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读后续写家庭亲情类
Ⅰ主题解读
家庭亲情类故事通常描写主人公与家人之间发生的日常生活事件。2021年新高考Ⅰ卷考查此类故事，主题为“给妈妈做母亲节早餐”。 该类故事一般分为两大类：
1.相亲相爱的锦上添花，比如纪念重要日子(如举办生日派对、母亲节、父亲节等)、父母教孩子新技能、孩子为长辈解决困难等。要求续写延续快乐有爱的语篇基调，刻画家人间的温馨举动，表达收获、开心、感恩等。
2.解决小误会/小矛盾的握手言和，比如亲子之间缺乏沟通，父母把自己的意志强加给子女，子女觉得父母做法不对，父母帮倒忙等。要求续写用原文伏笔，化解冲突，方式可以是弥补、解释、道歉、回忆等，最后冰释前嫌，握手言和。
家庭亲情类故事模型通常为：
Ⅱ万能句式表达
情绪表达
1. sb. felt a great sense of +情绪名词+ welling up in sb's heart
Alice felt a great sense of warmth welling up in her heart.Alice感觉有一股暖流在心里蔓延。
2.adj.+adj. ,主语+谓语+其他
Expected and delighted, they accepted the suggestion.既期待又兴奋，他们接受了这个建议。
动作表达：
1.主语+动作1+动作2 and 动作3
Alice took the tools, walked out and put the tools on the ground.Alice拿着工具，向外走去然后把工具放在了地上。
2. 主语+谓语动词，非谓语动词+其他
They talked about old memories, sharing happiness and joy.他们谈论着原来的记忆，分享着幸福和快乐。
加分表达
1. It is +强调部分+that
It is love and accompany that make the family closer and closer.是陪伴和爱让家人更加亲密。
2.With+宾语(名词或者代词)+宾补（to do / doing/ done/ adj./介词短语），+主语+谓语动词+其他
With an exciting vioce, Harrison asked:....Harrison 带着激动的声音问道。
3.Not only...but also 中not only 放句首，句子使用半倒装（助动词或情态动词+主语+实义动词）
Not only did it bring a chance to taste the delicioous food, but also it made them closer.这次停电不仅带给带给他们品尝美食的机会也让他们更加亲密。
升华表达
1．I keep the little plane as a reminder of my daughter’s love and also the power of words.
我保留着这架小飞机，以提醒女儿对我的爱和语言的力量。
2．Every time I faced challenges，a thought of giving up flashed in my mind，but the support of my family gave me the strength to keep going.每次面对挑战，我都想放弃，但是家人的支持给了我继续前进的力量。
3．The warm golden sunlight，flooding in through the window，together with love between my family，warmed us.温暖的金色阳光，透过窗户照进来，和家人之间的爱一起，温暖了我们。
4．Since then，my father’s plain and encouraging words have always echoed in my mind，guiding the way of my life.从那以后，父亲那句直白而鼓舞人心的话语一直在我的脑海中回响，指引着我的人生道路。
5．Following that，it gradually dawned on me that the love of mother is priceless，which nothing can match.
此后，我逐渐意识到，母亲的爱是无价的，没有什么能比得上。
Ⅲ典例剖析　(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a．m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next，Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time，she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute，the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully，Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
As the twins looked around them in disappointment，their father appeared.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
Ⅳ分步解读指导
Step 1　抓核心线索，理故事脉络
人物 Jenna & Jeff(twins)，mother，father 时间 on Mother’s Day
地点 at home
冲突/矛盾 双胞胎杰夫和詹娜计划为他们的妈妈做早餐，希望给她惊喜，结果手忙脚乱，事与愿违，厨房一片狼藉 文章主题 亲情、爱，温馨、难忘的母亲节
故事线索 (起)双胞胎杰夫和詹娜计划为他们的母亲做早餐作为母亲节惊喜→(承)一切都很顺利，直到杰夫烧焦了第一块面包→(承)粥溢出了，杰夫的手触摸了热炉，另一块面包变黑了。→(转)他们的父亲出现了→(合)这对双胞胎把早餐带给了他们的母亲。
Step 2　衔接升华句，初建续写模型
Step 3　思伏笔添细节，原续更融洽
捕捉原文所设伏笔，充盈过渡句细节并合理衔接，以使续写段落在逻辑和内容上更符合原文基调。
原文伏笔点 过渡句中可与伏笔衔接的细节
标题 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE 续写第二段可写妈妈看到早餐时的惊喜
首段 How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. 续写第二段可写妈妈看到早餐被端到床前时的快乐
原文二、三段中叙述面包煎煳了，粥溢出了，厨房一片狼藉 续写第一段可写父亲建议双胞胎收拾厨房
尾段 Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. 续写第一段可写父亲如何处理这锅没煮好的粥
尾段 But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. 续写第二段可写母亲看到杰夫的手，落下泪来
特定物品 pot，pan，eggs，milk 续写第一段可写孩子们和父亲再次做早餐的场景
Step 4　沿原文特点，写“3好”表达(准确、丰富、地道)
原文对做早餐的动作描写细腻，体现出即使简单的早餐，倘若不熟练，也会有很大的麻烦。在描写做早餐时，利用场景描写表现双胞胎由最初的自信到最后的不自信和沮丧，使描述极具画面感；利用间接引语呈现人物对话。续写时应学会借鉴和仿效，这样才能与原文语言风格保持一致。
佳作赏析 亮句解读
　　As the twins looked around them in disappointment，their father appeared.Seeing the mess in the kitchen，their father was stunned，asking what the twins were doing.[1](衔接句④) “Today is Mother’s Day and we are preparing a breakfast for mom as a surprise，” said the twins.Moved by their sweet idea[2]，their father decided to offer them possible help.Not only did he clean the stove for them，but also he gave patient guidance to them.[3]Under their father’s help，the kids soon finished French toast and chicken porridge.(结尾句③) The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.Waking up from her dream，their mother was still trying to figure out what had happened.[4](衔接句⑤) “Happy Mother’s Day and this is our surprise for you！” said the twins excitedly.Looking at their lovely faces and the breakfast they had made，their mother burst into tears.Holding the kids tightly in her arms，she said，“You are the biggest surprise that I can ever have in my life.”[5](结尾句①) Had it not been for this special experience，she might not have realized how much her children loved her.[6](升华句②) [1]“现在分词作状语＋宾语从句”描写了父亲看到混乱场景时的惊讶。 [2]过去分词作状语描写了父亲得知原因后的感动。 [3]部分倒装句描写了父亲帮助双胞胎的场景。 [4]现在分词作状语描写了妈妈刚睡醒时的茫然。 [5]“现在分词作状语＋动作＋语言”描写了妈妈得知真相后的感动。 [6]虚拟语气表达出了妈妈的心理活动。
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