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读后续写--语篇分析训练5
人与自我（个人成长）——解决问题
探索即成长
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers' offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.
伊娃在高中的第一周努力保持头脑清醒。她最头疼的事情之一是在巨大的校舍里找路。那是一栋六层楼的建筑。每层楼都有四条走廊，通向教室、实验室和教师办公室。在大楼的某个地方，还有一个图书馆、一个自助餐厅和一个健身房。
情节：新的校园环境复杂，让Eva感到吃力-----情感：焦虑
Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn't exist.
伊娃的方向感很差，她发现在这么大的建筑里不可能四处走动。所有不同的走廊和房间都让人难以想象，更不用说记忆了。她决定记住她的课在哪里，然后假装这个地方的其他地方不存在。
情节：Eva方向感差，记不住路→仅记忆必要路线→刻意忽略其他区域 情感线：无奈妥协
In her first PE class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic.There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile.To Eva,"a mile"was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather's, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car!
在她的第一节体育课上，当皮特教练宣布每个人都必须在外面的跑道上跑一英里时，伊娃感到震惊。她在同学们的脸上搜寻恐慌的迹象。她最害怕的莫过于跑完一整英里。对伊娃来说，“一英里”用来形容长距离。从她家到她爷爷家有十英里，即使在车里，这似乎总是很长的路！
情节：第一节体育课上，教练宣布跑一英里。情感： 震惊和恐惧
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle(哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However,while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It's just the beginning," she thought. “I'll come in last for sure.”
当皮特教练吹哨的时候(哨子), 伊娃想她会被抛在九霄云外。然而，当她的一些同学险胜时，其他同学却落在了后面。“这只是一个开始，”她想，“我肯定会最后一个来的。”
情节： 哨响后群体表现分化→Eva预设自己会垫底
情感：自我怀疑→短暂困惑
Soon Eva began to breathe hard,with her heart pounding and legs
shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word "mile". Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow cast on the track by an oak tree up ahead.Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved(拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.
很快，伊娃开始用力呼吸，心跳不止，双腿僵硬摇晃。伊娃感到绝望，开始对自己使用心理战术。她不再想“英里”这个词了。相反，她专注于到达前方一棵橡树在赛道上投下的阴影。然后她集中精力慢跑到跑道弯曲的地方(拐弯).之后，她试着看看自己能否完成第一圈。一圈变成了两圈，然后三圈，然后四圈。
通过认知重构突破极限：生理痛苦→分解目标（树荫/弯道/单圈）→完成四圈
情感变化: 绝望→策略性专注→阶段性成就感(从被动接受到主动应对的转变)
1、找 。
2、先 ,
再 ,
逐渐 。
识别标志
跑到橡树投下的阴影处
集中精力跑到弯曲处
跑完第一圈，第二圈...
请从上一段内容中提炼主人公分解目标的过程
Para1：When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Para2：Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with处理the school building.
一、阅读上面材料，回答下列问题：
1.Para1首句是“情绪描写”（Eva was surprised），紧接着应该写什么？

答：解释情绪产生的原因——
深层刨析
直接原因
根本原因
事件描述（表象）
事件描述：她怎么也想不到，自己刚刚跑完了一公里
原句：I never would have guessed that before long Tehran University would be closed and my dreams would fade away.我怎么也想不到，不久德黑兰大学居然就会被关掉，我的梦想就这样烟消云散。
仿写
她能跑完一公里的直接原因：
她能跑完一公里的根本原因：
正是对她自己使用的心理战术起了作用
强调句：It was ..... that .....
回顾她使用心理战术的过程——如何分解目标
focused on
concentrated on
把...分解成... divide sth. into sth. / break up sth. into sth.
2.依据第二段第一句的提示（Eva decided to use the same trick），Para 1末句内容应该是？
答：Eva自己认可了这个心理战术。
总结：第一段续写思路——根因分析法
事件描述:
直接原因:
根本原因:
确认:
There was no doubt that 毫无疑问...
It was ..... that .....
sb. never would have guessed that
There was no doubt that 毫无疑问...
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.She never would have guessed that she had just run a whole mile.（事件描述） It suddenly occurred to her that it was the mind trick on herself that worked .（直接原因）When she focused on reaching the shadow and concentrated on jogging to the track curve, the long mile was divided into several closer destinations/ broken up into many shorter distances. （根本原因）There was no doubt that the mind trick helped her resolve the difficult problem.（确认）
当皮特教练说:“干得好!在终点线对她说，伊娃很惊讶。她从来没有想到她刚刚跑了整整一英里。她突然想到，正是她对自己用的心理战术起了作用。当她集中精力到达跑道上橡树阴影时，当她集中精力慢跑到轨道弯道时，长英里被分成了几个更近的目的地。毫无疑问，她自己的心理战术帮助她解决了这个难题。
3.Para2首句是“认知”环节，接下来环节应该是？
答：
行为环节
Para2：Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with处理the school building.
描述她的具体做法和进展——方法迁移的过程
1. 找 。
2. 先——记 ,
再——一周后 ,
3. 逐渐——效果 。
目标分解法
She noticed that ..... was no longer a headache to her.
第二段续写思路（共三部分）：
第一部分：
第二部分：
第三部分：
升华This experience made her realize that
效果（正能量故事结尾）
Eva如何执行
This experience made her realize that with determination and a positive mindset, she could overcome challenges she never thought possible.
这段经历让她意识到：只要有决心和积极的心态，她就能克服她从未想过的挑战。

Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.Through careful observation, she found that different colors and key landmarks could be used for identification. At the same time, she decided to remember the rooms in a direction first. A week later, Eva found a clear map of the school building in her mind. She noticed that finding her way in the huge school building was no longer a headache to her. This experience taught her the valuable lesson that with determination and a positive mindset, she could overcome challenges she never thought possible.
伊娃决定用同样的手段来对付学校大楼。通过仔细观察，她发现不同的颜色和关键的地标可以用来识别。与此同时，她决定先记住一个方向上的房间。一个星期后，伊娃在脑海中清晰地看到了学校大楼的地图。在巨大的学校大楼里找路对她来说不再是件头疼的事了。
规律总结，分为两种情况：
第一种：续写原文中没有提供解决问题的途径，需要续写中自己写，
第二种：续写原文中给出了解决问题的途径(提示),续写中进行照应

而具体到第二段又分为两种情况：
第一种：续写第一段就已经解决了问题，第二段或者谈效果，或者谈感受
第二种：续写第一段解释解决问题的途径，第二段谈如何执行和效果

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