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Welcome to our class
Janet
Lead in
Enjoy a beautiful song.
一壶漂泊 浪迹天涯难入喉 流浪太苦了
你走之后 酒暖回忆思念瘦 好想你，我瘦了
水向东流 时间怎么偷 时间过的太快了
花开就一次成熟 我却错过 我错过了唯一的机会
Which one is better
How to make your description vivid
Show，don't tell
Version 1: She felt cold.
Version 2: She pulled her collar up, tightened her scarf, and turned her face away from the biting wind.
Tell是直接陈述结论，而Show则把读者拉到你描述的场景当中，通过故事细节的展示，让读者自己得出结论。
Read and Compare
Tell
Show
What is Show， Dont' tell
Show means give the readers actions, thoughts, senses, and feelings rather than simple descriptions.
How？
She walked to the window.
She slipped out of bed and tiptoed to the window.
她溜下床，蹑手蹑脚地走到窗户旁边。
Skill 1：Choose specific Verbs用精准动词代替笼统动词
How to show (1)
All of the words below can take the place of said, but they are used under different conditions. Choose the proper words to fill in the blanks.
The Math Test
As the test began, Mike leaned over to _________, "I'm stuck.” "Focus," Tom
muttered back. Minutes later, Mike had to_______, "Tell me the answer”
"No," Tom________ firmly. "Please," Mike began to ______, "I'll fail if you
don’t tell me." Tom started to ___________, "it's wrong!” Suddenly, the
teacher stood over them, asking "Is there a problem ” Mike tried to ________,
"I was just... asking for a pencil."
ask beg explain reply whisper complain
whisper
ask
replied
beg
complain
explain
低语
询问
回答
乞求
抱怨
解释
想要增添“读后续写”的表达效果，特别要注意避免使用泛泛而谈的抽象词，应该多使用具体词汇。
Tell ：
He is eating Latiao.
Show：
He tore the package, squeezed out one strip, and took a big bite.
How to show (2)
Skill 2: Break down action to form action chain
He was disappointed to see the test paper.
看到试卷

He _______________________ quickly, ______ the score, and _____ the table in disappointment.
如何分解动作：
扫视试卷
看到成绩
捶打课桌
scanned the test paper
spotted
pounded
Mom spanked me.
指出错误
妈妈打我
严肃的看着我
轻轻的打了我
Mom _________ me seriously, ____________ my mistake, and _________ me gently as a lesson.
stared at
pointed out
spanked
画面：下车
动作拆解：
收拾行李，起身，下车
He his luggage, from the chair and then ________ the car excitedly.
picked up
rose
got off
Scene: 跳水救人
Henry jumped into the river and saved Robert.
When the “Help!”, Henry the riverside, ________his clothes and the water without hesitation. He Robert just as he was sinking the last time. By great effort, and with much danger to himself, he finally _________ Robert to the shore.
hearing
dashed to
took off
jumped into
reached
pulled / dragged
Watch a video clip
文本分析
I tried to shake her off, but she just clamped on tight and yanked me along, saying, "Come on!"
My mom came out of the house and immediately got the world’s complex look on her face. "Well, hello," she says to Juli.
"Hi!" I'm still trying to pull free, but the girl's got me in a death grip. My mom's grinning, looking at our hands and my red face. "And what's your name, honey "
"Julianna Baker. I live right over there," she says, pointing with her unoccupied hand.
"Well, I see you've met my son," she says, still grinning away.
Finally I break free and do the only manly thing available when you're seven years old — I dive behind my mother.
How does the writer let us feel the boy’s dislike
From what aspects
文本分析
I tried to shake her off, but she just clamped on tight and yanked me along, saying, "Come on!"
My mom came out of the house and immediately got the world’s complex look on her face. "Well, hello," she says to Juli.
"Hi!" I'm still trying to pull free, but the girl's got me in a death grip. My mom's grinning, looking at our hands and my red face. "And what's your name, honey "
"Julianna Baker. I live right over there," she says, pointing with her unoccupied hand.
"Well, I see you've met my son," she says, still grinning away.
body language
voice
facial expressions
Finally I break free and do the only manly thing available when you're seven years old — I dive behind my mother.
Skill 3
Face+ Body +Voice
Liu Jingyang and her mother hugged each other excitedly
after her victory.
①Face:
Liu’s eyes ___________________with great delight.
A broad smile __________across her face.
Tears __________ in her mom’s eyes.
Show: They were excited.
sparkled / twinkled
spread
glistened
闪耀
漾开展开
She ________ toward her mom, and _____ her on the shoulders gently, sharing her joy with her excitedly.
Mom proudly gave her a thumps-up.
Show: They were excited.
②Body:
sprinted
patted
“I made it ” she screamed / yelled / exclaimed at the top of her lungs.
“I’m so proud of you!” Mom said, her voice trembling with joy.
③Voice:
Show: They were excited.
①Sb. + V, with复合结构
②Sb. + V, 独立主格结构
③Sb. + V, V-ing伴随状语
④ “无灵”主语句
Useful sentence patterns
Crossing the finish line, Liu Jingyang sprinted toward her mom at once and pulled her into a tight hug (body) . “Mom, I won!” she exclaimed (voice). Tears glistening in her eyes (face) , mom stroke her back gently (body) . “I’m so proud of you!” she said in a choked voice. (voice) , giving her a thumps-up. (body)
Show it
face
body
voice
She _______________ her eyebrows.
Her eyes _____________ with anger.
Her cheeks turned________________
She _________ her fists and ______ them widely in the air.
Her whole body was _______.
She paced back and forth like a caged _____.
“I’m very disappointed. Is this how you repay my efforts ”She yelled at the top her lungs.
Janet was angry because many students didn’t finish homework.
furrowed/knitted
red/flush
burnt/exploded
clenched
waved
shaking
tiger
face
body
voice
With her eyebrows knitted, eyes exploding with anger, and cheeks flushed, Janet clenched her fists and waved them widely in the air. “How dare you! Is this how you repay my efforts ” she yelled at the top of her lungs.
Janet was angry because many students didn’t finish homework.
Suppose: You were bound for another city where you will study, you exchanged goodbye with your mother at the railway station.
Describe the scene of separation.
“Take care, my dear!” Mom said in a choked voice. She threw her arms around me and stroke my hair. I was seized by sadness, my lips trembling and tears streaming down my face.
For a moment, the world and all its people disappeared, only Mum and me at the station.
“I have to leave now.” Mum murmured. She turned around and headed for the exit.
“I will miss you!” I waved my arm and shouted at the top of my voice. But she didn’t hear me.
Through misty eyes / glistening tears, I saw her back lost among crowds of people and no longer visible.
Don’t tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass.
---Anton Chekhov
不要告诉我月光闪烁，向我展示玻璃碎片闪烁的光芒。
---契科夫
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