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比赛类
Yoyo
比赛前
比赛中
比赛后
比赛过程
1. 做准备
2. 赛前的心理
1. 比赛开始
2. 遭遇打击
3. 受到鼓励，调整心态
1. Win or Fail，结束后，主角、亲人、评委的反应
2. 与在场人物的互动
3. 登台领奖 OR 失败后的心情
4. 情感升华
4. 全力以赴
文章所给的背景
PART 01
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para 2
PART 02
In-class practice随堂演练
PART 02
In-class practice
(2023年新高考I卷) When I was in middle school,my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest.I said no without thinking.I did not love writing.My family came from Brazil（巴西）,so English was only my second language.Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play,where I played all the parts.No one laughed harder than he did.
So,why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply:“Because I love your stories.If you're willing to apply yourself,I think you have a good shot at this."Encouraged by his words,I agreed to give a try.
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PART 02
In-class practice
I chose Paul Revere's horse as my subject.Paul Revere was a silversmith(银匠)in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18,1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming.My story would come straight from the horse's mouth.Not a brilliant idea,but funny;and unlikely to be anyone else's choice.
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从句 修饰银匠
从句 修饰银匠
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PART 02
In-class practice
What did the horse think,as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately.I got tired.I had doubts.I wanted to quit.But,like Revere's fabled horse,I kept going.I worked hard.I checked my spelling.I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library.I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher,he read it,laughed out loud,and said,“Great.Now,write it again.”I wrote it again,and again and again.When I finally finished it,the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing.If I didn't win,I didn't care.
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PART 03
Analysis
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记叙文
一般过去时
视角 第_____人称 体裁
时态 主题 在老师的鼓励下，写作获奖
时 空 线 when 老师提出参赛建议； 收到比赛结果通知
where 社会学科教室； 老师的办公室
人与自我→比赛→成长
PART 03
Plot line
One day,my social studies teacher asked me 1.__________(enter)a writing contest,but I refused,because my English was very poor,and writing was so difficult and 2. ________(pain) for me.However,my teacher held the belief 3._______I could do that well,because he 4.___________(watch)my presenting the play on the sinking of the Titanic,5._____played all the parts. He loved the play I 6.____________(perform).No one laughed harder than he did.
7.__________(encourage)by his words,I agreed to give it 8.__try.I chose Paul Revere's horse as my subject.I kept 9. _____(go).I worked hard.I checked my spelling,asked my older sister to correct my grammar,10. _______(check)out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere 11.______ the library,and even read a few of them.
to enter
who
painful
that
had watched
had performed
Encouraged
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going
checking
from
PART 03
Plot line
When I handed 12._____the essay to my teacher,he read it,laughed out loud,and said,"Great.Now,write it again."I wrote it again,and again and again.When I finally finished it,the thought of winning 13.__________(give)way to the 14.__________(enjoy)of writing.If I didn't win,I didn't care.When I almost forgot the contest,the news came.
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gave
enjoyment
PART 03
Emotion line
unwilling
不乐意
encouraged
受到鼓励
agreed
devoted
pleased
PART 04
In-class practice
A few weeks later; when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.________________
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I went to the teacher's office after the award presentation._____________________________
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衔接1 消息是什么
衔接3：老师的反应？
衔接2 ：颁奖典礼
PART 04
Design the general plots
比赛后
比赛后
比赛后
para 1
衔接1 得知得奖
para 2
衔接3：老师的反应
结局是？
过渡： 我得知的心理？
表情？肢体语言？
周围人 自己的反应
（但是不写老师）
我的回应？感激
衔接2 颁奖典礼发生了什么？
升华感悟
PART 03
Emotion line
unwilling
不乐意
encouraged
受到鼓励
agreed
devoted
pleased
shock wild joy
happy
inspired
hopeful
PART 04
Design the general plots
para 1
衔接1 得知得奖
How
hug congratulate rush trot
过渡： 我得知的心理？
表情？肢体语言？
周围人 自己的反应
Shock Wild joy
衔接2 颁奖典礼发生了什么？
step onto
A classmate rushed into classroom with apparent excitement in his look, and shoued,””You won! You got the first prize!
burst into applause
PART 04
Design the general plots
para 2
衔接3：老师的反应
Relief
过渡： 我的反应
鼓励→继续写作
express gratitude
升华感悟
PART 05
Try to write
Para 1
After few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.
I won the first place! →我的反应
With my heart pounded wildly, I felt shocked by the result.
→ My heart skipped a beat and disbelief washed over me.→ 他人
At the award ceremony hosted in the school hall, the headmaster kindly gave me a certificate.
As I accepted the award, my face lit up with joy with trembling hands.
And then the crowd burst into thunderous applause.
→ A wave of applause rang through the hall.
Para 1
A few weeks later; when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.
I was sitting in class when the result echoed through the loudspeaker.
As I heard my name, I felt a mix of shock and thrill with my heart pounding wildly——I got the first prize!
The world seemed to stand still.
My classmates stared at me in surprise, shouted crazily,and then burst into thunderous applause,which made me dumbfound with unexpected pride.
Theypushed me to the award presentation.
When I mounted to the podium, all my efforts finally paid off.
Para 2
I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.
His face lit up the moment he saw me.
I showed him the certificate and thanked him heartily.
He read it over and over and patted me on the shoulder.
“Congratulations!I knew you would make it."
A broad smile spread across his mouth, "But this is just the beginning.You can keep writing and find your own voice."
I still remember the spark in his eyes.
That was when I fell love in writing and started my lifelong writing journey,just like the silversmith's horse speeding through the night.
Para 2
Linda finished her dancing successfully and then came Mary’s turn.
He welcomed me with a smile and said , "You've come a long way,"with his voice filled with pride.
I couldn't help but feel grateful for his encouragement and patience.
"Thank you for believing in me,"I replied,realizing how much his words had meant.
As I left his office,I felt not just proud,but truly inspired.
I knew that this was just the beginning.
I was inspired to keep writing and exploring my creativity.
PART 06
范文欣赏
Para 1
A few weeks later,when I almost forgot the contest,there came the news.
①(news说什么)令我惊讶的是，我赢得了一等奖。
To my utter amazement, I won the first prize.
②(我的反应)巨大的兴奋抓住了我，因为我发现我的努力得到了回报。
Great excitement seized me as/because/ for I found my efforts paid off.
③ (参加award)然后，过了一节课，我就和其他学生一起参加了颁奖典礼。
Then,after a lesson, I attended an award ceremony with other students.
④(award场景细节):当我从校长那里领奖时，人群爆发了雷鸣般的掌声。
The moment I received the prize from the headteacher, the crowd burst into thunderous applause.
⑤舞台下站着我的社会研究老师，他用力拍手。感动，我知道我的成功也有他的一部分。
Under the stage stood my social studies teacher,who clapped his palms heavily.Touched,I knew my success was also part of his contribution.
Para 2
I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.
⑥(互动):我的老师在那里等着我，咧嘴笑着。我迫不及待地向他展示奖品，同时向他表示感谢。
My teacher was there waiting for me,grinning.I couldn't wait to show him the prize while expressing gratitude to him.
⑦(我问):然后，我感到困惑和好奇，问他为什么坚持让我继续写作，并对我充满信心。
Then,confused and curious,I asked why he insisted I kept writing and had so much faith in me.
⑧(他答):看着我的眼睛，他真诚地解释道：“你有写作的天赋。”
Looking at my eyes,he explained sincerely,“You have a gift for writing.”
⑨(结局):受到他的话的启发，我答应坚持写作并创作更多作品。
Inspired by his words,I promised to hold on to writing and create more works.
⑩(爱上写作):通过这次比赛，我曾经觉得艰难和痛苦的事情，逐渐成为我毕生的追求，这要归功于社会学老师的鼓励。
Through the contest,the thing I found tough and painful,gradually became my lifelong pursuit,thanks to my social studies teacher's encouragement.
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