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读后续写之动作描写
--动作分解与构造
Continuation Writing
--Description of Action
01
构建动作链
02
构建动作面
03
with复合结构
04
实战演练
目
录
CONTENTS
CONTENTS
教学目标、教学重难点
教学目标：
1.基础目标：能准确使用符合人物身份、场景需求的动作词汇,避免动作表达单一；
2.能力目标：能按“起因→发展→结果”的逻辑设计连续动作链让动作衔接自然；
3.提升目标：能将动作与环境、神态、心理及语言描写结合，增强续写的画面感
和感染力。
教学重难点：
1.动作词汇的精准化选择：聚焦“同义动作差异”引导学生根据人物情绪、场景
氛围选贴合词汇；
2.动作逻辑链的连贯性设计：训练学生按“触发动作→核心动作→伴随动作→结
果动作”的顺序构建链条；
3.动作与细节的融合技巧：强调“动作+神态/心理/环境”的搭配，让动作更具感
染力。
构建动作链
Action--chain
1. A, B and C 句式
2. Doing..., A and B 句式
3. Doing/Done/Having done,
+A 句式 +（doing...）
Step1 构建动作链--Action chain
操作：动作描写之具象化 --将动作
分解到“怎么做到的”。
动作链：是指在一个场景或情节中，一系列相互关联、前后相继的动作按照一定的逻辑顺序依次发生，形成一个连贯的动作序列，就像链条上的环节一样，环环相扣，共同推动情节发展，展现人物的行为和情感。
Looking around, the cat tiptoed
to see what was going on and
dashed into the basket quickly.
Step1 构建动作链
Pre-action
（先前动作）
Trans-action
(过渡动作)
Post-action后续动作
Action
具体动作
He stopped the taxi, jumped with the suitcase and told the driver, “Go to the police station, please.”
A
B
C
A，B and C 句式
Step1 构建动作链
描写：学生冲向饭堂。
想一想：冲向饭堂，这个动作前面或后面会发生什么呢？
The students jumped to their feet, rushed out of the classroom and ran to the dinning hall in order to avoid waiting in line.
学生
冲向饭堂
A
B
C
A，B and C 句式
跳起来
跑出教室
冲向饭堂
Step1 实战演练
A，B and C 句式
The man rushed towards the lake quickly, took off his clothes and jumped into the water to save the drowning child.
描写：跳入湖中救溺水的孩子。
想一想：跳入湖中，这个动作前面或后面会发生什么呢？
跳入湖中
救孩子
A
B
C
跑向湖边
脱掉衣服
跳水救人
Step1 构建动作链
描写：学生对老师说再见。
Hearing the bell for the end of the class, all the students stood up immediately and said goodbye to the teacher
Doing
B
C
Doing，A and B 句式
描写再见
的情景
铃声
响了
学生
起立
学生说
再见
想一想：学生说再见，这个动作前面或后面会发生什么呢？
Step1 实战演练
Doing，A and B 句式
Hearing the good news, he burst into laughter
and hugged everybody present with excitement.
描写：听到好消息的反应。
想一想：听到好消息，这个动作前面或后面会发生什么呢？
描写听到
好消息
A
B
C
听到
好消息
露出
笑容
拥抱
大家
Step1构建动作链
描写：他们在仰望星空。
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace from within.
Doing
did
doing
Doing..., A句式, doing...
想一想：仰望星空，这个动作前面或后面
会发生什么呢？
Step1 构建动作链
描写：妈妈拥抱孩子。
Moved by the children's behavior,
the mother hugged them tightly,
telling them how much she loved them.
Done
did
doing
Done, A句式, doing...
想一想：拥抱孩子，这个动作前面或后面
会发生什么呢？
Step1 构建动作链
描写：没有买到票。
Having queued for more than three hours, he was told that all the movie tickets had been sold out.
Having done
did
Having done, A句式(强调先后发生)
想一想：买票这个动作前面或后面会发
生什么呢？
先排队，然后才被告知票已被售罄。
构建动作面
Action--sence
神态 （appearance）
环境 （environment）
心理 （mental）
语言 （linguistic）
Step2 构建动作面
环境描写
他人视觉
01
02
03
构建
动作面
动作描写
语言描写
心理描写
神态描写
Step2 构建动作面--Action scence
描写：等待宣布结果的场景。
She was waiting for the result.
环境描写
神态描写
With so many people staring at him, she was so nervous
while waiting for the result that her face turned red, but she whispered to herself,“I can make it!”
心理描写
语言描写
Step2 构建动作面--实战演练
描写：疲惫的学生给自己加油。
He told himself to go forward bravery.
With the clock’s hands pointing to 12 midnight
in the quiet room, he rubbed his eyes hard,
took a breath and then said to himeself determinedly, “Just go forward bravely!”
环境描写
动作描写
语言描写
神态描写
Step2 构建动作面--实战演练
描写：看见那头熊，她感到非常害怕。
She was feared to see the bear.
With her face pale with fear, she watched
the bear run towards the fence,
her heart pounding in her chest, but she
yelled at the bear with courage, “Go away!”
神态描写
动作描写
心理描写
动作描写
语言描写
Step2 实战演练--构建动作面
Glancing through the audience off the stage, Tom took a deep breath to calm down and began his speech. The moment he finished the speech, all his classmates cheered up with wide eyes and burst into thunderous applause.
The teacher nodded with satisfaction and thumbed up at him.
Doing
A
B
心理
神态
动作
汤姆环顾台下观众，深吸一口气让自己平静下来，然后开始演讲。他一结束演讲，所有的同学都睁大了眼睛，兴奋地爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。老师满意地点点头，还对他竖起了大拇指。
心理
动作
构建动作链
With+宾语+宾补
with+宾语+to do
with+宾语+doing
with+宾语+done
Step3 with+宾语+to do,+sb. did sth.
1.我有这么多作业要完成，今晚不能和你去打篮球了。
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With so much homework to finish, I can't go out to play basketball with you tonight.
With a whole week to explore the city,
we can see all the sights together.
2.有整整一周的时间来探索这座城市，我们可以一起看
完所有景点。
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Step3 with+宾语+doing,+sb. did sth.
3.我眼含泪水冲出公寓，沿着街道奔跑。
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4.她害怕得脸色发白，看着熊向栅栏跑去，她的心怦怦
直跳。
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With tears welling up in my eyes, I rushed out of
the flat and ran along the street.
With her face pale with fear, she watched the bear run towards the fence, her heart pounding in her chest.
Step3 with+宾语+done,+sb. did sth.
5.我哥哥向我走来，他的眼中满是担忧。
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6.所有的作业都完成了，他收拾书包回家去了。
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My brother was making his way to me,
with his eyes filled with concern.
With all the homework finished, he packed his schoolbag and went home delightedly.
实战演练
Practice
makes perfect!
Step4 实战演练，构建动作链
1.露西走到窗前，打开窗户，抬头望着夜空。
Lucy __________ to the window,____________ it and
__________ out up at the night sky.
2.围坐在篝火旁，他们吃着烧烤，享受这一令人难忘的时刻。
______________around the campfire,
they ___________ on BBQ, ___________
the unforgettable moment.
came
opened
Gathering
feasted
enjoying
looked
Part 1 根据提示，构建动作链接。
Step4 实战演练，构建动作链
raised
Encouraged
whispering
clapped
nodding
smiling
3.受老师的话所鼓舞，露西举起了手，小声说:“我来。”
_____________ by the teacher's words, Lucy _________ her
hand, ______________,“I'll do it."
4.他激动地鼓掌，一边点头，一边微笑。
He ___________ his hands with excitement, _________ and
__________.
Step4 实战演练，构建动作面
Part 2 根据所给场景，进行合理的动作描写.
场景一：期末试没考好，拿着成绩单回家，父亲......
描写：父亲激动地站起来、摔书、拍桌子、冲出家、
摔门而去。
A flush of anger/range _____________him.
He ___________and________________ the room, __________ the door heavily/ ___________ the door.
swept over
stood up
stormed out of
shutting
slamming
Step4 实战演练，构建动作面
场景二：儿子丢了，担心了很久的妈妈看到被找回来的儿子。
描写：妈妈如释重负，喊名字，跑过去，抱住儿子, 哭起来。
根据所给场景，进行合理的动作描写
Waves of relief _________________ the mother. __________her son’s name，she ________________
her son and ____________him in her arms, with tears of delight streaming down without control.
flooded through
Crying out
dashed towards
enveloped
构建动作链
构建动作面
Homework
and Show Time
Step5 Homework and Show Time
Show Time
It’s time to show.Let’s go!
Step5 Homework and Show Time
1. 她跳起来，冲上前，紧紧地抱住了男孩。
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Part1 根据动作拆解，进行合理的动作描写(三种句式)
She jumped up, dashed forward and hugged the boy tightly.
Jumping up, she dashed forward and hugged the boy
tightly
A，B and C 句式
Doing，A and B 句式
Jumping up, she dashed forward , hugged the boy
tightly
Doing，A 句式，doing...
Step5 Homework and Show Time
2. 迈克凝视着我的眼睛，抚摸着我的头发，低声说：“你是我见过的
最漂亮的女孩。”(分词作状语)
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Looking straight into my eyes, Mike stroked my
hair, whispering, “You are the most beautiful
girl that I’ve ever met.”
Doing，A 句式，doing...
Mike looked straight into my eyes, stroked my
hair and whispered, “You are the most beautiful
girl that I’ve ever met.”
A，B and C 句式
Step5 Homework and Show Time
3. 当夜幕开始降临，简坐在草地上，凝视着广阔的天空，又害怕又饿。(分词作状语；形容词作状语)
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4.这个天真的女孩被妈妈抱着，激动地尖叫着，心在狂跳，毫不犹豫地打开了她期待已久的精致礼盒。(with 复合结构；分词作定语)
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As night was beginning to fall, Jane sat on the grass, staring at the vast sky, frightened and hungry.
With her heart beating wildly, the innocent girl, held by her mom and screaming with excitement, unwrapped her delicate gift box which she had been looking forward to without any hesitation.
时间状语+A句式，doing... and adj作状语
with+宾语+doing
Part2 2025年3月广东一模英语试题
第四部分 写作（共两节，满分40分）第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Right Thing to DoFauna had always dreamed of keeping a pet. Time and again, she asked her parents, promising to walk, feed, and look after it. Each time, though, they gave the same gentle response:“We'll see.”
One afternoon, on her way home from school, Fauna saw a little dog wandering near the park. Its fur was messy, and it looked lost, sniffing the ground as if searching for something. Feeling curious and hopeful, Fauna bent down and called to it. The dog quickly ran over，wagging（摇）its tail and gently pressing its nose into her hand，like they had known each other forever.
She looked around, but no one seemed to be searching for the dog. Feeling pity for the lost dog, Fauna decided to take it home. As they walked side by side,her heart swelled with joy. It felt as though this was the pet she had always dreamed of-a friend she had been waiting for.
At the front door, Fauna's mother greeted her with a warm smile. Although she found the dog adorable, she gently reminded Fauna that they needed to try and find its owner. If the dog was lost, someone must be missing it. Fauna reluctantly（不情愿地）agreed, though part of her wished no one would come forward to claim the little dog.
Over the next few days, Fauna and the dog-whom she named Buddy- grew inseparable. She fed him, played with him,and let him sleep curled up at the foot of her bed. Every day, it became harder to imagine lie without him. Buddy seemed happy too,wagging his tail whenever she came home from school. But Fauna knew deep down that she had to do the right thing. She and her parents posted flyers around town, hoping to find Buddy's owner.
Just a few days later, the phone rang. Fauna's heart sank as her father answered.From the conversation, it was clear that the caller was Buddy's owner. He described Buddy perfectly-the friendly eyes and playful personality. Fauna knew Buddy would soon be leaving her. Her father arranged for the owner to come by and pick Buddy up.
注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy. _____________________________________________________________________
That evening,Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind. ___________________________________________
Step5 Homework and Show Time
读后续写原题-- 写作分析
1.人物
①Fauna: had always dreamed of keeping a pet
②Her parents: gave the same gentle response: “We'll see.”
③a little dog (Buddy): wandering near the park. It looked lost,
sniffing the ground as if searching for something
2.故事梗概
Fauna一直想养宠物，但父母总是说“再说吧”。一天她遇到了一只流浪狗Buddy，带回家后虽然妈妈提醒要寻找主人，但Fauna还是和Buddy建立了深厚的感情。后来他们贴了传单，找到了主人，Buddy要被接走了。
续写部分的第一段开头是主人到来时Buddy高兴地跑向他，第二段是Fauna在房间感到空虚。
Step5 Homework and Show Time
3.续写安排
第一段: When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into
his arms, barking with joy.
①（与前一句衔接）Fauna的反应
②（过渡）如何与小狗的主人交流
③（承上启下）小狗回到了主人身边，Fauna又有怎样的反应
（与下文开头句衔接）
第二段: That evening, Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling
the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind.
①（与前一句衔接）父母怎样安慰Fauna
②（过渡）接下去，Fauna心态等方面有怎样的转变
③（收尾）从中学会了什么
Step5 Homework and Show Time
Finish, share and find out the action chain in the paragraph.
When the man arrived, the little dog ran straight into his arms, barking with joy. Fauna’s heart ached as she watched. Buddy
leap into the man’s embrace. The man’s eyes welled up as he whispered, “Thank you for keeping him safe.” He explained how Buddy had slipped out during a storm weeks ago. Fauna nodded silently, clutching the hem of her shirt to hide trembling hands. Buddy suddenly turned, bounding back to lick her cheek one last time. "He’ll miss you," the man said, handing her a small tag carved with Buddy’s name. “Keep this—you’re part of his story now.” As they left, Fauna traced the tag’s letters, tears finally spilling.
Step5 Homework and Show Time
That evening, Fauna sat quietly in her room, feeling the emptiness that Buddy's absence had left behind. She missed the warmth of having him there. Just then, her mom came in, her eyes twinkling with excitement. She stepped aside, revealing a small puppy behind her. Fauna's eyes widened in surprise. She gently took the puppy into her arms, feeling its tiny warmth. Her mom smiled, “He's all yours, Fauna. We wanted you to have a friend who could stay forever.” Fauna hugged the puppy close, tears welling up in her eyes—not from sadness this time, but from pure joy.
Step6 A Brief Summary
动词
构建
构建动作链
构建动作面
with复合结构
神态 （appearance）
环境 （environment）
心理 （mental）
语言 （linguistic）
with+宾语+to do
with+宾语+doing
with+宾语+done
A, B and C 句式
Doing, A and B 句式
Doing/Dong/Having done, A 句式 +（doing...）
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