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Soft golden light from the autumn sun shone through the tree tops as high school students Chloe and Noah walked through Whispering Pines Forest in one of their hiking trips. Their boots stepped on the fallen leaves and made a crackling sound, making them pile up. A strange noise broke the quiet — a high, sad cry, followed by violent moving in the bushes. The noise came from about 40 meters to the southwest, hidden by thick berry bushes full of ripe fruit.
Noah had learned about surviving in the wild at summer camp. He held up a fist to tell Chloe to stop. They listened carefully, and soon knew it was a hurt animal breathing heavily. Broken small trees and disturbed dirt showed a messy path ahead. They moved forward very carefully, stepping softly over small sticks. The sounds got more desperate — low cries and weak, unsteady movements. Chloe instinctively (本能地） opened the part of her backpack with first aid supplies, fingers brushing against bandage edges. "Let's move slow and talk quiet," Noah whispered. "Scared animals get more frightened if we make sudden moves." He remembered what he'd learned about animal behavior in biology class last semester.
As they got closer, the forest became very quiet. Birds stopped singing in the middle of their songs. Through the shaking tall, feathery plants, they got a quick look at the animal's light brown fur, like a fast-moving shadow. A leg stuck out at a wrong angle, twisted where it should be straight. Chloe thought of what she knew about first aid: the way it was positioned meant a bad injury, and they needed to stop the bleeding right away.
Noah checked his compass with a quick move of his wrist; they had ninety minutes before dusk painted the sky soft pink. "Priority: stabilize, disinfect, retreat," he murmured (低声说），mentally going over the wilderness first aid steps he'd memorized. Chloe nodded, clean cloth already in hand, her expression a blend of deep concern and steady determination.
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Soft golden light from the autumn sun shone through the tree tops as high school students Chloe and Noah walked through Whispering Pines Forest in one of their hiking trips. Their boots stepped on the fallen leaves and made a crackling sound, making them pile up. A strange noise broke the quiet — a high, sad cry, followed by violent moving in the bushes. The noise came from about 40 meters to the southwest, hidden by thick berry bushes full of ripe fruit.
Noah had learned about surviving in the wild at summer camp. He held up a fist to tell Chloe to stop. They listened carefully, and soon knew it was a hurt animal breathing heavily. Broken small trees and disturbed dirt showed a messy path ahead. They moved forward very carefully, stepping softly over small sticks. The sounds got more desperate — low cries and weak, unsteady movements. Chloe instinctively (本能地） opened the part of her backpack with first aid supplies, fingers brushing against bandage edges. "Let's move slow and talk quiet," Noah whispered. "Scared animals get more frightened if we make sudden moves." He remembered what he'd learned about animal behavior in biology class last semester.
As they got closer, the forest became very quiet. Birds stopped singing in the middle of their songs. Through the shaking tall, feathery plants, they got a quick look at the animal's light brown fur, like a fast-moving shadow. A leg stuck out at a wrong angle, twisted where it should be straight. Chloe thought of what she knew about first aid: the way it was positioned meant a bad injury, and they needed to stop the bleeding right away.
Noah checked his compass with a quick move of his wrist; they had ninety minutes before dusk painted the sky soft pink. "Priority: stabilize, disinfect, retreat," he murmured (低声说），mentally going over the wilderness first aid steps he'd memorized. Chloe nodded, clean cloth already in hand, her expression a blend of deep concern and steady determination.
注意：
续写词数应为150左右；
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When they got close to the sound, they found that it was an injured deer. ____________
About 30 minutes later, the deer tried to stand up. _______________________
文本分析
1．角色：_____________________________
2．视角：第________人称
3．时空线：Discovered a strange sound---______________ ---Confirm that the injured animal is a deer
三
Chloe and Noah（学过野外生存）deer （严重受伤）
Approach the source of the sound with caution
4. 请在文章中将可能的线索都找出来。
What did they hear in the forest ：
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How did they react when they heard the strange noise ：
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A strange noise broke the quiet — a high, sad cry, followed by violent moving in the bushes.
He held up a fist to tell Chloe to stop. They listened carefully, and soon knew it was a hurt animal breathing heavily
情节线： Chloe and Noah walked through Whispering Pines Forest. →
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→_______________________________
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→（续写）hey found that it was an injured deer. →（续写）About 30 minutes later, the deer tried to stand up.
A strange noise broke the quiet — a high, sad cry, followed by violent moving in the bushes.
They listened carefully, and soon knew it was a hurt animal breathing heavily
They moved forward very carefully
As they got closer，hey got a quick look at the animal's light brown fur
they needed to stop the bleeding right away.
情感线：Noah：______________________（He held up a fist to tell Chloe to stop）
Chloe：____________________（Chloe instinctively (本能地） opened the part of her backpack with first aid supplies）
deer：______________________（The sounds got more desperate — low cries and weak, unsteady movements）
calm and knowledgeable
sensitive
desperate
Chloe and Noah walked through Whispering Pines Forest.
leisure
nervous
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Chloe and Noah discovered a strange sound
deep concern and steady determination
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A leg stuck out at a wrong angle, twisted where it should be straight
7. 综合以上信息，请用 3-4 句话概括文章大意。（中英各一个）
中文：
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英文：
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克洛伊和诺亚在森林中散步发现奇异声音，并仔细辨认声音来源，发现受伤动物踪迹，小心靠近最终确认严重受伤的动物是小鹿
Chloe and Noah were walking in the forest when they heard strange sounds. They carefully identified the source of the sounds and discovered the tracks of an injured animal. They cautiously approached and eventually confirmed that the severely injured animal was a deer.
8.句式：
状语从句（as high school students Chloe and Noah walked through Whispering Pines Forest in one of their hiking trip；Scared animals get more frightened if we make sudden moves）；
分词作状语（making them pile up；stepping softly over small sticks）；
定语从句（the way it was positioned meant a bad injury）宾语从句： what he'd learned about animal behavior in biology class last semester
主题（本文属于人与自然）：人们热爱自然 ，尊重生命，救助受伤动物，体现人与自然和谐相处。
情节构造
第一段提示句：When they got close to the sound, they found that it was an injured deer.
衔接句 1——— 对 “an injured deer” 提问 “What was the specific condition of the deer's injury ”： Its leg was twisted at a grotesque/strange angle, blood seeping through(渗出) the fur. （看到这场景他们的反映）
过渡句推演：衔接 1→Seeing this, they immediately began to prepare to rescue the deer. →衔接 2
衔接句 2——— 对 “the deer tried to stand up” 提问 “How did they rescue the deer successfully ”：Chloe’s hands trembled as she pressed the clean cloth against the wound, while Noah carefully wrapped the bandage, his movements steady despite the urgency.
第二段提示句：About 30 minutes later, the deer tried to stand up
衔接句 3——— 对 “tried to stand up” 提问 “How did the deer do ”：Its legs wobbled/shook , but with a surge of determination, it pushed itself upright.
过渡句推演：衔接 3→Chloe held her breath, her heart pounding. The deer swayed slightly, then took a tentative（试探性的） step forward. Noah murmured encouragement, his voice soft but firm.→主题
主题：This unforgettable journey made them realize that every life deserves respect and care.
1.动作描写
She applied pressure to the wound, her hands firm and steady.
(她用力按压伤口，双手坚定而稳键。)
He rummaged through his backpack for the antiseptic wipes.
(他在背包里翻找消毒湿巾。)
The deer flinched as the cold solution touched its skin.
(当冰冷的药水触碰到它的皮肤时，鹿向后缩了一下。)
They fashioned a splint out of sturdy sticks and bandages.
(他们用结实的树枝和绷带制作了一个夹板。)
Noah secured the bandage with a tight, neat knot.
(诺亚用一个打得紧实而整齐的结固定好了绷带。)
The animal's chest rose and fell in rapid, shallow breaths.
(动物的胸膛起伏，呼吸急促而浅薄。)
Chloe gently stroked the deer's neck to soothe its nerves.
(克洛伊轻轻地抚摸鹿的脖子以安抚它的紧张情绪。)
It struggled to its feet, wobbling precariously.
(它挣扎着站起来，身体危险地摇晃着。)
He glanced anxiously at the darkening sky.
(他焦虑地瞥了一眼越来越暗的天空。)
The deer limped away, favoring its injured leg.
(鹿一瘸一拐地走开了，受伤的腿不敢用力。)
2、心理描写
A wave of sympathy washed over her as she saw its pain.
(看到它的痛苦，一阵同情涌上她的心头。)
A silent prayer formed in her mind: please let this work.
(她心中默念:拜托，一定要有用。)
A sense of urgency gnawed at him; time was running out.
(一种紧迫感折磨着他;时间不多了。)
She felt a surge of determination despite the trembling in her hands.
(尽管双手在颤抖，她却感到一阵坚定的决心。)
Doubt crept into his thoughts-were they doing more harm than good
(怀疑悄然涌入他的思绪-他们是在帮倒忙吗 )
An overwhelming sense of relief flooded through them both.
(一股巨大的宽慰感涌遍他们俩的全身。)
She held her breath, hoping against hope that it would stand.
(她屏住呼吸，抱着一线希望它能站起来。)
He felt an incredible connection to this wild, vulnerable creature.
(他感到与这只野生而脆弱的生物有一种不可思议的联系。)
A profound peace settled in their hearts as they watched it leave.
(看着它离开，一种深刻的平静感在他们心中沉淀下来。)
3.环境描写
The long shadows of dusk began to stretch across the forest floor.
(黄昏长长的阴影开始蔓延过森林地面。)
The air grew cool and carried the damp scent of approaching night.
(空气变凉了，带着夜晚将至的潮湿气息。)
The only sound was the whisper of the wind through the pine needles.
(唯一的声音是风拂过松针的沙沙声。)
The golden light of day softened into the violet hues of twilight.
(白昼的金色光芒柔和成了暮光的紫罗兰色色调。)
The first stars pricked the darkening canvas of the sky.
(初生的星星点缀在愈发黑暗的天幕上。)
The rustling of a small creature in the undergrowth broke the silence.
(矮树丛中一只小动物的窸窣声打破了寂静。)
The temperature dropped noticeably as the sun disappeared
(太阳消失后，气温明显下降了。)
The outline of the trees blurred into shadows in the fading light.
(在逐渐消退的光线中，树木的轮廓模糊成了阴影。)
A crisp autumn chill settled over the woods.
(一股清爽的秋寒笼罩了树林。)
The forest seemed to hold its breath, waiting.
(森林仿佛屏住了呼吸，等待着。)
When they got close to the sound, they found that it was an injured deer. This young female trapped in old wiresleft by hunters, her right side torn and bleeding. Chloe spoke in soft, slow tones while Noah pressed clean cloth to the wound to stop the bleeding. They stabilized the deer's leg at the correct angle,cleaned the cuts with cleaning wipes to keep infection away, then carefully cut the wire with strong scissors they brought with them in their hiking tool kit. The moment the last piece of wire snapped, they took 20 steps back to give the scared deer space,watching to make sure she didn't get weaker. They waited patiently while praying for this poor creature.
三、参考范文
About 30 minutes later, the deer tried to stand up.Her legs shook like small trees in a storm.She fell twice before standing unsteadily on the third try. The two friends almost gasped when the deer took her first shaky steps. Each step got stronger until she reached the edge of the woods.There, she stopped and turned her neck. Her dark eyes met theirs', as if they were sharing a moment without words. “That look," Noah said softly, “is why we care for all animals."Chloe whispered, “And why every first-aid lesson is important." The deer disappeared into the golden woods, leaving a quiet that felt deeper than before.

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