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读后续写专题4
关爱动物
Continuation writing
1
Read and analyse
I sat at the breakfast table with my four-year-old son, Matthew, trying to ignore the ache in my stomach. “Mama, want to play ” “Not today, baby.” I shook my head. These days I could barely get out of bed. I was still recovering from an operation. I hoped for strength and happiness, but the future seemed so hopeless.
Suddenly, Matthew jumped up from his spot on the kitchen floor. “Bird!” he shouted, rushing to our courtyard. Sure enough, there was a white dove seated in a rubber tree (橡胶树). It sat there for a few moments, and then flew away. Strange, I’d never seen one in our neighborhood before.
When I dragged myself to the kitchen the next morning, the dove was back. This time it was with a mate carrying sticks. “Look, Matthew,” I said, pointing to the tree. “They’re going to make a nest.” The doves flew in and out of the courtyard all week, building on top of the rubber tree.
Make a Nest for My Doves
Matthew could hardly contain his excitement. Every morning, he’d run into the kitchen and take his spot by the sliding glass door (滑动玻璃门), talking to the birds while they worked. His happiness was influential. As much as I was sad, I couldn’t help but look forward to the doves’ visits too.
Then it all went wrong. The courtyard was a safe enough spot for a nest, but the rubber tree’s broad, thin leaves were far from stable. One night, a strong wind blew, throwing the doves’ nest to the ground. I heard the twigs (细枝) break apart.
I surveyed the damage. Nothing good ever lasted. I wouldn’t blame the doves if they never came back. But they returned. And they paid no attention to the pile of sticks that had once been their nest. They started again from the beginning. Again, though, the wind destroyed all their hard work. The next day, and the next, they started again, as if nothing had happened.
Para.1: I knew I had to do something.
Para.2: “It works! The birds are back.” Matthew announced.
Who are the main characters and what are they like
How is the passage organised
What’s the theme of the passage
Analysis
My son (Matthew):
Jumped up from his spot; run into the kitchen...
talking to the birds while they worked. (天真活泼)
I:
The future seemed so hopeless (对生活无望)
They started again from the beginning; The next day, and the next, they started again, as if nothing had happened.
(被鸽子的精神打动)
Main Characters
Plot
Beginning
Ending
My son saw two doves making nest in our courtyard.
I was still recovering from an operation.
A strong wind blew, throwing the doves’ nest to the ground.
The doves started again, as if nothing had happened.
How did my emotions change
I hoped for strength and happiness, but the future seemed so hopeless.
“Bird!” Matthew shouted, rushing to our courtyard. Strange, I’d never seen one in our neighborhood before.
Nothing good ever lasted. I wouldn’t blame the doves if they never came back.
hopeless
strange
sad

The doves started again, as if nothing had happened.
My Emotions
2
Organise your writing
Step 1 定主线——构思两段主要情节
Para. 1: I knew I had to do something.
Para. 2: A spark of surprise flashed across his face.
→
→
→ I built a new safe nest for the doves.
→ The doves stayed in the new nest.
Step 2 确定两段首尾衔接句、结局句以及升华句
Paragraph 1 Paragraph 2 1 衔接para1 首句 6 衔接para2 首句
2 7
3 8
4 9 结局（正能量）
5 衔接para2 首句 10 升华主题
Step 3 剩余内容3大补充原则：
1）动作-反应-其他角色反应
2）人物对话及对话后的反应
3）人物心理活动及做出反应
适当用上衔接词：immediately, without hesitation, then, after a while, on arrival, with all the work done, however, instead, on/ upon doing…, to one’s+n.
paragraph 1
第一句 情感描写，使用情感万能句：Sb. felt a sense of+情绪名词+welling up in sb’s heart and surging through sb.
第二句 细节描写，使用非谓语结构：
Doing/Having done/Done by A, 主语+谓语 B, doing C
第三句 细节描写，使用with复合结构
第四句 细节描写，使用倒装句：
No sooner had sb done than sb did
第五句 过渡衔接句，使用从句或形容词作状语
1-4句式顺序可根据需要进行调整
paragraph 2
第一句 情感描写: 情绪名词A was replaced first by 情绪名词B, and then by 情绪名词C
第二句 细节描写（使用结构或从句）
第三句 所感、所悟
第四句 结局（正能量）
第五句 主题升华句，使用强调句/倒装句
1-3句式顺序可根据需要进行调整
适当用上衔接词：immediately, without hesitation, then, after a while, on arrival, with all the work done, however, instead, on/ upon doing…, to one’s+n.
其他可供选择的句式：
Not only+部分倒装， but also +陈述句
强调句: It is/was….that/ who…
虚拟语气
without/ but for+n., 主语+would/ could have done
要不是….某人就会….
4. An idea occurred to/ struck/ hit sb…某人突然想到…
5. The sight/ though of+ n. made sb.+ 情感形容词/ filled sb. with + 情感名词
6. adj. and/but adj., sb. did sth.
7. As +n./ adj.+主语+be，主语+谓语.
paragraph 1
第一句 提示句写“我”想我应该做点什么了，衔接句可写“我”这样想的原因。
第二句 “我”决定跟儿子一起做鸟巢给鸽子。
第三句 此句细节描写可写如何制作鸟巢。
第四句 做完之后把鸟巢放于何处？根据上文提到橡胶树的树枝难以为鸟巢抵挡风雨，因此他们可能会把鸟巢固定在离树不远处的墙上。
第五句 由下文可知，鸽子回来了，因此本段结尾句可写他们放好鸟巢后，在期待、等待着鸽子回来。
Thanks to their toughness and perseverance, I felt a sense of hope and brightness welling up in my heart and surging through me.
With this thought in mind, I immediately asked my son to make a nest together.
Firstly, we found a little woven net, making it into the shape of a nest, and then put a piece of cloth on it to make it warm enough.
All work done, we fixed the nest on the wall next to the rubber tree, waiting for their visit.
No sooner had we sat by the sliding glass door than we cought sight of tow familiar shadows.
paragraph 2
第一句 根据提示句，可写鸽子看到他们制做的鸟巢后的反应。
第二句 心理描写：“我”看到了鸽子的反应后，我的心情有何变化？
第三句 细节描写：“我”的儿子又是如何的反应
第四句 结局：“我”不再被心中的阴霾与压抑支配，并对生活充满了希望。
第五句 这次经历的感受：顽强的意志力与坚持不懈才能渡过难关。
The doves were circling around the nest, tweeting, as if to express their gratitude towards us.
Seeing this scene, my expectations were first replaced by a sense of happiness, and then by a move.
Moreover, my son was so excited that he even jumped and ran around the house.
Soon, the gloom and depression in my heart were driven away, and only the brightness of new life remained, like the doves.
From this, I learned that it was the strong will and perseverance of life that made our lives better and better.
3
Write and check
paragraph 1
I knew I had to do something. Thanks to their toughness and perseverance, I felt a sense of hope and brightness welling up in my heart and surging through me. With this thought in mind, I immediately asked my son to make a nest together. Firstly, we found a little woven net, making it into the shape of a nest, and then put a piece of cloth on it to make it warm enough. All work done, we fixed the nest on the wall next to the rubber tree, waiting for their visit. No sooner had we sat by the sliding glass door than we caught sight of tow familiar shadows.
paragraph 2
“It works! The birds are back!” Matthew announced. The doves were circling around the nest, tweeting, as if to express their gratitude towards us. Seeing this scene, my expectations were first replaced by a sense of happiness, and then by a move. Moreover, my son was so excited that he even jumped and ran around the house. Soon, the gloom and depression in my heart were driven away, and only the brightness of new life remained, like the doves. From this, I learned that it was the strong will and perseverance of life that made our lives better and better.
Thank you!

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