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(共18张PPT)
2025年全国I卷读后续写
一块道歉饼干的和解魔法
Students can work out an outline based on the analysis of the sample text and complete the writing.
Students can realise the significance of the story--“understanding and forgiveness”.
Students can accumulate(积累) useful expression and apply them properly.
Teaching objectives
2
1
3
Lead in
Do you have siblings(兄弟；姐妹)
How do you settle a conflict with your siblings
Pre-writing：read the original story
2025年新高考I卷
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
Pre-writing：analyze the story
2025年新高考I卷
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
1. 圈出主要角色
Pre-writing：analyze the text
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
1. 圈出主要角色
2. 了解故事开端
Pre-writing：analyze the text
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
2. 了解故事开端
3. 梳理文章主线
3. 梳理文章主线(conflict-solution)
Conflict 1
(Para2)
My brother chose to bring his dog Toby he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter.
Solution 1
I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
Conflict 2
(Para4)
I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house.
Solution 2
My brother decided to leave.
Conflict 3
(Para5)
Solution 3
I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again.
His reply came— “Not a chance.”
Conflict 4
(Para6)
Solution 4
My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother,
I resisted.
情节线+情感线 【双线并行】
3. 梳理文章主线(conflict-solution)
Conflict 1
My brother chose to bring his dog Toby he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter.
Solution 1
I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
Conflict 2
I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house.
Solution 2
My brother decided to leave.
Conflict 3
Solution 3
I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again.
His reply came— “Not a chance.”
Conflict 4
Solution 4
My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother,
I resisted.
Happy; expectant
Awkward
Concerned; worried
Stubborn
情节线+情感线 【双线并行】
未解决的矛盾，也是最大的矛盾
Conflict 5
(para6)
My conscience (良心) kept bothering me.
Solution 5
Guilty; understanding
情节线+情感线 【双线并行】
续写套路——十句五定法
(续写词数150词左右，我们可以两个段落共续写10句，每段续写5句，每句15词左右，这其中有5句可以按照套路基本确定写作内容)
Para1 Para2
句1 句6
句2 句7
句3 句8
句4 句9
句5 句10
（衔接到Para1首句）
（衔接Para2句首句）
（过渡到Para2首句）
（故事结局、正能量）
主旨升华
细节描写
细节描写
Think to plan your plot.
Para1: I realized it was me who was at fault.
Para 2:With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
What was my fault
What did I decided to do after I realized my fault
What did my wife suggest
What preparation did my wife and I make
Tip: Infer the plot by making questions(what...how...why...)
What was my feeling
What was my brother’s reaction
What did I do and say
What was the ending What lesson did I learn
My home
I; My wife
My brother’s home
I; My brother Tobby
While-writing：write the story
Para1:
I realized it was me who was at fault.
1. 我是如此的自私以至于我只关注了孩子们的安全，完全忽略了哥哥的感受。
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2. 内疚又羞愧，我独自坐在后院的长椅上，双手掩面哭泣。
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3. 尽管我很后悔，我却不知道做什么来弥补我的错误。
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4. 意识到我的困惑和难过，我的妻子主动做了一些饼干作为礼物给我哥哥。
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5. 受到妻子鼓励，我增强了道歉的决心，前往哥哥家。
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While-writing：write the story
Para 2:
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my btother’s door.
6. 我深呼一口气，鼓起勇气敲门，心在胸口紧张地怦怦跳。
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7. 过了一会，门开了，哥哥出现，Toby激动地跳向前，摇着尾巴。(wag tail)
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8. 我抓住机会递上饼干，表达我真诚的道歉和深深的遗憾，声音略微颤抖。
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9. 令我惊讶的是，哥哥走近我并且温柔地拍拍我的肩膀，与我紧紧相拥。
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10. 这次宝贵的经历深深根植在我的心里，这会经常提醒我理解和爱的力量。
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While-writing：write the story
Para1:
I realized it was me who was at fault.
1. 我是如此的自私以至于我只关注了孩子们的安全，完全忽略了哥哥的感受。
.
2. 内疚又羞愧，我独自坐在后院的长椅上，双手掩面哭泣。
.
3. 尽管我很后悔，我却不知道做什么来弥补我的错误。
.
4. 意识到我的困惑和难过，我的妻子主动做了一些饼干作为礼物给我哥哥。
.
5. 受到妻子鼓励，我增强了道歉的决心，前往哥哥家。
.
So selfish was I that I only focused on the children’s safety, completely ignoring my brother’s feeling.
Guilty and ashamed, I sat alone on the bench in the backyard, sobbing with my face in my hands.
Regretful as I was, I was totally at a loss what to do to make up for my mistake.
Sensing my confusion and grief, my wife offered to cook some biscuits as a gift for my brother.
Encouraged by my wife, I strengthened my determination to apologize and headed for my brother’s house.
While-writing：write the story
Para 2:
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my btother’s door.
6. 我深呼一口气，鼓起勇气敲门，心在胸口紧张地怦怦跳。
.
7. 过了一会，门开了，哥哥出现，Toby激动地跳向前，摇着尾巴。(wag tail)
.
8. 我抓住机会递上饼干，表达我真诚的道歉和深深的遗憾，声音略微颤抖。
.
9. 令我惊讶的是，哥哥走近我并且温柔地拍拍我的肩膀，与我紧紧相拥。
.
10. 这次宝贵的经历深深根植在我的心里，这会经常提醒我理解和爱的力量。
.
I took a deep breath, gathered my courage and knocked on the door, my heart pounding/beating nervously in my chest.
After a while, the door opened and my brother’s face appeared, with Toby jumping forward and wagging it’s tail in excitement.
I seized the chance to hand him the biscuits, expressing my sincere apology and deep regrets, voice trembling slightly.
To my amazement, my brother approached me and tapped me on my shoulder gently, embracing me tightly.
This precious experience was deeply rooted in my heart, which would constantly remind me of the power of understanding and love.
Step6 Self-assessment
档次 评分细则
第五档 （21-25分） 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义的表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第四档 （16-20分） 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义的表达。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑
第三档 （11-15分） 与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。应用的语法结构和词汇能够满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。
第二档 （6-10分） 与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。
第一档 （1-5分） 与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。产出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。语法结构单调，词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。
缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。
A组
B组
C组
Anger makes you smaller, while forgiveness forces you to grow beyond what you were.
愤怒会让你变得渺小，而宽恕会让你超越过去。

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