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十句五定法
第一段
①就地取材 文字接龙（支点1）
②预级演员 刻画情绪
③调配演员 接戏互动
④情节不够 特效来凑
⑤就地取材 反向文字接龙(支点2）
第二段
⑥就地取材 文字接龙（支点3）
⑦预级演员 刻画情绪
⑧调配演员 积极互动
⑨交代结局
⑩点晴升华(支点4）
读后续写---
如何紧扣主题
1.运用“5W1H→情感线+行为线→10定5句”三步构思表，在8 min 内完成草稿框架。 2.独立写出与原文情境融洽度≥80% 的两段续写。
【学习目标】
李华的好朋友小明请求李华能在明天的考试中帮助自己作弊，李华十分纠结是否应该帮助小明
A 李华最终答应帮助小明，小明十分感谢李华
B 李华拒绝帮助小明，然后两人闹矛盾，绝交
C 李华没有帮助小明并对小明进行劝导，最终小明认识到自己的错误并且感谢李华
Lead—in
正能量原则
判断所给故事情节的发展走向
高分评分标准解读
写作思路及技巧
写作步骤
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读后续写
高考读后续写高分作文评分标准
创造了丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高。
使用了多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构,可能有个别小错,但完全不影响理解。
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第5档
(21-25分)
有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。
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高分作文评分标准解读
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内容结构
（合理完整清晰）
符合逻辑
（事事有呼应）
融洽度高
（人物语言）
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词汇语法
（准确丰富多样）
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字体
赏心悦目
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读后续写步骤
分析续写两段段首句
研读文本
分析情节，把握主题
构思续写布局
找关键词
提前预测情节走向
段落大意
5W1H:when,where,why,who,what
语言文本特点：adj/adv/v/句型
故事情节发展
人物情感变化
确定故事主题
人称
时态
续写情节
para1：I thought about how I ought to use the money I had earned.
Para2: Soon I got to my house with the groceries(食品杂货).
step1 分析续写两段段首句
（有人）noun
（E情）adj./adv.>v.>n.
（M动）verb
（O物）noun
para1：I thought about how I ought to use the money I had earned.
Para2: Soon I got to my house with the groceries(食品杂货).
para 1 Just at that moment, many memories came back into my mind.
para 2 When arriving home, I saw my mother sitting at the dinner table, worried and tired.
（有人）noun
（E情）adj./adv.>v.>n.
（M动）verb
（O物）noun
para 1 Just at that moment, many memories came back into my mind.
para 2 When arriving home, I saw my mother sitting at the dinner table, worried and tired.
Para.1 The next morning , Amy woke up early and headed straight to the kitchen.
Para.2 From that day on , Amy's perspective on doing household chores changed.
（有人）noun
（E情）adj./adv.>v.>n.
（M动）verb
（O物）noun
Para.1 The next morning , Amy woke up early and headed straight to the kitchen.
Para.2 From that day on , Amy's perspective on doing household chores changed.
step2 研读文本：5W1H
Para.1 Amy shut the bedroom door behind her, annoyed. “Why do I always have to do the dishes It's so unfair!” she whispered, sinking onto her bed.
Para.2 Her mother, Mrs. Thompson, always tried to explain, "Doing housework helps you grow into a responsible person , Amy. And it shows you care about our family. ”But Amy never listened. To her, household chores were a tiresome burden, a waste of her precious teenage years .
When: 未指定具体时间（但根据上下文，可能是晚上或艾米生气的时候。）
Where: 卧室，家里
Who: 艾米，汤普森夫人
What：艾米关上门，抱怨洗碗不公平，然后坐在床上，表达对家务的不满。母亲解释家务的重要性，但艾米不听，认为家务是负担和浪费青春。
事情的起因——人物冲突
Para.3 One Monday evening, as Amy sat at the dinner table pushing her food around her plate, her mother coughed violently. Her face turned pale, and sheexcused herself, saying she wasn't feeling well. Mrs. Thompson went to bed early, leaving a sink full of dirty dishes.
Para.4 Amy thought about asking her mother to wash the dishes later, but something held her back. Remembering her mother's pale face and weak voice, Amy was overwhelmed with a strange feeling. For the first time, she noticed how tired her mother looked lately. She realized that, besides taking care of the family, her mother also worked long hours at the office.
When：一个星期一晚上
Where：餐桌或家中
Who：艾米，汤普森夫人
What：母亲咳嗽、脸色苍白，提前去睡觉，留下脏盘子，显示母亲身体不适。艾米想叫母亲洗碗但没做，注意到母亲疲惫，意识到母亲的工作和家庭责任，内心产生变化。
事情的转机
Para.5With a sigh, Amy stood up and walked into the kitchen. She stared at the mountain of dishes , feeling discouraged. But she rolled up her sleeves. As she washed the plates and bowls, she thought about all the times her mother had done this without a single complaint. Just as she was finishing up, she heard a soft voice behind her. “Amy ” It was her mother, looking surprised and touched. “You . . . you did the dishes . ”
Para.6Amy turned around, feeling a bit embarrassed. “Yeah, well . . . you weren't feeling well, so I thought I'd help out. ”Mrs. Thompson smiled , her eyes filled with pride. “Thank you, dear. That's very kind of you . ”That night, as Amy lay in bed, she couldn't stop thinking. Maybe her mother was right. Maybe doing housework wasn't just a chore—it was a way to show love and care for her family
When: 同一天晚上。
Where: 厨房。
Who: 艾米和汤普森夫人。
What: 艾米主动洗碗，母亲出现，感到惊讶和感动，艾米反思母亲的付出。艾米解释帮忙原因，母亲感谢，艾米在床上思考家务的意义，开始改变看法。
理解与反思
时间 情感线 行为线
某天晚上（para 1.2）
周一晚（para 3.4）
周一晚（para 5）
周一晚（para 6）
周一晚（para 6）
周二晨（续写1）
周二起（续写2）
厌烦
摔门、抱怨
内疚升起
犹豫
决心
卷袖洗碗
稍感尴尬
坦诚交流
反思
床上顿悟
喜悦自豪
主动揽活
习惯成自然
早起做早餐
step3 分析故事情节，把握文章主题
我：走进厨房→做早餐→妈妈表扬→我的看法改变→行为改变
主题: 同理心，理解，爱
step4 构思续写布局
情节+情感走向
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时态
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人称
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走进厨房→做早餐→妈妈表扬→我的看法改变→行为改变
一般过去时为主
第一人称和第三人称为主
读后续写的七个不
不增加人物
不增加旁支情节（延续原材料的故事情节，并不是发展新情节）
不用过多对话
不用负能量结局
不在文末设置悬念
不偏离原文主题
不违背逻辑常理
情节续写的两个线索
情感线
人物情感变化
行为线
人物行为变化
Para.1 The next morning , Amy woke up early and headed straight to the kitchen.
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写作思路及技巧:10定5
Para.2 From that day on , Amy's perspective on doing household chores changed.①
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她决定为妈妈做早餐。
换位思考，理解，爱
她开始主动承担家务，他们的家变成了一个更快乐、更互助的地方。
当妈妈请她帮忙时，她不再抱怨。
她看到一个小小的举动就能让妈妈如此高兴。
文字接龙
反向文字接龙
文字接龙
交代结局
点晴升华
Para.1The next morning , Amy woke up early and headed straight to the kitchen.
①她决定为妈妈做早餐。
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⑤她看到一个小小的举动就能让妈妈如此高兴。
写作思路及技巧:定逻辑
Para.2 From that day on , Amy's perspective on doing household chores changed.
① 当妈妈请她帮忙时，她不再抱怨。
④结局:她开始主动承担家务，他们的家也变成了一个更快乐、更互助的地方。
⑤升华主题：艾米终于明白， 做家务不仅仅是一种责任，它也是一种安静、温柔的表达爱的方式。
③她开始把家务看作是一种分担家庭工作和表达爱的方式。
②有时，她甚至在妈妈开口前就主动提出帮忙。
妈妈非常开心，并表扬了她。
妈妈刚好起床看到
给妈妈做了简单的鸡蛋和面条
Para.1The next morning , Amy woke up early and headed straight to the kitchen.①She decided to make breakfast for her mother.②She tried her best to make noodles and set the table nicely.③When her mother walked in, she was very surprised and happy. ④She gave Amy a big hug and said, "This is a wonderful surprise! Thank you, my dear." ⑤Amy felt a warm feeling inside. She saw how a small action could make her mother so happy.
Para.2 From that day on , Amy's perspective on doing household chores changed.①She no longer complained when her mother asked for help. ②Sometimes, she even offered to help before being asked. ③She started to see chores as a way to share the family's work and show her love. ④Her mother felt less tired, and their home became a more cheerful and cooperative place. ⑤Amy finally understood that doing housework wasn’t only a duty; it could also be a quiet, gentle way to show love.
写作思路及技巧:定语言（契合）
套路只是辅助，
不要魔化模板，
灵活运用，随机应变
日积月累才是王道
The next morning, Amy woke up early and headed straight to the kitchen. She quietly made a simple breakfast — some toast and a glass of milk — and placed it on a tray. Tiptoeing into her mother’s room, she found Mrs. Thompson still resting in bed. “I thought you might be hungry,” Amy said softly. Her mother sat up, her eyes widening in surprise. “You made this for me ” she asked, her voice warm with emotion. Amy just nodded, feeling a small, happy warmth spread inside her chest.
From that day on, Amy’s perspective on doing household chores changed. She began to help without being asked — setting the table, taking out the trash, or wiping the counter. It wasn’t always fun, and sometimes she still felt a little tired or bored. But every time she saw her mother’s grateful smile, Amy remembered that these small acts were more than just tasks — they were her way of saying “I love you” and “Thank you.” She finally understood that taking care of the family wasn’t only a duty; it could also be a quiet, gentle way to show love.
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总结续写步骤
Empathy 同理心:
.Only when we put ourselves in others' shoes, can we truly understand their situations and feelings.
只有当我们设身处地地为别人着想，才能真正理解他们的处境和感受。
Cherishing Family Ties珍惜家庭纽带:
Family relationships, often the most precious in our lives, demand our continuous care and dedication.
家庭关系往往是我们生命中最宝贵的东西，需要我们不断地关心和奉献。
Instead of waiting for others to make amends, taking the first step to resolve conflicts is always the best action one could take.
与其等着别人来弥补，不如迈出第一步解决冲突，这是能采取的最佳行动。
亲情、友情:万能句

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