【社会温情+现实冲突类读后续写】大善酒吧老板帮助迷途的孩子捞回的不止是钱包,是信任讲义素材2026届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

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【社会温情+现实冲突类读后续写】大善酒吧老板帮助迷途的孩子捞回的不止是钱包,是信任讲义素材2026届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

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2025届浙江省高三下学期5月模拟英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
An urgent call came into Ryan's bar(无灵主语句,聚焦事情的客观性) this past March. A newly married woman who had spent the afternoon at the dive beach bar(最开始我都忽略了这个细节) in Wrightsville Beach, North Carolina, couldn't find her wallet(核心事件). She didn't care about her ID, credit cards, or $150 in cash(名词并列)- but her wedding ring was put inside(重点衔接物).Ryan(人物2), 42, didn't like the idea that a theft could have occurred at his place.(同位从) Ryan's at Red Dogs. The bar had long served as a sanctuary for the homeless(兼具社会属性,意义升华很重要), offering not only hot meals but also job opportunities(递进). In fact, half of his current staff were former homeless individuals to whom he had given a second chance.
So he set out to find the wallet. He spent hours checking recordings from 16 different security cameras, watching(现在分词做伴随动作)the woman's every step in the bar until she went to sit on a bench outside and left when her ride arrived. Within minutes, a young man(人物3) in a jacket approached the bench, touched something in his pocket, and walked off(动作串描写).
That night Ryan posted a video clip on the bar's Facebook page. Instead of exposing the young man's face to shame him, Ryan chose to post with a question: “Does anyone know this person ”Within hours, Ryan got a text from 17-year-old Jimmy(与人物3是一个人,如果在这里出问题,就会跑偏了), who’d heard about the post from his sister. Jimmy admitted having taken the wallet and told Ryan he'd done it because he hadn't eaten in two days. He said he saw the ring but thought it was fake, so he took the money and threw the wallet off the docks into the ocean. Then he bought a sandwich(第二波冲突,这篇题目不错).
During their phone conversation, Jimmy opened up about his family conflicts and confessed to living in the woods for the past week. Though unable to see the young man directly(状从省略), Ryan - a father of two with a third child on the way(重要的身份参考信息)- pieced together Jimmy's situation from his trembling voice and fragmented explanations.
“This isn't some hardened criminal," he insisted. But with the missing ring involved(过去分词做后置定语), the situation had become serious: the police investigation could lead to criminal accusations. Determined to help(adj做主语补语), Ryan vowed to protect the young man who seemed more of a kid than a lawbreaker.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The next morning, Ryan told the teen to meet him at the docks.
Paragraph 2: Then one of the divers emerged from the depths of the water.
2025届浙江省北斗星盟高三下学期5月模拟英语试题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
An urgent call came into Ryan's bar this past March. A newly married woman who had spent the afternoon at the dive beach bar in Wrightsville Beach, North Carolina, couldn't find her wallet. She didn't care about her ID, credit cards, or $150 in cash- but her wedding ring was put inside.Ryan, 42, didn't like the idea that a theft could have occurred at his place, Ryan's at Red Dogs. The bar had long served as a sanctuary for the homeless, offering not only hot meals but also job opportunities. Infact, half of his current staff were former homeless individuals to whom he had given a second chance. So
he set out to find the wallet.He spent hours checking recordings from 16 different security cameras, watching the woman's every step in the bar until she went to sit on a bench outside and left when her ride arrived. Within minutes, a young man in a jacket approached the bench, touched something in his pocket, and walked off. That night
Ryan posted a video clip on the bar's Facebook page.Instead of exposing the young man's face to shame him, Ryan chose to post with a question: “Does anyone know this person ”Within hours, Ryan got a text from 17-year-old Jimmy, who’d heard about the post from his sister. Jimmy admitted having taken the wallet and told Ryan he'd done it because he hadn't eaten in two days. He said he saw the ring but thought it was fake, so he took the money and threw the wallet off the docks into the ocean. Then he bought a sandwich.
During their phone conversation, Jimmy opened up about his family conflicts and confessed to living in the woods for the past week. Though unable to see the young man directly, Ryan - a father of two with a third child on the way- pieced together Jimmy's situation from his trembling voice and fragmented explanations.
“This isn't some hardened criminal," he insisted. But with the missing ring involved, the situation had become serious: the police investigation could lead to criminal accusations. Determined to help, Ryan vowed to protect the young man who seemed more of a kid than a lawbreaker.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: The next morning, Ryan told the teen to meet him at the docks.
Paragraph 2: Then one of the divers emerged from the depths of the water.
第一部分:文章类型与构思布局分析
分类维度 类型说明
题材类型 社会温情类 / 现实冲突类
情节模式 以“道德冲突→理解→援助”为线索,温情反转型
人物关系 陌生人之间的信任与救助,成人与青少年之间的理解
情感主题 责任感、救赎、理解他人、成年人的仁慈
二、续写构思思路:
构思维度 内容建议
情节线索承接 从“Ryan告诉Jimmy第二天早上见面”进入第一段,挖掘“寻找+鼓励+等待+可能失望→转机”的心理及情节推进
情感层次安排 Ryan的坚持→Jimmy的内疚+恐惧→希望与改变
框架结构 悬念开场 → 搜寻过程 → 结果出现 → 情感升华(人物成长)
故事情节设计 第一段:见面+鼓励+打捞前紧张心理;第二段:潜水员出现+结果+冲突解决+人物升华
三、续写注意事项:原文承接注意:不可新增人物;承接Ryan的性格(包容、有责任、父亲视角)与Jimmy的状态(颤抖、害怕、愿意悔改);动作/心理衔接“Ryan召集”“潜水员出现”;情感方向必须朝“理解与改变”发展,而非单纯法律惩罚。结尾应有余味或主题照应,如“善意能改变一个人”。
故事山结构与语言细节分析
阶段 内容 原文衔接句
开端/设定 女子钱包丢失,婚戒在内;Ryan调查 "She didn't care... but her wedding ring..."
上升动作 Ryan查监控→发帖→收到Jimmy自首 "Ryan posted a video clip..."
高潮/冲突点 Jimmy坦白:饥饿、无家可归、误扔钱包入海 "He said he saw the ring but thought..."
下降动作 Ryan判断不是罪犯 → 决定帮助 → 召见 Jimmy "Ryan vowed to protect the young man..."
解决 潜水打捞行动(续写部分完成) 留白,由续写补足
文章细节线索提炼:
分析角度 内容说明 原文反映句
人物刻画 Ryan:有爱、判断力强;Jimmy:可怜、悔意 “This isn't some hardened criminal.”
情感层次 好奇→担忧→理解→决心帮助 “Determined to help...”
关键情节点 发帖→收到短信→通话→决定帮助 “Within hours, Ryan got a text...”
心理描写 Jimmy声音颤抖,羞愧;Ryan冷静判断 “...from his trembling voice and fragmented explanations.”
动作描写 Ryan查录像、发帖;Jimmy走近长椅、打电话 “...touched something in his pocket...”
环境描写 酒吧、码头、海边(可扩写) 暗示性存在
情感转折 从“丢失婚戒”到“帮助流浪少年” 整体反转
空间转换 从酒吧→码头→海面(续写空间) 隐含转场
时间过渡 下午(钱包丢失)→当晚→第二天(续写) “The next morning...”
隐含主题 人人都值得第二次机会 / 爱与理解 从人物行为中体现
三、推荐描写句与语料积累
动作描写
He clenched his fists tightly, trying to suppress the nervousness.
他紧握拳头,努力压抑紧张感。
Ryan scanned the horizon, eyes sharp with focus.
Ryan凝视着海平线,目光专注。
Jimmy shifted his weight from foot to foot.
Jimmy在脚下不安地移动着。
The diver gave a signal and disappeared into the depths.
潜水员打了个手势后潜入水中。
He reached into his pocket and slowly handed over the ring.
他伸进口袋,慢慢地交出了戒指。
She burst through the crowd, tears already forming.
她冲进人群,泪水已涌上眼眶。
He ran a hand through his messy hair and sighed.
他抚着凌乱的头发叹了口气。
The boy dropped his eyes, ashamed to meet Ryan's gaze.
男孩垂下眼睛,不敢直视Ryan。
His hands trembled slightly as he held out the soaked wallet.
他递出湿透的钱包时,手微微颤抖。
Ryan patted him on the back gently, like a father would.
Ryan像父亲一样轻拍他的背。
心理描写
His heart pounded with a mix of fear and hope.
他心中充满了恐惧与希望,怦怦直跳。
Guilt washed over him like a tide.
愧疚如潮水般袭来。
He couldn’t shake the feeling of being watched.
他总觉得有人在看他。
Relief spread across his face when he heard the news.
得知消息时,他脸上显出释然。
He regretted it the moment he threw the wallet away.
他扔掉钱包的那一刻就后悔了。
A sense of belonging crept into his heart.
一种归属感悄然在他心中滋长。
The words caught in his throat.
他一时语塞。
He didn’t expect kindness after what he’d done.
他没想到自己做了那事后还能被善待。
There was a flicker of hope in his eyes.
他眼中闪过一丝希望。
He felt as if a weight had been lifted.
他仿佛卸下了沉重的负担。
环境描写
The waves lapped gently against the docks.
海浪轻轻拍打着码头。
The morning mist hung low over the water.
清晨的薄雾低悬在水面。
Seagulls circled overhead, crying sharply.
海鸥在头顶盘旋,叫声尖锐。
The bench sat quietly under the old oak tree.
长椅静静地伫立在老橡树下。
The salty breeze carried a hint of seaweed.
咸咸的海风中带着一丝海藻味。
The dim light in the bar cast long shadows.
酒吧昏暗的灯光拉长了影子。
The wooden dock creaked under their feet.
木质码头在他们脚下吱呀作响。
The sun broke through the clouds, warming the air.
太阳穿破云层,使空气温暖起来。
The cold water shimmered with uncertainty.
冰冷的海水在不确定中闪烁。
Silence fell, broken only by the diver's splash.
寂静降临,唯有潜水员入水声打破沉寂。
高频词高级替换
常见词 高级替换词 场景/语义
help assist / support / aid 正式场合、人际帮助
sad sorrowful / downcast / heartbroken 心情低落
scared terrified / anxious / shaken 紧张心理描写
look gaze / peer / glance 动作细腻化
say admit / whisper / confess / remark 表达细节变化
搭配现象
confess to doing sth. 承认做了某事e.g. He confessed to taking the wallet.
同义:admit to doing sth. 反义:deny doing sth.
live in the woods 暗示“无家可归”的表达
e.g. He confessed to living in the woods for a week.
be determined to do sth. 下定决心做某事
e.g. Ryan was determined to help Jimmy.
piece together (info/story) 拼凑信息,了解真相
e.g. Ryan pieced together Jimmy’s situation from his voice.
vow to protect 发誓要保护(动宾搭配)
e.g. He vowed to protect the young man.
Possible Versions(3)
Version Special
Paragraph 1: The next morning, Ryan told the teen to meet him at the docks.
Jimmy showed up, face pale and steps hesitant(独立主格刻画人物神态), his heart heavy with guilt(独立主格). As Ryan approached, Jimmy expected harsh words, but instead, Ryan simply handed him a bottle of water and a chocolate bar. "You're part of fixing this," Ryan said calmly. Jimmy nodded, grateful and surprised(adj做补语). Ryan introduced the local dive team and explained they would search for the ring. Jimmy felt a lump in his throat. As the divers prepared, Jimmy asked quietly, "Even if it's lost forever, why try " Ryan glanced at the boy, eyes firm(独立主格刻画人物). "Because doing the right thing is never a waste." The words echoed in Jimmy's heart(无灵主语句). For hours, they waited. Jimmy paced, chewing his nails(现在分词做伴随动作), each failed dive twisting the guilt deeper into him(独立主格刻画人物). Yet Ryan stayed beside him, unwavering(adj做补语).
Paragraph 2: Then one of the divers emerged from the depths of the water.He held up the wallet triumphantly, water streaming from its edges(独立主格), and nestled inside, the ring caught the sunlight(无灵主语句). Jimmy gasped, stunned, and whispered(动词并列), "You really did it." Ryan smiled, not at the ring, but at the boy beside him(递进描写). Later, as Ryan explained to the woman that Jimmy would repay her, the woman's eyes welled up. She nodded. Jimmy’s shoulders relaxed for the first time in days. That evening, Ryan handed Jimmy a mop and an apron. "Start here," he said. Jimmy took them, no complaints, no questions. Every stroke across the floor felt like scrubbing away regret. In that small harbor town, Jimmy had not just returned a ring; he had begun to return to himself(升华).
语言亮点与表达积累:
搭配与表达:handed him a bottle / do the right thing / unwavering support / pass understanding / scrubbing away regret
动词升级:gasped (instead of "said"), nestled (替代“was inside”), paced (代替“walked nervously”)
描写短语积累:heart heavy with guilt, each failed dive twisting the guilt deeper, glowing with forgiveness, scrubbing away regret
Version 1
Paragraph 1: The next morning, Ryan told the teen to meet him at the docks. Jimmy arrived, his shoulders hunched and eyes avoiding contact(独立主格刻画人物形象), embodying a mixture of guilt and apprehension(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Ryan greeted him with a nod, his expression calm yet firm(独立主格). "Ready to make things right " he asked. Jimmy swallowed hard and nodded(动作刻画人物情绪). Ryan had arranged for a local diver group to assist in retrieving the wallet. As they prepared, Ryan shared stories of his own past mistakes, emphasizing the importance of redemption and second chances(现在分词做伴随动作,让我想到了李连杰“尔冬小和尚”). Jimmy listened intently, the tension in his posture gradually easing(独立主格刻画人物神态). The diver, equipped and ready(过去分词做后置定语), signaled before diving into the water, leaving ripples in his wake(现在分词做结果状语).
Paragraph 2: Then one of the divers emerged from the depths of the water. In his gloved hand, he held the missing wallet, soaked but intact(adj做补语). Jimmy's eyes widened, a mix of relief and disbelief washing over him(独立主格刻画人物情绪). He reached out, taking the wallet with trembling hands(现在分词短语做伴随动作), and opened it to reveal the wedding ring still nestled inside. Tears welled up in his eyes as he whispered, "I can't believe it's still here." Ryan placed a reassuring hand on his shoulder. "It's never too late to do the right thing," he said. Jimmy nodded, determination replacing fear(独立主格). "I want to make amends," he declared. Ryan smiled, "Let's start by returning this to its rightful owner."
情绪描写:guilt and apprehension, tension easing, relief and disbelief
动作描写:shoulders hunched, eyes avoiding contact, trembling hands
高级词汇替换:
guilt → remorse
relief → solace
tension → strain
短语升级:
make things right → rectify the situation
do the right thing → act with integrity
例句积累:
He arrived, shoulders hunched, embodying a mixture of guilt and apprehension.
Tears welled up in his eyes as he whispered, "I can't believe it's still here."
Version 2
Paragraph 1: The next morning, Ryan told the teen to meet him at the docks. Jimmy stood at the edge of the dock, the morning sun casting long shadows on the water(独立主格刻画环境). Ryan approached, carrying a thermos of hot coffee(现在分词短语做伴随动作). "Thought you might need this," he said, handing it over(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Jimmy accepted it with a grateful nod, the warmth seeping into his cold hands(独立主格). They sat in silence, the gentle lapping of waves filling the void(独立主格刻画环境). "I never meant to cause harm," Jimmy murmured. Ryan looked at him, "Intentions matter, but actions define us." Just then, the divers signaled readiness and plunged into the water.
Paragraph 2: Then one of the divers emerged from the depths of the water. He held up the recovered wallet, water dripping from its edges(独立主格做细节刻画). Jimmy took it, opening it slowly to reveal the wedding ring(现在分词短语做伴随动作), still gleaming(现在分词做后置定语), lying in the wallet corner(现在分词做后置定语). A smile broke across his face, the first genuine one in days(可以理解为独立主格). "Thank you," he said, turning to Ryan(现在分词做伴随动作). "For believing in me." Ryan nodded, "Everyone deserves a second chance." Jimmy stood taller, the weight of guilt lifting.(独立主格刻画人物的神态变化) "I want to make things right," he said with conviction. "Then let's start by returning this," Ryan replied, gesturing towards the bar(现在分词做伴随动作).
语言亮点
情绪描写:grateful nod, genuine smile, conviction
动作描写:stood at the edge, handed it over, sat in silence
高级词汇替换:
guilt → contrition
smile → grin
stood taller → straightened up
短语升级:
make things right → amend one's mistakes
believing in me → having faith in me
例句积累:
"Intentions matter, but actions define us."
"Everyone deserves a second chance."
Version 3
Paragraph 1:
The next morning, Ryan told the teen to meet him at the docks. Jimmy arrived, his face pale with anxiety, his hands shoved deep into his pockets (独立主格刻画人物神态). Ryan, sensing his fear (现在分词做伴随动作), spoke gently, “We’ll fix this together.” He had already arranged for local divers to search the spot where Jimmy had thrown the wallet. As they stood by the water’s edge, Jimmy muttered, “I didn’t think anyone would care about a fake ring.” Ryan sighed, “It’s not about the ring—it’s about doing what’s right (递进句式).” The morning sun cast long shadows (环境描写), and the rhythmic sound of waves seemed to echo Jimmy’s restless guilt (融情于景).
Paragraph 2:
Then one of the divers emerged from the depths of the water. In his gloved hand was the soaked, missing wallet (倒装句),water cascading off its surface(独立主格). Jimmy reached out, hands trembling(独立主格), and opened it to find the wedding ring nestled inside. Jimmy’s eyes widened, his breath catching in his throat(独立主格). Ryan took the ring and turned to him, “Now, let’s return it.” Jimmy swallowed hard, nodding(现在分词做伴随动作). The woman, upon receiving her ring, didn’t scold him but instead said softly, “People make mistakes. What matters(主从) is how you fix them(表从).” Overwhelmed(adj做主语补语), Jimmy whispered, “I’ll do better.” Ryan smiled, “You can start by helping at the bar.”
官方:
The next morning, Ryan told the teen to meet him at the docks. Jimmy arrived, shoulders hunched and eyes fixed on the ground(独立主格), avoiding Ryan's gaze(现在分词做伴随动作). To his surprise, the man handed him a wrapped sandwich. “Eat first,” Ryan said, his tone softer than expected(独立主格). As Jimmy nibbled silently, Ryan introduced local dive team, and declared his plan to recover that ring. Jimmy's eyes widened and he hadn't expected this effort. For hours, the team combed the dark waters near the docks. Each time a diver emerged with nothing but handfuls of seaweed, jimmy's fists clenched tighter. He mumbled apologies, words dissolving into the crash of waves(独立主格,寓情于景), but Ryan silenced him, “We won't stop until we find it”, his voice firm yet calm(独立主格).
Then one of the divers emerged from the depths of the water. In his hand was the wallet(倒装句), the ring glinting faintly under the noon sun(独立主格). Jimmy rubbed his eyes as if to confirm it wasn't a dream. When Ryan informed the owner her ring was found and he would pay the $150 on Jimmy's behalf, she was overcome with emotion. Moved by his gesture(现在分词短语做原因状语), she immediately agreed to drop the theft charges against Jimmy. Yet the matter didn't end there. Troubled about Jimmy's predicament(过去分词做原因状语), Ryan even offered the kid a job at his bar. By sunset, Jimmy was mopping floors there, his first wage set aside to repay the stolen $150(独立主格). The wedding ring sat behind the counter(无灵主语句), awaiting its owner a small circle of gold(现在分词短语做后置定语), gleaming not with wealth, but with the quiet light of grace(递进描写), proof(同位语解释说明)that even in the shadow of a mistake, kindness can lead the way home(同位从).

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