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(共15张PPT)
读后续写
高分评分标准解读
写作思路及技巧
（以9月联考续写为例）
写作步骤
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02
03
读后续写
高分作文评分标准解读
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03
内容结构
（合理完整清晰）
符合逻辑
（事事有呼应）
融洽度高
（人物语言）
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词汇语法
（准确丰富多样）
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字体
赏心悦目
Activity 1 Read for background
Who; When; Where
Para.1 In a small and dusty village in England, there lived a young man named Tom Harper. His clothes were old and torn, and his shoes had holes that let in the rain, Tom lived in a tiny room above a noisy cafe, where he worked washing dishes for a few coins each day. Life was hard, but Tom had a dream: he wanted to own a bakery, filling the streets with the warm smell of fresh bread.
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Activity 2 Read for plot
伏笔1：Tom had a dream: he wanted to own a bakery, filling the streets with the warm smell of fresh bread.
each day
a tiny room above a noisy cafe
Tom Harper, Mrs. Green
生活艰难，在咖啡馆洗盘子谋生，但梦想拥有一家能飘出新鲜面包香气的面包店。
Para.2 Tom's parents passed away when he was young, leaving him with nothing but a kind heart and a strong will. Every night, after cleaning the cafe's pots, he sat by a flickering candle and read books about baking. He borrowed these books from Mrs. Green, the village librarian, who saw
something special in Tom's bright eyes.
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Activity 2 Read for plot
伏笔2：Tom had a kind heart and a strong will.
Every night, he sat by a flickering candle and read books about baking.
Tom's parents passed away
in a tiny room / in the library
Tom Harper, Mrs. Green
Tom 每晚阅读烘焙书籍(从 Mrs. Green 处借阅), Mrs. Green 看到他眼中的特别之处。
Para.3 One day, a poster appeared in the village square. It announced a baking competition in London, with a grand prize of 10,000. Tom's heart raced. This could be his chance! But the journey to London cost money, and Tom had none. He worked extra hours, saved every penny, and even sold his only coat to buy a train ticket.
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Activity 2 Read for plot
伏笔3：a baking competition in London with a grand prize of 10,000.
Tom sold his only coat to buy a train ticket.
one day/before the competition
in the village square
Tom Harper
看到伦敦烘焙比赛的海报(奖金 10000 英镑)，拼命攒钱(甚至卖掉唯一的外套)买火车票
Para.4When the day came, Tom boarded the train with a small bag and a nervous smile. In London, the competition was held in a huge hall filled with the best bakers from across England. Tom felt small among them. He had no fancy tools, just an old wooden spoon and a recipe he'd createdhimself, a soft , golden loaf with herbs from the village fields. His hands shook as he mixed flour, water , and yeast. The shake resulted from not just his nervousness, but also the coldness.
Para.5After what seemed to be a century, Tom finally completed his herb loaf. All the baked bread and cakes were presented to the judges. The judges tasted them carefully. Hours passed, and Tom's stomach twisted with worry. It seemed hard for him to make it through the announcement olwinner, both psychologically and physically. Before the judges announced the winner, Tom's eyes accidentally met a familiar figure's eyes-Mrs. Green was among the audience!
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Activity 2 Read for plot
伏笔4：The shake resulted from not just his nervousness, but also the coldness.
during the match
in London
Tom Harper, the judges,
Mrs. Green
Tom 带着简单工具和自制配方做香草面包，他在焦虑中等待评委的结果，Tom 意外看到观众中的 Mrs. Green。
分析故事情节，把握文章主题
Tom的日常生活（Paras.1-2）
比赛前(Para. 3)
比赛期间(Paras.4-5)
要求续写部分：
Para.1 Mrs. Green was holding a coat and waving her hands at Tom.
Para.2 With the prize money, Tom opened a small bakery in his village.
How did Tom react
How did Tom feel
Why did Mrs.Green hold a coat
Where did the prize money come from
Tips: Question chain
1.What did sb. do
2.How did sb. do sth.
3.How did sb. feel
构思续写布局
情节+情感走向
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时态
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人称
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赢得比赛→开店成功
一般过去时为主
第三人称为主
Para.1 Mrs. Green was holding a coat and waving her hands at Tom.
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Para.2 With the prize money, Tom opened a small bakery in his village.
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Tom惊讶+回应Mrs. Green
升华主题：善良；坚持；意志力
结局:面包店很成功
Tom经营面包店+心情描写（开心）
Tom回到小村庄
写作思路及技巧:定逻辑；定5句
审视初稿
句子哪些进行高级改写
时态和语态是否一致
主谓是否一致
人称是否一致
单词拼写是否正确
是否能写满格

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