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丛林冒险
Continuation writing
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Read and analyse
Camping Cousins
My cousin Allen was the coolest person in all of Minneapolis. By the age of 19, he was a star football player at the University of Minnesota. I wanted to be just like him. So when Allen asked me to join him on a spring fishing trip in northern Minnesota, I said yes!
After planning the trip, we gathered clothes and supplies and then set off on our adventure. We reached the Superior National Forest by early evening. On the way to our campsite, Allen pointed to a small house faraway in one of the mountains, saying that it was the ranger station (护林站) where the foresters worked.
Allen knew all the tricks of an experienced camper. After we gathered enough wood from the forest floor, he started the campfire using only stone and steel — no matches. After a day of travelling, we were very hungry. We ate beef and rice and some soup as well.
Exhausted, we crawled into our sleeping bags early. Allen was still talking about his past camping adventures when a sudden wind picked up from the north. The temperature dropped and it began to snow. Allen knew of a way to increase the temperature inside the tent. He dragged a log from the woods, wrapped aluminum foil (铝箔) around the log and then placed it near the campfire. The heat from the fire reflected into the tent. Soon the tent was warm again and thoughts of lake fish filled my dreams.
I was still dreaming when Allen woke me up in a panic. Our tent was on fire! The snow had stopped during the night, but the wind had fanned the flames of the fire towards our tent. Frightened by the flames, I ran out of the tent immediately. The tent collapsed with Allen inside. Without any hesitation, I reached into the burning tent, grabbed him, and dragged him to the icy lake. We checked each other to make sure neither of us was hurt.
Para.1: Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our situation.
Para.2: Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest.
Who are the main characters and what are they like
How is the passage organised
What’s the theme of the passage
Analysis
I:
Without any hesitation, I reached into the burning tent, grabbed him and dragged him to the icy lake. (勇敢果断)
Allen:
... knew all the tricks of an experienced camper (经验丰富)
I was still dreaming when Allen woke me up in a panic. (机敏警觉)
Main Characters
Plot
Allen invited me to go on a spring fishing trip.
Allen had a trick to make the tent warmer with temperature dropping.
We reached the campsite, had dinner and crawled into the sleeping bag.
Our tent was on fire. We escaped from the tent safely.
We considered our situation...
We heard a voice...
Beginning
Ending
My Emotions
Allen asked me to join him on a spring fishing trip, I said yes!
Thoughts of lake fish filled my dreams.
excited
panicky & frightened
expectant
Allen woke me up in a panic. Our tent was on fire!
We considered our situation.

We heard a noise in the forest.

Theme: Only when we’re calm can we make correct decisions.
2
Organise your writing
Step 1 定主线——构思两段主要情节
Para. 1: Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our situation.
Para. 2: Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest.
→
→
→ We tried to get the campfire started again to attract the foresters’ attention.
→ The foresters noticed the distant glow of fire and came to our rescue.
Step 2 确定两段首尾衔接句、结局句以及升华句
Paragraph 1 Paragraph 2 1 衔接para1 首句 6 衔接para2 首句
2 7
3 8
4 9 结局（正能量）
5 衔接para2 首句 10 升华主题
Step 3 剩余内容3大补充原则：
1）动作-反应-其他角色反应
2）人物对话及对话后的反应
3）人物心理活动及做出反应
适当用上衔接词：immediately, without hesitation, then, after a while, on arrival, with all the work done, however, instead, on/ upon doing…, to one’s+n.
paragraph 1
第一句 情感描写，使用情感万能句：Sb. felt a sense of+情绪名词+welling up in sb’s heart and surging through sb.
第二句 细节描写，使用非谓语结构：
Doing/Having done/Done by A, 主语+谓语 B, doing C
第三句 细节描写，使用with复合结构
第四句 细节描写，使用倒装句：
No sooner had sb done than sb did
第五句 过渡衔接句，使用从句或形容词作状语
1-4句式顺序可根据需要进行调整
paragraph 2
第一句 情感描写: 情绪名词A was replaced first by 情绪名词B, and then by 情绪名词C
第二句 细节描写（使用结构或从句）
第三句 所感、所悟
第四句 结局（正能量）
第五句 主题升华句，使用强调句/倒装句
1-3句式顺序可根据需要进行调整
适当用上衔接词：immediately, without hesitation, then, after a while, on arrival, with all the work done, however, instead, on/ upon doing…, to one’s+n.
其他可供选择的句式：
Not only+部分倒装， but also +陈述句
强调句: It is/was….that/ who…
虚拟语气
without/ but for+n., 主语+would/ could have done
要不是….某人就会….
4. An idea occurred to/ struck/ hit sb…某人突然想到…
5. The sight/ though of+ n. made sb.+ 情感形容词/ filled sb. with + 情感名词
6. adj. and/but adj., sb. did sth.
7. As +n./ adj.+主语+be，主语+谓语.
paragraph 1
第一句 提示句写“我们”思考当时的情况，因此衔接句可写火烧后“我们”的物资情况。
第二句 检查完物资情况后“我们”当时的绝望和无助。
第三句 因为前文提到Allen懂得很多野外露营的技巧，此句作为转折句可写Allen先反应过来，可通过火烟求助。
第四句 有了想法之后立即行动，捡树枝制造火烟。
第五句 由下文的suddenly可知，“我们”经历了漫长的等待。
With all of our supplies burnt by the fire, we were in an extremely difficult situation.
Frightened and hungry, we felt a sense of helplessness and desperation welling up in our heart and surging through us.
Suddenly, Allen stood up, saying:“If there are any ways that can help us to be seen by the foresters in the ranger station”.
No sooner had he thought for a while than he asked me to added more wood into the fire to cause some smoke, hoping it could catch someone’s attention.
However, after waiting for what seemed like centuries, we were on the edge of mental collapse.
paragraph 2
第一句 提示句写“我们”听到了声音，可写当时的心情的变化。
第二句 声音的来源——是forester们发现了我们的火烟，赶来检查情况。
第三句 forester们扑灭了火之后先把“我们”接到了护林站，且“我们”在护林站与父母取得联系。
第四句 向forester们解释情况和表达感谢后，我们与父母回了家。
第五句 这次经历的感受：遇到困难时需时刻保持头脑冷静。
Looking at each other, our desperation was replaced first by a hope, and then by an eager expectation.
Minutes later, we saw a car driving fast towards us—it was the foresters who noticed the smoke and come to check the situation.
Immediately, they put out the fire and took us to the ranger station, where we got touch with our parents.
After explaining what had happened and expressing our sincere gratitude for their help, we returned home with our parents.
From this experience, we learnt that when facing danger, only if we’re calm enough can we make correct decisions.
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Write and check
paragraph 1
Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our situation. With all of our supplies burnt by the fire, we were in an extremely difficult situation. Frightened and hungry, we felt a sense of helplessness and desperation welling up in our heart and surging through us. Suddenly, Allen stood up, saying:“If there are any ways that can help us to be seen by the foresters in the ranger station”. No sooner had he thought for a while than he asked me to added more wood into the fire to cause some smoke, hoping it could catch someone’s attention. However, after waiting for what seemed like centuries, we were on the edge of mental collapse.
paragraph 2
Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. Looking at each other, our desperation was replaced first by a hope, and then by an eager expectation. Minutes later, we saw a car driving fast towards us—it was the foresters who noticed the smoke and come to check the situation. Immediately, they put out the fire and took us to the ranger station, where we got touch with our parents. After explaining what had happened and expressing our sincere gratitude for their help, we returned home with our parents. From this experience, we learnt that when facing danger, only if we’re calm enough can we make correct decisions.
Thank you!

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