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高分写作 B.读后续写
第3讲　围绕中心词提问法构建合理的续写情节
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
(2024·全国新课标Ⅰ卷·浙江)
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers' offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.
Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn't exist.
In her first PE class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather's, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car!
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It's just the beginning，” she thought. “I'll come in last for sure.”
Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile”. Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.
注意：续写词数应为150个左右。
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. __________________________________________________________
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Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. ________
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续写部分所给的两段开头语为我们规划了写作的思路和框架，所以在开始写作之前必须研读两段开头语，找出其关键词。写作时，我们往往采用逆向思维，即根据续写第二段开头语所提供的信息倒推出续写第一段的故事情节，再根据续写第二段开头语展开后面的故事情节。基于原文和开头语提供的信息，采用围绕中心词提出一些相关问题，然后回答这些问题的方法，拓展我们的写作思路和思维角度，最终形成合理的故事情节线。
续写第一段我们可以尝试问这些问题：
1. Why was Eva surprised
2. What did she learn from this experience
然后进行详细的回答，我们就可以写出这样的一段：
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work！” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. Knowing that she had performed better than most classmates, she was more than delighted but couldn't help asking herself, “How did I make it This is absolutely unbelievable！” She began to recall the process of her running: the oak tree, the curve spot, the first lap… “Oh, I get it! The seemingly unattainable goals can be divided into several practical small goals. With each small goal fulfilled, the ultimate goal will be naturally achieved.” Realizing this, she felt her world lighten little by little.
续写第二段我们可以尝试问这些问题：
1. What was the same trick How did she deal with the school building by using it
2. How did such experience influence her later life
然后进行详细的回答，我们就可以写出这样的一段：
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.She stopped thinking about all the different hallways and rooms and made a schedule for herself. The first week she would memorize teachers' offices, the second week laboratories, and the library, the cafeteria… Time passing by, she kept in mind where most rooms were. A sense of achievement gradually rose in her mind. Later she applied the trick to her study and did better and better in academic performance.

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