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(共18张PPT)
Crafting the Opening Paragraph
for a Continuation Writing
读后续写之开篇段落的构思与写作
Learning aims:
you will be :
1. able to analyze the text.
2. use the backward reasoning method (倒推法)to construct（搭建） the framework （框架）for the first paragraph's continuation.
3. upgrade（升级） the language expression by employing action descriptions（动作描写）, psychological descriptions（心理描写）, and environmental descriptions.（环境描写）
Little Notes
Once again, I headed out to look for a job. Although I wasn't very confident about the interview, I still held my head high, trying to stay hopeful under the morning sun. Before leaving, I made sure to stick a note on the fridge that read, "Son, finish your breakfast and have a good day." Then I walked out of the door.
This quiet tradition came from my father. I still remember how, before every trip, he would leave a note on my desk: "I'll come back with gifts for you." When I stayed up late studying, I would open my pencil box and find another note inside: "Go to bed and have a good dream." During summer camp, I would find a little note in my pocket that said, "Take care of yourself." Those small pieces of paper were my first understanding of love-a gentle way of reminding me that someone always cared.
Years later, when my own son Jack was old enough to read, I continued the tradition. I left little notes throughout his life: "You are smarter than you think" in his math book, "Son, my little sun" on his bedroom door, and "Good luck at soccer" inside his shoe. He never said anything about them, but he became a happy, brave, and kind boy. That was enough for me.
Then came the hardest winter of my life. My company cut our pay, and people began whispering about who might lose their jobs. I worked every day with a heavy heart, always anxious,but in the end, I was still told to leave. It was a huge shock-but things got even harder. My husband lost his job too and had to move to another city to find work. I didn't have time to feel sad. I needed to find a new job quickly to support our family.
注意：
(1）续写词数应为150个左右；
(2）请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Activity 1: Draw the character relationship
Who
Activity 2: Analyze the text
1. What is the main purpose of the "little notes" tradition as established by the narrator's father
A. To give practical advice for daily life.
B. To provide a gentle reminder of care and love.
C. To secretly check on the narrator's activities.
D. To help the narrator improve her writing skills.

2. How did Jack typically react to the notes his mother left for him
A. He complained about them being annoying.
B. He verbally thanked her every time.
C. He never mentioned them but became a positive boy.
D. He wrote notes back to her immediately.
B
C
(What is “little notes”)
3. What major challenges is the narrator facing in the fourth paragraph
She ____ her job, and her husband had to _____ away for work.
4. The primary theme of the story is the power of ________.
A. financial success
B. small, consistent gestures of love
C. verbal communication
D. strict parenting
lost
move
B
(What happened / conflict )
Activity 3:续写框架：
(Para.2:The apple was refreshing and sweet, and so was the note.)
Para.1:That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted
Tips(ask questions):
1.When & where , who did _____
2. How did he/she /I felt_______ 3.情节倒推法
Para. 1:
承上
启下
3.
4…
2.
1.
Character:
Character：
I , my son and little notes
apple note sweet Why & how
I ______ apple and a note _________ (动作描写)
I __________ my son _________ than I ______ (动作+ 环境描写)
I did what How did I feel (动作+心理描写)
Put words into sentences （连词成句 ）:
3. Jack was already asleep. I sank onto the couch in the quiet living room.
key words Chinese sentences English sentences
3. I ___. Jack ____
4... 2. I _____ an apple and a note
1. note on table read, “________ ”
“Mom, everything will be OK. I love you.”
2. I saw an apples on the table. When I picked it up, I noticed a small note stuck to the apple.
2.我看到桌上有一苹果在桌上。当我拿起苹果时，我注意到苹果上粘着一个小纸条。(stick)
1.“妈妈，一切都会好起来的。我爱你”
3.杰克已经睡着了。我坐在安静的客厅的沙发上。（sit / sink onto ）
A:我捡起一块，当我这做时，我的手指碰到了下面的东西。
B:上面用杰克工整的笔迹写着，"妈妈，一切都会好起来的。我爱你。
C:出于好奇，我掀开盘子，发现了一张小纸条。
D:"当我轻轻地拿着那张纸条时，我的眼睛里涌出了泪水。
E:我坐在安静的客厅的沙发上，看到桌上有一小盘切得整整齐齐的苹果在等我。
F:杰克已经睡着了。
2.
情节构建框架：
1.
3.
4.
5.
6.
Task 4：句式升级
1.A:杰克已经睡着了。____________________________________________
B: 杰克睡得正香，柔软的脸颊贴在枕头上，唇边漾着一丝星星般的浅笑，仿佛在做什么美梦。(rest on, a little smile like a tiny star，play on, lip,)(倒装句+独立主格结构+比喻修辞)
总结句型技巧：
Jack was already asleep.
Fast asleep was Jack, his soft face resting on the pillow, a little smile like a tiny star playing on his lips
as if dreaming of something nice.
倒装句（表语+be+主语：Fast asleep was Jack）；比喻修辞（smile like a tiny star）
2.A: 我坐在安静的客厅的沙发上，看到桌上有一小盘切得整整齐齐的苹果在等我。________________________________________________________________
B:_______ (step) slowly into the quiet living room and _____ (sink) onto the couch, my eyes immediately _______ (fall on) a small plate of neatly sliced apples—fresh and sweet-looking under (暖光让整个房间都满是暖意comfort)
总结句式技巧：
I sank onto the couch in the quiet living room and saw a small plate of neatly sliced apples waiting for me on the table.
Stepping
sinking
fell on
the warm light that filled the room with comfort.
非谓语状语（doing短语前置：Stepping...and sinking...）；无灵主语（warm light名词 + 动词（filled...with comfort）
3.A:我捡起一块，当我这做时，我的手指碰到了下面的东西。(brushed against)
B: 我伸手去拿一块，指尖触到脆生生的苹果时，盘子底下藏着的一张纸状物轻轻蹭过我的手。
(reach out, finger, crisp apple, something paper-like无灵主语, brush against)
总结句式技巧：
I picked a piece up, and as I did, my fingers brushed against something underneath.
I reached out to pick one, and as my fingers touched the crisp apple, something paper-like hidden under the plate brushed
against them.
无灵主语：n. + v.（something paper-like + brushed against）
4.A: 出于好奇，我掀开盘子，发现了一张小纸条。上面用杰克工整的笔迹写着，"妈妈，一切都会好起来的。我爱你。

B: 我满心好奇，小心翼翼地掀开盘子，竟发现一张小纸条；杰克那工整又带着孩子气的字迹写着：“妈妈，我知道今天你很难熬，但你超棒的。一切都会好起来的，我爱你！”(形容词短语前置,only to do sth)
总结句式技巧:
Curious, I lifted the plate and found a small note.In Jack's neat handwriting, it read, "Mom, everything will be OK. I love you. "
Curious about it, I lifted the plate carefully, only to find a small note; in Jack’s neat, childlike handwriting, these words were written: “Mom, I know today was hard, but you’re great. Everything will get better. I love you!”
非谓语状语（形容词短语前置)
5.A: 当我轻轻地拿着那张纸条时，我的眼睛里涌出了泪水。
B: _______ when I held the note gently ______(强调句) my eyes filled with tears, and a warm feeling like sweet honey quickly chased away the day’s tiredness, ___________________.(疲惫慢慢消失,非限制性定语从句)
总结句式技巧：
My eyes welled up with tears as I held the note gently in my hand.
It was
that
which slowly left me
强调句 It was…that…;比喻修辞（warm feeling like sweet honey股蜜糖般的暖意）;非限制性定语从句
That evening, after another long, unsuccessful day, I came home exhausted. Jack was already asleep. I sank onto the couch in the quiet living room and saw a small plate of neatly sliced apples waiting for me on the table. I picked a piece up, and as I did, my fingers brushed against something underneath. Curious, I lifted the plate and found a small note. In Jack's neat handwriting, it read, "Mom, everything will be OK. I love you. " My eyes welled up with tears as I held the note gently in my hand.
Task 5: 段落整合
Task 6: Summary (升级句型公式)真题改编原句
1. He was so excited at he couldn’t’t say a word when he saw the gift.（全国卷读后续写素材）
2. The rain stopped suddenly, and we decided to continue our trip.（新高考I卷场景句）
3. She found a old photo in the drawer when she cleaned her room.（全国卷语法填空句型拓展） 4. His voice was clear, and everyone in the room could hear him.
1. So excited was he at the sight of the gift that he couldn’t say a word.（倒装句）
2. The rain stopping suddenly, we decided to continue our trip.（非谓语状语+无灵主语）
3. Cleaning her room, she found an old photo in the drawer.（非谓语状语）
4. It was his clear voice that everyone in the room could hear.（强调句）
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