资源简介 2026年上海闵行区中考一模初三英语作文解析一、原题回顾(2026闵行区中考一模)VII. Writing (作文) (本大题共1题,共20分)84. Write at least 60 words according to the given situation (根据以下情境写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号占一格)假设你是一名花园学校(Rose Garden School)的初三学生李华,英国姊妹学校校长Mrs. Miller带领一批学生来你校访问,你被选为学生代表上台发言。请用英语撰写一篇欢迎辞,欢迎Mrs. Miller和同学们的同时,介绍你的校园特色文化或活动,说明接待期间你所负责的具体工作、能给予的帮助,并送上你和同学们的祝福。(注意:1. 欢迎辞中不得出现姓名、校名等个人信息,否则不予评分。2. 照抄本卷语篇不得分。)二、审题一、任务背景与身份定位任务性质:这是一篇面向英国姊妹学校来访师生的欢迎辞,属于应用文写作。身份设定:作为初三学生代表,发言需兼顾学生的真诚热情与代表的得体礼貌。场景设定:在正式的欢迎仪式上,需开篇点题,快速拉近与来访师生的距离。二、核心写作要求拆解1. 必写内容模块欢迎致意:向 Mrs. Miller 和来访同学表达热烈欢迎,这是文章的开篇核心。校园特色介绍:需选取 1-2 个具体、有代表性的校园文化或活动,如传统艺术社团、特色课程等,避免空泛。接待职责说明:明确自己在来访期间的具体工作,如校园向导、活动协助、问题解答等,体现责任感。美好祝愿:对来访师生的行程表达祝福,让结尾温暖有力。2. 硬性限制条件字数:不少于60词,需保证内容充实。禁忌:不得出现真实姓名、校名,不得照抄试卷原文。语言:符合初三学生水平,避免复杂词汇和长难句。三、文章结构逻辑开头段:问候+欢迎,点明身份与场合,简洁明了。主体段1:介绍校园特色,用具体例子展现学校文化魅力。主体段2:说明接待工作,体现主动服务的态度。结尾段:送上祝福,升华友好交流的主题。四、得分关键点1. 必须覆盖所有核心写作要点,遗漏会直接扣分。2. 用词、语法需准确,避免低级错误。3. 保持热情、真诚、得体的语气,符合学生代表的身份。4. 段落划分明确,逻辑连贯,让读者一目了然。三、写作框架模板①开头(问候+欢迎+点明身份)It’s my great honor to stand here and extend our warmest welcome to all of you, dear [来访嘉宾称呼,如:Mrs. Miller/our foreign friends]. I’m [你的身份,如:a Grade 9 student/your student guide for this visit].②主体1(介绍校园特色/文化)Our school is proud of its rich campus life. We have [具体活动1,如:a popular traditional dance club] where we [活动内容,如:learn to perform Chinese folk dances], and [具体活动2,如:a weekly international culture sharing session] that lets us [活动意义,如:learn about different countries’ customs]. These activities not only make our school life colorful, but also help us understand different cultures better.③主体2(说明接待职责/提供帮助)During your stay, I’ll be happy to help you in any way I can. I’ll [具体工作1,如:show you around our beautiful campus and introduce our school history], [具体工作2,如:help you join our after-school activities], and [具体工作3,如:answer any questions you have about our daily life]. If you need anything, just let me know!④结尾(送上祝福)I truly hope you’ll have an unforgettable time here, make lots of new friends, and take home wonderful memories. Wish you a pleasant and meaningful visit!四、范文赏析Dear Mrs. Miller and dear friends,It’s my great honor to stand here and extend our warmest welcome to all of you.Our school is proud of its rich cultural atmosphere. We have a traditional calligraphy club where students practice writing Chinese characters, and a weekly traditional music workshop that lets us experience the beauty of guzheng and erhu. These activities are not only part of our campus life, but also a window into Chinese culture.During your stay, I’ll be your guide. I’ll show you around our campus, introduce you to our teachers and classmates, and help with any needs you might have—whether it’s finding your way, understanding our daily schedule, or joining in our activities.I truly hope you’ll have an unforgettable time here, make lots of new friends, and take home wonderful memories of our school and city. Wish you a pleasant and meaningful visit!范文点评:(1)整体评价这篇欢迎辞结构清晰、内容完整,既满足了题目所有要求,又在语言表达上贴合初三学生的水平,是一篇兼具实用性和感染力的范文。(2)亮点分析1. 开篇得体,点明身份开头用 “It’s my great honor to stand here and extend our warmest welcome to all of you.”既表达了荣幸之感,又直接点明欢迎主题,符合学生代表的发言身份,礼貌又热情。2. 校园特色介绍具体生动文中选取了 “traditional calligraphy club”和“traditional music workshop”两个具体活动,并用 “practice writing Chinese characters”和“experience the beauty of guzheng and erhu”进行细节补充,让来访师生能直观感受到校园文化特色,避免了空泛的描述。3. 接待职责明确,体现主动性用 “I’ll be your guide”明确身份,再通过“show you around our campus”、“introduce you to our teachers and classmates”和“help with any needs you might have”具体说明工作内容,展现出细致周到的服务意识,让读者感受到真诚的态度。4. 结尾祝福温暖,升华主题结尾用“unforgettable time”、“make lots of new friends”和“wonderful memories”传递美好祝愿,既呼应了欢迎的主题,又强化了友好交流的氛围,让全文收尾自然有力。5. 语言简洁,符合水平整体用词简洁易懂,句式以简单句和并列句为主,如“These activities are not only part of our campus life, but also a window into Chinese culture.”既用到了初中阶段重点句型“not only...but also...”,又保证了表达的流畅性。(3)可借鉴的高分技巧要点全覆盖:严格按照题目要求,包含欢迎、介绍、职责、祝福四个核心模块,确保内容完整。细节具体化:介绍校园特色时用具体活动替代空泛描述,让内容更有说服力。语气适配场景:保持热情、真诚的语气,符合学生代表的身份和欢迎仪式的场合。 展开更多...... 收起↑ 资源预览