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Continuation Writing
读
后
续
写
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读后续写“解题三步骤”
深度解读语篇
Read
浅层信息获取：when, where, who, what, how
深层文本解读
理清情节和情感
分析人物性格特点
明确故事主题
Think
结合所给两段首句写好衔接
结合正能量原则和原文呼应
生动编写故事
动作描写
情感描写
环境描写
语言运用
推测情节发展
构思写作框架
Write
Read and Explore
2022 全国新高考1卷
David’s run
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."
I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well-he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer -that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
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David
What: David hesitated to run and wanted to give up.
Why: David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children. He was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him
Step 1 Read for the basic information
Step 2 Read for the plot & emotion
Though with a brain disease, David always finished the practice, was thought a regular kid.
Coach gave him the chance to run or not.
David decide to give up
Para.1 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
Para.2 I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
Beginning
Rising action
Climax
Falling action
Ending
David’s run
Determined
optimistic
self-doubtful, nervous,upset...
discouraged
思考并讨论：What is the theme of the passage
主题：
身残志坚，积极向上，挑战自我的精神。
“十句五定”
Para 1. Para 2.
定句1: 情感＋动作 定句6:情感/动作/心理
句2: 句7:
句3: 句8：
句4: 定句9:结局
定句5: 过渡句 定句10:主旨/点睛升华
构思情节（结合首句和原文呼应原则，构思两段情节）
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look atme. __________
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I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
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根据第二段首句，第一段最后应该是：
最终David 改变了主意，决定要参加跑步比赛
结合正能量结尾，第二段结尾应该是：
David 克服各种困难，最终完成比赛
衔接David的反应：沮丧、失落、自我怀疑
衔接David的反应：被鼓舞、坚定
Inspired, in high spirit
depressed, frustrated
主旨升华：坚持不懈、战胜自我
Para 1：
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
Para 2：
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
David was upset.
动作/心理
What did I do and say to comfort him
How did David react
动作/情绪反应
How did I and others react ？
How did David perform on the field
David crossed the finish line.
心理/情绪
补充细节
点睛之笔：坚持、战胜自己
David decided to run.
David was determined.
动作/心理
hang / lower one’s head 低下头
tap sb on the shoulder gently 轻拍某人的肩膀
toe the line 踮起脚尖，准备起跑
shoot like an arrow 像离弦的箭一样飞速奔跑
quicken one’s steps 加快脚步
battle one’s way through 奋力通过
1. 高级表达——动作描写：
丰富细节
be torn between a rock and a hard place 进退两难，左右为难
make up one’s mind 下定决心
burst into a big toothy smile 绽放出露齿笑容
He was in high spirits and felt a sudden strength inside him. 他情绪高涨，突然感觉内心充满力量。
A flush of admiration and joy swept over me. 一股钦佩和喜悦之情涌上我的心头。
2. 高级表达——情绪描写：
丰富细节
David felt a sense of achievement welling up in his heart. “Everyone deserves a better version of themselves,” as the old saying goes.
David 感到一股成就感涌上心头。俗话说: “每个人都应该拥有更好的自己.”
With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future. conquer [ k k ] vt. 征服; 占领
有了战胜自己的能力，他就能在通往光明未来的道路上战胜一切。
Nothing will be impossible as long as you pay efforts and have a tough determination.
只要你付出努力，有坚定的决心，一切就皆有可能实现。
主旨升华句：
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. He hung his head, trying to avoid eye contact with me. It was a tricky moment, calling for a good choice of words. Having thought it over, I mentioned some events which won people’s praise for his determination and perseverance. His face began to lighten. He added that even the judges thumbed up at him. The whistle went off and the competitors began to take their places. To my joy, David slowly rose to his feet.
范文赏析
动作描写，与首句过渡合理自然
解决冲突, “我”鼓励 David 参赛
神态描写
承上启下, 与Para.2首句David 走向起跑线呼应
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. David stood firmly in his position, ignoring everything around. Pushing forward without balance, he was left behind. However, when he made his way to the finish line, the spectators burst into thunderous cheers and applause. Inspired by the enthusiasm and encouragement, David quickened his pace in high spirits. It turned out that he achieved his best record ever. Seeing his confident smile, I sighed in relief. With the power to conquer himself, he can conquer anything on the way to a promising future.
范文赏析
与首句衔接, 展现 David 的决心
赛场表现: David 患有脑疾, 跑得比别人慢
配角反应: 展现同学们团结友爱
再次被鼓舞：动作+情绪
升华主旨，战胜自我
比赛结果
我的反应
1. tricky [ tr k ] adj. 困难的; 棘手的; 狡诈的
2. call for 要求; 需要
3. perseverance [ p : s v r ns] n. 毅力; 韧性
4. thumb up 竖起拇指
5. rise to one’s feet 站起来
6. make one’s way to 前往某处/想方设法进入
7. spectator [spek te t ] n. 观众；旁观者；目击者
8. burst into thunderous cheers and applause 爆发出雷鸣般的欢呼和掌声
9. in high spirits 情绪高涨/兴高采烈 in low spirits 情绪低落
10. sigh in relief 如释重负地叹气
词块积累
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ________________________________________________
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