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读后续写第一节课
读后续写能否拿高分某种程度上取决于故事情节的构思。这就要求考生做到学会分析情节。分析故事情节一般从故事六要素着手，即who, when, where, what, why, how。然后根据故事情节发展线和主人公的情感变化来续写文章。
第一步：分析段首句。根据其关键信息，提出问题，预设故事情节发展走向。
第二步：关注段首句和续写部分的衔接。思考续写第一段和第二段的衔接。根据情节发展构思末句，通过收尾呼应，达到文章升华，体现故事主题。增加相关细节，完善续写情节
精读原文找准了线索、确定了主题后,即可顺应原文情节和两段给定的首句,搭建续写情节框架。
理清了故事的情节，确定了续写的方向，我们就需要依据文脉走向，构思续写内容了。
3衔接句：第一个提示句后的衔接1，第二个提示句前后的衔接句2和3
2过渡句：衔接句1和2，衔接句3和主题句之间的桥梁
1主题句：升华主题
文章结构
【para 1】
衔接1: 承接续写第一段首句，描写人物的心理和情感反应以及随之产生的行为或言语
过渡1: 语言/动作/环境描写+关键情节
衔接2: 依据续写第二段首句写出续写第一段的最后一句与之衔接
文章结构
【para 2】
衔接3:承接续写第二段首句，描写人物的心理和情感反应以及随之产生的行为或言语
过渡2: 关键情节+心理/动作/语言+结局(紧贴首段，解决问题)
主题1: 依据故事主题写出启示和感悟，以提炼或升华主题
文章结构
主题：honesty
续文情节推理
①由第一段首句内容“妈妈说:‘这个巧克力糖是对你想象力的奖励:一只会开窗子的猫!’”可知,第一段可描写妈妈用奖励巧克力糖的方式引导Ben承认是他自己打碎了花瓶。（怎么引导？）
②由第二段首句内容“现在手里拿着巧克力糖,男孩的不好的态度消失了。”可知,第二段可描写Ben良心不安,无法继续撒谎,最后鼓起勇气对妈妈坦白事情的经过。（如何坦白？）
The mother said, “This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a window-opening cat!” Hearing her sincere appreciation, Ben flushed, lowered his head and muttered a thank you. Surprisingly, the mother took out another chocolate and pressed it into his hand. “This one is for the delicate repair work you did to the broken vase.” She also added that she was moved by how much the boy cherished the family possession. At these hearty remarks, （酣畅淋漓的评论）Ben felt a flow of shame through his veins, and had to duck his head even lower. The mother then calmly encouraged Ben to reward himself with more chocolates for any other merits（善举） he had displayed in this event. He did as was told to, confessing that he was calm when facing the accident.
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Now with some chocolates in hand, the boy’s bad attitude disappeared. His palms（手心） and forehead sweating, nervousness welled up （涌起）inside him. After what seemed a long time（看似很长一段时间）, he looked up at his mother, admitting that it was not the cat but he that had broken the vase accidentally and asked for punishment. “I’m sorry I lied to you, mum. Please take back the chocolates.” Feeling so ashamed, Ben couldn’t hold back his tears. （忍住眼泪）He opened his palm wide, ready to return the chocolates. To his surprise, however, his mother placed the whole box of chocolates in his hand, smiling. “Honesty deserves the best reward（回报）, my dear.”
人物心理描写的句式
Hearing her sincere appreciation, Ben flushed, lowered his head and muttered a thank you.
His palms（手心） and forehead sweating, nervousness welled up （涌起）inside him.
用动作（身体反应）来表示情绪
1. with 的复合结构
他冲出了房间，心怦怦直跳，满脸通红。
He rushed out of the room __________________________________
with his heart beating wildly and his face flushing.
At these hearty remarks, （酣畅淋漓的评论）Ben felt a flow of shame through his veins, and had to duck his head even lower. 直接描写情绪
1.A sense(wave/flush/ripple) of +情绪n. flooded over(swept over)sb.
一种复杂的内疚感涌上凯文的心头，他怀疑自己的判断是否过于草率。
A complex sense of _______ flooded over Kevin, wondering if his judgment had been too hasty.
guilt
2.情绪名词1 gave way to 情绪名词2
....（情绪）让位于....（情绪）
汤姆最终成功地将这只动物哄骗到他身边。紧张和恐惧让位于喜悦。
Tom eventually succeeded in coaxing the animal to him. _______________________ gave way to _____.
Nervousness and fear
joy
3.情绪adj. and 情绪adj., sb did sth
我惊讶地发现，那些骑自行车的人都很井然有序。
_________________________, I noticed that the bikers were all in an orderly manner.
4.With growing +情绪n, Sb did sth
随着恐惧的增加，艾莉和我以最快的速度收拾了我们的营地
_________________, Elli and I packed up our camp as quickly as possible.
Surprised and amazed
With growing fear
请不要做！
一、七个不要
1.不增加人物
2.不增加旁支情节：续写情节必须紧扣原文主线，旁支情节易导致故事偏离主题，使整体结构松散，无法有效推动故事朝着合理的方向发展。
3.不用过多对话：对话可丰富故事，但过多会使文本冗长繁杂，影响叙事节奏和流畅性，应合理控制对话比例，以更好地展现故事发展。
4.不用负能量结局：故事结尾需传递正能量，体现勇气、善良、正义、团结等积极价值观，给读者带来希望和鼓舞，避免消极、悲观或不良导向的结局。
5.不在文末设置悬念：续写要给读者完整的结束感，避免在文末留下无法解答的悬念，否则会使故事显得不完整，不符合续写任务要求。
6.不偏离原文主题：续写始终要围绕原文主题展开，深入挖掘和升华主题，使新内容与原文自然融合，共同传达一个明确且连贯的主题思想。
7.不违背逻辑常理：人物行为和情节发展必须符合现实逻辑和生活常理，不能出现与人物性格、背景以及现实情况相悖的不合理情节。
二、三个核心原则
1.原文一致原则：续写内容在人称、时态、事件等方面要与原文保持高度统一。使用与原文一致的人称视角，保证叙述连贯；遵循原文时态，维持故事时间线的一致性；事件发展要基于原文情节，符合其内在逻辑。
2.曲折性原则：为增强故事的可读性和吸引力，续写时可适当设置冲突与矛盾，如人物之间的意见分歧、目标受阻、意外情况等，但冲突要合理且最终能得到妥善解决。
3.正能量原则：整个故事，包括续写部分，要传递积极向上的价值观，展现人性美好、困难克服、成长进步等正面内容。

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