. 写作方向？
Activity 1: Brainstorm
1：故事情节？
恐惧
觉醒
行动
成长
主题：从恐惧到自信的心理成长。
核心矛盾：主人公因害怕被嘲笑而沉默，最终决定突破自我。
2：接下来会发生什么事情？(第一段？第二段？)
Para3:I had built a cage around my own potential, letting fear and
self-doubt control my life. But over time, I realized that living in this
self-made prison was far more painful than the risk of stepping outside
of it. I was in a place that Anais Nin described well when she said,
"Then the day came when the risk it took to remain tightly closed in a
bud (花蕾) became more painful than the risk to bloom (开花)."
Para4:...I watched her speak so openly and confidently about
her experiences and thoughts. It amazed me how free she was in
expressing herself, unafraid of what others might think. ...She wasn't afraid to be herself and it struck me deeply.
Internal cause
内因
External cause
外因
第一段：具体行动
（如第一次举手发言、参加演讲比赛等）
3：写作方向
第二段：成长结果
（如自信表达、获得认可等）
承接材料中朋友自信表达的触动，描写具体行动需描写主人公如何通过“小步骤”开始改变（如主动发言、参与活动、课堂举手、加入社团等）。
Activity 2: 续写分段策略：Para 1
第一段：具体行动
一、开头句：
At that moment, I decided to change and began with small steps.
二、写作思路：
1. 动作描写：选择一个小挑战（如课堂发言、加入讨论）。
2. 心理描写：紧张→犹豫→尝试后的释然。
3. 细节支撑：同学的反应、自己的肢体语言。
1.当我举起手时，手心微微颤抖着，只抬到肩膀那么高，但老师却鼓励地点了点头。
My hand _________ as I ________ it, barely _________ shoulder height, but the teacher _____________encouragingly.
2.我深深地吸了一口气，紧紧握住笔记本的边缘，直到手指的关节都变得发白了。
I ___________________, __________ the edges of my notebook until my knuckles____________ white.
二、写作思路：1. 动作描写
took a deep breath
gripping
turned
raised
reaching
nodded
trembled
PRACTISE
二、写作思路：2.心理描写
1.要是他们再次嘲笑我怎么办？但那种懊悔的沉默却比恐惧更沉重。
What if they__________ again But the silence of _______ felt heavier than the __________.
2.当这些话从我口中说出时，我胸口重压顿时消散了，就像一扇门缓缓打开，让阳光照进了室内。
As the words left my mouth, the__________on my chest______, like a door cracking open to__________ .
laugh
regret
fear
weight
lifted
sunlight
PRACTISE
需总结改变后的状态，呼应材料中“追逐梦想”的主题。
引用呼应：可再次引用材料中的“开花”比喻，体现蜕变。
升华主题：通过对比过去与现在，强调自信带来的成长（如领导团队、公开演讲。)
Activity 2: 续写分段策略：Para 2
第二段：成长结果
一、开头句：
"Today, I can go confidently in the direction of my dreams."
二、写作思路：
1. 对比手法：过去逃避 VS 现在主动（如从躲在后排到站上演讲台）。
2. 象征性场景：用一次成功经历（如比赛、公开表达）体现蜕变。
3. 升华主题：点明“勇敢尝试”的价值。
动作描写：
1.现在，我大步走上舞台，声音坚定地向观众阐述我的观点。
Now, I ________ to the stage , my voice steady as I _________ my ideas with the crowd.（自信的动作）
2.我没有退缩，而是倾身向前，依次与他们对视。
Instead of ___________back, I ________ forward,_______ their eyes one by one.（肢体语言的变化）
二、写作思路：1. 对比手法 2. 象征性场景
stride
share
shrinking
lean
meeting
心理描写：
1.掌声涌上我的心头，这并非是突然地震撼，而是一种肯定的回应：我一直有能力做到，只是因为害怕而不敢尝试罢了。
The applause _____________me, not as a shock but as a confirmation: I was always_________, just _______ to try.（成就感）
2.恐惧仍在低语，但如今我知道那只不过是昔日的牢笼正在崩塌而已。
The ______ still whispers, but now I know it’s just the old _________walls ____________.（心理成长的比喻）
二、写作思路：1. 对比手法 2. 象征性场景
washed over
capable
afraid
fear
prison
crumbling
1.Fear once imprisoned my soul, and courage has given me a new life.
恐惧曾禁锢我的灵魂，而勇气让我重获新生。
2.Only by stepping out of the cage of self-isolation can we move forward confidently on the road to dreams.
走出自我封闭的牢笼，方能在梦想的道路上自信前行。
二、写作思路：3. 升华主题
PRACTISE
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范文展示
At that moment,I decided to change and with small steps. The next day,I forced myself to raise my hand in class,even though my heart was racing.lt was a small victory, but it felt huge.l began to speak up more often in group discussions,even if my ideas weren’t fully formed or I was unsure of myself. Slowly.the fear that had controlled me for so long start to lose its hold.I allowed myself to make mistakes,knowing that each one was a
chance to grow.
Today, l can go confidently in the direction of my dreams.
l share my ideas without hesitation,whether in class or with friends.The fear of judgment still shows up at times, but l no longer let it silence me.l’ve learned that expressing myself is a strength, not a weakness.I've come to understand that taking risks and being vulnerable(脆弱的) are part of the journey to becoming who l truly am.Each step forward is a reminder that l am no longer the person who hides in the shadows,but someone who embraces the light.
第一段：小行动 + 心理突破 → 用细节动作和内心挣扎体现“开始改变”。
第二段：大变化 + 对比升华 → 用场景对比和象征性成功收尾。
贯穿技巧：比喻呼应、身体语言链、心理活动递进。
紧扣高考续写评分标准（内容连贯、描写生动、主题升华）
SUMMARY
HOMEWORK
一、修改自己的读后续写。
二、完成课后读后续写任务。
Thank you !

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