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高一英语期中考试
作文讲评
如何写好"建议推荐"类书信
教学目录
1
真题回顾与总体评价
4
核心问题诊断与提升
2
典型问题分析与修改
5
话题语料库建设
3
范文赏析与结构剖析
6
实战演练与总结
真题回顾
主要问题
内容空洞
语料匮乏
逻辑断层
书面表达（满分 15 分）
假设你是李华，你校外教 David 计划拍摄一段关于校园生活的短视频，为此征求你的建议，请
你给他回一封邮件，内容包括：
1. 推荐 1-2 个可供拍摄的校园场景或活动；
2. 说明理由。
注意：
1. 词数 80 词左右；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
没有说明理由
说明的理由无关
语言表达常见错误
范文赏析与结构剖析
Dear David,
I'm excited to hear about your video project and would like to share some ideas to capture our campus atmosphere.
First, I highly recommend filming during the morning reading time. This is when classrooms are filled with the sound of students reciting Chinese poems or practicing English, showcasing their passion for learning and providing a fresh, energetic start to the day.
Another great spot is the sports field after class, where you can capture lively moments of students running, jumping, or playing ball games. These scenes perfectly reflect the energetic spirit of our campus.
I believe combining these two aspects will present a lively picture of our campus life. Looking forward to your video!
Yours,
Li Hua
三段式黄金结构
开头
问候 + 回应话题
I'm glad to hear...
主体
分点推荐 + 理由阐述
which shows... will surely...
结尾
祝福 + 期待
Hope these ideas help...
核心问题诊断与提升策略
The playground is big and beautiful.
The playground is where our vitality is fully displayed. It witnesses our laughter during P.E. classes and our cheers during sports meets, embodying the spirit of teamwork and healthy lifestyle.
问题一：理由空洞，如何深化？
“公式”升级： 不要只停留在What (是什么)，要写出Why (为什么) 和How (怎么样/有何意义)。
Dear David,
I'm thrilled to hear that you're planning to shoot a short video about our campus life. Here are my suggestions.
Firstly, I highly recommend capturing the dynamic scene of our morning running activity on the playground. It's not just exercise, but a symbol of our energy and collective spirit. The sight of hundreds of students running in unison under the morning sun is truly uplifting. Additionally, the school library during reading hour would be another perfect choice. It showcases a completely different atmosphere—quiet, serene, and focused. You can film students immersed in books, which perfectly represents our pursuit of knowledge.
I believe these two scenes will present a balanced view of our school life. Looking forward to your fantastic video!
Yours,
Li Hua
AI写作
核心问题诊断与提升策略
问题二：词汇单一，如何丰富？
1.推荐场景和描述形容词：
操场/体育馆: playground, sports field, gymnasium; morning exercises, sports meeting, basketball game
图书馆: school library, reading room, corners of the library; borrow/return books, search for materials, have group discussions
教室: classroom, lab; have a heated debate, do an experiment, listen attentively
其他: school canteen, art club, music room, campus garden
动态的:
dynamic, energetic, vigorous, lively, bustling
静态的:
peaceful, tranquil, serene, focused, academic
积极的:
meaningful, inspiring, motivating, collaborative
核心问题诊断与提升策略
问题二：词汇单一，如何丰富？
2.推荐活动和描述的形容词：
晨读（morning reading）
学习氛围浓厚 enthusiastic reading aloud, positive learning attitude
运动会（sports meeting）
活力四射energetic, cheer loudly, team spirit, youthful passion
社团活动（club activities）
多才多艺 show talents, colorful campus life, creative performances
校园风景（campus scenery）
环境优美 beautiful scenery, green lawns, blooming flowers, peaceful atmosphere
课堂互动（class interaction）
active discussions, teacher-student interaction, innovative teaching methods

话题语料库建设
进阶表达句式
It’s more than just... it’s a symbol of...
This is an ideal place to capture/vividly show...
It represents/reflects/embodies...
...would present a balanced view of...
...would add diversity to your video.
实战演练与修改策略
1
识别问题
内容空洞，缺乏细节
语言单一，词汇贫乏
逻辑混乱，衔接不当
2
应用公式
理由深化：What-Why-How
词汇升级：话题语料库
句式多样化：连接词
3
检查完善
格式规范：书信格式
结构清晰：三段式
表达流畅：语言自然
小组讨论任务：选择典型问题句子，运用本节课所学方法进行修改练习，重点关注理由阐述的深度和语言表达的丰富性。
识别问题
内容空洞，缺乏细节
语言单一，词汇贫乏
逻辑混乱，衔接不当
应用公式
本课要点总结
1
格式正确是基础
书信格式规范，
称呼结尾得体
3
内容具体是核心
推荐什么+为什么推荐，理由深入What-Why-How
2
结构清晰是关键
三段式结构，连接词使用恰当
4
语言丰富是亮点
积累话题词汇，
运用多样句式
写作提升路径：从基础格式 → 结构逻辑 → 内容深度 → 语言美感
希望大家把今天所学的写作技巧运用到今后的英语写作中
记住：好的写作源于清晰的思路、丰富的积累和持续的练习

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