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Read and analyse
Organise your writing
Write and check.
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Read and analyse
Winners Never Quit
I had been swimming competitively for five years but after such a long time, I was ready to quit. I was often the only African American at the swimming competitions and our team couldn’t afford good uniforms. However, my number-one reason for wanting to quit was that I kept receiving “Honorable Mentions (荣誉奖)”. Any athlete knows that you don’t want to have a bookshelf full of “Honorable Mentions”, which you get just because you showed up.
One summer’s day, the day before a big swim meet, I decided to break the news to my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. When I told her, she looked me in the eye and said, “Baby, remember these words ‘Quitters never win and winners never quit.’ Your grandmother didn’t raise losers or quitters. You go to that meet tomorrow, and you swim like you are a grandchild of mine, you hear ” I was too afraid to say anything but “Yes, ma’am”.
The next day we arrived at the swim meet late, missing my group of swimmers in the 15/16 age group. My coach insisted I be allowed to swim with the older group. I knew she was including me in the race so our journey to the meet would not be wasted, and she had no expectations whatsoever that I would come in anything but eighth place and only that, because there weren’t nine lanes.
As I was mounting the board, all the other girls looked at me. I quickly noticed that these girls were all here to do just one thing — beat me. All of a sudden, my grandma’s words rang in my head, “Quitters never win and winners never quit. You swim like you are a grandchild of mine. Quitters never win and winners never quit.” “Yes, Grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild of yours,” I said to myself.
Para.1: SPLASH! I swam harder than I had ever swum before.
Para.2: It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me.
Analysis
Who is the main character and what is he/she like
How is the passage organised （plot/change of emotion）
What’s the theme of the passage
I:
Any athlete knows that you don’t want to have a bookshelf full of “Honorable Mentions”...（自尊心强）
I knew she was including me in the race so our journey to the meet would not be wasted…I quickly noticed that these girls were all here to do just one thing — beat me. （渴望证明自己）
Main Characters
Plot
I swam harder than ever before...
Grandma encouraged me and I decided to take part in the race.
I decided to quit the swimming team and give up this competition.
The coach had no expectations. I felt the pressure from other girls.
I heard the claps and cheers...
The changes of my emotion
I decided to quit the team because I kept receiving “Honorable Mentions”.
My grandma refused my decision and demanded that I should keep going on.
depressed
reluctant
determined

I made efforts to swim...
My grandma’s words rang in my head.
Theme: Quiters never win and winners never quit.
02
Organise your writing
Step 1 定主线——构思两段主要情节
Para. 1: SPLASH! I swam harder than I had ever swum before.
Para. 2: It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me.
→
→
→ During the race, there was intense competition between the other girls and me.
→ I saw the result of the competition and later received the award on stage.
Step 2 确定两段首尾衔接句、结局句以及升华句
Paragraph 1 Paragraph 2 1 衔接para1 首句 6 衔接para2 首句
2 7
3 8
4 9 结局（正能量）
5 衔接para2 首句 10 升华主题
Step 3 剩余内容3大补充原则：
1）动作-反应-其他角色反应
2）人物对话及对话后的反应
3）人物心理活动及做出反应
适当用上衔接词：immediately, without hesitation, then, after a while, on arrival, with all the work done, however, instead, on/ upon doing…..
paragraph 1
第一句 情感描写，使用情感万能句：Sb. felt a sense of+情绪名词+welling up in sb’s heart and surging through sb.
第二句 细节描写，使用非谓语结构：
Doing/Having done/Done by A, 主语+谓语 B, doing C
第三句 细节描写，使用with复合结构
第四句 细节描写，使用倒装句：
No sooner had sb done than sb did
第五句 过渡衔接句，使用从句或形容词作状语
1-4句式顺序可根据需要进行调整
paragraph 2
第一句 情感描写: 情绪名词A was replaced first by 情绪名词B, and then by 情绪名词C
第二句 细节描写（使用结构或从句）
第三句 所感、所悟
第四句 结局（正能量）
第五句 主题升华句，使用强调句/倒装句
1-3句式顺序可根据需要进行调整
适当用上衔接词：immediately, without hesitation, then, after a while, on arrival, with all the work done, however, instead, on/ upon doing…, to one’s+n.
其他可供选择的句式：
Not only+部分倒装， but also +陈述句
强调句: It is/was….that/ who…
虚拟语气
without/ but for+n., 主语+would/ could have done
要不是….某人就会….
4. An idea occurred to/ struck/ hit sb…某人突然想到…
5. The sight/ though of+ n. made sb.+ 情感形容词/ filled sb. with + 情感名词
6. adj. and/but adj., sb. did sth.
7. As +n./ adj.+主语+be，主语+谓语.
paragraph 1
第一句 提示句写“我”游得比以往都努力，因此衔接句可写其原因想到祖母的话，让“我”充满了力量
第二句 “我”的努力的使得“我”处于领先地位。
第三句 但相比于同组参赛者，“我”年龄小且没有专业的赛服，很快又被其他选手超越。
第四句 被超越之后，“我”并没有放弃，用尽全力追赶。
第五句 最终，“我”完成了比赛。
Thinking of my grandma’s words, I felt a sense of power welling up in my heart and surging through me.
Having swum for a while, I found myself on the lead, making me surprised and excited.
However, no sooner had I buried myself in this joy than I was surpassed by a girl.
Eager to win, I willed my legs to keep going with every effort.
Minutes later, I touched the wall, tired and exhausted.
paragraph 2
第一句 提示句“我”周围响起掌声，衔接句可写“我”的反应。
第二句 “我”看到了比赛结果，如愿得了较好的成绩。
第三句 看到“我”得了第一名后，他人的反应。
第四句 结局：“我”如愿以偿地换掉了书架上的荣誉奖。
第五句 主题句
Immediately, I watched the scoreboard, anxious to find my name.
What was beyond my expectations was that my name was on the first one!
Not only were other girls, but also my coach was surprised, rushing to hug me tightly.
Upon reaching home, I delightedly replaced the Honorable Mentions by the gold medal in the bookshelf in my eagerness.
As was said by my grandma, winners never quit and quitters never win.
03
Write and check.
paragraph 1
SPLASH! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. Thinking of my grandma’s words, I felt a sense of power welling up in my heart and surging through me. Having swum for a while, I found myself on the lead, making me surprised and excited. However, no sooner had I buried myself in this joy than I was surpassed by a girl. Eager to win, I willed my legs to keep going with every effort. Minutes later, I touched the wall, tired and exhausted.
paragraph 2
It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. Immediately, I watched the scoreboard, anxious to find my name. What was beyond my expectations was that my name was on the first one! Not only were other girls, but also my coach was surprised, rushing to hug me tightly. Upon reaching home, I delightedly replaced the Honorable Mentions by the gold medal in the bookshelf in my eagerness. As was said by my grandma, winners never quit and quitters never win.
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