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(共23张PPT)
周考读后续写
普遍问题：
1. 人称不清；男女不分
2. 卷面脏乱，书写潦草
3. 无话可写，下笔漏洞百出。
不能用自己的顽固考验老师的阅读力和忍耐力。
多次下笔，与模板产生更强的感应，只要写，就有分，每一分都很重要。
Part1. 读懂文本，获取关键信息
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Takehito was daydreaming when he heard a voice. “And what performance will you present at the talent show, Takehito ” Takehito's fifth-grade teacher, Mrs. Klein, had spoken and was glaring down at him now.
Takehito had been staring out the window from his desk while Mrs. Klein paced up and down the rows of desks to ask each student what talent he or she would perform for the show. The rest of the class and Takehito's teacher were now staring and waiting for his answer.
Takehito's face popped beet-red. He didn't know what to say. Luckily for him, the bell rang, signaling the end of the school day. Takehito quickly gathered his books and got up to leave, but Mrs.Klein stopped him.
Actually, Mrs. Klein worried about Takehito. Last year, he and his mother immigrated from Japan to Chicago. He had not made friends easily. Some of the students in his old class made fun of the way he looked and the way he spoke. Therefore, as his teacher this year, Mrs. Klein was determined to get Takehito to perform in the talent show, knowing that if he did, he would establish some friendships before entering junior high.
“What are you good at ” asked Mrs. Klein.
Takehito, thought for a moment. “I don't know.”
“What do you mcan ” Mrs. Klein continued. “Can you draw Can you play a sport Can you play a musical instrument Can you sing ..."”
Mrs. Klein continued listing talents, but Takehito stopped listening as his gazing wandered to a poster on the wall. The poster showed a person doing breakdance（霹雳舞）.
“Dancing. I will breakdance!" Takehito interrupted.
Mrs. Klein's eyes lit up with encouragement. "That's fantastic, Takehito! Breakdancing is a great choice. I'm sure you'll do an amazing job.” Her smile was reassuring, and she added, “The talent show is three months away, so you have plenty of time to prepare. I'll be here to help you prepare if you need it.”
1.读原文，把握故事
who：谁 （续写不加新人）
when：什么时候（以一般过去时为主，对话里可用现在时）
Where: 发生在哪里（地点转换以原文为主，故事背景不能天马行空）
Why: 为什么（故事原因）
What: 发生了什么（合理发展；有效对话；推动情节发展）
How: 怎么样（主人公如何解决问题，故事结果是什么，整个故事线应该流畅完整）
A story
who
when
where
what
why
how
Takehito; mother; Mrs.Klein
That evening; Three months later
school ; home
Perform at the talent show
Encouragement from Mrs.Klein
breakdance
Part2. 弄清故事情节
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Beginning
Ending
Teacher asked other students
indifferent
Teacher asked Takehito
embarrassed
The bell rang
relieved
Teacher stopped him
anxious;bewildered
Climax(高潮)
breakdance
excited; nervous
Sat at the dinner table with his mother
The show came
amazing
Feeling
Part3. 十句定五句
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Para.1：That evening, Takehito sat at the dinner table with his mother.
就地取材，文字接龙（Para1首句）
2.
3.
4.
就地取材，反向文字接龙（Para2首句)
Para.2：The three months slipped by in a flash, and the day of the talent show was finally here.
就地取材，文字接龙（Para2首句）
故事结局
10.感悟升华
十句定五句
与母亲说明情况，寻求帮助
母亲鼓励他，并提供建议
下定决心，练习跳舞
中间有曲折艰辛
想起母亲和老师的鼓励，坚持
很紧张
被鼓励
上台表演
表演很成功
Part4. 佳作欣赏&大家一起来找茬
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That evening, Takehito sat at the dinner table with his mother. Hesitant at first, he finally shared, “Mom, Mrs. Klein asked what I'd perform at the talent show, and I said I'd breakdance. But I've never danced before.” His mother looked at him with a mixture of surprise and pride. “Breakdancing, huh That sounds exciting! Let's find you a dance class. You'll get better with practice.” The following week, Takehito began attending dance classes. The sessions were tough; his muscles ached, and he often stumbled over the moves. But he remembered Mrs. Klein's encouragement and his mother's faith in him. He kept pushing through, dedicating himself to mastering each step.
The following weeks witnessed Takehito’s determination and efforts.（无灵主语）
上台表演套路一：紧张—鼓励—开始表演—成功—升华
紧张
When Takehito steped onto stage, he thought have some butterflies in his stomache.
When he stepped onto the big stage, he heard his heart pounding widely.
When Takehito walked up to the stage, a strong sense of nervess swept over him.
A mixture of excitement and nervousness surging throug Takehito’s heart, he stood on the stage.
1. Takehito sank into an inner conflict between the desire to perform and the fear of dancing in public.
2. Though having made adequate preparations, Takehito was still overwhelmed by great nervousness, his heart beat violently as he dragged himself up to the stage.
被鼓励
But he look her mom’s eyes. Her embrassed was replace confidence.
Just in that moment, Takehito saw his mom and teacher, who was cheering for him. Worried and nervious give way to confidence.
1. No sooner had he caught sight of Mrs. Klein’s smiling face and encouraging look than his nervousness and worry faded away, replaced by courage to have a try.（倒装句）
2. Anxiety had almost drove him crazy when suddenly, he caught sight of Mrs. Klein’s smile, comforting and inspiring.
1. Enveloped in the glow of the lights, Takehito took a deep breath, calmed himself down and danced to the music. （done, S+V1,V2 and V3）
2. As the music started, he let the rhythm guide him, his movements flowing with confidence. His energetic performance was a burst of spins, flips, and powerful freezes, captivating everyone in the audience.
上台表演
Takehito looked at his firm eyes, gathered his courage stepped on the stage, began his show.
It was at that time that he noticed Mrs. Klein’s sight, who wore a reassuring smile. He forced himself calming down and began to dance.
1. The performance turned out to be a success, thunderous applause echoing around the hall.（独立主格）
2. To his surprise, he danced with heart and soul, standing out from all the participants.
表演成功
When he finished the final pause, a thunderous of applause was filled with the classroom.
With a smooth action ending up the show, he was surrounded by heated claps.
1. It was at that moment that Takehito came to realize that experience was a testament(证明) of patience, perseverance and passion.(强调句)
2. Actually, every individual possesses talent. When we find it, be brave, confident and make efforts, and we will create miracles in the end.
自然结局
1. As imaging, he established some friendships and become a positive person.
2. Without hesitate, he walked up to his mom and teachers, expressing his heartfelt grate to them and embaracing them tightly.
3. After that, his classmates asked Takehito teach them breakdance, rather than make fun of him any more. He is truely estabished some friendship.
4. Mom embraced me tightly, words failling her.
升华感悟
If you use your heart, and try you best, you can do it.
Maybe the distance between success and ordinariness sometimes was just a try.
Every step taken on the road counts.
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Part5. Homework
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请二次创作上周读后续写第二段
Paragraph 2:
Walking up on the stage, I took a deep breath and sat at the drum set. _______________
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Thank you

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