资源简介

(共40张PPT)
A continuation of "Eliza's Choice"
第一部分：词汇积累
核心情绪与心理描写
1. 紧张与害怕
nervous (紧张的) anxious (焦虑的)
Her heart was racing/pounding wildly. (她的心怦怦直跳。)
/Somebody did sth with his heart racing/pounding wildly.
The thought of ... made her stomach turn. (一想到……让她感到反胃/五味杂陈。)
have butterflies in one's stomach 心里七上八下，紧张(忐忑)不安 / with butterflies in one's stomach
He waited for his turn to speak, with butterflies in his stomach.他怀着忐忑不安的心情等待轮到自己发言。
I had butterflies in my stomach right before stepping on the stage.
在上台之前，我心里七上八下，忐忑不安。
He stood up to speak, with his hands trembling.
他站起来发言，双手颤抖着。
He stood up to speak, feeling his palms become sweaty. (感觉手心出汗了。)
万能句型：
A wave/burst/rush/surge of nervousness washed/swept over her或welled up inside her. (一阵紧张感席卷了她。)
2. 犹豫与纠结
hesitate (犹豫) be unsure (不确定的)
A conflict went on inside her. (她内心在进行一场斗争。)
万能句型：
She was torn between ... and ... (她在……和……之间进退两难。)
"What if... " she wondered. (“万一……怎么办？”她心想。)
3. 愧疚与责任
guilty (愧疚的) feel bad (感到难过) responsibility (责任)
He lowered his head in guilt. 他愧疚地低下了头。
She couldn't look me in the eye. 她不敢直视我的眼睛。
"I'm sorry," he whispered, with his voice trembling. “对不起，”他小声说道，声音有些颤抖。
He bit his lip, feeling terrible. 他咬着嘴唇，心里难受极了。
She played with her fingers nervously. 她紧张地摆弄着手指。
The thought of ... made her stomach turn. (一想到……让她感到反胃/五味杂陈。)
万能句型：
The idea of saying no made her feel guilty. (拒绝的想法让她感到愧疚。)
She didn't want to let her mom down. (她不想让妈妈失望。)
4. 决心与勇气
determined (坚定的，决心的) courage (勇气) make up one's mind (下定决心)
万能句型：
A determined look appeared in her eyes. (她眼中闪现出坚定的神色。)
She took a deep breath to calm herself. (她深吸一口气让自己平静下来。)
She gathered her courage and said... (她鼓起勇气说道……)
3. 愧疚与责任
guilty (愧疚的) feel bad (感到难过) responsibility (责任)
He lowered his head in guilt. 他愧疚地低下了头。
She couldn't look me in the eye. 她不敢直视我的眼睛。
"I'm sorry," he whispered, with his voice trembling. “对不起，”他小声说道，声音有些颤抖。
He bit his lip, feeling terrible. 他咬着嘴唇，心里难受极了。
She played with her fingers nervously. 她紧张地摆弄着手指。
The thought of ... made her stomach turn. (一想到……让她感到反胃/五味杂陈。)
万能句型：
The idea of saying no made her feel guilty. (拒绝的想法让她感到愧疚。)
She didn't want to let her mom down. (她不想让妈妈失望。)
4. 决心与勇气
determined (坚定的，决心的) courage (勇气) make up one's mind (下定决心)
万能句型：
A determined look appeared in her eyes. (她眼中闪现出坚定的神色。)
She took a deep breath to calm herself. (她深吸一口气让自己平静下来。)
She gathered her courage and said... (她鼓起勇气说道……)
1. 紧张与害怕
____________ (紧张的) ___________ (焦虑的)
heart /stomach
她的心怦怦直跳。________________________________________.
/Somebody did sth _______________________________.
The ____________ of ... made her stomach _______. ( 一想到……让她感到反胃/五味杂陈。)
have butterflies in one's stomach 心里七上八下，紧张(忐忑)不安 / with butterflies in one's stomach
He waited for his turn to speak, ______ _____________ in his ____________.
他怀着忐忑不安的心情等待轮到自己发言。
I ______ butterflies in ___________________ right before stepping on the stage.
在上台之前，我心里七上八下，忐忑不安。
hands/palms
He stood up to speak , ________________________.
他站起来发言，双手颤抖着。
He stood up to speak, feeling ________________________________. (感觉手心出汗了。)
万能句型：
A _________/__________/________/________ of nervousness ______/_______over her.或______ up
inside her. (一阵紧张感席卷了她。)
nervous
anxious
Her heart was racing/pounding wildly.
did sth with his heart racing/pounding wildly
thought
turn
with butterflies
stomach
had
in my stomach
feeling his palms become sweaty
his palms become sweaty
wave
burst
rush
surge
washed
swept
welled
2. 犹豫与纠结
___________ (犹豫) be ________ (不确定的)
______________________ inside her. (她内心在进行一场斗争。)
万能句型：
She_____________ between ... and ... (她在……和……之间进退两难。)
"What if... " she ________. (“万一……怎么办？”她心想。)
hesitate
unsue
A conflict went on
She was torn
wondered
3. 愧疚与责任
__________ (愧疚的) __________ (感到难过) ____________ (责任)
He _______________ in guilt. 他愧疚地低下了头。
She couldn't ____________________. 她不敢直视我的眼睛。
"I'm sorry," he whispered, ____________________.
“对不起，”他小声说道，声音有些颤抖。
He ______________, ______ terrible. 他咬着嘴唇，心里难受极了。
She ________________________ nervously. 她紧张地摆弄着手指。
The ____________ of ... made her stomach _______.
( 一想到……让她感到反胃/五味杂陈。)
万能句型：
The idea _____________ made her ____________.
(拒绝的想法让她感到愧疚。)
She didn't want to __________________. (她不想让妈妈失望。)
guilty
feel bad
responsibility
lowered his head
look me in the eye
with his voice trembling
bit his lip
feeling
played with her fingers
thought
turn
of saying no
feel guilty
let her mom down
4. 决心与勇气
___________ (坚定的，决心的) _________ (勇气) __________________ (下定决心)
万能句型：
_________________________ appeared in her eyes. (她眼中闪现出坚定的神色。)
She ___________________________ to calm herself. (她深吸一口气让自己平静下来。)
She __________________________ and said... (她鼓起勇气说道……)
determined
courage
make up one's mind
A determined look
took a deep breath
gathered her courage
精准动作描写
1. 肢体动作（替换“走”、“说”、“想”）
go / walk 怎么走的？
rush (冲), trudge (沉重地走), tiptoe (踮脚走)，slip away(悄悄溜走)
say 怎么说的？
shout/yell(喊叫) exclaim(惊呼)mumble (咕哝), whisper (低语), add (补充说)
think 怎么想的？
A thought flashed in her mind... (一个念头闪过：/灵机一动：)
2. 面部表情
A smile spread across her face. (她脸上绽放出笑容。)
Her eyes shone with excitement. (她眼中闪烁着兴奋的光芒。)
She forced a smile. (她挤出一丝微笑。)
1. 肢体动作（替换“走”、“说”、“想”）
go / walk 怎么走的？
________ (冲过去), ________ (沉重地走), _______(踮脚走)，___________(悄悄溜走)
say 怎么说的？
___________(喊叫) __________(惊呼)__________ (咕哝), ________ (低语), ____ (补充说)
think 怎么想的？
__________________________________. (一个念头闪过)
2. 面部表情
A smile ______________________. (她脸上绽放出笑容。)
Her eyes ______________________. (她眼中闪烁着兴奋的光芒。)
She ______________________. (她挤出一丝微笑。)
rush
trudge
tiptoe
slip away
shout/yell
exclaim
mumble
whisper
add
A thought flashed in her mind
spread across her face
shone with excitement.
forced a smile
第二部分：教学过程
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The final class of the day was PE, and Eliza was having a great time skipping rope on the sports field. Her classmates gathered around, cheering her on. Skipping rope was her best sport, and she was fast. The rope spun quickly as she jumped, and when the timer went off,the counter showed 201 skips. Smiling, Eliza raised her hand in a victory sign to the crowd.Just then, the school bell rang, signaling the end of the day.
Eliza packed up her skipping rope, but her mind was focused on something else— she had to make a decision. That morning, Ms. White had asked her if she would take charge of the class bulletin board(布告栏) for an upcoming competition. Anna, the student who usually did it, was sick, and someone needed to step in. Eliza was surprised that Ms. White had chosen her. She was nervous and said that her handwriting wasn't good enough. But Ms. White encouraged her to think it over and promised to let her make the final decision by the end of the day.
Now, as Eliza walked toward the teachers' office, her heart raced. The thought of her handwriting being displayed on the bulletin board for everyone to see made her stomach turn.She had already decided she would say no. With that decision in mind, she quickened her pace(步伐), almost running across the sports field.
When Eliza reached the office, she still felt nervous. She stood outside the door for a moment, trying to calm herself. The idea of saying no to Ms. White made her feel guilty(愧疚).Ms. White had been so kind, and now she was putting all her trust in Eliza. But the thought of her messy handwriting being on display weighed on her. She wasn't sure if she was ready for such a big responsibility.
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Taking a deep breath, Eliza knocked on the door.
After some thought, Eliza replied, “OK, I' ll give it a try.”
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The final class of the day was PE, and Eliza was having a great time skipping rope on the sports field. Her classmates gathered around, cheering her on. Skipping rope was her best sport, and she was fast. The rope spun(spin v.) quickly as she jumped, and when the timer went off, the counter showed 201 skips. Smiling, Eliza raised her hand in a victory sign to the crowd. Just then, the school bell rang, signaling the end of the day.
Eliza packed up her skipping rope, but her mind was focused on something else— she had to make a decision. That morning, Ms. White had asked her if she would take charge of the class bulletin board(布告栏) for an upcoming competition. Anna, the student who usually did it, was sick, and someone needed to step in. Eliza was surprised that Ms. White had chosen her. She was nervous and said that her handwriting wasn't good enough. But Ms. White encouraged her to think it over and promised to let her make the final decision by the end of the day.
Now, as Eliza walked toward the teachers' office, her heart raced. The thought of her handwriting being displayed on the bulletin board for everyone to see made her stomach turn.She had already decided she would say no. With that decision in mind, she quickened her pace(步伐), almost running across the sports field.
When Eliza reached the office, she still felt nervous. She stood outside the door for a moment, trying to calm herself. The idea of saying no to Ms. White made her feel guilty(愧疚).Ms. White had been so kind, and now she was putting all her trust in Eliza. But the thought of her messy handwriting being on display weighed on her. She wasn't sure if she was ready for such a big responsibility.
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Taking a deep breath, Eliza knocked on the door.
After some thought, Eliza replied, “OK, I' ll give it a try.”
当天最后一节课是体育课，伊丽莎在操场上玩跳绳玩得不亦乐乎。同学们围过来为她加油助威。跳绳是她最拿手的运动，而且她跳得特别快。她一跳绳，绳子就转得飞快，计时器一响，计数器显示已经跳了201下。伊丽莎笑着向人群举起胜利的手势。就在这时，学校的铃声响起，宣告了一天的结束。
伊丽莎收拾好她的跳绳，但她的思绪却飘向了其他事情——她必须做出一个决定。那天早上，怀特老师问她是否愿意负责班级公告栏（布告栏）在即将到来的比赛中的工作。通常负责这个任务的安娜生病了，需要有人顶替。伊丽莎惊讶于怀特老师选择了她。她感到紧张，并说她的字写得不够好。但怀特老师鼓励她仔细考虑，并承诺会在当天结束前让她做最终决定。
现在，伊丽莎走向教师办公室时，心跳加速。想到自己的手写作业会被展示在公告板上供所有人看到，她感到一阵恶心。她已经决定要拒绝。有了这个决定，她加快了脚步（步伐），几乎跑过整个运动场。
当伊丽莎到达办公室时，她仍然感到紧张。她在门外站了一会儿，试图让自己冷静下来。拒绝怀特女士的想法让她感到内疚（愧疚）。怀特女士一直很友善，现在她把所有的信任都寄托在伊丽莎身上。但想到自己潦草的字迹会被展示出来，她心里很不是滋味。她不确定自己是否准备好承担这么大的责任。
Writing Clinic
亮点：
能够写出简单的动作和对话，尽力解决“无话可说”，精神可嘉。
能注意到衔接和收尾环节
问题：
1.主题不明确或偏离
2.代入“I”
3.布告栏 比赛分不清
4.字数明显不足，书写普遍不够工整
5.语言表达匮乏
语言表达诊断：
Eliza was nervous. She went to the office and said to Ms. White, "I'm worried." Ms. White told her not to worry. Then Eliza said okay.
问题一：动作描写单一。
大量使用walk, say, think 等宽泛词汇。“She went to the office and said...”不够具体。
问题二：心理描写空洞。
习惯用telling（直接告诉）而非 showing（生动展现）。
“She was very nervous.” 而不是展现她如何紧张。
Learning Objectives
教学目标：
运用“做了什么、想了什么、说了什么”进行细化、深化和优化，使续写内容更加生动、丰满、合理。
动作升级： 从“宽泛动词”到“精准动词”。
心理升级： 从“直接告知”到“具体展现”。
教学重点：
How to upgrade
Step 2 升级句子
1.动作描写升级——让画面“动”起来
把“宽泛动词”换成“精准动词”：
go / walk 怎么走的？
rush (冲), trudge (沉重地走), tiptoe (踮脚走)，slip away(悄悄溜走)
say 怎么说的？
shout/yell(喊叫) exclaim(惊呼)mumble (咕哝), whisper (低语), add (补充说)
think 怎么想的？
A thought flashed in her mind... (一个念头闪过) On reflection,------
look at 怎么看的？
glance at/stare at/watch
面部表情---笑/高兴起来
A smile spread across her face. (她脸上绽放出笑容。)
When she heard she got the job, her face lit up.
（当她听说自己得到了那份工作时，她的脸一下子亮了起来。）
She brightened up immediately. （她立刻容光焕发。）
Her eyes shone with excitement. (她眼中闪烁着兴奋的光芒。)
---------- 走
原句：She went into the office.
升级方向：表现出她的“犹豫”或“紧张”。
升级句：She ______ into the office, her steps heavy with doubt.
原句：He left the party because he felt it was boring.
升级句：Seeing that the party was getting boring, he __________ when
no one was looking.
The students __________ out of the classroom as soon as the bell rang.
The mother ______ out of the room to avoid waking up the sleeping child.
walked hesitantly/unwillingly (犹豫地走)
slipped away
rushed
tipyoed
实战演练：
------ 说
原句：Lily said to her deskmate, "I don't have an eraser."
升级方向： 在安静的考场，。
升级句：In the quiet examination room, Lily _________ to her deskmate,
"I don't have an eraser."
Seeing the soccer ball flying over, Tom __________ "Watch out!"
After a moment of hesitation, she ____________, "I'm sorry."and
lowered her head.
实战演练：
whispered
shouted
mumbled
------ 看
原句： 老师在讲课，Johnny 却一直在想窗外的小鸟。
He looked at the blackboard, but didn't see anything.
升级句：He ________ at the blackboard, but didn't see anything.
动物园里，一个孩子第一次看到大熊猫。
The little boy _________ at the panda with big eyes.
In the park, the mother ________ her child play.
实战演练：
glanced
stared
watched
Step 2 升级句子
2.心理描写升级——让内心“看”得见
用“生理反应/内心独白”来代替“直接告知”
She was nervous. Her palms ____________. (她的手掌出汗了。)
She felt guilty. The __________ of saying no made her _________turn.
(想到拒绝就让她反胃/五味杂陈。)
She was happy.
A bright smile instantly ________________ face.
(一抹灿烂的笑容立刻在她脸上绽开。)
A wave of happiness _________________ him, making him feel light as air.
(一阵幸福的浪潮席卷了他，让他感觉轻得像空气一样。)
were sweaty
thought
stomache
spread across her
swept/washed over
Eliza felt determined.
Eliza clenched her fists (攥紧拳头) and ____________,ready to face the challenge ahead.
"OK," she said __________(用坚定的声音) , "I'll give it a try, for Anna and the class." she promised herself.
a determined look appeared in her eyes.
in a firm voice
Step 3 升级段落
基础版范文
Para 1
Taking a deep breath, Eliza knocked on the door. She was nervous. She pushed the door open and said to Ms. White, "I am worried about my handwriting. I don't think I can do the bulletin board." Ms. White was nice. She said, "Don't worry. I believe in you." Eliza thought about it.
Para 2
After some thought, Eliza replied, "OK, I'll give it a try."(有啥想法 ) Ms. White was happy. Eliza also felt determined. She said she would try her best. Then she prepared carefully. Finally, it was very successful.
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Step 4 升级版范文展示
Para 1
Taking a deep breath, Eliza knocked on the door. Her hands were trembling as she gently pushed the door open and stepped inside. Seeing Ms. White at her desk, she mumbled, avoiding eye contact /afraid to look her in the eye, "I am worried about my handwriting. I don't think I can do the bulletin board." Ms. White looked up with a warm, encouraging smile. "Don't worry. I believe in you," she replied calmly, "I chose you for your determination, not for perfect handwriting." Eliza thought about her words, her heart still pounding in her chest.
Para 2
After some thought, Eliza replied, "OK, I'll give it a try." By this time , she had an idea in mind: she could design a unique layout to make it one to remember. Hearing it, Ms. White’s face lit up with a proud smile and as for Eliza, a determined look also appeared in her eyes . During the next days,Eliza devoted herself to designing it, putting/injecting her passion into it. Thankfully, when the bulletin board was finally finished, it immediately produced a hit among all the teachers and students. It was a great reminder that courage and effort could lead to unexpected rewards.
Step 4 升级版范文展示
Para 1
Taking a deep breath, Eliza knocked on the door. Her hands were trembling as she gently pushed the door open and stepped inside. Seeing Ms. White at her desk, she mumbled, avoiding eye contact /afraid to look her in the eye, "I am worried about my handwriting. I don't think I can do the bulletin board." Ms. White looked up with a warm, encouraging smile. "Don't worry. I believe in you," she replied calmly, "I chose you for your determination, not for perfect handwriting." Eliza thought about her words, her heart still pounding in her chest.
Para 2
After some thought, Eliza replied, "OK, I'll give it a try." By this time , she had an idea in mind: she could design a unique layout to make it one to remember. Hearing it, Ms. White’s face lit up with a proud smile and as for Eliza, a determined look also appeared in her eyes . During the next days, Eliza devoted herself to designing it, putting/injecting her passion into it. Thankfully, when the bulletin board was finally finished, it immediately produced a hit among all the teachers and students. It was a great reminder that courage and effort could lead to unexpected rewards.
Step 4 巩固所学
Taking a deep breath, Eliza knocked on the door. 1. (推门进去时的状态---紧张) ______________________ as she _______pushed ____________ and went inside. Seeing Ms. White at her desk, 2.(如何说？) she ______, _____________, "I am worried about my handwriting. I don't think I can do the bulletin board." Ms. White looked up 3.(如何看？) ______________________. "Don't worry. I believe in you," she replied 4.(如何回复)_____, "I chose you for your determination, not for perfect handwriting." Eliza thought about her words, 5._________________________________ (与第二段首句衔接，思考及状态)
After some thought, Eliza replied, "OK, I'll give it a try." 1.(心里已经有了想法)____________________________: she could design a unique layout to make it one to remember. Hearing it, 2.(Ms. White很高兴)______________________ with a ______ smile and as for Eliza, 3.(有了决心和勇气) ___________________ also ___________________ . During the next days, 4.(如何prepare ) Eliza _____________________ it, putting/injecting her passion into it. Thankfully, when the bulletin board was finally finished, 5.(结果successful) it ________________________ among all the teachers and students. 6.(感悟/主题: courage and effort )
Her hands were trembling
gently
the door open
mumbled
avoiding eye contact
with a warm, encouraging smile
her heart still pounding in her chest
By this time , she had an idea in mind
Ms. White’s face lit up
proud
a determined look
appeared in her eyes
devoted herself to designing
it immediately produced a hit
Summary and Homework
Step 4 Summary and Homework
Summary：
学会使用了至少 1/2/3/--- 个精准动词。
学会使用至少 1/2/3/--- 种展现心理的方法
Homework：
总结范文中描写修饰性句子；
并借助汉语翻译背写整篇范文，认真体会“升级技巧”在整篇续写中的运用。
Homework
Para 1
Taking a deep breath, Eliza knocked on the door. 她双手颤抖着，轻轻推开房门走了进去。看见Ms.White坐在桌前，她躲闪着眼神小声说："我担心自己的字写得不好，可能做不了板报。" Ms.White抬起头，露出温暖鼓励的笑容："别担心，我相信你可以的。"她镇定地说，"我选你是因为你的认真，不是要完美的字迹。" Eliza想着她的话，心依然在胸口怦怦直跳。
Para 2
After some thought, Eliza replied, "OK, I'll give it a try." 此时她心中有了一个想法：她可以用特别的设计让板报令人过目不忘。听到这个想法，Ms.White脸上露出欣慰的笑容，而 Eliza眼中也闪现出坚定的光芒。接下来的日子里，她全心投入设计，把热情都倾注其中。令人欣慰的是，当板报最终完成时，立刻受到了全体师生的喜爱。这让我们明白：勇气和努力终会带来意想不到的收获。

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