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中考英语书面表达热门主题——机器人科技（范文两篇+名师点评）
假如你是李华，你校英语校报在上一期的报刊中报道了上文中的“人形机器人马拉松”，引起了广大同学们的兴趣。下期报刊计划以“The Robot I Want”为主题，请你写一篇英语短文进行投稿。
注意：(1)可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息。
(2)不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现真实校名和考生的真实姓名。
(3)语句连贯，词数80左右。作文开头已经给出，不计人总词数。
一、高频核心词汇（分场景分类）
1. 机器人相关基础词汇
核心名词：robot（机器人）、android（人形机器人）、automaton（自动机）、roboticist（机器人专家）
功能类词汇：service robot（服务机器人）、industrial robot（工业机器人）、robotic surgery（机器人手术）、smart robot（智能机器人）
动作类词汇：operate（操作）、assist（协助）、perform（执行）、replace（替代）、accomplish（完成）
2. 科技类升级词汇（高分替换）
形容词：advanced（先进的）、intelligent（智能的）、electronic（电子的）、marvelous（了不起的）、significant（重大的）
名词：technology（技术）、innovation（创新）、invention（发明）、advancement（进步）、breakthrough（突破）
动词：enhance（提升）、facilitate（促进）、boost（推动）、explore（探索）、resolve（解决）
二、万能句型（按写作结构分类）
1. 开头引入句（引出主题 / 现象）
With the rapid advancement of science and technology, robots have gradually become an indispensable part of our life.
Have you ever imagined that robots will take on more and more important roles in the near future
It is undeniable that robotic technology has brought great changes to people’s daily life and work.
2. 功能描述句（介绍机器人作用）
Some robots are designed to deal with boring or dangerous tasks that are not suitable for humans.
Service robots can assist people with housework, such as cleaning rooms, cooking meals and taking care of the elderly.
In the medical field, robotic surgery has helped improve the accuracy of operations and reduce patients’ recovery time.
3. 观点表达句（发表看法 / 利弊）
From my perspective, robots not only bring convenience to our life but also promote the development of society.
On the one hand, robots can save us a lot of time; on the other hand, we should avoid over-reliance on them.
Although robots have many advantages, we need to pay attention to potential problems like job replacement.
4. 结尾总结句（升华主题 / 展望）
Undoubtedly, robotic technology will continue to make progress and bring more surprises to our life.
In conclusion, we should make full use of robotic technology to create a better future for humanity.
What’s most exciting is that robots will play a more positive role in education, healthcare and other fields in the future.
三、逻辑衔接词（提升文章连贯性）
1. 递进关系（补充观点）
Moreover、Furthermore、What’s more、In addition、Additionally
Not only...but also...、Besides、Above all
2. 转折对比（表达利弊 / 差异）
However、Nevertheless、On the contrary、Conversely、On the other hand
Although、Even though、Despite the fact that
3. 因果关系（说明原因 / 结果）
Therefore、Consequently、Thus、As a result、Accordingly
Due to、Owing to、On account of、Thanks to
4. 举例 / 总结（论证 / 收尾）
For example、For instance、Take...as an example、A typical case is...
To sum up、All in all、In conclusion、Taking everything into account
四、高分范文
The Robot I Want（基础版）
I’m Li Hua. When I first read the news about the human-like robot marathon, I was really amazed.In my opinion,robot marathon is such a wonderful event
that it has left a deep impression on me.Meanwhile,it clearly shows how smart and powerful today’s robots are.
Watching those robots move and compete also makes me look forward to owning my own robot .As for its appearance, it should be of medium size—easy to carry. Besides，It will also have a lovely look with soft colors, so it can cheer me up every day.
This robot can not only help do housework like sweeping the floor but also chat
with me when I feel bored. I really hope such a smart robot will come into my life as soon aspossible.
五、名师点评：（基础版范文）
【点评亮点】紧扣主题，内容完整：全文围绕 “机器人马拉松引发对理想机器人的期待” 展开，依次阐述对赛事的观点、机器人的外观和功能，层层递进，完全覆盖写作要求，无遗漏要点。
语法扎实，句型规范：正确运用核心复合句：such…that 强调赛事的精彩，how引导的宾语从句说明机器人的优势，符合初中阶段语法考核重点；
熟练使用基础高分短语：look forward to doing、as for、not only…but also、as soon as possible，短语运用准确且不生硬，体现扎实的基础积累。
词汇恰当，符合水平：选用 amazed、smart、powerful、cheer me up 等初中核心词汇和短语，避免生僻词，既保证表达准确，又贴合普通班学生的词汇储备，读起来自然流畅。
逻辑清晰，衔接自然：通过Meanwhile、Besides等衔接词串联段落和句子，从 “赛事感受” 到 “外观设想” 再到 “功能期待”，逻辑链条完整，无跳跃感。
The Robot I Want（高阶版）
I’m Li Hua. When I first read the news about the human-like robot marathon, I was truly amazed. In my opinion,the robot marathon is such a wonderful event that it has left a deep impression on me. Moreover, it vividly shows how smart and powerful today’s technology has become.
When it comes to its appearance,the robot I want should be of medium size—neither too heavy to move around nor too tiny to interact with. What’s more special is that it willhave a soft,warm-colored body and gentle facial expressions so that it feels like a close friend rather than a cold machine.
This robot will not only handle tiring housework like sweeping floors and folding clothes but also provide me with emotional support.Besides,it can listen patiently to my worries and offer practical and comforting advice. Only in this way can such a robot make my life more convenient and colorful.
名师点评：（高阶版范文）
【点评亮点】
立意明确，内容有深度：不仅完成 “描述理想机器人” 的基础要求，还通过 “情感支持”（倾听烦恼、提供建议）拓展了机器人的 “人文属性”，从 “工具型机器人” 上升到 “伙伴型机器人”，立意比基础版更深刻，体现了批判性思维和丰富的想象力。
语法精湛，句型多样且自然：
高阶复合句密集且准确：such…that 强调句式、neither…nor 并列否定结构、What’s more special is that 主语从句、so that 目的状语从句、Only in this way can… 部分倒装句，覆盖中考核心高阶语法，且无堆砌感，每类句型都服务于内容表达；非谓语动词和固定搭配精准：provide sb. with sth.、listen patiently to、offer practical and comforting advice，短语搭配地道，体现对英语语言的灵活运用能力。
词汇精准，高级且贴合语境：替换基础词汇提升表达质感：truly 替代 really、vividly 替代 clearly、handle 替代 help do、colorful 替代 enjoyable，词汇梯度明显；精准运用抽象词汇：emotional support、practical and comforting，让功能描述更细腻，体现词汇储备的深度。
逻辑严谨，衔接流畅：Moreover、When it comes to、Besides 等衔接词运用精准，段落间过渡自然；外观描述中 “尺寸 + 材质 + 表情” 的细节递进，功能描述中 “家务辅助 + 情感支持” 的维度拓展，让全文结构严谨，层次感强。

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