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(共33张PPT)
2023年
黑吉皖滇
四省联考
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Read the story
Read the story
1 My husband and I enjoy seeing life through the eyes of our children. It's amazing to watch as they discover their world.
2 While we were outdoors last summer enjoying the sunshine, our oldest daughter, Kaytlin, called me to the doorway. Beneath the steps was a baby red squirrel.We watched it from a distance, not wanting to disturb it or scare off its mother. But after a long wait - and looking all around our house for signs of a nest or a mother-we realized the tiny squirrel was lost.
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Watch→我和丈夫是站在旁观者的视角来见证这件事的
5 W+ 1 H
how
Theme
续写类型
who
where
when
what
why
I
my husband
my children
outdoors
last summer
a squirrel
waited and found it was lost
found
a lost squirrel
a red squirrel
体裁： 记叙文
人称： 第一人称
时态： 一般过去时
主题： 人与自然
审题
两条线
Beginning
Climax/Conflict
Ending
plot line
emotion line
Read the story
3 Shaking terribly, he was weak, thin, and hungry. We tried to find an expert to help, but the Inland Fisheries and Wildlife website showed that there were no wildlife experts in our area. After some quick research, we concluded that the best way to give the squirrel a fighting chance was to care for him ourselves. So a trip to the local store for milk and supplies was in order. More research taught us how much to feed him, how to estimate his age, how and when to wean （断奶） him, and that we should let him go as soon as he could survive on his own.
4 Our daughters and I took turns in feeding “Squirt.” Kaytlin took on the most responsibility. She taught him to eat from a bottle, and she woke in the night for his feeds.
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5 To our relief, Squirt soon became healthy and strong. Within a few weeks he became more active. He would chatter （吱吱叫）for his next meal, playfully go around the girls, and lie down on them for sleep. It wasn't long before he was weaned onto solid food and reintroduced to the wild.
6 His first few visits to the great outdoors were funny. Just like a child, he would play in the grass some and then run back to Kaytlin for safety. Soon she had him climbing trees and finding nest material.
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读Para 1+2
→定情节发展
读para 1+2→定情节发展
One day in the trees, Squirt met up with a family of gray squirrels.
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One night, Squirt didn’t come back to our house and it rained hard.
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写Squirt 和灰松鼠的事
Squirt 会回来
读para 1+2→定情节发展
Para 1
One day in the trees, Squirt met up with a family of gray squirrels.
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固定 续写首句
固定 承接下一段的首句
Para 2
One night, Squirt didn’t come back to our house and it rained hard.
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固定 续写首句
固定 结局/升华主旨
Squirt 和灰松鼠
寻找Squirt的心路历程
Squirt 要回来
尝试写 Para 1
One day in the trees, Squirt met up with a family of gray squirrels.
To our surprise, the gray squirrels were startled by us, crouching on the tree,chattered fiercely and trembled his furry tail.
Approaching them slowy, Squirt smelled and tried to please them.
.....
Squirt often went outdoors, looking for new friends, but still came back home at night.
One night, Squirt didn’t come back to our house and it rained hard.
尝试写 Para 2
One night, Squirt didn’t come back to our house and it rained hard.
.....
At the sight of this, a mix of pride and sorrow washed over us, knowing that it was time to say goodbye.
....
This unforgettable expericne threw a significant stone into the pond of our life and the ripples would never end.
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列大纲
列大纲
Para 1 角色： 我 丈夫 女儿 Squirt Gray squirrels
Para 1 大意： 和灰松鼠发生的事+ Squirt 依然会回来
Para 1 续写思路：见 闻 说 感 做
Q1： How did Squirt get along with the gray squirrels (动作+心理活动)
Q2： How did we react to Squirt’s new condition
Q3： Did he come back to our house every night (下段首句)
①被接纳，马上打成一片，和谐相处→happy？excited？
② 毛色不同，谨慎试探，被接纳，和谐相处→ upset happy
不舍+开心→happy + sad
每天晚上还是回来
① 不过越来越迟
② 不过越来越迟，和我们疏远，我们失落
列大纲
Para 2 角色： 我 丈夫 女儿 Squirt Gray squirrels
Para 2 大意： 寻找Squirt+ Squirt 最终的去留
Para 2 续写思路：见 闻 说 感 做
Q1:How did we feel about Squirt’s absence in rainy day
Q2: What did we do with the situation （动作）
Q3：How would the story end What was my reflection （结尾+感悟）
worried
① 当晚寻找→与新朋友相处挺好的→放心告别
② 寻找→被雨淋湿 造孽巴萨→带回家
③ 不找，担心一晚→第二天松鼠和他的伙伴回来
① 想要留下他 VS 一如往常每天回来或者偶尔回来
② 给他自由 VS 永远离开
读para 1+2→定情节发展
Para 1
One day in the trees, Squirt met up with a family of gray squirrels.
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3.
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固定 续写首句
固定 承接下一段的首句
Para 2
One night, Squirt didn’t come back to our house and it rained hard.
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固定 续写首句
固定 结局/升华主旨
Squirt 和灰松鼠
孩子学到了什么
人与自然 爱与自由
Squirt 要回来
灰松鼠是否接受？
我们的反应和感受
我们的纠结
寻找Squirt的心路历程
Squirt 和我们最终的抉择
素材：表达内心犹豫和纠结的句子
1.A war of conflicting emotions raged within me:A or B.
一阵矛盾的情感在我内心肆虐：A 还是B。
A war of conflicting emotions raged within me: to let him go or to bring him back
2.I was trapped in a whirlpool of my own thoughts： A or B.
我陷入自身思绪的漩涡，
I was trapped in a whirlpool of my own thoughts: do I continue learning or givng up
素材：下定决心的句子
1.And then,a wave of clarity cut through the noise in my mind.The path ahead,though daunting,was now unmistakably clear——finally, I decide to....
接着，一阵突如其来的清晰穿透了我脑海中的纷杂噪音——我最终决定...
2.I took a deep breath,exhaling all my doubts.My fingers curled into fists,not of unwillingness,but of unwavering determination.
我深吸一口气，呼出了所有的疑虑。我的手指蜷缩成拳，不是因为不舍，而是因为坚定不移的决心。
补充素材:动物的叫声
狗吠→ bark
猫叫→ meow
松鼠和鸟→ chatter 吱吱叫
老虎，狮子→roar 吼叫
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参考范文
→积累词句
Para 1
One day in the trees, Squirt met up with a family of gray squirrels.
Unfortunately, they were not happy with his presence and scolded him, driving (swatting) him away.
Squirt quickly learned to be more socially aware and, for the next few days, he spent his time playing in the trees around our house.
At night, he would come back to rest.
Squirt's visits to the trees became a regular routine, and he soon became familiar with the gray squirrels.
He learned to respect their boundaries and, in return, they accepted him as part of their community.
Squirt was now a part of the family, and he enjoyed his time in the trees with them.
Para 2
One night, Squirt didn't come back to our house and it rained hard.
Our girls fretted.
But with the sun rising, there was Squirt begging for food to eat.
And that remained the pattern for a few weeks.
Squirt became famous in our neighborhood, and visitors knew to be on the lookout when they stopped by.
But mostly he played in the trees, chattering away to anyone who happened to cross his path.
The experience was entertaining and heartwarming for our family.
This magical squirrel was changing our lives and our children learned to value and appreciate life, but this was just the beginning.
下水作文 Para 1
One day in the trees, Squirt met up with a family of gray squirrels.
Curious to see these creatures, Squirt felt a sense of closeness rising in his body.
He took one step forward , but quickly jumped back.
However, the next moment, we found that Squirt was playing with these gray squirrels merrily among the branches, and chasing after each other.
Seeing their relationship bonded, we felt both relieved and a bit sad, especially Kaytlin.
We were relieved that he would finally return to his natural world, where he belonged.
Meanwhile, we were sad because we had already made him a member of our family.
He still came back every night, but much later. And every morning, he set off early.
下水作文 Para 2
One night, Squirt didn't come back to our house and it rained hard. Worried, we searched every corner of the yard, praying that he could be sheltering from the rain somewhere, but in vain.
Not wanting to give up the hope of finding him, we opened our umbrellas and with headlights headed for the place where they used to play together.
Suddenly out of a tree hole came this red creature, who was sleepily looking at us and then jumped into Kaytlin’s arms.
“He is gong to leave us forever,” Kaytlin sighed.
Though a little sad, I exchanged an understanding smile with my husband, really glad that the bitter-sweet experience helped our kids find their world of love with Squirt for company.
Para 1 描写 Squirt
1.One day in the trees, Squirt met up with a family of gray squirrels.
Q1:How did Squirt get along with the gray squirrels (动作+心理活动)
At first, he was hesitant to approach them, but after a few tentative and cautious trials, he finally took his first step to the group.
Squealing in delight, never had Squirt acted so delightedly in his life.
First hesitant, he soon grew curious and approached them with caution, his tiny red tail wagging back and forth.
Para 1 描写 Squirt
1.One day in the trees, Squirt met up with a family of gray squirrels.
Q1:How did Squirt get along with the gray squirrels (动作+心理活动)
At first, he was hesitant to approach them, but after a few tentative and cautious trials, he finally took his first step to the group.
Squealing in delight, never had Squirt acted so delightedly in his life.
First hesitant, he soon grew curious and approached them with caution, his tiny red tail wagging back and forth.
素材： 人与自然升华句
We can shower all the creatures with love and care, but we also should allow them the freedom to return to the wild.
It was a tearful moment, but we knew it was the right thing to do. Squirt had taught us so much about caring for others and letting go.
We will always remember the time we spent with Squirt and the lessons we learned about the importance of taking care of our wildlife.
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人与自然（动物）
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话题巩固：2023浙江十校联考April Fools' Day
Nat woke early and jumped out of bed. Today was the best day of the year for him. Nat loved to play tricks, and today was April Fools’ Day.
Some of Nat’s tricks were big hits. Last year, he short-sheeted his sister’s bed. She couldn’t understand what was going on and started to think that her legs must have grown much longer during the day. When she realized what had happened, she laughed her head off.
Some of Nat’s tricks were not so successful. Mom didn’t think finding a furry toy mouse in the fridge was humorous at all. After she calmed down a bit, she said, “That’s it! There’s a ban on Nat tricks for two weeks.”
Nat was also the class clown. He was always making jokes in class. He liked it when he made the other kids laugh. Since it was April Fools’ Day, he felt like he had to come up with something really good to provide his classmates with some really good entertainment.
For that, Nat thought long and hard before he came up with his brilliant idea. He bought two toy frogs which were made out of green plastic and looked very realistic. Nat knew just the trick he would play on his classmates.
Nat arrived at school early. To succeed in his plan, he needed to get into the classroom before anyone else. Nat’s class had a rainforest terrarium (饲养皿). It had plants, insects, and three frogs in it. Nat’s idea was to pretend that the frogs had escaped. He knew that Ms. Lopez, his teacher, wasn’t afraid of frogs but several of his classmates, including himself, were.
Nat slipped into the classroom. Good! There was nobody here. He put one of the toy frogs on the floor, near the terrarium and the other on his friend Stacey’s desk. Nat knew that Stacey really didn’t not like frogs. Also, she played a great trick on him last April Fools’ Day. To make his trick more convincing, Nat pushed the lid of the terrarium open. Then he rushed off to morning gathering.
注意： 1.续写词数应为150左右：
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
下水作文 Para 1
When the students got back to class, no one noticed the toy frogs at first.
Then Stacey, who finally noticed the frog, screamed and pointed at her desk.
A couple of other kids leapt out of their seats and shrieked while the rest were laughing and banging their desks.
Nat was feeling very pleased with himself. His trick was definitely a success.
But he knew he had to hide his glee.
He pretended that he was working and reached out for a piece of paper.
It was then that something cold and wet slithered滑动 past his fingers.
It was a frog- a real one!
下水作文 Para 2
Nat realized that he had opened the lid of the terrarium.
Suddenly, there came a loud croak呱呱地叫 from under his chair.
Nat almost jumped out of his skin吓了一跳 with fright.
Now he became the laughingstock of the class.
What scared him even more was the only person who remained serious-Ms. Lopez.
She calmly walked down the aisle, scooped up the frog and put it back into the terrarium.
Then she came to Nat’s side, seemingly waiting for his confession.
Nat felt his face burning and apologized to Ms Lopez.
He also promised to be considerate from then on.
谢谢欣赏
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