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“Hurry up girls, it’s getting late for school!” called my Mom. We dashed downstairs and had a quick breakfast. I was eating my favorite —very sweet cereal, and Sara was having eggs. When I rose to have my bowl washed, Mom whispered, “You know you need to be cautious today when you’re walking Sara to school. It’s your job to assure me she gets there all right.” Then she cast me a very serious look. I thought to myself, wondering why Mom was making such a big deal out of this. It was Sara’s first day of kindergarten, but I could manage it. I wish Mom wouldn’t treat me like such a baby.
“Goodbye, Mom!” Sara yelled. She ran out the door, and I went behind her.
“Be careful!” my mom yelled.
“I will!” I said back and ran outside. Sara was skipping down the front walkway to the sidewalk.
I grabbed Sara’s hand. “Are you eager and excited for your first day of school ” I asked, trying to sound like a grown-up. Sara smiled and nodded in agreement. Meanwhile, my mom was staring at us through the window. “When will she stop treating me like a little kid ” I thought. “I’ll show you the way,” I said. I felt proud to be the elder sister. We walked past beautiful gardens and big, leafy trees. Suddenly, I heard a growl and saw a dog walking towards us. He was big and fierce looking with long sharp teeth.
“GRRR!!!” the dog growled. I didn’t see its owner or anyone who could help us. My hand became sweaty and Sara stopped walking. “I’m scared, Julie,” she said. I didn’t want her to be scared. I wanted to seem brave. “Everything will be okay,” I said. “GRRR!!!” The dog stepped closer and we could see it was the size of a small horse —with red eyes and sharp teeth.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1 I was trying to make my voice sound calm.
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Paragraph 2 I told Mom what had happened.
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一、文本分析
1．角色
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视角第______人称
时空线家中（早餐时妈妈叮嘱 Julie 送妹妹 Sara 上学，强调谨慎）--- 家门口（姐妹俩与妈妈道别，出发上学）--- 途中（经过花园和绿树，氛围轻松）--- 途中（遇到一只高大凶猛、无人看管的狗，陷入险境）---（续写）遇狗现场（Julie 安抚 Sara，应对凶猛的狗）---（续写）家中 / 放学回家后（Julie 向妈妈讲述事情经过）
文章线索
What was the occasion for Sara ：________
What did Mom ask Julie to do ：________
How did Julie feel about Mom's repeated warnings ：________
What did Julie and Sara see on the way to school ：________
What danger did they encounter suddenly ：________
How did Sara react to the dog ：________
How did Julie want to appear in front of Sara ：________
What was Julie's inner desire about Mom's attitude ：________
情节线妈妈早餐时叮嘱姐姐 Julie 送妹妹 Sara 去幼儿园（Sara 第一天入园），反复强调要确保妹妹安全，Julie 觉得妈妈小题大做，希望妈妈不要再把自己当小孩看待→ ______________________________________→ 突然听到狗叫声，一只高大凶猛、长着锋利牙齿的狗朝她们走来，没有主人看管→ Sara 害怕得停下脚步，Julie 手心冒汗，但想在妹妹面前表现得勇敢，安慰妹妹会没事→______________________________→（续写）Julie 努力让自己的声音保持平静→（续写）Julie 向妈妈讲述了事情的经过，
情感线
Julie：不耐烦（对妈妈的过度叮嘱感到厌烦，觉得被当成小孩）→ 自豪（作为姐姐送妹妹上学，想表现得成熟）→ 紧张害怕（面对凶猛的狗时手心冒汗）→ 坚定勇敢（为了安抚妹妹，努力克制恐惧）→（续写）____________________（应对狗时的内心状态）→（续写）______________________________（成功脱险后的感受）→（续写）理解感激（向妈妈讲述后对妈妈的叮嘱有了新的认识）
Sara：兴奋期待（对幼儿园第一天充满向往，点头回应姐姐的问题）→ 恐惧不安（看到凶猛的狗后停下脚步，向姐姐表达害怕）→（续写）（得到姐姐安抚后的状态）→（续写）安心放松（成功脱险后）
妈妈：担忧牵挂（反复叮嘱 Julie 确保 Sara 安全，透过窗户目送她们）→（续写）___________________________（听到事情经过后的反应）
文章大意概括
中文：
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句式示例
宾语从句：___________________________________________________________________________非谓语：
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感叹句：
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同位语：_______________________________________________________________________________
完全倒装句：
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比喻：
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夸张：
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9．主题归类
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二、情节构造
第一段提示句：I was trying to make my voice sound calm.请思考以下问题，梳理第一段情节思路：
衔接句 1—— 对 “Julie 的应对行动” 提问：Julie 会说什么来安抚 Sara？会采取什么具体措施驱赶狗或保护妹妹？她会有哪些细节动作（如抱紧妹妹、后退等）？：________
衔接句 2—— 对 “狗的反应与脱险契机” 提问：狗会继续逼近还是有所退缩？是否会出现转机（如狗主人出现、路人帮忙等）？脱险过程会有哪些紧张又温暖的细节？：________
过渡逻辑：请说明第一段情节如何为第二段向妈妈讲述、Julie 的心态转变做铺垫：_______________________________________________________________________________
第二段提示句：I told Mom what had happened.
请思考以下问题，梳理第二段情节思路：衔接句 3—— 对 “讲述过程、妈妈的反应与 Julie 的感悟” 提问：Julie 会如何详细描述遇狗的经过和自己的感受？妈妈会有什么反应（如担心、欣慰、教导等）？Julie 通过这件事对 “姐姐的责任” 和妈妈的叮嘱有什么新的理解？：________
主题：
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三、段落构思
第一段：I was trying to make my voice sound calm.请按 “安抚→应对→脱险” 的逻辑，梳理第一段写作思路，并完成英文续写：思路：→①________（Julie 安抚 Sara 的语言和动作）→②________（Julie 应对狗的具体措施）→③________（脱险的契机与过程）；
英文续写：
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___________________________________________________________________________第二段：I told Mom what had happened.请按 “讲述→反应→感悟” 的逻辑，梳理第二段写作思路，并完成英文续写：思路：→④________（Julie 向妈妈详细讲述事情经过）→⑤________（妈妈的反应与回应）→⑥________（Julie 的感悟与成长）；
英文续写：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
参考答案
一、文本分析
1．角色Julie（姐姐，渴望被认可为 “成年人”，有责任心，起初对妈妈的叮嘱不耐烦，后在险境中展现勇敢担当）、Sara（妹妹，幼儿园第一天入园，天真兴奋，遇到危险时依赖姐姐）、妈妈（细心牵挂孩子，重视姐姐的监护责任，对孩子安全充满担忧）、凶猛的狗（途中出现的危险元素，推动情节发展）
2．视角第一人称（第一人称，以姐姐 Julie 的视角叙述）
3．时空线家中（早餐时妈妈叮嘱 Julie 送妹妹 Sara 上学，强调谨慎）--- 家门口（姐妹俩与妈妈道别，出发上学）--- 途中（经过花园和绿树，氛围轻松）--- 途中（遇到一只高大凶猛、无人看管的狗，陷入险境）---（续写）遇狗现场（Julie 安抚 Sara，应对凶猛的狗）---（续写）家中（Julie 向妈妈讲述事情经过）
4．文章线索
What was the occasion for Sara ：It was Sara’s first day of kindergarten.
What did Mom ask Julie to do ：Mom asked Julie to walk Sara to school and assure she gets there safely.
How did Julie feel about Mom's repeated warnings ：She thought Mom was making a big deal out of it and wished Mom wouldn’t treat her like a baby.
What did Julie and Sara see on the way to school ：They saw beautiful gardens and big, leafy trees.
What danger did they encounter suddenly ：They encountered a big, fierce-looking dog with long sharp teeth, no owner around.
How did Sara react to the dog ：She was scared, stopped walking and told Julie about her fear.
How did Julie want to appear in front of Sara ：She wanted to seem brave and like a grown-up.
What was Julie's inner desire about Mom's attitude ：She wanted Mom to stop treating her like a little kid.
情节线
妈妈早餐时叮嘱姐姐 Julie 送妹妹 Sara 去幼儿园（Sara 第一天入园），反复强调要确保妹妹安全，Julie 觉得妈妈小题大做，希望妈妈不要再把自己当小孩看待→ 姐妹俩与妈妈道别后出发，Julie 牵着 Sara 的手，以姐姐的身份感到自豪，询问妹妹是否期待开学，途中经过美丽的花园和绿树→ 突然听到狗叫声，一只高大凶猛、长着锋利牙齿的狗朝她们走来，没有主人看管→ Sara 害怕得停下脚步，Julie 手心冒汗，但想在妹妹面前表现得勇敢，安慰妹妹会没事→ 狗继续逼近，看起来像小马一样大，眼睛发红、牙齿锋利→（续写）Julie 努力让自己的声音保持平静，紧紧抱住 Sara 后退，尝试用坚定的语气驱赶狗，恰逢狗主人及时赶到带走了狗→（续写）Julie 向妈妈讲述了事情的经过，妈妈既担心又欣慰，Julie 终于理解了妈妈的叮嘱和作为姐姐的责任。
情感线
Julie：不耐烦（对妈妈的过度叮嘱感到厌烦，觉得被当成小孩）→ 自豪（作为姐姐送妹妹上学，想表现得成熟）→ 紧张害怕（面对凶猛的狗时手心冒汗）→ 坚定勇敢（为了安抚妹妹，努力克制恐惧）→（续写）沉着坚定（一边安抚妹妹一边冷静应对，不敢流露胆怯）→（续写）后怕欣慰（成功脱险后既害怕又庆幸妹妹安全）→（续写）理解感激（向妈妈讲述后明白妈妈的担忧，懂得责任的意义）
Sara：兴奋期待（对幼儿园第一天充满向往，点头回应姐姐的问题）→ 恐惧不安（看到凶猛的狗后停下脚步，向姐姐表达害怕）→（续写）依赖安心（紧紧抱住姐姐，在姐姐的安抚下逐渐平静）→（续写）安心放松（成功脱险后恢复安全感）
妈妈：担忧牵挂（反复叮嘱 Julie 确保 Sara 安全，透过窗户目送她们）→（续写）担忧欣慰（听到事情经过后既后怕又为 Julie 的勇敢担当感到欣慰，进一步解释叮嘱的原因）
文章大意概括
中文：
幼儿园开学第一天，妈妈叮嘱姐姐 Julie 送妹妹 Sara 上学并确保她的安全，Julie 觉得妈妈小题大做，渴望被当成成年人对待。姐妹俩出发后，途中经过美丽的花园和绿树，Sara 满怀期待。突然，一只高大凶猛、无人看管的狗朝她们走来，Sara 吓得不知所措，Julie 虽内心紧张，但为了保护妹妹努力表现得勇敢。最终她们成功脱险，Julie 向妈妈讲述了事情经过，也终于理解了妈妈的担忧和作为姐姐的责任。
英文：
On Sara’s first day of kindergarten, Mom asked her elder sister Julie to walk her to school and ensure her safety. Julie thought Mom was making a fuss and longed to be treated like an adult. After the two sisters said goodbye to Mom and set off, they passed beautiful gardens and big leafy trees on the way, with Sara full of expectation. Suddenly, a big, fierce dog with sharp teeth and no owner approached them. Sara was scared and at a loss, while Julie, though nervous inside, tried to be brave to protect her sister. They finally escaped danger safely. Julie told Mom what had happened and finally understood Mom’s worries and her responsibility as an elder sister.
句式示例
宾语从句：Mom whispered that I needed to be cautious when walking Sara to school. / I thought to myself why Mom was making such a big deal out of this.
非谓语：When I rose to have my bowl washed, Mom whispered something to me. / Sara was skipping down the front walkway to the sidewalk.
感叹句：What a fierce dog it was! / How brave Julie was to protect her sister!
同位语：Sara, my little sister, was having eggs for breakfast
.完全倒装句：Behind the big tree stood a fierce-looking dog.
比喻：The dog was as big as a small horse, with sharp teeth shining.
夸张：My heart almost jumped out of my chest when the dog growled at us.
主题
归类讲述了姐姐 Julie 在送妹妹 Sara 上幼儿园的途中遭遇凶猛野狗，从起初对妈妈的叮嘱不耐烦，到为保护妹妹勇敢应对危险，最终理解妈妈的担忧和自身责任的故事，体现了成长过程中责任意识的觉醒、姐妹间的亲情以及父母对孩子的牵挂。
二、情节构造
第一段提示句：I was trying to make my voice sound calm.
衔接句 1—— 对 “Julie 的应对行动” 提问：Julie 会说什么来安抚 Sara？会采取什么具体措施驱赶狗或保护妹妹？她会有哪些细节动作（如抱紧妹妹、后退等）？：Julie 会轻声对 Sara 说 “别害怕，姐姐在”，同时紧紧抱住妹妹慢慢后退，避免直视狗的眼睛，用坚定的语气对狗说 “走开”，不让自己表现出胆怯。
衔接句 2—— 对 “狗的反应与脱险契机” 提问：狗会继续逼近还是有所退缩？是否会出现转机（如狗主人出现、路人帮忙等）？脱险过程会有哪些紧张又温暖的细节？：狗会暂时停下低吼，盯着她们但没有立刻扑上来；此时狗主人焦急地赶来，大声呼唤狗的名字并道歉，用绳子拴住狗带走；脱险时 Julie 会紧紧护住 Sara，直到狗走远才松一口气。
过渡逻辑：通过 Julie 在险境中主动承担保护妹妹的责任，展现她的成长变化，为第二段向妈妈讲述时的感悟和对责任的理解做铺垫，让 “理解妈妈叮嘱” 的情节更自然。
第二段提示句：I told Mom what had happened.
衔接句 3—— 对 “讲述过程、妈妈的反应与 Julie 的感悟” 提问：Julie 会如何详细描述遇狗的经过和自己的感受？妈妈会有什么反应（如担心、欣慰、教导等）？Julie 通过这件事对 “姐姐的责任” 和妈妈的叮嘱有什么新的理解？：Julie 会详细描述狗的凶猛、自己的紧张以及如何安抚和保护妹妹，还有狗主人赶来的经过；妈妈会抱住 Julie，既担心又欣慰地说自己正是因为担心这种意外才反复叮嘱；Julie 会意识到妈妈的叮嘱不是 “小题大做”，而是对她们的牵挂，自己作为姐姐有保护妹妹的责任。
主题：成长意味着学会承担责任，亲人的牵挂是无声的爱，面对困难时的勇敢与担当能让人真正成熟。
三、段落构思
第一段：I was trying to make my voice sound calm.思路：→①Julie 轻声安抚 Sara，抱紧她后退→②Julie 用坚定语气驱赶狗，与狗对峙→③狗主人及时赶到，带走狗，姐妹俩脱险；
英文续写：
I was trying to make my voice sound calm. “Don’t worry, Sara, I’m here,” I whispered, hugging her tightly and stepping back slowly. I avoided looking directly at the dog’s red eyes and shouted firmly, “Go away! Leave us alone!” My legs were shaking, but I didn’t dare show my fear. The dog growled louder and took another step forward. Just as I was about to pick up a stick, a man ran over, calling the dog’s name anxiously. “I’m so sorry! He got loose,” he apologized, tying the dog to a leash. We watched the dog leave, and I finally let out a deep breath.
第二段：I told Mom what had happened.思路：→④Julie 向妈妈详细描述遇狗的紧张过程和保护妹妹的经历→⑤妈妈既担心又欣慰，解释叮嘱的原因→⑥Julie 理解妈妈的爱，明白作为姐姐的责任；
英文续写：
I told Mom what had happened. I described the fierce dog, my shaking legs, and how I tried to protect Sara. Mom pulled me into a hug, her eyes filled with worry and relief. “That’s why I told you to be careful,” she said softly. “As the elder sister, your job is to keep her safe, and I couldn’t bear to see you two in danger.” I nodded, feeling guilty for thinking her warnings were unnecessary. From that day on, I understood that being a grown-up isn’t about being independent—it’s about taking responsibility for the people we love.

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