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Focusing on
details and clues
Continuation writing
Ed Guo
Do you still remember the story of “praying mantis”
They called him “Donnie the Dung Beetle”, Donald didn't mind the comparison, as he knew that African dung beetles (粪金龟) were known for moving things a thousand times their own body weight. However, his classmates in Mrs. Beecher’s third-grade class probably didn’t know this fact. ①Nobody knew insects like Donald did, and he figured that ②being compared to a dung beetle was not a praise.
What information can you get from the highlighted sentences
Donald knew much about insects
His classmates didn’t respect him
Donald knew much about insects
His classmates didn’t respect him
The first paragraph has a lot to say!
The crucial “first paragraph”
Introduce the topic;
Display the story setting: time, place, characters...
Imply the plot.
the ending should echo the beginning!
sectional practice
Read the first para.
1. What is the problem
2. How can you have an echoing ending
Michael and Greg were brothers and they lived in a family with a tight budget. They both missed the field trip last year because they could not cover the extra fee.This year, Michael’s class would arrange a field trip to the city museum and he really wanted to go. So he was trying to earn some pocket money.
What may happen in the end
Michael and Greg were brothers and they lived in a family with a tight budget. They both missed the field trip last year because they could not cover the extra fee.This year, Michael’s class would arrange a field trip to the city museum and he really wanted to go. So he was trying to earn some pocket money.
With the money he earned, Michael finally made his dream of attending the field trip come true.
With the money he earned, Michael finally made his dream of attending the field trip come true. More than that, the money could cover the fee for both of the two brothers!
Read the first para.
1. How can you have an echoing ending
2. What is the possible theme
Jumping Over Boundaries
When I was in elementary school, we had an annual sports day. Girls could do many things like hopscotch, jump rope, tetherball, and dodgeball, except high jumping. Only boys could do high jumping.
That’s what I wanted to do-high jumping. So I went to the coach.
Where else can you find clues
The vital “beginning sentences”
Indicate what you should write next;
Indicate what should be mentioned above;
Imply the last plot you should write in the first part.
every word counts!
Read the two “beginning sentences”
1. What should be mentioned in the first part
2. What to continue in the second part
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers' offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym. (para.1)
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
What was going on
Para1. When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Para2. Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
1. Enrich Eva’s surprise: what she thought, what she acted...
3. How Eva applied the trick to remembering buildings.
2. Eva found a trick to solve problems.
4. Finding her way was no longer a headache for Eva.
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers' offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.
integrated practice
2023新课标I卷
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
Read the first 2 paragraphs.
1. What happened
2. How did the teacher persuade the author
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
My teacher wanted me to enter a writing contest, but I refused because I didn’t like writing.
He encouraged the author to have a try.
Read the rest part
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
Think:
Q1. How did the author treat the contest
Q2. Why did the author say “If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care”
The author was very serious and hard-working.
Because the author enjoyed the process of writing.
Read the two beginning sentences
What clues can you find
Discuss with your partners!
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
What was going on
Para1. A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
Para2. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
How did I feel
What was the news
What happened in the office
How did the story come to a happy ending
Why
What
You should mention that in the first para.!
Write your plot points
past tense
first person
echoing ending
What was going on
Para1. A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
I won the first place.
Hearing that, I was in great surprise and delight.
I attended the award presentation to receive my prize.
I felt an urge to share my success with my teacher.
What was going on
Para2. I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
I expressed my gratitude to my teacher.
He praised me for my achievement and effort.
He encouraged me to keep going.
Finally I fell in love with writing.
Can we add something more
...I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. (para.4)
Think further:
How can you apply the image of “Revere’s horse” to your essay
Homework:
Finish your essay according to the points.
Assessment chart
评价维度 细则 分值 分数
要点齐全 每段2-3个要点 12
段落间衔接合理 过渡句、承上启下 3
语法词汇使用正确 时态、语态、拼写 5
内容表达丰富多样 情感描写、侧面描写、 使用从句、非谓语 5
书写及字数较差，扣分 （-2）
Thank
you
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I was informed that I won the first prize in the writing contest and that there would be an award presentation in two days. Hearing the news, I stood there, frozen. I couldn't believe my ears. My classmates gave me a look of disbelief at first, and then cheered and clapped happily. When I came to my senses, tears of excitement came to my eyes. At the award presentation, I accepted the award certificate, extremely nervous and excited. At that moment, I couldn’t help thinking of my teacher.
I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. When I presented the award certificate to my teacher, his eyes glistening with tears, he reached out his hands and hugged me tightly. I expressed my sincerest gratitude to the teacher and attributed this small achievement to him. Looking into my eyes, he said, “I'm so proud of you. It's your own hard work that paid off. Believe in yourself and you can write better and better.” I nodded determinedly. That was when I fell in love with writing.

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